Sylvia Waldgrave
A wandering spirit in search of a comfortable home. Will that be here? maybe.

Member Since: 06/18/15 Membership status: Member
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A new world of magic and strange creatures, where slavery is accepted and racism is the norm. One man will become something completely different and change the world itself.
Rated: Explicit 139 Reviews starstarstarstarstar Story Incomplete Reads: 107814 Words: 196456 Chapters: 37 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Young Adult (20-26 yrs)
Turned Into: Fantasy Character, Wife
Locale: Camp
Motivation for Change: For a Job, Forced
Sexual Orientation: Becomes Only Attracted to Men
Story Theme: Historical Time Period, Mythical Setting
Type of Change: Racial
Warnings: Death, Intense Violence, Non-Consentual Sex, Torture
Series: None
Published: 12/27/14
Updated: 03/22/17
Reviewer: Sylvia Moriah Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 09/19/15 Title: Chapter 32: Chapter 30: Apprehensiveness

Glad I noticed this was updated as well. :3

Nice touch on the treatment of the Emporer. :P It wouldn't be the first time we see a person of such an age, with such a position, be thrown well out of his depth hahaha.

Author's Response: I thought that the Emperor needed a different touch. There are only two people of that position, one is a complete a****** (King of Isertar) and one is the character we've been following since the beginning who barely uses her position to get things done. ["If I'm wearing the crown, then I'm Queen"]. The Emperor needed to be young enough to have a council, yet old enough to make laws and decisions. He needs to be educated, yet not know about what he can bargain with. I believe I'm mentioned this before, but Aesop is surrounded by enemies. If they don't ally with Yisardis or Yisardis ends the war on a victory and finds that Aesop doesn't keep its promises they will be more than ready to switch their targets. This meant that I could make a teenager who wanted to protect his country, yet felt that the right way to do it was trying to make bargains he couldn't afford.

A mystery, a man named The Dealer, who takes the dead and places them in new worlds. Their names... Aces. People who will go on to change history, or fail trying. This is Shore's story, a Dragon Knight and The Dealer's newest Ace.
Rated: Explicit 253 Reviews starstarstarstarstar Story Incomplete Reads: 96865 Words: 208366 Chapters: 31 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Young Adult (20-26 yrs)
Turned Into: Fantasy Character
Motivation for Change: Unknown, Willing or Voluntary
Personality: Made Smarter
Sexual Orientation: Becomes Only Attracted to Men
Type of Change: Fast/Instant Change
Warnings: Death, Intense Violence
Series: None
Published: 02/14/15
Updated: 02/17/16
Reviewer: Sylvia Moriah Signed
Date: 07/20/15 Title: Chapter 1: Ace of clubs: Rigging the deck

well people have guessed :P

personally I kinda wanted it to be Arya of the celestial wastelands xD just as a want really :P

Author's Response: I will head to Celestial Wastelands... One day. So many continents that are all so simply reached with wings.

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Date: 09/06/15 Title: Chapter 17: Five of Clubs: Deckmaster

ooh appearance of the master :3

Author's Response: More an appearance of the student. The master was there first. ;)

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Date: 12/08/15 Title: Chapter 28: Seven of Hearts: Questioning the Heart

then I must take this moment to thank you for the calm chapter and... request for 2 fangs in a row :P

IT sounds like a safer bet for you to keep up with your creativity if you get to progress by a happy amount, and we certainly wouldn't want to see you rush through any 1 story at a time :3

Author's Response: As much as two Fangs sounds fun. I'm already writing one and I have ALtSo request above. I'll think about writing another Fangs chapter after that.

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Date: 12/10/15 Title: Chapter 29: Seven of Spades: The Forth Suit (Conclusion of book one)

Ooooh Nice one Misa :3 +100

such a nice mood raiser when things aren't quite working out elsewhere ^^

Author's Response: 'Things aren't quite working out elsewhere'. s***, that doesn't sound good. I'm glad to at least bring something to lighten the mood.

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Date: 07/19/15 Title: Chapter 12: Three of Spades: Gold and Black

well, that was quite a bit of progress on multiple fronts. nice to see shore making the mental shift and starting to feel more comfortable as her current self.

as for the riddle... Isn't it a bit too straight forward? at least if what I think it means happens. I won't make the claim though since I'm new here xD

Author's Response: I decided to put more of a focus on Shore this time than Shore's Dragon Knight powerful self and have her feel a bit more self-conscious. She can't always kill someone and get results.

As for the riddle... It is very straight forward, I said it was easy and I would really prefer for someone to be right as I would prefer one result rather than the other, but both ideas I have are interesting, but no-one has answered yet so......

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Date: 07/22/15 Title: Chapter 13: Four of Clubs: A Joker in the Deck

Like the chapter. I think the skipping of minor non-essential scenes is perfectly fine, if not the writers ideal. If you are worried about it later on, making a back-reference would be enough since not everything in a story is revealed in chronological order (can't let the reader pre-empt everything, we/they love to be surprised) simply bring up the events in a personal confiding moment between shore and asthenia would be enough :3

The scale of the place is surely interesting, intended so as to avoid derailing the story with cumbesome micromanagement that would happen if the place were any smaller? :3

Author's Response: Then if it's fine, I'll make references in chapters of minor scenes, more descriptive thoughts that will explain a scene that may or may not have been included in the story, it means that even if I do find something that might have been a little important, it will still be part of the story.

I had to make it large, originally it was said to be the first place Dragon Knights went and they would commonly challenge the Lord of the citadel, if it were any smaller, it would be destroyed in battle. I don't mind micromanagement, though it does make it easier to explain.

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Date: 07/31/15 Title: Chapter 14: Four of Diamonds: A Mountain and a Bridge

few hiccups with some of the grammar, but for the most part, a great chapter :3

Author's Response: Yeah.. Grammar and I are like oil and water. We don't mix.

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Date: 08/02/15 Title: Chapter 15: Four of Hearts: Violet Jack

Ouch, a harsh but arguably necessary lesson :S

possibly there were less severe ways to slowly curb her recklessness, but then again nothing is quite as effective as a sudden shock to the system. Quite a good amount was covered leading to plot advancement as well as interesting applications of immortal class magic :3

Hmm, speaking of the appearance of the dragons... I would want scales that are like Crystal, radiating the refracted light into a rainbow display :P first name Sylvia ;) but the second name something to do with my appearance and ice :P not sure about the body shape, something between the western and eastern versions I guess :S

Author's Response: True enough.

It took me a while to think about whether this was a good idea, it's a very harsh set of circumstances, yet what's a better way at confronting someone's recklessness and femininity than r***, or attempted r***? When we're looking at the immortal magic, I knew that once she had learned to sense and slightly alter the course of magical bacteria, I would need to reference more. It's a valuable part of combat which could explain how magic actually works outside of the visible changes.

And if I remember, I can try. I'm not sure I'd have something that's a rainbow, I can use chrome, as that hasn't got it's own dragon yet, and it does what you are saying, being that it makes the scales 'look' like it's colored like the rainbow, otherwise the crystal you're asking for would allow people to see internal organs, muscles, and bones, which would simply be creepy. Chrome colored crystals I don't think exist, simply, only deep colored gems work, and deep colored gems don't refract light, but I can try put a Dragon Knight named Sylvia Ice[something](I'll work on it) in the story, but it might only be once we start looking to the North.

Reviewer: Sylvia Moriah Signed
Date: 08/04/15 Title: Chapter 1: Ace of clubs: Rigging the deck

haha no need to include me :P I was just "thinking" out loud what I would like to look like were I in shore's situation. but yeah, seeing the guts and stuff would be bad :S not sure how to fix that unless It's a special blend of white+blue scales with a clear crystalline surface? xD winter frost crossed with morning dew kind of look? xD

I'm sure during the course of reading this everyone has at least thought about the basic set-up of their dragon form ;)

As for shore, as long as the shock doesn't leave any serious scarring that asthenia won't be able to help with on her return ;) I mean at this rate she is going to be noticeably changed by the time he sees her again and that would be like the 3rd serious personality shift in her young age? he might think she is entering premature madness :S

Author's Response: I said I'll see what I can do. If I can include someone who wants to be included I'll do that.

Yeah, I have a plan, no need to fret, but she's definitely not going to remain as she was, but I hope to shift her into a happier persona later.

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Date: 09/18/15 Title: Chapter 18: Five of Diamonds: Flipped Face Up

damn, I love emotional reunions. :')

very few errors that I could notice so as a whole the chapter came out really well :) (of course I haven't done anything as vain as run my grammar software over it but who wants that really? xD )

Author's Response: I've been getting better with editing. Just not as good as I would like to be. The reunion seemed to work out well. So I'm happy.

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Date: 10/30/15 Title: Chapter 21: Six of Clubs: All In

Oooh sparkly :P

nice chapter, including both devious and mysterious elements :3

Though... I am a bit worried about this "son" talk o.O err... do we... perhaps... know the father... of the two?...

Author's Response: The son talk.. Right. It's mostly there because there aren't very many Dragon Knights of that age who don't have children. From what I've created thus far. There's one and they are one of the Aces. I haven't created the Father, but instinctually females are... Difficult when they get to ten. She would have at least one child. The other could be a nephew. So there you go. Tell me what you'd prefer, I can make sure that it's one son and one nephew, or whatever you want.

Reviewer: Sylvia Moriah Signed
Date: 10/30/15 Title: Chapter 1: Ace of clubs: Rigging the deck

lol just surprise us :P

as long as it wasn't a drunken mistake of youth :P or what nearly happened to shore :S though they would probably be dead if it was that huh?

Author's Response: Very much so. The first son is very probably a 'kind of drunken mistake of youth' but it would more likely be purely instinctual. Though survival is low unless the strength of the Dragon Knight is good. Which in most of the city owner's case. This is true. As for whether she is the 'single mate' or 'multiple mate' Dragon Knight. That's the real question.

Also. What happened to Shore, if it actually did happen. The child wouldn't be a Dragon Knight. It would've been Human. A Dragon Knight requires both the Human and the dragon form to copulate. Because that wouldn't have happened and in very many cases, Dragon Knights don't have the ability to r*** both forms it would have been completely voluntary on both sides. The More You Know.

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Date: 11/04/15 Title: Chapter 24: Six of Spades: The King and His Thing

Nice to see more sides of shore and a setting that requires serious consideration on her part.

Stories can't always be about the exciting juicy bits like combat, romance or betrayal et cetera. So it is nice to be able to read this which aims for a more rounded approach to the whole setting; new world, new body, new rules and making it as logical and rational as one could expect were it true reality.

There are occasional small grammar issues, but not enough to warrant a decrease in my rating. :3

looking forward to how things are turning out, as they turn out ^^

Author's Response: Yeah. It's mostly what I've been trying. A Leg to Stand On was a story I made so I can better craft situations like the norm so they don't seem so stilted and forced. Fangs in my paragon of everything rolled into one and I'm pretty happy with how all of them have turned out. It allows me to try much more. It should turn out pretty well and I'm hoping to have another or so out tomorrow.

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Date: 11/07/15 Title: Chapter 26: Side Deck 1: Asthenia: Ace of Clubs: The King’s Gambit

aside from the occasional name changes occuring (out of the 3 I like Krauss the mot ;P just sayin' lol) a really nice chance to see things from another perspective.

while it may or may not slow down the progress of the main storyline, I look forward to more of these in the future ^^

Author's Response: Seriously. Kragus is the real name and I was just panning over it will a spell checker and it must've fixed the name up to something I don't want.

Yeah. The plan is to maybe do a few more when I need to set the scene for a character, but it probably will never happen with a mortal character. Their short lives and easy to access minds make them a little boring and I can just have someone read their mind. Everything happens in first person if you read someone's mind. You saw that when she read Ula's mind.

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Date: 12/06/15 Title: Chapter 27: Seven of Diamonds: The Will of an Ace

oh my, that is one way to end the chapter :P bet she didn't think she would hit a home run on the first swing huh? XD

haha the threats are fine xD I hate scum just as much as the next person, but I must admit I am a bit too lazy to go hunting for them :S not quite entertaining unless something interesting is going on :P besides, weren't you plotting world domination earlier? xD power does seem to decide how the world works after all, no complaints there :D

Author's Response: One word... Magic. Pretty much the reason for everything that happened in this chapter.

That's good. It's not much fun if you're annoyed.

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Date: 01/03/16 Title: Chapter 30: Freedom: First Link: A Queen to a Commoner

It seems like a very messy start to a new arc :P

I wonder if he will be a real threat or just an arrogant, over-confident fool xD

Author's Response: You'll have to wait and see ;)

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Date: 02/18/16 Title: Chapter 31: Freedom: Second Link: Ordering a New Golden Age

did she forget to mention the fact her own guards don't recognize her and keep getting in her way when she travels??

Author's Response: Double edged sword. Being known also makes her unable to travel because she'd be recognized and stopped by her people. She can get passed the guards with Immortal magic. Easy as pie, she just gets annoyed at them when they make fun of her for it. There are less guards than there are people in the city at least.

Dane thought he had life planned out and everything was working out. That is until a car crash tears it all away and leaves him paralyzed, but what can a medical company that specializes in bleeding edge technology offer him that will help him retake his life?
Rated: Explicit 75 Reviews starstarstarstarstar Story Incomplete Reads: 53721 Words: 65166 Chapters: 10 Table of Contents
Categories: Sci-Fi Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Teen (13-19 yrs)
Turned Into: Daughter
Locale: High School, Hospital or Clinic
Motivation for Change: Willing or Voluntary
Sexual Orientation: Becomes Bisexual
Story Theme: Everyday Living, Medical Experiment
Type of Change: Mechanical Device
Warnings: Death, Politically Incorrect
Series: None
Published: 06/26/15
Updated: 05/18/17
Reviewer: Sylvia Moriah Signed starstarstarstar
Date: 07/27/15 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4: Door Trap

there are a few lines of conversation where I can't quite tell what is being said, but other than that the chapter feels pretty good :3

nice to know your stories will keep updating ^^

Author's Response: One of the difficulties I have. Just point them out and I'll fix them.

I recently got picked up for another project, not going to go into specifics, but I'm not positive I can update as fast as normal.

Reviewer: Sylvia Moriah Signed
Date: 12/25/15 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7: My Secrets

hmm that little excerpt was rather interesting. is that also a TG story or just a story straight on?

if you have enough ideas for it you haven't deigned to use elsewhere... is it open to voting on? and if so what should we refer to it by?

Author's Response: It's a TG story. But I was considering making it a normal story.

It's open to voting, though it has no name for now. It's just 'mystery project' for now.

An aging overweight man who plays too much online gaming receives a gift from Freya, the
goddess of love, lust, beauty, sorcery, fertility, gold, war and death.
Rated: Adult 102 Reviews starstarstarstarhalf-star Story Incomplete Reads: 106437 Words: 136354 Chapters: 41 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Adult (27-62 yrs)
Turned Into: Adult, Clothing, Fantasy Character
Featured Items: Lingerie, Long Nails, Pantyhose, Petticoat, Lace, Ruffles, Crinoline, Undies
Locale: Camp, College, Family Household
Motivation for Change: Revenge, Tricked, Willing or Voluntary
Story Type: Includes Images
Story Theme: Everyday Living, Mythical Setting
Type of Change: Age Regression, Fast/Instant Change, Stuck
Series: None
Published: 06/29/15
Updated: 02/05/16
Reviewer: Sylvia Moriah Signed
Date: 07/16/15 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8: Gaining Knowledge

conversations until now just feel too unnatural and I can't help but think that the characters seem rather hollow/2D. you have people start a conversation after meeting for the first time, and then jump into a really detailed but unnecessary section of backstory. a lot of the interactions and reactions just seem too positive and convenient to make the story immersive enough to fully enjoy.

and just as a side note for quality of appearance, do you use a decent spellchecker/grammar checker after you finish the first draft and before posting? it can catch a lot of your smaller errors for you and improve the flow

Author's Response: Just a dictionary online.

A Timber Grove Story: What happens when a man slowly becomes the sexy temptress that he pretends to be online?
Rated: Explicit 1 Reviews starstarstarstarstar Completed Story Reads: 8620 Words: 3043 Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Categories: Sci-Fi Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Teen (13-19 yrs)
Turned Into: Bimbo
Featured Items: Bikinis
Motivation for Change: Tricked
Personality: Is Unaware of Changes, Loses Identity, Made Dumber
Sexual Orientation: Becomes Bisexual
Type of Change: Slow/Gradual Change
Series: Timber Grove
Published: 08/03/15
Updated: 08/03/15
Reviewer: Sylvia Moriah Signed starstarstarstar
Date: 08/03/15 Title: Chapter 1: CHAPTER -ONE-

quite the ironic twist where the online-self started to interfere with the offline self :P

Many of my wants were fulfilled by a strange chalice found within the Maze, but many more problems arise due to the power it grants and the world it opens.
Rated: Explicit 275 Reviews starstarstarstarhalf-star Completed Story Reads: 189616 Words: 161202 Chapters: 28 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Teen (13-19 yrs)
Turned Into: Fantasy Character
Locale: High School
Motivation for Change: Forced
Sexual Orientation: Becomes Only Attracted to Men
Story Theme: Everyday Living, Mythical Setting
Type of Change: Fast/Instant Change
Warnings: Death, Intense Violence, Torture
Series: None
Published: 08/22/15
Updated: 09/18/19
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Date: 09/26/15 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5: Thornton Academy

Like the chapter. :3

as for your chosen parody... it makes for a better name than what they decided to go with xD also sounds less... questionable? :P

looking forward to what comes next :)

Author's Response: Thanks. For both the fact you like the chapter and the name. Hikaro said people might not get it, so I made sure people understood it.

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Date: 09/05/15 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3: Cappucino

nice chapter, agreed on being a satisfying read :3

keep up the excellent work ^^

Author's Response: Thank you. Still got a bit more beating on the bully to do.

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Date: 08/28/15 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2: Redefining Logic

story starts off really nicely, there's a lot of angst and worry befitting the situation. The sense of betrayal by his own feelings towards everything ups the realism and immersiveness.

My only worry is about the sudden mass introduction scene where a great number of names were suddenly dropped on us at the meal, which will likely take a few rereads to let everything slowly sink in but could potentially still confuse us later on.

Noticed name shifts between the 2 chapters but these can be spotted and cleaned at a later edit-pass. like syra/syla and verona tares/verona teles.

Don't worry about vampires being over saturated, since it isn't over saturated with quality pieces and simply a lot of fanfic-level pieces an amateur probably thought would hit it big ;) Just give it your personal touch and it will easily stand out from the crowd ^^

(I have read the vampire diaries and many others that have different genre focus, yetabhor and avoid ones like twilight as if it were the plague for example. I am not put off by there being another one because it is a theme I like andwas "my thing" for a while in highschool xD)

Author's Response: That's good. I was worried it would be like many of the other stories I write and I made an error while writing as to how much they should react to the situation.

The mass introduction was simply an info dump on purpose. I want the reader to be as confused as Verona. Honestly, there are maybe 4 names in the introduction you need to remember as important. And you don't really need to remember Ray and Iva, which would bring it down to two. Those two are Scylla and Triss. It's more of a respect thing. No-one likes being left out of an introduction, as for remembering the names, it should be expected. While I was at school, I couldn't remember everyone's name after spending two years with them, of course I'm pretty bad, but I don't expect anything better of my own characters.

I quickly fixed them. Refer to previous statement where I said 'I'm bad with names'

Yeah. After receiving reviews to back me up on the story, I think at this point I'm just glad to know there are people who will enjoy it. Thanks a lot.

Awesome. Thanks for the review and thanks a lot for pointing out my errors. It helped a lot. :)

Reviewer: Sylvia Moriah Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 09/17/15 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4: Bloody History

hmm, good show. :3

It is shocking how much worse some things could have gotten, yet at the same time I wish Kayla would have gotten beat even worse. :P

Indeed, she doesn't think enough, so why does she need all that valuable blood that is wastefully pumped through her thick-skulled head? xD

Author's Response: Because then we have a hopeful and stupidly ambitious plan for a bully in the future of course! I like my death flags to sit at half mast... In preparation for the other death flags.

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Date: 12/11/15 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8: Magic and a Melee

Oohh, she was incomplete O.o

did not see that coming :3 nice one Misa xD

Author's Response: I like my twists. And I through people off by the weather in the previous chapter.

A couple goes out on vacation to Hawaii for surfing. When arriving there however, they realize their luggage was mishandled and had gone somewhere else. In the meanwhile, Mark and Gina go out to buy replacement gear. Mark, still sleepy and distracted from the incident, commited a HUGE mistake while shopping for his stuff...
Rated: Adult 2 Reviews starstarstar Story Incomplete Reads: 32420 Words: 1220 Chapters: 3 Table of Contents
Reviewer: Sylvia Moriah Signed
Date: 10/11/15 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3: Curiosity and Regret

this sounds more like sci-fi or magical change than it does a realistic gender change.

Reviewer: Sylvia Moriah Signed
Date: 01/25/16 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

thats a lot of names beginning with C... the A and B series not work out so well?

what was it? insanity? rebellion? ;P

A short story for the weekend crowds. A man reads something that changes him progressively.
Rated: Explicit 6 Reviews starstarstarstarstar Completed Story Reads: 4647 Words: 1718 Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Young Adult (20-26 yrs)
Motivation for Change: Tricked, Unknown
Personality: Fights Change, Is Unaware of Changes
Sexual Orientation: Becomes Only Attracted to Men
Type of Change: Fast/Instant Change
Series: None
Published: 11/13/15
Updated: 11/13/15
Reviewer: Sylvia Moriah Signed
Date: 11/13/15 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

i know right? xD

commenting is like telling everyone what kind of kinks get you off :P could it get anymore awakward? ;)

just playing lol. not a script for a short story, certainly had an interesting flow. about that last comment though... is that the guy-gone-girl,guy-turned-girl or simply guy-likes-guy-roommate?

Nathan meets the woman of his dreams, but though she loves him, she swears that cannot be together. Soon, Nathan falls prey to the same curse that afflicts her... to become a woman three days a month.
Rated: Explicit 20 Reviews starstarstarstarstar Story Incomplete Reads: 37339 Words: 20012 Chapters: 7 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Young Adult (20-26 yrs)
Turned Into: Girlfriend, Wife
Motivation for Change: Curse
Personality: From Dominant to Submissive
Sexual Orientation: Becomes Only Attracted to Men
Story Theme: Everyday Living, Romance
Type of Change: Fast/Instant Change, Stuck
Series: None
Published: 01/12/16
Updated: 01/21/16
Reviewer: Sylvia Moriah Signed
Date: 01/16/16 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 - Cassandra; or, The Girl at the Club

I could think of a fun plot counter to this setting where the guy only gets to return to being a man 3 times a month :P too cruel? too bad xD

A man who cross dresses for his friend is going to get a surprise when he puts on a spider necklace.
Rated: Explicit 5 Reviews starstarstarstar Completed Story Reads: 5272 Words: 1680 Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Young Adult (20-26 yrs)
Turned Into: Adult, Fantasy Character
Motivation for Change: Curse
Sexual Orientation: Becomes Only Attracted to Men
Story Theme: Horror
Warnings: Death
Series: None
Published: 02/08/16
Updated: 02/08/16
Reviewer: Sylvia Moriah Signed starstarstarstar
Date: 02/08/16 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

certainly a good first attempt, though I would have asked another person to go over it once or twice to point out any errors or problems they see with the content. certainly agree with selv, you need variety to keep flow and keep it immersive. I would recommend looking at other stories andsee how their authors did things, same for published books. this can give you a better grasp of what works so you can spend less time focused on how to write something and instead focus more on where you want to take it and how you want the characters to get there.

this is complete as of chapter1, so it's a one-shot? if so, it's not a bad choice. writing a few one-shots can get you comfortable and ready for writing longer pieces, plus the reviews can help you spot your biggest issues before you get too invested in a bigger project ;)

looking forward to a few more of your stories.

Kenneth Brewster is fine with crossdressing as a harmless hobby, but then his cousin Amanda shows up for a few days and changes his life forever...
Rated: Explicit 40 Reviews starstarstarstarstar Completed Story Reads: 102179 Words: 42860 Chapters: 13 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Teen (13-19 yrs)
Turned Into: Girlfriend
Locale: Family Household
Motivation for Change: Caught Crossdressing, Willing or Voluntary
Sexual Orientation: Does Not Change
Type of Change: Fast/Instant Change
Series: The Curse Universe
Published: 06/09/16
Updated: 07/26/17
Reviewer: Sylvia Moriah Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 06/16/16 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3

Nice progress, though I have to say I was feeling kinda confused until just over halfway in.

likely because of the difference from the previous story. was a good read :)

Author's Response: This one had to be different. I didn't want to just rewrite Amy's story using a different character. That would be boring.

New Ba.... er well maybe not those.
Rated: Adult 1 Reviews starstarstarstar Completed Story Reads: 7158 Words: 1000 Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Teen (13-19 yrs), Male to Female, Young Adult (20-26 yrs)
Turned Into: Object, Prostitute
Featured Items: Lingerie, Work Uniform
Body Modification: Extreme Breast Enlargement
Motivation for Change: Accident, As Justice for a Crime, Female Domination, Forced
Personality: From Dominant to Submissive, From Submissive to Dominant
Story Theme: Humiliation
Type of Change: Fast/Instant Change
Series: None
Published: 07/19/16
Updated: 07/19/16
Reviewer: Sylvia Moriah Signed starstarstarstar
Date: 08/05/16 Title: Chapter 1: Tennis Club

seems like an interesting plot but the lack of names and individuality made it hard to immerse myself in the story.

Another 'guy gets sucked into video game world as female character' story. I wrote this story several years ago but didn't do anything with it.
Rated: Adult 26 Reviews starstarstarstarhalf-star Story Incomplete Reads: 47005 Words: 56616 Chapters: 18 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Teen (13-19 yrs)
Turned Into: Fantasy Character
Motivation for Change: Unknown
Personality: Fights Change, Loses Identity
Sexual Orientation: Does Not Change
Story Theme: Mythical Setting
Warnings: Intense Violence
Series: None
Published: 04/23/17
Updated: 08/24/17
Reviewer: Sylvia Waldgrave Signed
Date: 05/04/17 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 6

Enjoying the story quite a bit. very interesting setting and a split narrative of events around the realm makes it easier to imagine the overall picture being portrayed. However, there are bits and pieces throughout your chapters so far that could use their grammar being fixed up and extra words removed to clear up any potential confusion ;) just cleaning and editing stuff really.

Looking forward to the next chapter.

Author's Response: Editing is not my strong point :(

A late-night stroll seems to be the perfect time to encounter strange events. After getting pulled into an encounter with slavers, Alex is forced to find his own way back home, however difficult that may be.
Rated: Explicit 184 Reviews starstarstarstarstar Story Incomplete Reads: 106684 Words: 218027 Chapters: 36 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Teen (13-19 yrs)
Turned Into: Fantasy Character
Motivation for Change: Unknown
Personality: Fights Change
Sexual Orientation: Becomes Only Attracted to Men
Story Theme: Mythical Setting
Warnings: Death, Intense Violence
Series: None
Published: 05/05/17
Updated: 03/25/19
Reviewer: Sylvia Waldgrave Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 05/11/17 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7: Runner On Rails

yay, chocolate!! maybe?

Love the story so far, I must be tainted beyond belief because up until this chapter I was constantly worrying if some sort of unspeakable horror would occur to the MC by some locals :S (may be that I am too used to reading about an isolated/reclusive location breeding offensive ignorance in it's populace :S)

Author's Response: 0.0 New chapter gives away some of those details. Chocolate definitely. Bigotry... Somewhat.

Reviewer: Sylvia Waldgrave Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 05/15/17 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11: Open and Shut

Damnit!

I'm addicted T-T

Author's Response: And you got annoyed with the chapter length!

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Date: 06/05/17 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19: Escort

yay, a user of intelligent casting has appeared among us :3

woe to us who hath seen plenty of fledgling fire-slingers think the answer was but a bigger, badder One-hit K.O Spell let loose to wreak havoc on the poor innocent souls around them.

Author's Response: Now if only gas were easier to cast. Then we can have a bigger bang.

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Date: 06/19/17 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 20: Amongst the Unexpected

hehe, a world of eccentric tailors :3

how fun ^^

Author's Response: It always seems more fun to make eccentric tailors. I feel like the people who have good imaginations would be stranger than those who are dull. People who work in a creative industry, like designing and writing. I would say that many of the writers on this site have some element of eccentricity in them.

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Date: 06/27/17 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21: Contentment

Love the chapter. me and Zenith are both happy to see alex come to a sort of acceptance that gives her and all her potential guys a fair fighting chance when it comes to future romances. that said, she needs to beware getting caught up in that nice hug of his, she may just fall for him before she can properly think things through :P

Author's Response: You too, eh? I was worried that Zenith might come off as manipulative, and for one of my readers he did. Though I felt it was important to reveal that all characters have their own emotions that might make them act oddly and even contradict themselves. That hug, while it seemed out of character, one can assume that it is more like him at his core.

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Date: 08/18/17 Title: Chapter 25: Chapter 25: Stressed Out

So much thanks for this chapter. As someone who has once experienced this myself, I can understand exactly what Alex is going through currently and this feels like the important plot step I had been expecting and waiting for since the slavers first appeared. I never had such a powerful protector when my issues had happened so I am looking forward to seeing how Alex moves on from this personal crisis with all the friends that are there to support her.

Author's Response: I always felt that I was on the other side. Being both bullied and being the bully. I never once considered myself as someone who hurt people emotionally, but rather acted because I lacked control over my temper in my early life. Because I felt that the bullies couldn't protect themselves when I went after their weakest member. I never considered that they might be standing with the bully because of personal protection. Bullies have no place in the world and we deserve to see them getting their punishments and understanding that they equal the pain we felt and to demonstrate the life they ruined. In some cases, we do get our desserts and in others, we don't.

It's just that when we don't have friends, we need to gain a sense of pride in ourselves and when we do have them, they need to see that we experienced that pain, just like Lyla saw. Alex won't get that pride back, she already believed it was lost and was in the process of returning to her proud self, but it's gone now. It has to be replaced with friendship.

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