Beefed
I'm just an average writer putting my half baked but hopefully original ideas somewhere I hope they can be enjoyed by others.
Member Since: 01/12/17 Membership status: Member
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Reviews by Beefed
Joseph was a pessimistic loner, angry with both his existence and the world. After a misused wishing stone alters his body and robs him of his voice, Joseph is forced to evaluate his life.
Rated: Adult 243 Reviews starstarstarstarhalf-star Completed Story Reads: 240307 Words: 105449 Chapters: 23 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Teen (13-19 yrs)
Turned Into: Cheerleader, Daughter, Girlfriend
Locale: Family Household, High School
Body Modification: Ears Pierced
Motivation for Change: Accident, Revenge
Personality: Bad to Good
Sexual Orientation: Becomes Only Attracted to Men, Does Not Change
Story Theme: Coming of Age, Everyday Living, Genie/Wishes, Romance, Sports
Type of Change: Fast/Instant Change, Stuck
Series: None
Published: 02/09/17
Updated: 07/15/17
Reviewer: Beefed Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 05/11/17 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2: The Stone

From the use of 'hot chick' I think Joseph should count himself lucky that he didn't turn into a warm baby chicken!

Author's Response: Haha! That would be quite a twist, but this isn't a Shadow Dragon story.

Jake, a 16yo French guy, was waiting the bus when he found an allshiny golden coin on the ground. There is something special about thiscoin. Whenever he wants something to happen, it happens, instantly.Here is Jake’s story.
Rated: Explicit 3 Reviews starstarstarhalf-star Story Incomplete Reads: 26639 Words: 5065 Chapters: 4 Table of Contents
Reviewer: Beefed Signed
Date: 02/16/18 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I'm going to take it, judging by the dialogue structure, and the odd misuse of a word, that you are French, or at least not English/American/Australian in nationality. I recommend you research how to use speech marks and write dialogue in English as I believe that this is your biggest problem. There are a few words and phrases that you should also work on but you just have to know this stuff, I recommend you read more in English and look for the patterns

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