ThePro
I occasionally write depraved transformation fetish fiction. Somewhat more occasionally, it's TG themed.

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Member Since: 02/28/17 Membership status: Member
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Reviews by ThePro
A budding historian looking for an academic break finds a book from the ancient world while on a trip in the countryside. He finds the book is not what it seems, and draws himself and his entire world into a waking nightmare. Sometimes fantasy does not make fun reality.
Rated: Explicit 10 Reviews starstarstarstar Completed Story Reads: 20419 Words: 53301 Chapters: 8 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Young Adult (20-26 yrs)
Featured Items: Masks
Motivation for Change: Forced
Personality: Cultural/Nationality Change, Fights Change, Loses Identity
Sexual Orientation: Becomes Only Attracted to Men
Story Theme: Historical Time Period, Horror, Mythical Setting
Type of Change: Age Regression, Slow/Gradual Change
Warnings: Bodily Functions, Death
Series: None
Published: 02/27/17
Updated: 02/27/17
Reviewer: ThePro Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 02/28/17 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8

I registered just to review this.

Fantastic. Identity death is not my thing, but this is perhaps the pinnacle of how it should be handled. TF fans, don't be too worried by the disclaimer. The transition is slow and sometimes (delightfully) agonizing. The author has a real talent rarely seen in writers of this genre, both for the more literal erotica and for the kinky psychological stuff that makes TG worthwhile. The "victim" does, ironially, end up in a position of power by the end. Which some will like, some won't. (I'm the bad end type myself, but I suppose the bad end for poor Ryan came long before the coronation). But the way the protagonist (antagonist?) gets there is well done, with hints to whats going on layered throughout the story. So it's not just good tg, but good writing in and of itself.

My only criticism (besides some typos here and there) Honestly, it's too long. Could probably get the same effect with less text. Especially in the beginning. Establishing the family dynamic was vital, but there was some redundant parts.

Fun fact: Even before the comment in last chapter, I was imagining Renée looked like Sophie Marceau in Braveheart. A fave of mine as well, IancundIuliana.

I would very much like to see more from you in the future. This is the kind of tg story that I check these sites for, and they're all too rare.

Author's Response: Thanks for the kind words! I think I made the beginning so long in order to introduce some characters who I had plans for later. I will probably still do some chapters following up their stories. My philosophy is that for an identity death story to be solid, you need to have a character to destroy in the first place. Furthermore, despite the way it's eroticised here, I also think the genre leans so heavily close to horror at all times, that to trying pretend it's otherwise is madness. At the moment I am trying to finish another story I started in the middle of Coronation. Hopefully it will be a bit more compact this time around... but I can't promise anything.

Evan and his three closest friends take part in an ‘organic’ virtual reality Beta test. Together, they learn how immersive 21st century video gaming has become while they explore the fantasy world of their favorite book series and re-discover themselves.
Rated: Explicit 143 Reviews starstarstarstarstar Completed Story Reads: 150584 Words: 71291 Chapters: 18 Table of Contents
Reviewer: ThePro Signed
Date: 08/27/17 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: Droozle

May be a bit early given we haven't seen his assigned personality traits yet, but I'm guessing he's basically Sansa Stark now? Not exactly who must people would pick. Should be interesting.

Author's Response: That's an interesting observation. While this world is clearly inspired by Game of Thrones, it does not necessarily mirror GoT. As such, Evan's character does not have a clear-cut counterpart from GoT, but Sansa would probably be a somewhat comparable character. We'll be diving into more of the backstory in the next chapter, and you'll start to see more similarities and differences as the story unfolds.

Reviewer: ThePro Signed
Date: 09/01/17 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3: The Duchess

What a healthy attitude the Duchess has towards fiction. I'm sure her attachment to "Kayda" here will be just as healthy.

Not that I'm complaining, mind. This has great drama potential, and it's not beyond the realm of believability (especially given she seems to be using her as a stand in for a real world daughter that was lost maybe?) even if it's not exactly a great way to cope.

Author's Response: Nice catch on that. The Duchess definitely has personal reasons for diving into the storyworld headfirst, as a method of escape from reality. You may see this become a theme xD

This story tells the tale of a simple mistake which snowballs into something a lot worse. Set in a modern world with magical elements, it doesn't actually follow the story of Romeo and Juliet very well.
Rated: Deviant 11 Reviews starstarstarstarhalf-star Story Incomplete Reads: 24574 Words: 14091 Chapters: 3 Table of Contents
Reviewer: ThePro Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 01/03/18 Title: Chapter 1: Do you bite your thumb at us, sir?

Twisted, sad, and very sexy. Great stuff.

19 year old Colin Tyler is a typical guy. When he sets off for a month long family vacation, the last thing he expects is to be thrust into the body of his little cousin. How will he cope with having his new life, when he is oh so detached from his own generation?
Rated: Explicit 22 Reviews starstarstarstarhalf-star Story Incomplete Reads: 49687 Words: 10229 Chapters: 5 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Teen (13-19 yrs)
Turned Into: Bimbo, Cheerleader, Daughter, Teenager
Featured Items: Bikinis, Undies
Locale: Vacation Destination
Motivation for Change: Accident, Unknown
Personality: From Dominant to Submissive, Good to Bad, Loses Identity, Made Dumber
Sexual Orientation: Becomes Only Attracted to Men
Story Theme: Coming of Age, Everyday Living, Humiliation, Second Childhood
Type of Change: Age Regression, Body Swap, Fast/Instant Change, Stuck
Warnings: Politically Incorrect
Series: None
Published: 05/25/18
Updated: 06/08/18
Reviewer: ThePro Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 06/03/18 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Great stuff. A true bimbo TG in the old style, yet the characters feel quite real. You're improving visibly as you write as well. The balance of personality change vs. the struggle to keep the old identity is always extremely difficult to get right but so far you're managing perfectly. I eagerly look forward to more.

Poor Colin, stuck with Tori's vapid subconscious. Somehow I get the feeling he'll have interesting dreams.

Reviewer: ThePro Signed
Date: 06/13/18 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5

Interesting. If the voice in his head is Tori, then who's in his body? Of course, it's entirely possible it's just a bit of Tori's psyche. Or our hero here is really just Tori having gone insane. Will be glad to see where it goes.

The dream wasn't something I was expecting but character development is always welcome. Might go some ways to explain why Tori is such an attention whore.

The masturbation was pretty well done though personally I find the transformation more stimulating as it were.

Personally, every 5 days seems like a great schedule for me for work of this length and quality. I wish I had that ethic. Keep it up.

My crazy ex-girlfriend shows up wielding the powers of a goddess. She decides that my and my new girlfriend need to be punished.
Rated: Explicit 11 Reviews starstarstarstarhalf-star Completed Story Reads: 80641 Words: 81435 Chapters: 10 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Adult (27-62 yrs)
Turned Into: Bimbo, Cheerleader, Teenager
Featured Items: School Uniform
Locale: High School
Motivation for Change: Revenge
Personality: Loses Identity
Type of Change: Age Regression, Fast/Instant Change, Mind Control, Stuck
Series: None
Published: 07/05/18
Updated: 08/24/18
Reviewer: ThePro Signed starstarstarstar
Date: 07/06/18 Title: Chapter 1: Part 1

Still enjoying it the second time. You'll probably find this site more receptive than fictionmania to the pornier old school transfromation stories.

After he accidentally disturbs his female neighbours' ritual, beer-swilling student Chad finds himself gaining some pretty nifty divine powers. Unfortunately for him, that that's not all that is changing about him. Will the girls be able to reverse the effects, or is the old Chad soon to be no more?
Rated: Adult 55 Reviews starstarstarstarstar Completed Story Reads: 103759 Words: 23273 Chapters: 13 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Young Adult (20-26 yrs)
Turned Into: Fantasy Character
Featured Items: Corsets, Lingerie, Pantyhose, Petticoat, Lace, Ruffles, Crinoline
Locale: College
Motivation for Change: Accident
Personality: Fights Change
Sexual Orientation: Does Not Change
Story Theme: Everyday Living, Witchcraft
Type of Change: Slow/Gradual Change
Series: None
Published: 07/29/18
Updated: 09/04/18
Reviewer: ThePro Signed starstarstarstar
Date: 08/07/18 Title: Chapter 1: The Wrong Flat

Interesting transformation concept, likeable characters, fun scenario. There's some mild grammar errors here and there and I feel like the developments (both character and transformation wise) could be expanded upon a bit more, but all in all this is the kind of story I like to see.

Author's Response: Let me know any specific grammatical errors; I do my best to catch them all but some might still slip through!

Reviewer: ThePro Signed
Date: 08/09/18 Title: Chapter 6: A Path Unknown

I would have liked to have seen more of this from Chad's perspective. I feel like this is moving a bit fast, skipping a lot of internal struggle.

Author's Response: Thanks for the feedback. I made a conscious choice to portray this particular story from multiple viewpoints, and to move it along relatively swiftly. But don't worry, I've got plenty more stories in me yet.

Reviewer: ThePro Signed
Date: 08/12/18 Title: Chapter 7: Bavarian Stylings

Story's not quite going the direction my subjective personal tastes tend to lie, but it's still well written and I'm sure people on the more wish-fulfillment end of the kink spectrum will love it.

I have to say I expected the traditional Bavarian dress to be a one off. I'm glad it wasn't. Not something you see in TG often but it's a wonderful traditionally girly outfit. The dressing scene is a classic sequence, too.

Reviewer: ThePro Signed
Date: 08/17/18 Title: Chapter 8: The High Priestess

Feels too easy. Not sure where you can go from here. Oh well, folks are enjoying it at least. Just not my cup of tea.

Author's Response: As you say, different people look for different things from a story. Don't feel you have to stick with this one if you're not enjoying it; goodness knows there are enough on this site!

It didn't surprise me when my girlfriend was angry when she found out I'd been cheating on her. The surprise was in discovering she hired a couple of witches to deliver her revenge.
Rated: Explicit 6 Reviews starstarstarstarhalf-star Story Incomplete Reads: 9392 Words: 7635 Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Young Adult (20-26 yrs)
Turned Into: Bimbo
Featured Items: High Heels, Maid Uniform, School Uniform
Motivation for Change: Revenge
Personality: From Dominant to Submissive, Made Dumber
Sexual Orientation: Becomes Only Attracted to Men
Type of Change: Age Regression, Fast/Instant Change, Mind Control, Stuck
Warnings: Bondage/S&M
Series: None
Published: 08/25/18
Updated: 08/25/18
Reviewer: ThePro Signed starstarstarstar
Date: 08/26/18 Title: Chapter 1: 1. My Last Night as a Man

Bog standard old school TG plot, but executed very well. Sometimes there's a reason something becomes a trope, and a work can stand out purely on quality. Originality is overrated.

Basically looking forward to seeing where you're going with this.

Author's Response: Sometimes the old tropes provide the biggest challenges to make fresh. I hope you aren't disappointed.

A visit to a thrift shop brings Jack into contact with a mysterious woman and a foreshadowingly named video game, which soon draws him into a shadowy world of secret missions and strange agendas in which he's newly equipped to play a part.
Rated: Explicit 5 Reviews starstarstarstarhalf-star Story Incomplete Reads: 2586 Words: 1421 Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Categories: Sci-Fi Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Young Adult (20-26 yrs)
Motivation for Change: Tricked, Undercover
Sexual Orientation: Becomes Bisexual
Series: None
Published: 09/13/18
Updated: 09/13/18
Reviewer: ThePro Signed starstarstarstar
Date: 09/13/18 Title: Chapter 1: Player One

You have a very good writing style, and this is a promising start. You also have a talent for getting the reader in the head of a horny young guy, although maybe that's not that hard in much of this audience's case. Can't say much more until the story goes further.

Dan watched Kristie Rose every day, she was his world, his goddess. So when he wakes up as her he needs to figure out where she went and how much he actually knows about her.
Rated: Adult 16 Reviews starstarstarstarhalf-star Completed Story Reads: 23342 Words: 17949 Chapters: 6 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Teen (13-19 yrs)
Turned Into: Teenager
Locale: Family Household, High School
Motivation for Change: Unknown
Story Theme: Mind/Body Posession
Type of Change: Body Swap
Series: None
Published: 09/19/18
Updated: 10/10/18
Reviewer: ThePro Signed starstarstarstar
Date: 09/20/18 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

I haven't seen much like this premise. A stalker becoming the object of their obsession. Color me intrigued.

My only big criticisms so farar that I feel like despite how important her looks are to the protagonist, we haven't gotten a good picture of Kristie as readers. Also the temporal transitions from one day to the next can be a bit abrupt and confusing. Still looking forward to more though.

Author's Response: I'm amazed this premise isn't more out there, it seemed really obvious to me. Maybe I'm just weird. There's a lot of body swap stories out there but they don't seem to dig into the niche elements of the genre. As far as Kristie goes I like how I described her. It's sort of a specifically vague description of beauty. Imagine her as you will. The time thing was a genuine problem though, thanks for pointing that out. Added some spaces, hopefully, that clarifies it. I'll make it more obvious if necessary. Thanks for the constructive criticism. Hope you enjoy the rest of the story.

Thrown into another world as an infant, Tyler is summoned back on his sixteenth birthday. Faced with a world she doesn't know, the Princess struggles with a world on a brink of war, and reconnects with a mother she never knew. Epic Fantasy.
Rated: Explicit 42 Reviews starstarstarstarstar Story Incomplete Reads: 11450 Words: 17435 Chapters: 4 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Teen (13-19 yrs)
Turned Into: Daughter, Fantasy Character
Motivation for Change: Forced
Personality: Fights Change
Sexual Orientation: Does Not Change
Story Theme: Mythical Setting
Type of Change: Fast/Instant Change
Warnings: Death, Intense Violence
Series: None
Published: 01/06/19
Updated: 01/21/19
Reviewer: ThePro Signed
Date: 01/08/19 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue

So far the premise is exactly my jam but I'll hold off on rating to see where it goes. Rugged orphan to curvy fairy tale elf princess? Delicious contrast, if that's what you're going for. Writing is solid but could use a bit of polish on the prose. All down to practice really. Eagerly awaiting more. Though unlike one other reviewer I'm rather hoping it doesn't go the wish fulfillment route.

Reviewer: ThePro Signed starstarstarstar
Date: 01/22/19 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 3

Well, this is not only not the kind of kinky story I'd ideally want, but it didn't go at all in the way I expected even if it didn't turn out that way. Characters in these stories usually have little agency either way but damn, you're really taking it in the opposite direction. It may not be porn, but it's definitely not fluffy wish fulfillment either.

4/5 stars. Keep up the good work. Pretty sure there's nothing else like this on the site. Gonna keep watching eagerly. And hot damn, Tyler's a dead-eye. How did he ever get caught in the real world?

When Elias Bouquet's suburban community has an outbreak of the bizarre and unexplained disease, AHS - Acquired Hypersexuality Syndrome - he has cause to be excited. Most people jump at the chance to be more attractive (albeit more libidinous) versions of themselves. However, it quickly becomes clear that Elias doesn't have a typical case of AHS. In fact, he appears to be turning into a she. How will Elias deal with the changes, and will he ever be able to have some semblance of a normal life afterward? (NOTE: Some tags refer to major characters who *aren't* the main character)
Rated: Explicit 20 Reviews starstarstarstarhalf-star Story Incomplete Reads: 52583 Words: 37971 Chapters: 10 Table of Contents
Categories: Sci-Fi Gender Change
Characters: Female to Male, Teen (13-19 yrs), Male to Female, Teen (13-19 yrs)
Turned Into: Bimbo, Daughter, Girlfriend, Model
Featured Items: Bikinis, Lingerie, Maid Uniform, Sex Toys, Undies
Body Modification: Extreme Breast Enlargement, Permanent Hair/Skin/Nail Change
Motivation for Change: Accident
Personality: Made Dumber, Made Smarter
Sexual Orientation: Becomes Bisexual
Story Theme: Coming of Age, Medical Experiment, Romance
Type of Change: Drug-Induced, Mind Control, Slow/Gradual Change, Stuck
Series: None
Published: 01/05/20
Updated: 01/25/20
Reviewer: ThePro Signed starstarstarstar
Date: 01/22/20 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter One: Outbreak

This is fun stuff but I gotta say inconsistencies in the characters views vs. the tone and actions taking place in the story are really coming to ahead. Like for example in this chapter where they save Lucy from sexual slavery by making her their sex slave and raping her instead.

Or was that the goal? If it's intentional I withdraw the complaint. I have no problem with erotic rape in and of itself, fetishes in text hurt no one. But it's just bugging me here that the narrative doesn't seem aware of what's going on.

Author's Response: Perhaps that's simply my oversight as an author. I meant to frame that scene as them being unusually horny teenagers who sort of stumbled into an orgy situation. The commands they gave Luci that triggered the orgy were obviously external commands, but none of their actions after that were intended to force her into a particular plan of action. It's worth asking whether Luci is capable of informed, enthusiastic consent at this point. If not, then it isn't possible to ethically have sex with her and what happened must be viewed as r***. But if she is, then I hope I portrayed her as an enthusiastic participant and not as a puppet who would have been otherwise unwilling. Because what I meant to portray was abnormally horny teenagers letting things get out of hand and *not* gang r*** of any sort.

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