Alojz
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Reviews by Alojz
When Todd's girlfriend brings home a new game that promises to turn a fantasy MMO into reality, he's understandably skeptical. A few magic rituals later, and that problem is solved. But a whole new one arises. He's not the character he was supposed to be.

WARNING: This is a "stuck in the game" style fantasy TG/TF story. However the main character does not become a beautiful princess, a sultry rogue, or a bimbo bard. There's some weird monstrous tf in here that should probably not be read by anyone. Unless you're into that kind of thing. If you're not, don't say I didn't warn you.
Rated: Deviant 5 Reviews starstarstarstarstar Story Incomplete Reads: 10147 Words: 11978 Chapters: 2 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Young Adult (20-26 yrs)
Turned Into: Fantasy Character
Body Modification: Extreme Breast Enlargement
Motivation for Change: Accident
Personality: Fights Change, Good to Bad, Made Dumber
Sexual Orientation: Becomes Bisexual
Story Theme: Humiliation, Mythical Setting, Witchcraft
Type of Change: Fast/Instant Change
Warnings: Bodily Functions, Non-Consentual Sex
Series: None
Published: 07/06/18
Updated: 07/22/18
Reviewer: Alojz Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 09/25/18 Title: Chapter 1: Trolled

You are one of the few authors with real talent for portraying the protagonist's internal struggle as they are cast in a *very* unfamiliar body, in a life very distant from their own. A lot of my fantasies involve feeling uncomfortable in my transformed body (a little of emotion masochism I guess) so even though I'm not into TG set in fantasy lands, and even though I've definitely never found anything sexy about trolls of all races, this story was very close to hitting the nail right in the head for me. I loved how much of the story involved the protagonist being shocked / appalled by his new form, how much of it was him observing his boobs over and over again, and how somehow you manage all of this to not feel repetitive. What I think a lot of TG stories get wrong is how quickly the transformee gets used to their new body while in reality I think that even if I became an average woman my breasts would stay unfamiliar and irking for at least a number of days. You get this right.

And finally, what you get right is the conveying how being the troll affects the mental state of the protagonist. I'm not sure if that was intentional but a lot of the descriptions seemed kinda vulgar and crude which really made me think of the reality of being a thick troll. I enjoyed the little things like when he found little joy in getting himself in the mud. I enjoyed the bigger things, like the troll arousal building up for a while. And what I absolutely loved about it was that he seemed aware of those mental changes, disgusted by them, and yet powerless but to succumb to them. Spot. On.

Now, I know you do commissions now (I'm not sure if you have any non-commission, writing for fun accounts). And I know that as a poor grad student I am nowhere close being able to afford commissioning anything. But if you ever feel like writing for fun, I'd love to see you tackle the idea of the protagonist feeling uncomfortable, gross and weird not as a fantasy monster, but as a woman most people would consider sexy. I can't help but think that if I was cast into a very feminine body, and at the same time robbed of the ability to be sexually attracted to the feminine, I would be likely to experience the entire thing as a weird grotesque. I mean, being suddenly much smaller and weaker, yet with huge plush behind and uncomfortably heavy sacks of fat stuck to my chest. Boobs which as a man I found infinitely alluring but now seeming pointless, and if anything mostly embarrassingly on display and a real physical nuisance. The wide hips I once found sexy now being a source of self-consciousness and a constant reminder my body is biologically prepared for child bearing in it's extremely obvious soft and squishy fertility - a no doubt a distressing thought for someone who doesn't actually want children. The slit between my legs not just a matter-of-fact difference between men and women, but now experienced as my own I'd get to feel exactly just how slimy and sticky its folds become when my mind keeps involuntarily returning to the idea of having a fat dick pushed into it. A fat dick I for some inexplicable reason now am drawn to, and just inches away from devouring, even though the very thought of that turns my stomach.

Ooops, this review turned into a smut.

Anyway... I really enjoyed your wring, please continue! I'm looking forward to reading a less fantasy-set story at some point!

Author's Response: Thanks very much for the kind words. I know exactly what you mean about the emotional masochism, it's very much the center of any TG fantasies I myself have. Though I usually go for something more traditional, I did manage to see the appeal of the troll tf as I worked with the person that commissioned it. That said I kind of knock it in the summary, but if the story were just for me the TF victim very much would have ended up a stereotypical blonde princess damsel in distress type. With the detailed extended, aftermath heavy bad-end twists I tend to like. The state of mind thing didn't start as intentional but by chapter 2 it just seemed right. My only recent finished works that weren't commissions were also not TG centered, but animal TF. They're available on furaffinity and Doc's Lab. I'm actually behind on commissions right now due to some real life stuff so I'm not really taking more anyway. When I have the time and energy I'd love to just write something purely for me. I very much like your idea for the tg'd victim ending up in a very sexualized body that no longer has any sexual appeal for them at all. It would be a fun note to hit. Sadly another part of this story has not yet been commissioned so it'll be awhile regardless. Currently in the pipe is a non-TG tf and two chapters of Boku no Waifu though, if you're into that.

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