Will It Work
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A group of four friends lives change when they find a set of magical cards and use them to become pro gamers
Rated: Adult 61 Reviews starstarstarstarhalf-star Story Incomplete Reads: 63836 Words: 56015 Chapters: 12 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Young Adult (20-26 yrs)
Turned Into: Fantasy Character, Girlfriend, Model
Featured Items: High Heels, Lingerie
Locale: College, Road Trip
Motivation for Change: For a Job, Willing or Voluntary
Personality: Fights Change
Sexual Orientation: Changes to be Attracted Only to Men
Story Theme: Beauty/Fashion, Romance
Type of Change: Fast/Instant Change
Series: None
Published: 06/04/15
Updated: 08/05/16
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Date: 01/31/17 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12 The long night

This was the story that made me stop lurking. A fun take on collectible card games the gets serious, fast, I had a very hard time putting this down. The story is character-driven, and memorable. Lots of fun!

A dragon, a knight, a curious boy and a thief. Four individuals, two quests, one adventure.
Rated: Adult 19 Reviews starstarstarstarstar Story Incomplete Reads: 33916 Words: 105792 Chapters: 22 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Teen (13-19 yrs)
Motivation for Change: In Hiding, Willing or Voluntary
Story Theme: Mythical Setting
Series: None
Published: 09/21/15
Updated: 08/08/19
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Date: 07/08/18 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter Twelve - "You Have Got to be Kidding Me"

Yay, update! Thanks for coming back to this, and thanks for sharing. I still think the plot hook is interesting.

Aiden Sommers was just your average, boring man, until he died. Upon learning that the afterlife is not exactly what it seems, Aiden must become a demon and an agent of Lust. What he doesn't know is this also entails him becoming a succubus.
Rated: Explicit 77 Reviews starstarstarstarstar Completed Story Reads: 225062 Words: 49461 Chapters: 21 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Young Adult (20-26 yrs)
Motivation for Change: For a Job
Sexual Orientation: Does Not Change
Story Theme: Everyday Living
Type of Change: Fast/Instant Change, Mind Control, Stuck
Series: None
Published: 12/04/15
Updated: 07/06/17
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Date: 07/03/17 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 19

Hmm, things seem to be looking up! Medusa ex machina? Still, a moderately well-executed plot (she'll get better), with promotion potential, and Aeriel gets the desk.

Lastly, I like that you've been remembering the el suffixes. Thanks for sharing.

Author's Response: Thank you very much!

(Old – Please read the new version) An 18 year old just out of high school gets the opportunity of a lifetime, well sort of. He signs a contract without looking at it and ends up in a virtual... Paradise?
Rated: Explicit 34 Reviews starstarstarstarstar Story Incomplete Reads: 92310 Words: 24587 Chapters: 8 Table of Contents
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Date: 06/20/17 Title: Chapter 7: What's on the menu?

Language has gotten more polished, and I always like to see some righteousness. I can't figure out if the threat level is balanced or not, but players always mess with game balance — just look at EVE or Battlegrounds. Personal and emotional threats make for good stories, but are hard to systematize and make into games.

Keep on writing, trying, and being yourself. Work|life|school balance is hard, not taking medical needs into account. Thanks for sharing.

Superpowers! Gender Change! Monsters! Aliens! Science! Broken London. Carl Cordeira receives a gift/curse from mysterious technology. Only with the help of pop-culture obsessed Tom, and rockstar goddess drag queen Maddox, can he learn what it is to be a hero, whilst also learning to be a woman.
Rated: Adult 9 Reviews starstarstarstarstar Story Incomplete Reads: 14523 Words: 32045 Chapters: 8 Table of Contents
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Date: 10/08/17 Title: Chapter 4: Issue #4: Spade Proof, But Not Life Proof

Gotta hand it to you — really liking where this is going.

Thanks for sharing!

When Damien witnesses the demise of a beautiful female daemon prince of Slaneesh, the creature leaves a piece of herself within him, much to his horror.
Rated: Explicit 6 Reviews starstarstarstarhalf-star Story Incomplete Reads: 3707 Words: 6309 Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Categories: Sci-Fi Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Adult (27-62 yrs)
Turned Into: Adult, Fantasy Character
Featured Items: Long Nails
Locale: Space or Foreign Planet
Motivation for Change: Curse, Forced
Personality: Fights Change
Sexual Orientation: Does Not Change
Story Theme: Distant Future, Fan Fiction, Horror
Type of Change: Slow/Gradual Change, Stuck
Series: None
Published: 07/11/16
Updated: 07/12/16
Reviewer: Will It Work Signed starstarstar
Date: 01/31/17 Title: Chapter 1: Part 1

Interesting, and a good start. I like the focus on the temptation of the change, rather than the mechanics — we all know how it's going to end, the question is simply how long before it gets there?

Mike Cross is your average, all around high schooler. He's nothing special, nobody you'd pick out in a crowd. Then he woke up to find he'd been possessed by a succubus who just wants to get out of her trade...
Rated: Explicit 63 Reviews starstarstarstarstar Completed Story Reads: 139992 Words: 54821 Chapters: 16 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Teen (13-19 yrs)
Featured Items: Bikinis, High Heels, Maid Uniform, School Uniform, Undies
Locale: Family Household, Hairstyling/Salon, High School
Motivation for Change: Forced
Sexual Orientation: Changes to be Attracted Only to Men
Story Theme: Comedy
Type of Change: Fast/Instant Change
Series: The Curse Universe
Published: 08/31/16
Updated: 02/19/18
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Date: 05/11/17 Title: Chapter 8: Part 8

This is still a lot of fun to read.

Author's Response: We aim to please.

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Date: 02/04/18 Title: Chapter 15: Part 15

An unexpected climax! I’m looking forward to what happens next.

Thanks for sharing.

After defeating his life-long rival in the US Open, Ben was living the dream. However, tennis turns treacherous when the rival's family seeks vengeance.
Rated: Explicit 26 Reviews starstarstarstarhalf-star Completed Story Reads: 88213 Words: 21687 Chapters: 10 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Teen (13-19 yrs)
Turned Into: Daughter, Girlfriend
Locale: Vacation Destination
Motivation for Change: Forced, Revenge
Personality: From Dominant to Submissive
Sexual Orientation: Changes to be Attracted Only to Men
Story Theme: Romance, Sports
Type of Change: Fast/Instant Change, Stuck
Series: None
Published: 10/19/16
Updated: 11/04/16
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Date: 06/18/17 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10: In the End, We're All Human

Well, not quite where I thought it might go, but not a bad ending at all! Probably the best possible of ways, and a fun read. Thanks for sharing.

Author's Response: This was the first story I'd ever written, and I know that the ending isn't very good. I struggle with endings. Thank you for your kind words, though.

Peter - a shapeshifting intelligence operative - sets out to solve a series of grisly murders, only to have his investigation derailed when a disguise backfires.
Rated: Adult 127 Reviews starstarstarstarstar Completed Story Reads: 120507 Words: 108139 Chapters: 34 Table of Contents
Categories: Sci-Fi Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Teen (13-19 yrs)
Turned Into: Daughter, Teenager
Featured Items: High Heels
Locale: High School, Hospital or Clinic
Body Modification: Extreme Piercing
Motivation for Change: Accident
Sexual Orientation: Changes to be Attracted Only to Men
Story Theme: Everyday Living, Horror
Type of Change: Age Regression, Fast/Instant Change, Identity Theft, Stuck
Warnings: Death
Series: None
Published: 11/07/16
Updated: 06/23/17
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Date: 10/25/17 Title: Chapter 34: Chapter 34: Flare

So what a story, and what an end. Honestly, I expected something else horrible to happen, but kind of glad it didn’t.

Thanks for sharing!

Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it! I spent a lot of time on the last few chapters of this story...I think I re-drafted them six or seven times before I settled on this ending. Thanks for the feedback!!

Eric, heir to one of the most famous last names in all history. His family was known to kill and hunt down the most dangerous monsters hat walked these lands. But what does the title of Monster Hunter gives you, if in this society monsters and humans now live in peace, working together to form a better future. Struggling to leave his last name in the shadows, Eric will soon find himself more attracted to these shadows.
Rated: Adult 36 Reviews starstarstarstarstar Story Incomplete Reads: 12657 Words: 22399 Chapters: 4 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Teen (13-19 yrs)
Turned Into: Daughter, Fantasy Character
Featured Items: Corsets, Long Nails, School Uniform, Undies, Work Uniform
Locale: Family Household, High School
Motivation for Change: Accident, Unknown
Personality: Bad to Good, Fights Change
Sexual Orientation: Changes to be Bisexual
Story Theme: Coming of Age, Everyday Living, Mythical Setting, Romance
Type of Change: Hormonal, Stuck
Series: None
Published: 01/30/17
Updated: 02/08/17
Reviewer: Will It Work Signed
Date: 02/05/17 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 2 Stoker

This was a fun read so far, and has some real potential! I'm excited to see where you take it — Erica might have been too obvious, but why Sussanne?

The whole high school drama slice of life thing can be overplayed, but you've changed so much, that it seems vital and relevant. Please hold on to that core feeling of what it means to fit in, and don't get too distracted by the typical tropes of the genre. Not saying don't have fun, but if in ten or twenty chapters Sussanne is a well-adjuested popular cheerleader with Vladimir as a boyfriend, I'm going to be a little disappointed.

Thanks for sharing!

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Date: 02/15/17 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 3: Lovecraft.

Seriously, what the fuck? Abusive family, abusive childhood, and little to no oversight. You've got an interesting story, but I'm honestly not sure how I feel about it… reading about how those people are treating Eric makes me so angry! That goes double for the aunt, who is apparently not onl an incompetent nurse, but also an extortionist.

Despite the technical issues however, you have a lot of potential. If I didn't care about the characters, I wouldn't be emotionally invested in what happens. I definitely want justice for Eric, however, and a shakeup at the school. Will the wolf traits recede? Camille might be a good role model, but she's going to need to get beyond her own assumptions. Maybe one of grand-dad's old army buddies could show up, play the wise mentor role and provide stability.

Whatever happens I'm looking forward to it. I know this review seems very negative, but thank you for sharing.

Joseph was a pessimistic loner, angry with both his existence and the world. After a misused wishing stone alters his body and robs him of his voice, Joseph is forced to evaluate his life.
Rated: Adult 251 Reviews starstarstarstarhalf-star Completed Story Reads: 282145 Words: 105448 Chapters: 23 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Teen (13-19 yrs)
Turned Into: Cheerleader, Daughter, Girlfriend
Locale: Family Household, High School
Body Modification: Ears Pierced
Motivation for Change: Accident, Revenge
Personality: Bad to Good
Sexual Orientation: Changes to be Attracted Only to Men, Does Not Change
Story Theme: Coming of Age, Everyday Living, Genie/Wishes, Romance, Sports
Type of Change: Fast/Instant Change, Stuck
Series: None
Published: 02/09/17
Updated: 07/14/17
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Date: 05/11/17 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14: Hearts and Minds

The wild emotional swings are disturbing, but sure add verisimilitude! Thanks for sharing, it's been a lot of fun.

Author's Response: Verisimilitude! What a lovely word! Thank you for the review, and I'm glad you're enjoying the story. :)

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Date: 05/22/17 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15: Forks and Spoons

Another fun chapter, and another positive uptick in Johanna's life. The cheerleader piece seems a little typical, but could be a good experience for her. Of course, nothing in her life is ever good forever, and I'm expecting something unfortunate to happen soon — like Tina's promised revenge.

Thanks for sharing.

Author's Response: I agree that the cheerleading can be cliche, and that's why I'm attempting to add more depth there, and actually detail the team dynamic and the particulars of the routines. Cheerleading is more than just pompoms and revealing clothing.

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Date: 06/13/17 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19: Slice

This continues to be a very inspiring drama; I love reading Johanna fight her fate. Also, the other wishes that keep getting slipped in unnoticed. Trying to think of justifications for the consequences of wishes is half the fun.

Author's Response: Hehe yes, sneaking in background wishes is my favorite part of writing this story.

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Date: 06/20/17 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 20: Willpower

Victory! This feels like a deserved, earned, well executed chapter for both Johanna and the story as a whole. I love the themes of trust and temptation here.

Unfortunately it also feels like we've got the climax (maybe one more confrontation with Jarvis and Tina?) and then this story is winding down.

Author's Response: It is indeed winding down. There will only be a few more chapters, sadly. That being said, there's always a climax in Act IV. Don't think that this story will end in a sleep-inducing fashion.

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Date: 06/25/17 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21: Eye of the Storm

This is the perfect time for one final revenge attack. But overall, the story feels quite successful, and very complete.

Author's Response: Yay! I've been working on improving my story-endings, so I appreciate that piece of feedback. Thanks!

You're a small-time thief; you earn your money by looking for wallets left in buses, or by mugging the old and defenseless. One day, your friend Eric promises to have a solution: robbing the mansion of a rich, disabled old man. The plan stinks from the beginning, but you let your conscience guilt you into helping your friend. Finally, you'll know what it feels like to be gainfully employed, even if your only earnings come in the form of praise from your Master.
Rated: Deviant 20 Reviews starstarstarstarstar Completed Story Reads: 246959 Words: 157285 Chapters: 28 Table of Contents
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Date: 09/14/17 Title: Chapter 20: Day 104

This story has been a long back-and-forth. Can't really say this is earn your HAPPY ending, but she definitely seems to have dodged the… awful end, I guess?

Author's Response: Well, it hasn't ended yet, but yes, it's not an overly happy story. Sorry if you didn't expect that. Thanks for leaving a review!

In spite of all precautions, it's in the end inevitable that once the technology of surgical brain transfer to an artificial human body has been invented, it will sooner or later get out among shady people with more money than honor... "Men of honor" that is...
Rated: Explicit 1 Reviews starstarstarhalf-star Completed Story Reads: 3855 Words: 12416 Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
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Date: 02/26/17 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

This was a very fun story to read!

I'm guessing from your name and the formatting that English isn't a first language. Overall, huge time jumps made it a little hard to follow, but Stef is a very empathetic character, and this was an interesting twist on an old idea.

Thanks for sharing!

A 19 year old history student dies in a car accident, but ends up being revived in the body of the princess of a kingdom in a world of magic.
As he, now she, slowly adapts to her new lifestyle, she realizes how powerful her 21st century knowledge can be in a medieval world.
Rated: Adult 16 Reviews starstarstarstar Story Incomplete Reads: 7880 Words: 4083 Chapters: 2 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Teen (13-19 yrs)
Turned Into: Daughter, Teenager
Featured Items: Corsets, Petticoat, Lace, Ruffles, Crinoline
Motivation for Change: Accident
Story Theme: Historical Time Period, Witchcraft
Type of Change: Age Regression, Stuck
Warnings: Death
Series: None
Published: 03/02/17
Updated: 03/04/17
Reviewer: Will It Work Signed
Date: 03/02/17 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: Rebirth

OK, interesting concept, slow burn with lots of world building… I'm into it! Let's see where it goes, and congratulations on your first post. Thanks for sharing.

Author's Response: Thank you, I'm happy you liked it so far. :)

Superhero Sidekick Relief gets lucky with a beautiful alien woman during a crisis. Unluckily, their brief encounter led to his biology changing.
Rated: Adult 10 Reviews starstarstarstarhalf-star Completed Story Reads: 24759 Words: 10723 Chapters: 6 Table of Contents
Categories: Sci-Fi Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Teen (13-19 yrs)
Turned Into: Alien, Maid, Mother
Featured Items: Lingerie, Maid Uniform, Pantyhose, Undies, Work Uniform
Locale: Family Household, Space or Foreign Planet
Story Theme: Pregnancy
Type of Change: Hormonal
Series: Mother from Another Planet
Published: 03/26/17
Updated: 03/27/17
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Date: 03/29/17 Title: Chapter 6: The Departure

Short, cute, and filled with warm and fuzzy feelings. Thank you, and well done.

Derek woke up to find a strange girl in his bedroom. What follows...
Rated: Adult 10 Reviews starstarstarstarstar Completed Story Reads: 10267 Words: 2683 Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Young Adult (20-26 yrs)
Turned Into: Girlfriend
Featured Items: Undies
Locale: College
Motivation for Change: Tricked
Sexual Orientation: Changes to be Attracted Only to Men
Story Theme: Comedy
Type of Change: Fast/Instant Change
Series: The Curse Universe
Published: 04/01/17
Updated: 04/01/17
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Date: 04/08/17 Title: Chapter 1: Tricking the Trickster

Fun, but I think ‘what?’ is the tagline for this story. I'm sitting here with a stupid look on my face from reading the mindfuckery. On the other hand, a crossover between this and Mischief Managed, hmm…

Well done!

Author's Response: I don't know what that is.

In a mystical land, a young Ranger keeps the countryside safe from all manner of dark creatures. One fateful night, a chance meeting with a beautiful maiden will change his life forever...
Rated: Deviant 73 Reviews starstarstarstarhalf-star Story Incomplete Reads: 137780 Words: 119977 Chapters: 26 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Young Adult (20-26 yrs)
Turned Into: Adult, Fantasy Character
Motivation for Change: Curse
Personality: Fights Change, Good to Bad
Sexual Orientation: Changes to be Attracted Only to Men
Story Theme: Mythical Setting
Warnings: Death, Non-Consentual Sex
Series: None
Published: 04/18/17
Updated: 06/22/20
Reviewer: Will It Work Signed
Date: 01/19/18 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter VI

Well that’s a thing. Good way to use all of your resources? I’ll be looking forward to what Ellina has planned.

Author's Response: Thank you. Stay tuned!

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Date: 10/29/17 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter V

I was kinda expecting this, but way to sell it. Now of course, is what happens when they have to share the body?

Author's Response: Stay tuned and find out! ;)

The war between the Demon Realm and Human Realm has lasted centuries on this world, with no end in sight. However the 72nd Demon Lord has a plan to finally achieve peace by turning the current the human's current champion, Hiro, into the new Demon Lord and a succubus to boot. With his newfound responsibility, he must try to seek peace between the two Realms with the help of his friends.
Rated: Adult 19 Reviews starstarstarstarhalf-star Story Incomplete Reads: 11959 Words: 16130 Chapters: 3 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Young Adult (20-26 yrs)
Turned Into: Fantasy Character, Maid, Prostitute, Robot, Wife
Featured Items: Lingerie, Maid Uniform, Undies
Locale: Space or Foreign Planet
Motivation for Change: Curse, For a Job, Forced, Undercover
Personality: Cultural/Nationality Change, Fights Change
Sexual Orientation: Changes to be Attracted Only to Men
Story Theme: Mythical Setting
Type of Change: Fast/Instant Change
Warnings: Bodily Functions, Intense Violence
Series: None
Published: 04/26/17
Updated: 08/26/17
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Date: 07/06/17 Title: Chapter 1: A New Demon Lord

Prickly Gregor… mistress of household is perfect for him. Honestly, I'm really enjoying this story. The mix of lore dumps and character development feels comfortable and each archetype is developed and different. Thanks for sharing.

Cam never knew anything aside from the inside of a hospital. Suddenly he finds out that he's the clone of a female alien superhero and his caretaker was her greatest enemy. Can he adapt to his body changing into a young woman? Can the superhero Venusian teach him about his newfound powers? Can he trust the woman who raised him?
Rated: Kid-Friendly 8 Reviews starstarstarstarstar Completed Story Reads: 8301 Words: 10785 Chapters: 6 Table of Contents
Categories: Sci-Fi Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Teen (13-19 yrs)
Turned Into: Alien, Daughter
Locale: Family Household, Hospital or Clinic, Labratory, Office
Story Theme: Coming of Age, Medical Experiment
Type of Change: Hormonal
Series: Mother from Another Planet
Published: 05/13/17
Updated: 05/15/17
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Date: 05/23/17 Title: Chapter 6: The Epilogue

Daaaaw. I really do love these stories. Short, warm comic book tales with well-deserved happy endings. Also, points for pulling in post-story Relief.

Thanks for sharing.

Daniel McCallum died when a tanker truck ran him over after running a red light. Now he's in Limbo, and the line to find out where you're going is too long, so he decides to take a little walk into his new future as the new Death.
Rated: Adult 61 Reviews starstarstarstarhalf-star Story Incomplete Reads: 40306 Words: 50518 Chapters: 14 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Teen (13-19 yrs)
Turned Into: Fantasy Character
Locale: Family Household, High School
Motivation for Change: For a Job
Sexual Orientation: Changes to be Attracted Only to Men
Story Theme: Comedy, Mythical Setting
Type of Change: Fast/Instant Change, Stuck
Series: The Curse Universe
Published: 05/22/17
Updated: 11/23/20
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Date: 05/30/17 Title: Chapter 2: The Second Chapter

OK, I'm down with this. It's got your trademark YA targeting and quirky humor, and some interesting reversals. I like the characterization And will be looking forward to the next chapter.

Thanks for sharing.

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Date: 06/04/18 Title: Chapter 4: The Fourth Chapter

I re-read from the beginning to catch back up — and it’s just been plain fun. I love a good earn your happy ending, and this is going much better than some other serials about teenage soul reapers.

Also, a minor point, but thank you for keeping the el on the names. Even whiney limies.

Thanks for sharing!

Author's Response: What are the other teenage soul reaper stories you speak of?

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Date: 05/02/19 Title: Chapter 6: The Sixth Chapter

You have a genuine talent for writing young adults and slice of life stories; the mundane mixes with the fantastic. Dan I won’t win them all, but hopefully this will be a growth experience.

Thanks for sharing.

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Date: 10/15/20 Title: Chapter 8: The Eighth Chapter

Well things just got… a little unreal? Generally I approve on consequences, and you have a lovely light style. On the other hand, this whole shared universe is a Buffy-esque nightmare. Not because the writing is bad mind you, but because horrible things happen to people for reasons that aren't their fault. Right now, I'm expecting this turn turn into a huge drama and mystery with power plays and a big showdown.

Well, at least it'll be a fun read. Thanks for sharing!

Cal is just a second rate nerd at his local school when he discovers a seemingly magical device that produces bracelets that change the wearer, though not always how they are expecting.
Rated: Adult 12 Reviews starstarstarstarstar Story Incomplete Reads: 29092 Words: 5801 Chapters: 4 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Female to Male, Teen (13-19 yrs), Male to Female, Teen (13-19 yrs)
Locale: Family Household, High School
Motivation for Change: Accident, Willing or Voluntary
Sexual Orientation: Changes to be Bisexual
Story Theme: Everyday Living
Type of Change: Body Swap, Changed by Clothing, Fast/Instant Change
Series: None
Published: 05/29/17
Updated: 06/10/17
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Date: 06/05/17 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3

I'm pretty impressed by this. You have an interesting YA drama with good perspective on some really big questions, and haven't jumped on stereotypes or gotten too self-absorbed.

I think Cally's in for trouble though. Thanks for sharing!

Our courageous narrator finds himself in a strange- and soon sticky- situation in a galaxy far, far away. Can he find out why he's a she, and why she suddenly inhabits a supposedly fictional universe, before the plot catches up with her?
Rated: Deviant 29 Reviews starstarstarstarstar Story Incomplete Reads: 212431 Words: 37498 Chapters: 28 Table of Contents
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Date: 06/11/17 Title: Chapter 1: Episode I: Foundation

Interesting going so far. I give you massive plus points for proofing before you post. Maybe the unnamed girlfriend will show up later? My only significant advice is to not follow main story characters. Self insertion is the gateway to Mary Sueism. Maybe she'll see them once in a while, but write your own story in the setting.

Thanks for sharing.

Author's Response: Thanks for the advice! I'm definitely looking to create a new storyline in here; I had just finished rewatching Empire before I wrote this and liked the idea of a TG set in the SW universe but not focused on a main character.

Synopsis: Pretty transparent storyline: Young music teacher and his wife take his students to a choral festival at Walt Disney World. Luggage is lost and adjustments must be made. Not the most original premise, but, hopefully, you'll enjoy a fun ride.

This is my first story in 5 years and my first time posting at TG Storytime. I have posted stories on another site before, perhaps you've read them? TONGUE TIED, A LITTLE BIT OF A CHANGE and DUSTY ROSE. Anyway, I hope you enjoy this one. Please send comments!
Rated: Adult 15 Reviews starstarstarstarhalf-star Completed Story Reads: 15410 Words: 29612 Chapters: 3 Table of Contents
Categories: Realistic Gender Change
Characters: Female to Male, Adult (27-62 yrs)
Turned Into: Adult, Daughter, Teenager
Featured Items: High Heels, Lingerie, Pantyhose, Petticoat, Lace, Ruffles, Crinoline
Locale: Girl's School, High School, Vacation Destination
Body Modification: Ears Pierced
Motivation for Change: For a Job
Personality: From Dominant to Submissive
Story Theme: Humiliation
Type of Change: Age Regression, Changed by Clothing
Series: Dusty Rose
Published: 06/16/17
Updated: 06/23/17
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Date: 06/20/17 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Welcome back! This is a warm and fuzzy story with unfortunate consequences. Kelly and Cathy's relationship seems loving and mutually supportive, but by the end it really felt like she was slipping towards some nonconsensual femdommy BS — and that creeps me out. Not sure if it was intentional, and kinda sours what would be a really positive story about love and being comfortable with oneself, doing extraordinary things for others.

Thanks for sharing.

Author's Response: I hope that chapter 3 eased those concerns.

In a world where all international problems are solved through a MOBA game played by enhanced humans, what happens when a neural implantation goes wrong and two unlucky gamers are forced to live in each other’s bodies?
Rated: Kid-Friendly 5 Reviews starstarstarstar Story Incomplete Reads: 3984 Words: 5839 Chapters: 2 Table of Contents
Categories: Sci-Fi Gender Change
Characters: Female to Male, Teen (13-19 yrs), Male to Female, Teen (13-19 yrs)
Turned Into: Daughter, Maid, Son
Featured Items: Maid Uniform, School Uniform, Work Uniform
Locale: High School
Motivation for Change: Accident
Personality: Fights Change
Sexual Orientation: Changes to be Bisexual
Story Theme: Comedy, Coming of Age, Everyday Living
Type of Change: Body Swap
Series: None
Published: 07/11/17
Updated: 07/20/17
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Date: 07/23/17 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2- The new girl

Fun but weird so far. I don't really have a good sense of Rowan, but after the first chapter, this seems more personal, yet more disconnected. Hopefully, the narrative will settle down as he becomes more comfortable. Thankfully, I'm pretty aware of gaming terminology, and didn't have a problem with the jargon — and honestly, the gimmick is pretty cool!

Thanks for sharing, I'm looking forward to more.

One night a little town is wiped off the map by their own government's special forces. All the residents are taken and sent to a underground lab for experimentation.

This story has implied gore but nothing too descriptive. An no sexual events.
Rated: Adult 5 Reviews starstarstar Story Incomplete Reads: 12393 Words: 5768 Chapters: 4 Table of Contents
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Date: 09/06/17 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2 Taking down the big man.

Wow, so this is an interesting twist. I like the concept, building out on a scene and making it work. Also, the concept of this angry, damaged person and her struggle. Flipping back and forth with the flashback and the current story has an interesting pace as well.

Thanks for sharing.

After a heist goes wrong I am left dead and have to decide what to do next. Do I join the dark lord Stan in his endeavors to fight against God? Or do I tell him no and suffer for eternity?

Well I’m no idiot! And this job seems like fun, at least better than the alternative. Maybe I can even get something out of it.
Rated: Deviant 17 Reviews starstarstarstarhalf-star Completed Story Reads: 15506 Words: 32776 Chapters: 12 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Teen (13-19 yrs)
Turned Into: Child
Motivation for Change: Willing or Voluntary
Type of Change: Fast/Instant Change, Stuck
Warnings: Death, Intense Violence, Torture
Series: None
Published: 08/19/17
Updated: 08/24/17
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Date: 08/26/17 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12: Apocalypse

This was an interesting story. Wheels within wheels, and personal temptation. I would have liked it if Judy had learnt a lesson applicable to the next life, but I think I see what you were trying to do with the ending. Being so short and abrupt, I feel a little bit unsatisfied, but it works.

Overall, you did a great job for your first publicly released story. Thanks for sharing, and I look forward to seeing the next one!

Author's Response: Thanks for the review. I thought about doing a lesson learned kind of thing, but halfway through I instead opted to make it a stuck in a bad situation kind of deal since I found it easier to write for that.

Evan and his three closest friends take part in an ‘organic’ virtual reality Beta test. Together, they learn how immersive 21st century video gaming has become while they explore the fantasy world of their favorite book series and re-discover themselves.
Rated: Explicit 143 Reviews starstarstarstarstar Completed Story Reads: 163286 Words: 71291 Chapters: 18 Table of Contents
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Date: 09/08/17 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4: Northern Strong

Better a princess than a nameless guardsman.

Thanks for sharing!

Author's Response: Agreed! Glad that you're enjoying the story

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Date: 09/15/17 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5: A Mere Flesh Wound

Getting a little SAO in here? Good way to get the conflict rolling. Honestly, I think Evan worrying about his traits is a little on the nose, but it fits the character of a sensitive nice guy in the role of a sensitive nice young woman.

Thanks for sharing!

Author's Response: I'm glad that you're liking the story! Evan and the whole 'trait-reveal' was just my way of revealing my thought process as a writer. Every time I write a story, I try to brainstorm 3 to 5 traits for every major character. No character has all positive traits, and no character has all negative traits...I feel like it's a good way to organize my thoughts, and I intended for Evan's trait-reveal and reaction to be a bit interesting for readers. P.S. What's SAO? xD

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Date: 09/26/17 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6: The Pink Canoe

More character development! And cheers for making the scene work.

Author's Response: Yay! Glad you liked it! I know a lot of my stories are a bit character-focused, and I just hope that it doesn't bore people :)

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Date: 12/18/17 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16: Branches

Did I already review this? Not sure. Either way, another successful happy ending! And yes, Kayda, you are kinda badass.

The death scene in the previous chapter was tear-jerking, and I wasn't sure how you were going to pick up the return to reality. Well done!

Thanks for sharing.

Author's Response: Aw, thanks! Glad that you've enjoyed it, and it's not over yet! I'll give you a conclusive ending to this one ;)

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Date: 10/26/17 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11: Morning Dew

At this point, I'm not sure if it's dismissal, or whistling in the dark, but Dan's approach here seems very short-sighted. Also, does Kayda still have the ‘in love with Arden’ status, since personality is changing the character?

Been having a lot of fun with this, even though I'm not particularly a GoT fan. Thanks for sharing!

Author's Response: That's a fair assessment, and you may be correct. Here was my thought process, when creating Dan's approach: 1) Dan is generally a short-sighted and impulsive person, so he doesn't see the ominous happenings as particularly scary. He'd rather live in the moment. 2) Dan's primary objective is to get Kayda to open up and become a little less up-tight and worrisome. Thus, he has almost fallen into a pattern of telling her 'stop worrying about x,y,z,'...which may or may not prove to be dangerous, down the road. Glad you're liking the story!

Justin wakes up and everything has changed. He's got to adjust to his situation and learn how to stay safe from the one who is keeping him here.
Rated: Explicit 10 Reviews starstarstarstarstar Story Incomplete Reads: 58957 Words: 18855 Chapters: 12 Table of Contents
Categories: Sci-Fi Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Teen (13-19 yrs)
Turned Into: Adult, Bimbo, Mother, Slave, Teenager
Motivation for Change: Forced
Personality: Fights Change, Good to Bad, Loses Identity, Made Dumber
Sexual Orientation: Changes to be Bisexual, Changes to be Attracted Only to Men
Story Theme: Captive
Type of Change: Artificial Age Progression, Fast/Instant Change, Mind Control
Warnings: Non-Consentual Sex
Series: None
Published: 08/26/17
Updated: 04/30/18
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Date: 05/01/18 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12 - The Best Laid Plans

I don’t hate you. For me, it’s less about how “happy” a conclusion is, and more about how well it’s earned. Having a horror story where the monster wins and everyone else dies (a personality death) is a valid — and expected — end to this story. The major issue I have is the abrupt perspective change from Anna to Mary.

It might be interesting having a “what happens after he dies” ending — maybe an investigator on the grounds. Maybe a one-shot sequel? Did Elliot do a Mad Father and take his family and start again? How much do the ghosts of that manor scream? With the Warden’s death, what happens to everyone? (Revert, re-fixate, or just go catatonic? Of course, it’d be unlikely said investigator would make it out… intact…

Any way it goes, or if you leave it here, thanks for sharing. A frightening and very readable story.

Author's Response: Wowee! First off, I have no intention of directly leaving it here. There will at least be SOME more to the story, although because this story is purely just a "lets sit down to write and see where it goes" story, I have no comittement to any sort of update consistency. But expect more, at least a little. All of that being said, having a one-shot story about an investigator walking through the place seems pretty dang cool and I might do that if I ever get around to it. Half the time I sit down to write this story I have 0% of a plan for what I'm gonna write, but I think I do have at least half of an ending in my head as of this moment. I'm probably gonna step away from this one for a bit, as throwing such a huge perspective shift tends to make me wanna take a step back (even when it feels right at the time), but maybe in a few weeks/month I'll finish it up. As far as the initial perspective shift from Anna to Mary, I felt I couldn't best describe the changes in Anna from her own perspective, and thought staying there would lose that feeling of being trapped and stuff (Or at least for a while until she was more properly established). It also probably came from me not knowing exactly what to do with her either (aka it was a cop out), but ya... I did want to come back to her though, just because once I got a better handle on her character I just thought it'd be interesting. Also, idk if you can tell, but when I run out of ideas for a character's usefullness I tend to just kill them off (cough Ellie and Chase! cough). It's probably a bad habit, but again, I don't so much care in this story like I would in others. So ya, glad you like it through all of its not-thought-outness and its often super weird and wacky turns. Thanks!

The son of a tyrant is kidnapped by a local rebel group. Surprisingly they actually want to put him in power! There's just one small catch...
Rated: Adult 16 Reviews starstarstarstarhalf-star Story Incomplete Reads: 18900 Words: 11901 Chapters: 5 Table of Contents
Categories: Sci-Fi Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Teen (13-19 yrs)
Turned Into: Daughter, Girlfriend
Featured Items: Lingerie, School Uniform
Locale: Hospital or Clinic
Body Modification: Ears Pierced, Permanent Hair/Skin/Nail Change, Sexual Reassignment Surgery
Motivation for Change: Willing or Voluntary
Sexual Orientation: Does Not Change
Story Theme: Beauty/Fashion, Captive, Coming of Age, Everyday Living, Romance
Type of Change: Drug-Induced, Hormonal, Mechanical Device, Slow/Gradual Change
Series: None
Published: 09/04/17
Updated: 09/07/17
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Date: 09/08/17 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5

You certainly addressed many of MY concerns. Also, nicely done on the title drop. No real complaints, I like the direction and character development.

Thanks for sharing!

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Date: 09/04/17 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

I'm a sucker for both light politics and for heroic sacrifice to earn your happy ending. And you've got a great start to both here.

Of course, it can't be that easy, and I'm also looking forward to the struggles.

Thanks for sharing.

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Date: 09/06/17 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4

The slow transition and growth is a good hook; I like a good insight into the struggle and mentality of the primary character. I still don't have a good feel on Shira's character. She's a big fish (small language joke) who is SUPPOSED to be a professional, but she's been acting both childish and unprofessionally. The whole "forced into gender stereotypes because lol" seems very out of character for someone who has supposedly done this before, in a culture that should be more accepting and aware. That said, did I read correctly that there had never been a female ruler before? That will not only start precedent, but provide you as an author all sorts of potential for social commentary.

Thanks for sharing.

Author's Response: While I agree that Shira is acting in a highly unprofessional manner, i don't believe I ever stated she had done anything like this before. As Blake's apprentice, Shira is more or less restricted to his field of study, which is genetics, not sexual reassignment surgery, I will attempt to address your point about her...lack of sensitivity, I suppos in coming chapterse. It was unintentional, I was more trying to portray a very light hearted and playful character. You are correct, there has not been a female ruler previously, and no doubt there will be people opposed to it for various reasons. I really appreciate you taking the time to express your concerns to me, hopefully I can address them to your satisfaction!

Nathan, the son of a white nationalist leader, learns that hard times reveal true friends.
Rated: Adult 292 Reviews starstarstarstarstar Completed Story Reads: 193863 Words: 76073 Chapters: 37 Table of Contents
Categories: Sci-Fi Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Teen (13-19 yrs)
Turned Into: Daughter, Teenager
Locale: Family Household, High School, Hospital or Clinic
Motivation for Change: Unknown
Sexual Orientation: Changes to be Attracted Only to Men
Story Theme: Coming of Age, Everyday Living, Romance
Type of Change: Slow/Gradual Change, Stuck
Series: None
Published: 09/08/17
Updated: 03/12/18
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Date: 02/27/18 Title: Chapter 33: Chapter 33: Krieg

You sure like the dramatic showdown, don't you! This has a lot of similarities with a young queen on the parapets defending her love — but that doesn't make it wrong.

In a lot of ways, I really like Nat. More than Johanna, Nat is growing past trauma to become a more whole person, and I REALLY like that.

Thanks for sharing.

Author's Response: That's refreshing to hear! Thanks for the feedback. Next chapter is going to be a big one, in terms of Nat coming to really understand her new self. I think you'll enjoy it :)

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Date: 09/14/17 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4: Civilization

You have a real talent for the slow burn character drama, and this one is really shaping up well. Looking forward to what happens Nat becoming Natalie may actually be an objective bonus!

Thanks for sharing.

Author's Response: Oo you called it with the Nat-Natalie! I love that name :)

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Date: 12/07/17 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19: Specs

May the WaFF flow. Thanks for sharing, this has been great!

Author's Response: Thanks for the feedback!

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Date: 10/08/17 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9: Changes

I almost feel bad for him. Hopefully, this will be the chance to make a clean break. Of course, your usual talent at writing believable, conflicted characters shines through here.

Thanks for sharing!

Author's Response: Thanks for the reassuring words! The reason I write in first-person is because it's really hard to dissect emotions in third-person, and I just hope that those emotions come across as genuine to readers

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Date: 10/24/17 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12: The Nervous Turtle

Major shocks to your worldview at night make for uncomfortable days. What others have been using GB as a plot point? I seem to recall a few other stories.

Thanks for sharing!

Author's Response: Yup! It's a common premise, but I'm trying to give it an interesting twist. Glad you're liking it!

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Date: 11/07/17 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16: Open Arms

Daaaawwww. Enough said.

Thanks for sharing!

Author's Response: :D Glad you're liking it!

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Date: 03/13/18 Title: Chapter 37: Chapter 37: Epilogue

While I'm a little disappointed Nat ended up leaving, I love the warm and gracious end to the story.

You write the best fairy tales.

Author's Response: I'm so glad that you liked the ending! Endings have generally been a weakness of mine, but I like to think that I'm improving in that department. In this story, I felt like the dark themes would make a purely fairytale ending a bit too out-of-place, so I tried to add some bittersweetness with Nat's departure, along with some heavy-handed closure via leaving her old town behind. *Hugs*

Anita is one tough lady, and believe me you don't want to get on her wrong side. She is a military hero, Green Beret, and very smart. She also has a soft side. Her love is out there, somewhere.
Rated: Adult 7 Reviews starstarstarstarhalf-star Completed Story Reads: 17949 Words: 38941 Chapters: 16 Table of Contents
Categories: Realistic Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Young Adult (20-26 yrs)
Turned Into: Bride, Mother, Wife
Featured Items: Gaff, Lingerie
Body Modification: Castrated/Neutered, Sexual Reassignment Surgery
Motivation for Change: In Hiding, Willing or Voluntary
Sexual Orientation: Changes to be Attracted Only to Women
Story Theme: Romance
Type of Change: Hormonal
Warnings: Death, Intense Violence
Series: None
Published: 11/10/17
Updated: 12/09/17
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Date: 11/14/17 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Okay, I’m interested. Write what you know, this has that gritty flowing feel of verisimilitude.

Consume in small doses, but thanks for sharing!

Sometimes change is good, sometimes bad, and sometimes it's vengeance.

Nemesis is a cruel mistress they say, but what do you think she does to those on the other side?
Rated: Adult 10 Reviews starstarstarstarhalf-star Completed Story Reads: 43257 Words: 13122 Chapters: 14 Table of Contents
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Date: 11/27/17 Title: Chapter 14: Epilogue II - Fly me to the moon

Well it might not be Earn Your Happy Ending, but a redemption story always goes well. I did like the glimpses into Alice’s head, where in the middle of it, she had only a little more freedom and stability than those she punished. Major shades of Donnie Darko here, but maybe that’s just the rabbit. (That was a joke. The Alice theme works well, but the narrative disconnects — I think I get what you were trying to do — made for difficult reading.)

Thanks for sharing!

Author's Response: Thanks :) Sometimes the narrative and theme did feel like they were fighting, but I rather enjoyed imposing my will on it all (Using Alice as a conduit). I had enough fun in fact that Alice shall return just as soon as I finish one of my other stories (Which is not behaving as it should). As for the rabbit, originally she was going to be the mad hatter and male. With the swipe of the keys and without conscious thought she changed sex and species.

How bad can college hazing get? You can’t possible imagine…
Rated: Explicit 261 Reviews starstarstarstarstar Completed Story Reads: 808659 Words: 57491 Chapters: 79 Table of Contents
Categories: Realistic Crossdressing and TV
Characters: Male to Female, Young Adult (20-26 yrs)
Turned Into: Bimbo, Fantasy Character, Girlfriend, Object, Prostitute, Sissy, Slave
Featured Items: Breast Forms, High Heels, Lingerie, Long Nails
Locale: College
Motivation for Change: Blackmailed, For a Job, Male Domination, Tricked
Personality: Loses Identity
Sexual Orientation: Changes to be Attracted Only to Men
Story Type: Includes Images
Story Theme: Captive, Comedy, Humiliation
Type of Change: Slow/Gradual Change, Stuck
Warnings: Non-Consentual Sex
Series: None
Published: 11/26/17
Updated: 02/22/18
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Date: 02/28/18 Title: Chapter 79: Epilogue

Short, but feels well-earned. A long, well-written, experiment in abuse and growth.

Honestly, this is one of those where I come back and say that I didn't really like this, it wasn't a fun read, but very well done, and emotionally raw. From previous author's notes, I believe you came from a similar perspective.

Thank you for sharing.

Author's Response: Honestly, that sounds just perfect and what I set out to do. There aren't really any redeeming characters in Hazed, even James. We can feel sorry for him but, I think, it's hard to root for him like he's a hero. And, yes, it was an experiment in abuse and that was my intent. Pablo likened it to A Clockwork Orange - disturbing. That's high praise but, whether earned or not, it's the sort of story I set out to write. I actually felt a little icky as I wrote it and edited each chapter before posting. I'm glad to be working on a happier project now.

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Date: 01/19/18 Title: Chapter 48: Homecoming Part II

This is… an utterly believable and somewhat horrifying portrayal of operant conditioning. I’m still not sure if his father is negligent or actively abusive, but at this point it’s clear his mother is complicit. The romance here’s the same — the toxic sweetness of an abusive relationship passed down one generation to the next.

Your writing makes it carry though. This whole thing has been very readable, well explained, and actually almost reads like a sweet slow WaFFy story. Thank you for sharing.

Author's Response: That’s exactly what I was hoping for! The questions you have will be answered soon. I can’t wait to hear what you think. Oh, and James isn’t done going deeper in.

Everyone knows genies are wicked, ancient, terribly powerful creatures... or at least everyone used to know that. But now, after a thousand years of captivity, one scheming djinn is ready to bend an unsuspecting world to her will, one twisted wish at a time.
Rated: Explicit 32 Reviews starstarstarstarhalf-star Completed Story Reads: 334546 Words: 37208 Chapters: 16 Table of Contents
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Date: 02/06/18 Title: Chapter 5: Who Wants to be a Millionaire?

Nobody wins. I’m really enjoying this!

Thanks for sharing.

Author's Response: Hmm, I think winning and losing might be subjective here. Glad you like it!

In a land of eternal conflict between humans and monsters, Mark finds himself 'adopted' by the succubus queen.
Struggling with his new identity and newly acquired powers, Mark now Shina will embark in a journey trough exotic lands between kitsunes, lamias, and many more, to try to stop a war few even remember why it started.
Rated: Explicit 36 Reviews starstarstarstarhalf-star Story Incomplete Reads: 31077 Words: 22707 Chapters: 7 Table of Contents
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Date: 02/27/18 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter VI: Slime and prejudice

This is really growing into an interesting pace. I like the idea of a virtuous man sacrificing identity for the right, and making a difference.

Even if that includes making nice to slimes, and infiltrating a military camp. Looking forward to reading the next chapter!

Thanks for sharing!

Author's Response: Thanks, I actually have a tiny bit of remark about virtue, perceived virtue and responsibility, which I do plan to include on the story, but I won't be able to fit it inside for a while.

Connor is a successful young techie living in New York. Just when he doesn't think life could get any better the two kinky girls downstairs invite him over for what he naively assumes is a threesome.
Rated: Explicit 66 Reviews starstarstarstarstar Story Incomplete Reads: 201700 Words: 54429 Chapters: 14 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Adult (27-62 yrs)
Turned Into: Girlfriend
Featured Items: High Heels, Lingerie, Pantyhose, Undies, Work Uniform
Motivation for Change: Tricked, Willing or Voluntary
Personality: Fights Change, From Dominant to Submissive
Sexual Orientation: Changes to be Bisexual, Changes to be Attracted Only to Women
Story Theme: Humiliation, Witchcraft
Type of Change: Body Swap, Fast/Instant Change, Mind Control
Series: None
Published: 04/29/18
Updated: 09/12/18
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Date: 05/02/18 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3 - Waking Up on the Other Side

Well written and interesting twist on some classic plot hooks. That said, I really feel like Connor is carrying the idiot ball here. Maybe it’s desperation, but getting tricked once and now he’s getting in deeper.

The smart thing would probably be to take his ball and go home, just bailing on them. That doesn’t look like the dynamic though — for all of his success, Connor doesn’t seem to have the self confidence to be unmoved. Maria will just keep playing games with her new toy — perhaps not maliciously, but that doesn’t change the fate of the mouse when the cat’s about. Too bad there’s no friendly best friend who also is looking for an opportunity who could rescue “Alice” — oh wait there is EXACTLY that. That path avoids magic at the cost of becoming Alice in function as well as form.

Looking forward to where you take it — thanks for sharing.

An adventurer finds himself at the mercy of a mysterious, slightly inhuman woman, after having already being tricked by a cunning king and his unsympathetic court wizard.
Rated: Explicit 37 Reviews starstarstarstarstar Story Incomplete Reads: 37767 Words: 47590 Chapters: 12 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Adult (27-62 yrs)
Turned Into: Fantasy Character
Motivation for Change: For a Job, Forced
Personality: From Dominant to Submissive
Sexual Orientation: Changes to be Attracted Only to Women
Story Theme: Mythical Setting
Type of Change: Fast/Instant Change
Series: None
Published: 05/12/18
Updated: 06/15/18
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Date: 05/16/18 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3

This whole character study has been interesting. Where is the will to own one’s situation? They went from mercenaries to murderers, and now our protagonist is in a vastly different situation.

Karya also seems to have gotten an unfair review in the story summary. Definitely alien, but so far she hasn’t seemed malicious. We’ll have to see as things go on.

Thanks for sharing!

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Date: 05/21/18 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5

Oh no it’s tricksy dryads time! I’m really having fun with this, the character interaction is spot on. Karya is that best of aliens — mischievous but not malicious, and very different in perspective.

Thanks for sharing!

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Date: 06/05/18 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7

Aww, now I feel awful for Karya. Of course, she’s up against a proper dragon, but I hope that her loyalty and hopeful trust is rewarded.

Queen Meliantha needs to find a new female apprentice with enough magical potential to teach. Local peasant Ferand has wanted all of his life to one day become a strong and noble Villorian Knight. Only one of them is going to get what they want...
Rated: Explicit 73 Reviews starstarstarstarstar Completed Story Reads: 86527 Words: 113876 Chapters: 21 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Young Adult (20-26 yrs)
Turned Into: Fantasy Character
Featured Items: Corsets, High Heels, Long Nails
Motivation for Change: Forced
Personality: Fights Change, From Dominant to Submissive, Made Smarter
Sexual Orientation: Changes to be Attracted Only to Men
Story Theme: Mythical Setting, Romance
Type of Change: Stuck
Series: None
Published: 06/27/18
Updated: 07/13/18
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Date: 07/08/18 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15

I kinda of expected Delilah, but… while I wanted Mel to bite it, at least she died a hero's death? Good characters invite conflict. Looking forward to the next chapter!

Right now, I'm basically expecting the existing family to be wiped out, Rodric and Elicia assume the throne, and also open a mage's college in the land after so much gets wiped out. The southern kingdom kinda tags along, but no one trusts them.

Looking forward to the next chapter, and thanks for sharing!

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Date: 07/03/18 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12

This has been a great series, and a fair progression. I've always had a soft spot for well-earned victories, and hard-fought romance. Elicia is being set up for both — although I still want some sort of justice for Meliantha.

More insight into the ones fighting in the war would be good, but don't get too caught up in the pile of named characters you've developed. It's easy to lose track of the story.

Thanks for sharing!

Author's Response: Thanks for the feedback!

After he accidentally disturbs his female neighbours' ritual, beer-swilling student Chad finds himself gaining some pretty nifty divine powers. Unfortunately for him, that that's not all that is changing about him. Will the girls be able to reverse the effects, or is the old Chad soon to be no more?
Rated: Adult 57 Reviews starstarstarstarstar Completed Story Reads: 111743 Words: 23273 Chapters: 13 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Young Adult (20-26 yrs)
Turned Into: Fantasy Character
Featured Items: Corsets, Lingerie, Pantyhose, Petticoat, Lace, Ruffles, Crinoline
Locale: College
Motivation for Change: Accident
Personality: Fights Change
Sexual Orientation: Does Not Change
Story Theme: Everyday Living, Witchcraft
Type of Change: Slow/Gradual Change
Series: None
Published: 07/29/18
Updated: 09/04/18
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Date: 09/16/18 Title: Chapter 13: Epilogue - In With the New

Awww, a lovely ending to a warm story. I really like how nobody got set up as ‘the villain’. Everyone was trying with the best intentions and made mistakes, and ‘all's well that ends well.’ Including the girl getting her girl.

It might be interesting to see what Mercedes is doing with herself, but for right now, this story feels complete.

Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it.

A Halloween night that started out ordinary becomes far crazier when you and your two friends get bitten by what can only be a vampire.
Rated: Explicit 31 Reviews starstarstarstarhalf-star Completed Story Reads: 67611 Words: 20148 Chapters: 11 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Young Adult (20-26 yrs)
Turned Into: Slave
Locale: College
Sexual Orientation: Changes to be Bisexual
Story Theme: Captive, Costume or Halloween
Warnings: Intense Violence, Non-Consentual Sex
Series: None
Published: 11/10/18
Updated: 03/18/19
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Date: 12/05/18 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5

So sexy noncon is a success. I’m really hoping Brianna gets out of that, but no one’s getting out unscathed.

This was fun!

Chris is having the mother of all bad days when he finds himself suddenly caught up in an ancient conspiracy to bring about Ragnarök, with him as the mother of the apocalypse. Now also available on scribblehub.com.
Rated: Adult 12 Reviews starstarstarstarstar Story Incomplete Reads: 51326 Words: 53847 Chapters: 38 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Young Adult (20-26 yrs)
Turned Into: Fantasy Character
Motivation for Change: Accident, Curse, Willing or Voluntary
Sexual Orientation: Changes to be Attracted Only to Women, Does Not Change
Story Theme: Mythical Setting
Warnings: Intense Violence, Torture
Series: None
Published: 09/09/19
Updated: 05/04/20
Reviewer: Will It Work Signed starstarstarstar
Date: 04/10/20 Title: Chapter 36: Fahrenheit 451

Well that escalated quickly. Honestly, I was expecting to see some sort of sacrifice in the process of attaining equilibrium and establishing a future life, but I had hoped that the library would survive.

You've certainly increase the steaks and made a interesting and dramatic story. Thank you for sharing!

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