brucejedi
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Eric is a normal teenage desperately in love with his 'fiancée' Sarah, yes they are that in love. His parents have other ideas and start Eric on an incredibly unfamiliar journey. Will he be able to cope?
Rated: Adult 13 Reviews starstarstarstarstar Story Incomplete Reads: 36212 Words: 18404 Chapters: 8 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Teen (13-19 yrs)
Turned Into: Daughter
Featured Items: School Uniform
Locale: Family Household, High School
Motivation for Change: Forced
Sexual Orientation: Changes to be Attracted Only to Men
Story Theme: Everyday Living, Romance
Type of Change: Fast/Instant Change
Series: None
Published: 07/11/15
Updated: 07/13/15
Reviewer: brucejedi Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 09/11/17 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1-An Unwelcome "Gift"

I found this story after reading your other one. I was unaware of it before, and it's quite a hidden gem. The comparisons between the main character and her former girlfriend are quite something--imagine being shorter, curvier, and less athletically gifted than the girl you used to have sex with on a regular basis! Here's to hoping you continue this wonderful tale.

Poor Daniel. Woke up to find his world turned sideways as his manhood is stripped from him without a trace or any sign of how it happened. Will he be able to find the source of his new X chromosome and revert it or live life as a newfound woman?
Rated: Adult 52 Reviews starstarstarstarhalf-star Story Incomplete Reads: 88078 Words: 38805 Chapters: 18 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Teen (13-19 yrs)
Locale: High School
Motivation for Change: Unknown
Sexual Orientation: Does Not Change
Series: None
Published: 03/02/16
Updated: 02/16/17
Reviewer: brucejedi Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 02/02/17 Title: Chapter 17: Massively Single Player

Still loving this one. I've never quite seen a story on these sites where the character actually experiences the emotions that might come from an experience like this, but that is exactly what you've done here. So glad you decided to continue it.

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Date: 04/11/16 Title: Chapter 9: Message Alert

I can't even begin to say how much I'm enjoying this story. There are far too few stories where the guy turns into an average girl as opposed to a supermodel. It's one thing to become a sexual fantasy, but quite another to become a flesh-and-blood person with all the insecurities and worries of a regular teenage girl. We have here a believable description of how a high school kid might actually respond to waking up the opposite gender. She doesn't immediately explore her body--in fact, she refuses even to look at it. So instead of the full reveal, we get a tidbit here, a tidbit there--of the times when despite her every intention, her femaleness imposes itself: when she leans on the desk, when she peers down at her underwear, and here in this chapter when her bra is distracting her. It has the overall effect of leaving us constantly on the edge of our seats.

There are a few inconsistencies--e.g. she mentions gym class but it never arrives--and a few minor grammatical issues, but they don't interfere with the awesomeness of this story. There also might be some opportunities to work in elements of the physical description the author provided below, but in subtle ways that keep with story's current style--e.g. she notices her arms brushing against her wider hips when she walks, or her jeans fitting tightly in certain areas when she first slips then on. I'm eager to see how the author chooses to work this stuff in, if at all.

Author's Response: Thank you very much for the kind words and input! I will have to go through again to spot all the grammatical errors as I am seeing this note a few times and will do my best to do a few more of these places of physical description. This is my first time writing anything of this length and scope, so I apologize for the lack of ability at times. Comments like these are what kept this from dying in the first few chapters and keep me motivated to write.

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Date: 04/20/16 Title: Chapter 11: Faded Memories

This just keeps getting better and better and better. Loved the scene of the photobook, when she saw herself wearing the same outfit as in the dream...what a chilling discovery! And it's cool how each time she looks in the mirror she notices something she wasn't aware of before, and the new reality sinks in deeper.

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Date: 06/03/16 Title: Chapter 1: Morning Alarm

Will you let us know when you've made revisions so we can go back and read the chapters again? Very curious to see what you will change...

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Date: 09/20/16 Title: Chapter 15: Delayed Sweat

Another fantastic chapter! I hope the next one doesn't take tooooo long to come out...

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Date: 10/30/16 Title: Chapter 1: Morning Alarm

Nah, the last two chapters were great! Just keep doing what you're doing. My only critique would be that those chapters were very physical, which I like, but not as psychological as the earlier ones. Where this story really shines is when those two components come together--as, for example, in her constant reflection on how different things now are. Another beautiful aspect of this story is the ongoing confusion and disequilibrium she feels, not just at being female, but at all the implications of that, in terms of who her friends are, how her old friends treat her, even what her interests and hobbies are. Of course the scenes of her getting dressed or looking in the mirror are great fun, but the so too is the constant self-consciousness and confusion as to how she is supposed to be acting. (Shoot me an email if you want to throw around some ideas.)

It's just so frustrating! Follow the adventures of Jason as his life is made much more uncomfortable by a curse and his life trying to cope with it and find some peace with himself.
Rated: Explicit 35 Reviews starstarstarstarhalf-star Story Incomplete Reads: 88689 Words: 17604 Chapters: 7 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Adult (27-62 yrs)
Turned Into: Girlfriend, Mother
Locale: Office
Motivation for Change: Curse, For a Job, Forced, Revenge, Tricked
Personality: Bad to Good, Fights Change
Sexual Orientation: Changes to be Attracted Only to Men
Story Theme: Everyday Living, Horror, Pregnancy, Romance
Type of Change: Changed by Clothing, Fast/Instant Change, Stuck
Warnings: Bodily Functions
Series: None
Published: 06/04/16
Updated: 05/28/17
Reviewer: brucejedi Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 06/07/16 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter Three

This is a fantastic idea, and well-executed. Loved the gym scene and the sequence when the curse first hits. The fact that he is not actually female but feels as if he is makes this story that much hotter for some reason. And it allows for the focus to be on the physical disequilibrium, which is usually my favorite part of these stories anyway. Can't wait to see where this goes next!

Author's Response: So glad you've enjoyed it so far. It's been good to write.

My best buds and I make an annual trip to our favorite winter cabin, except we have a unique twist on our epic week. Of course, the twist never happened to me until I drew the short straw this year...
Rated: Explicit 168 Reviews starstarstarstarstar Story Incomplete Reads: 301026 Words: 119627 Chapters: 34 Table of Contents
Categories: Sci-Fi Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Young Adult (20-26 yrs)
Turned Into: Adult, Daughter
Locale: Family Household, Office, Vacation Destination
Motivation for Change: Lost a Bet, Willing or Voluntary
Sexual Orientation: Changes to be Attracted Only to Men
Story Theme: Coming of Age, Everyday Living, Romance
Series: None
Published: 11/28/16
Updated: 09/29/18
Reviewer: brucejedi Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 09/11/17 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: Drawing To Keep Your Straw

This is a very nice story with vivid description and thoughtful insight into the main character's emotions. I actually like your other story even more--any plans on continuing that one too?

Author's Response: @brucejedi-I love that you are enjoying the story so far! I really like my other story (A Parent's Incantation) as well, and unfortunately haven't got around to adding more as I have used my writing time on this story or other stories I haven't put up yet. Long story short... I definitely want to finish it! Will hopefully try to tackle it when I have this one done and no other stories come in the way.

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Date: 09/20/18 Title: Chapter 27: Chapter 27: Birds of a Feather Flock Together?

I read this too quickly the first time through, basically scanning for the physical details I enjoy. This story has plenty of that: Ashley’s frequent references to her new anatomy and physique, and how that impacts everyday situations. But I skimmed right past the subtle and eminently believable inner monologue that reveals Ashley’s emotions.

The author understands that we rarely think “I like this boy” and then kiss him. Rather, one thing leads to another, we kiss, and we agonize later over what it meant. We constantly second-guess ourselves, question or rationalize our decisions. Ashley feels female, even identifies as such, from almost the moment she switched, but what that means evolves over time. At first it’s just physical, but as she falls for Jack she finds herself exploring her new self emotionally and culturally as well—through clothes, makeup, flirting, and ultimately, falling for a man.

This tale is like a transgender Brokeback Mountain. In fact I’m surprised this never came up in earlier reviews. In both, a magical stay in a remote location leads a person to discover a new side to their sexuality, and to fall head-over-heels in love. But the real world is waiting back home. Only with the passage of time can they learn what the experience really meant.

Something in Ashley’s personality before the switch must have led her to get so swept up in her femininity and in Jack, not unlike Ennis (Heath Ledger) in the movie. To someone else, Dan for example, curiosity might lead to sexual experimentation, but not to the intense feelings Ashley develops for her friend. But that doesn’t mean she’s not regretful, heartbroken, depressed, and overall confused afterwards. It seems perfectly natural to me that she’d experiment with another girl—and no less natural to realize, to her surprise, that she didn’t much like it. In short, “Part II” of the story makes Ashley and her journey all the more real.

Jack’s personality and motives are less clear at this point. At the cabin he seemed less conflicted than Ashley, not just physically but emotionally too, and it’s unclear why. (Her looking like a girl doesn’t full explain it.) Perhaps more will be revealed later on.

Author's Response: I am completely flattered brucejedi, and your comment made my week. I obviously am on the same page with you, realizing essential one's truths come through experimentation and discovery. Maturation and self-realization is never known to be a one event process, and Ashley's story reflects that. She needs to place herself in situations to reveal what she likes and doesn't like. This is a journey for her that has many amusing experiences and depictions; I too often scroll through this site looking for exactly what you do, that is one of the reasons I put them in here! But, they also set the tone for the environment of not just her outside metamorphosis, but her internal change. And hank you for pointing a thought that occurred to me about a year ago... This story is a lot like Brokeback Mountain! I swear it wasn't intentional (I haven't seen the movie, but I know the plot), yet that is how it is coming out to be. Maybe it is a common allegory to many different aspects of our lives, even outside of the LGBT culture? Just a thought to ponder. As for Jack, I have intentionally left Jack's motivations and thought process be muted through the story. When the plot begins, Ashley is like many of us at that age, on the cusp of adulthood but unknowingly self-centered in the sense she can't see the bigger picture. In her journey, she isolates herself from Jack, and clearly we can't know what Jack feels because he is, for all intensive purposes, and outsider to her life. By this stage, she is distinctly more awoken to what is happening around her and her place. We will know exactly Jack's perspective by the end of the story :) On another note, sorry for the long block of post, apparently I can't make separate paragraphs in the 'Author's Response' section on this site.

Reviewer: brucejedi Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 09/30/18 Title: Chapter 34: Chapter 34: More Than You'll Ever Know (Part II)

You about melted my heart with that one. Ashley has been through so much--she deserves someone like Jack. Here's to hoping we get to witness one more steamy love-making scene between them...

Jason Thomas was just trying to finish up his junior year of high school and enjoy his summer. The world had seen a new phenomenon of sudden gender changes over the past three years. That all seemed far removed from the small town in Iowa. Follow Jason as he struggles to adjust to his new reality and the start of something bigger on a global scale.
Rated: Explicit 35 Reviews starstarstarstarhalf-star Story Incomplete Reads: 120851 Words: 53526 Chapters: 12 Table of Contents
Categories: Sci-Fi Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Teen (13-19 yrs)
Turned Into: Cheerleader, Daughter, Girlfriend, Teenager
Featured Items: Bikinis, High Heels, Lingerie, Long Nails, Sex Toys, Undies
Locale: Family Household, High School, Hospital or Clinic, Labratory
Body Modification: Ears Pierced
Motivation for Change: Unknown
Sexual Orientation: Changes to be Bisexual, Changes to be Attracted Only to Men
Story Theme: Coming of Age, Everyday Living, Medical Experiment, Romance
Type of Change: Slow/Gradual Change
Series: None
Published: 12/01/16
Updated: 11/10/17
Reviewer: brucejedi Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 12/07/16 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Loving this so far. Keep it coming!

Brian had a lot to live forward to. It was senior year after all. And he planned to breeze through it until college. That is, until he woke up with an unexpected change.
Rated: Adult 18 Reviews starstarstarstarhalf-star Story Incomplete Reads: 41871 Words: 5566 Chapters: 6 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Teen (13-19 yrs)
Turned Into: Daughter, Girlfriend, Teenager
Locale: High School
Motivation for Change: Curse, Unknown
Personality: Fights Change
Sexual Orientation: Changes to be Bisexual
Story Theme: Comedy, Coming of Age, Everyday Living
Type of Change: Slow/Gradual Change, Stuck
Series: None
Published: 09/09/17
Updated: 11/04/17
Reviewer: brucejedi Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 10/01/17 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5: Vaginaville, Day 2

This is truly great. The theme of casual dating while in the midst of an unwelcome transformation is a gold mine just waiting to be tapped. And this story taps it with humorous precision.

Author's Response: Thank you so much! It really means a lot. I've got more in store so I definitely hope you keep reading!!!

Connor is a successful young techie living in New York. Just when he doesn't think life could get any better the two kinky girls downstairs invite him over for what he naively assumes is a threesome.
Rated: Explicit 66 Reviews starstarstarstarstar Story Incomplete Reads: 199946 Words: 54429 Chapters: 14 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Adult (27-62 yrs)
Turned Into: Girlfriend
Featured Items: High Heels, Lingerie, Pantyhose, Undies, Work Uniform
Motivation for Change: Tricked, Willing or Voluntary
Personality: Fights Change, From Dominant to Submissive
Sexual Orientation: Changes to be Bisexual, Changes to be Attracted Only to Women
Story Theme: Humiliation, Witchcraft
Type of Change: Body Swap, Fast/Instant Change, Mind Control
Series: None
Published: 04/30/18
Updated: 09/13/18
Reviewer: brucejedi Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 06/28/18 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9 - Something Gained for What Was Lost

The mental transformation in this story is truly great. My favorite part is Connor's internal struggle to resist the curse--how he can recall his old life if he concentrates hard enough, but that otherwise Alice's personality takes over. That came out in earlier chapters but you really nailed it in this one.

Calvin is a chimera — a shapeshifter — whose college major involves a year spent as the opposite sex. Becoming a woman isn’t easy, but being one may be even harder. And when Calvin, now Cate, stumbles upon some secrets she should never have learned, she’ll have to rely on her powers, and her friends, to save the day.
Rated: Explicit 145 Reviews starstarstarstarstar Story Incomplete Reads: 195303 Words: 143576 Chapters: 57 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Female to Male, Young Adult (20-26 yrs), Male to Female, Young Adult (20-26 yrs)
Locale: College
Motivation for Change: Willing or Voluntary
Sexual Orientation: Changes to be Attracted Only to Men
Story Theme: Everyday Living
Type of Change: Slow/Gradual Change
Warnings: Bodily Functions
Series: None
Published: 08/02/18
Updated: 10/26/18
Reviewer: brucejedi Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 08/08/18 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5

This has to be one of the most fascinating stories I've read on these sites. It seems as though "Debug Mode" functioned as a prelude, allowing you to develop the ideas of probability and chance as they relate to TG. Now those ideas take fuller form in this wonderful tale, but join some great new ones like chimeric residue. That one in particular opens up so many interesting possibilities. These chimeras can alter their bodies, but too great a change gets tiring. So to change genders indefinitely, they have to figure out what their female (or male) self would have been like had only their sex chromosome been different. I can conjure up a great scene of Calvin trying to figure out what his breasts would have looked like, or his hips, butt, etc. and who knows, maybe the result doesn't match his image of a perfect body? And what about that pituitary gland? Once you get it to match your female baseline, what effects will that have on your personality? Nah, that little organ couldn't possibly be very important...

Author's Response: I’ve often found that what interests me most are the details of a process, and this story started out as my attempt to create a coherent system that was as detailed as possible. The story took new directions from there, but that was the genesis. I hope subsequent chapters continue to scratch that itch.

A young man finally meets up with his longtime online friend for their first date, only to discover she's been working on an interesting app that has the potential to change their lives. Literally.
Rated: Explicit 92 Reviews starstarstarstarhalf-star Story Incomplete Reads: 336607 Words: 56980 Chapters: 29 Table of Contents
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Date: 09/19/19 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10: The GAME Part 1

This quote from "The Truman Show" sums up this story for me:
- Truman: Was nothing real?
- Christof: You were real. That's what made you so good to watch.
Despite the suspended disbelief required by a sci-fi story like this, Ethan and Samantha are so believable. I feel like I'm right there with them in the room.

I hesitate to give ideas, considering how insanely good this is already, but since you asked... I wonder if Ethan could experience some more of his own fetishes, like carrying a bit of extra feminine weight, etc. But, it's fun to fully explore one change before going further. Like right now his butt FEELS big to him even if it's not actually that big. So how interesting it would be for him to acclimate to his current situation before getting hit with something closer to what he gave Samantha... I also wonder what situations would best exploit each change. For instance, Sam's being unable to cover up is one thing in the privacy of her home, but the two of them going out in public would certainly raise the stakes. Likewise with Sam's new curves, going to the gym or out dancing would accentuate everything he's feeling...

But seriously, keep doing what you're doing. The subtlety of the changes, and the focus on the characters' reactions, is what's making this story so great. Also the good-natured teasing--pushing each other's limits and creating embarrassing situations without the meanness.

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