Karl
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A horrific accident puts 17-year-old Brad Dowdy in the body of a 9-year-old girl while they grow a male clone. But when complications cause growth spurts, Brad finds himself on the wrong side of puberty. How will this affect his relationship with his girlfriend? What about his best friend, the star QB?
Rated: Adult 77 Reviews starstarstarstarhalf-star Completed Story Reads: 663811 Words: 120203 Chapters: 24 Table of Contents
Reviewer: Karl Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 01/05/16 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

This was a really good story. Well written and overall a great story. Some great character development, especially Brad. I was generally happy with what happened to him, but then the ending seemed, I dunno... not right. I still fully see how Tiffany took over and Brad disappeared. Allison seemed kinda silly, but in some way realistic in how she acted, but I was surprised she didn't see any of this coming. I mostly didnt like the mother, I felt she was a horrible person, pushing her son into a worse and worse position and then turning out how she did in the end as Hannah. It didnt make much sense to me. I didnt like the doctor at all. If I were Brad I'd probably stab her to death in the end for what she did. Then suddenly all is forgiven.

John Grey is the big man on campus at USC, until he and his buddies decide to have a panty raid...on a coven of witches. John will slowly become everything he desires in a woman, but will John come out with panties as his prize, or will he be wearing them? Magic can be a b****...
Rated: Kid-Friendly 7 Reviews starstarstarstarhalf-star Completed Story Reads: 18975 Words: 7559 Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Reviewer: Karl Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 03/05/16 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I always like when justice is served.

Sam has been looking forward to his summer holiday away with his big sister and her friends all year. But when a subtle mistake turns Sam into the opposite gender he must decide whether to let it ruin his holiday or embrace his new appearance.
Rated: Explicit 213 Reviews starstarstarstarhalf-star Completed Story Reads: 613417 Words: 92080 Chapters: 31 Table of Contents
Categories: Sci-Fi Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Teen (13-19 yrs)
Featured Items: Bikinis, Curlers, High Heels, Undies
Locale: Vacation Destination
Motivation for Change: Accident
Personality: Fights Change, From Dominant to Submissive
Sexual Orientation: Changes to be Bisexual
Story Theme: Humiliation
Type of Change: Drug-Induced, Slow/Gradual Change
Series: None
Published: 08/14/14
Updated: 12/15/15
Reviewer: Karl Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 01/05/16 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: The Brit girls

Wow. This was an excellent story. Yes some grammar and spelling issues, but I dont care to much about it. You created some great characters, particularly Sam, David, Denise. I loved their character development. Eric had no point in the story. You could have just left him out it and wouldnt have made a difference. It would have been nice to understand Sarah as a character more, why she was so mean and then had a sudden change of heart.

Overall a great storyline. Good development and nice twist ending. I like the slow development and the ongoing conflict. I thought you captured it well. I felt with the end he could have turned back into a guy fast enough to pass as a guy and save writing about being stuck at the airport.

Thank you so much for your effort and for finishing this story. I look forward to your other stories.

Author's Response: Thanks for the honest and detailed review. I'm glad the spelling issues didn't distract from the overall story. Eric was there for a few reasons really- 1. to make the group of friends bigger. 2. so that sam wasn't the only boy among them. 3. he was meant to be sort of the comic relief along with Leila. I agree he wasn't fleshed out a lot but I still think he was vital to the story. I take on board the rest of your comments about Sarah and the airport stuff, it was just how I envisioned the story. Thank you for reading and I appreciate the 5 star rating. Hope you enjoy more of my work in future. xxx

Ever seen a magic trick so convincing, it makes you wonder if the magician really is hiding a secret power? One man discovers just that, a little too late.
Rated: Adult 16 Reviews starstarstarstarstar Completed Story Reads: 15135 Words: 3200 Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Adult (27-62 yrs)
Turned Into: Model
Featured Items: Corsets, High Heels, Long Nails, Pantyhose
Locale: Vacation Destination
Body Modification: Ears Pierced
Motivation for Change: Tricked
Sexual Orientation: Does Not Change
Story Theme: Humiliation, Witchcraft
Type of Change: Age Regression, Body Swap
Series: None
Published: 12/06/14
Updated: 12/06/14
Reviewer: Karl Signed starstarstarstar
Date: 03/05/16 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Very interesting story. I like what you have written. It is short and effective. Leaves the reader wanting more. I dont like stories where stuff like this happens to people. But in this case he still appears to have some control, still has his mind and one can hope he finds his way back.

I'm not sure I understand how the crowds and his friends just forget all about him. It may have been better if he were alone. One less thing to deal with. With short stories like this, it may be better to leave no loose ends except maybe the key story arc.

Imagine you had a magic bookmark that would allow you to enter the book of your choosing for a week at a time. What could possibly go wrong?
Rated: Adult 14 Reviews starstarstarstarstar Completed Story Reads: 14315 Words: 2992 Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Teen (13-19 yrs)
Turned Into: Adult, Fantasy Character
Featured Items: Petticoat, Lace, Ruffles, Crinoline
Locale: Family Household
Motivation for Change: Accident
Sexual Orientation: Does Not Change
Story Theme: Historical Time Period
Series: None
Published: 02/20/15
Updated: 02/20/15
Reviewer: Karl Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 03/05/16 Title: Chapter 1: An erroneous translation

You are such a creative story teller. You have created a bunch of very interesting stories. Great descriptions without rushing along. This one is really well done. Even the ending wrap up was great. I really dont have any constructive criticism other than I wish you would continue the story. This premise literally opens up endless possibilities. It is not often you run into something original like this. Having said that, this story is just right all on its own. Thank-you so much for writing this and sharing it with us.

Adam and Steve were just helping out their sisters, unfortunately they came upon a witch, and now Adam's been cursed...
Rated: Adult 135 Reviews starstarstarstarstar Completed Story Reads: 413449 Words: 39803 Chapters: 17 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Teen (13-19 yrs)
Featured Items: High Heels, Undies
Locale: Family Household, High School
Motivation for Change: Curse, Forced
Personality: Fights Change
Sexual Orientation: Changes to be Attracted Only to Men
Type of Change: Slow/Gradual Change
Series: The Curse Universe
Published: 05/25/15
Updated: 08/30/15
Reviewer: Karl Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 06/20/15 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Very interesting story and generally well written. I look forward to see what happens next.

I'm not really sure I understand the reasons of the witch, why was she breaking into her neighbours house in the first place? It kinda doesn't make much sense with her ending up as principal, especially if she is youngish and the daughter of the previous principal.

I think the transition is done ok, but it seems like the main character is too accepting of the change. I would think a 15yr old boy would be more angry over the whole thing, especially angry at their best friend.

The parents dont seem to work as part of the story. They would be totally freaking out and calling the police and everything. Not like "our son turned into a girl, oh well."

Keep up the good work.

Author's Response: Okay, those things I can answer.

About the sorceress: Her becoming the new principal is completely unrelated to what she's done with Amanda. It's extremely coincidental, but it's true, she was going to be the new principal no matter what. She wasn't breaking into her neighbor's house, she was genuinely asked to watch the Garnet house when no one was there, and Adam and Steve were breaking in. She took it upon herself (for reasons I WILL explain, if'n you keep readin' the story) to punish Adam and Steve because she had the power to do so.

Amanda is more indifferent than accepting. She's been told she'll be a girl by the end of the week and that she can't change it. At the beginning, she was afraid, and as time passed by, her mind changed along with her body. At this point, and for the rest of the story, she's very much just dealing with it and wouldn't rather be either gender, but she's stuck as a girl. As for whether or not she should be angry at Steve, the dreams are very much a clue there.

The parents are dealing with Amanda's change in their own way. Her father misses his son, but he doesn't want to lose his new daughter by pushing her away. Her mother, despite what she said, is very happy that she has another daughter now, and purely wants her to be recognized as female. I'm fairly certain that upon hearing about Amanda's plight, they had plans on calling the police as soon as they saw her, but when they got home, they saw the truth, that Adam was more Amanda than anything else, and realized that calling the police would mean little and would turn their life into a media circus. They don't want a media circus.

I hope that helps. I've thought about every one of these points.

Reviewer: Karl Signed starstarstar
Date: 01/11/16 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Thank-you so much for completing your story. I know the effort that goes into one.

There were plenty of great things about your story. Overall, you write well. I thought Amy/Steve were great characters. I really liked their interactions. It felt real, like they were real friends and dealing realistically with the crazy situation. Most of the characters were well done.

This story started out great. I made it half way through, but for me it when downhill from there. This is my view based on my experience and maybe doesnt reflect what other people think.

Again I felt the parents were far too accepting and it broke my suspension of disbelief. Id seriously be hunting down the witch with my shotgun if someone did that to my son. It would have been easier to just magic away the problem with them coming back and thinking adam was always amy. Though I did like the parental interactions throughout the story.

Also I got confused between thoughts and speech. Thoughts in italics maybe?

Not sure I got the point of the dream sequences. I don't know if they really added much to the story. Maybe just reinforcing what was already being developed in the real world. Remove them and you dont miss much, except for the one with the witch.

I felt the witch was an incomplete character that didnt work well for the story. I stand by my original thought that she was cruel. Even in the end she is still cruel doing things to people without permission. Her motives are silly and dont make sense. She screwed with some innocent guy because she felt like it. I felt it would have been better if you used a different mechanism like some weird statue in Deans house or something. The witch doesnt seem to fit and seemed totally one dimensional.

I felt Amy accepted her change way too easily. In a realistic situation she would have been a mental case. It wasnt clear if this crazy fast acceptance was due to magic or not. If not, then it makes no sense. You cant stick a gay guy into a womans' body and everything is fine. Even Adam didnt know if he was gay or trans and the story doesnt make this clear or not. Being gay and being trans are different things. It was so frustrating that other people told him he was this or that without him even knowing himself. It pissed me off.

And then the bombshell that the sisters were behind the whole thing. For me, that totally ruined the whole story. I almost gave up reading when Amy was like "Melanie did this. meh." What a selfish, evil, horrible, terrible, cruel sister. She just assumed her brother was gay and turning him into a girl without even talking to him. Just because she wanted a little sister and because she wanted to match make. I felt it was an insane development. A gay guy stuck in a girls body is still a horrible situation and pretty much torture. If I were Amy I would have hated Melanie for the rest of my life. I would have never spoken to her again and maybe shoved a knife in her face. Few people forgive someone close to them for that sort of betrayal. But in this story is like "it's ok, lets find a dress!" I was so disappointed with this development as it just ruined my whole experience.

For what it is worth, I really enjoyed half the story.

Author's Response: Well, even if you only half enjoyed the story, I'm glad you enjoyed that half.

The parents were simply accepting because of the obviousness of the changes. If there were multiple POVs in this story, their internal reactions would also have been detailed. Their actions wouldn't be different, but you would have gotten more of how they feel they've lost their son, even though they gained a daughter. To just "magic away" the parents would have been COMPLETELY against what the Sorceress was doing, She wanted Amanda to experience the change and the reactions of those around her.

Are you meaning the points during Amanda's narration where her thoughts were coming forward? Speech was clearly defined by quotation marks. Not separating the thoughts and narration was an experiment, to see how the story would read. I feel it worked, but I wrote the story.

The dream sequences were less to reinforce anything than to explain that the Sorceress' influence was still in effect. She manipulated them to show Amanda what was going to happen, but they were mainly to show that the magic was still being used.

Okay, the Sorceress cannot be helped. In essence, she WAS an incomplete character, because even if I was doing multiple POVs, I wouldn't have been able to explore hers, otherwise that would have given the twist away. As for her motives being silly... I don't see that. She can do magic, and two teenage girls know her secret. Instead of blabbing about her and trying to make this international news, they chose to befriend her and keep that secret. She didn't screw with anyone "because she felt like it", Adam and Steve were close friends who didn't know that they should have been closer, so she nudged them together by putting one through extreme hardship.

And as far as using a "weird statue in Dean's house", I'm not SapphireFoxx.

I'll agree with you that Amanda accepted her change easily, but that one is simply in service to the story. I wasn't gonna write an epic about trans-girl discovering herself and being changed by magic into the form that she preferred. I'd be a better writer if I did, but either way, this story was longer than I expected it to be, being damn near 40k words when I expected it to be at most 10k. I also wasn't going to draw out the story to take place over months and months, which is likely the minimum it would take for someone to accept their gender. Also, I leave fairly big hints that Amanda was trans to begin with, I just also muddy the waters to cause reader confusion.

No, as a matter of fact, Melanie DIDN'T just "assume her brother was gay". She watched him, she paid attention to her brother, and she saw that Adam was very much uncomfortable in his own skin. She took a gamble that she could improve her brother's life, not for any gain of her own. Is she happy she has a sister now? Probably, because Amanda's basically her life-size Barbie doll for a little while, but her intentions weren't selfish in any way. And Amanda's had a week to think about this, and realizes that literally the only thing that's really changed in her life is that she's female instead of male, that Melanie didn't do anything outright horrible to her. Steve is still her best friend, and always will be. Her parents still love her. She still likes exactly the same things. Melanie helped her come out of her shell a little bit, and that's all.

Also... Amy didn't WANT to wear that dress. The closest Melanie gets to torture is the fact that she forces certain outfits on her.

So there. I hope you understand my counterpoints. I'm happy that you found your own interpretations for things that I left up in the air. I simply have one question:

Why'd it take you four/five months to review the story?

Evan's petite girlfriend has always longed to be able to take a more dominant role in a relationship. So he has offered to do whatever it takes to help her achieve that.
Rated: Explicit 19 Reviews starstarstarstarhalf-star Completed Story Reads: 50265 Words: 5568 Chapters: 3 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Female to Male, Adult (27-62 yrs), Male to Female, Adult (27-62 yrs)
Turned Into: Boyfriend, Girlfriend
Locale: Family Household
Motivation for Change: Tricked, Willing or Voluntary
Story Theme: Everyday Living
Type of Change: Fast/Instant Change
Series: None
Published: 05/29/15
Updated: 06/04/15
Reviewer: Karl Signed starstarstarstar
Date: 05/30/15 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I thought it was a well written story like the rest of your stories. Thank-you for writing it. Personally I really didnt like the ending for two reasons. Firstly, I really dislike stories with innocent victims that are left to suffer. If the guy was a horrible person and Haley's boss, then it would have been "ok". But laying that aside, secondly with that ending it just didnt make any sense and it kind of broke the illusion. If I were Evan I'd just kill myself out of spite or set myself on fire or give myself aids. The plan goes up in smoke. There is no guarantee that Evan(as a girl) could reach orgasm by being raped so there may be no way back into that body. Besides the fact that Evan in his body could still give evidence on Haley and blame her for everything (her codes used too) enough to bring doubt into the case. There are too many problems with the ending that are unresolved.

Author's Response: You have some valid arguments here. I can certainly accept that. Thanks for the feedback.

Reviewer: Karl Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 06/09/15 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Wow. That was a great twist at the end. Im glad you took criticism and suggestions and kept working on it. Sorry if I was to negative before but I really like what you did with this.

Author's Response: I didn't mind the criticism at all. It was very constructive and helpful. Thanks again for the feedback.

A depressesed, but cynical young man goes through the change of a lifetime after suddenly dying. What happens after this man, who's given up on all hope of a better future for himself, is given a second chance at life, but from a different perspective...both cultural and generational? This is the story of Evan Jones, told from his perspective.

(Disclaimer: Some strong language and nudity involved.)
Rated: Explicit 10 Reviews starstarstarstarstar Story Incomplete Reads: 45216 Words: 14336 Chapters: 10 Table of Contents
Reviewer: Karl Signed starstarstarstar
Date: 01/26/16 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: Depression & High Hopes

Interesting story. Great start. I still don't get a sense of any of the characters except the main one. Very little development this far in. Im looking forwards to see where you go with it.

Author's Response: Thank you for your criticism. I'm trying to do better with explaining the characters and giving them more life.

Aaron is the target of a scorned witches curse, causing him to slowly become a woman. With his loving girlfriend's help, Aaron is soon discovering what it is to be a woman while navigating the changes the curse causes in their relationship.
Rated: Explicit 22 Reviews starstarstarstarstar Completed Story Reads: 115453 Words: 18553 Chapters: 12 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Young Adult (20-26 yrs)
Featured Items: Bikinis, High Heels, Lingerie, Long Nails, Sex Toys
Locale: Hairstyling/Salon, Office
Body Modification: Ears Pierced
Motivation for Change: Curse
Personality: Fights Change, From Dominant to Submissive
Sexual Orientation: Does Not Change
Story Theme: Romance
Type of Change: Age Regression, Slow/Gradual Change, Stuck
Series: None
Published: 10/22/15
Updated: 12/04/15
Reviewer: Karl Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 01/26/16 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: "The Curse"

What a sweet, wonderful story! I always look forward to your stories and this is another to add. Well written characters, great development. They feel like real people. Great use of emotions. I got angry at the witch in the first chapter, but then it all made sense after. Thank you for writing.

Author's Response: Thanks for the kind words.

A teenager resents being stuck at home on Halloween, and manages to anger the wrong trick-or-treater— a mistake he is soon to regret.
Rated: Adult 5 Reviews starstarstarstarstar Completed Story Reads: 9940 Words: 2356 Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Teen (13-19 yrs)
Turned Into: Child
Featured Items: Petticoat, Lace, Ruffles, Crinoline
Locale: Family Household
Motivation for Change: Tricked
Personality: Fights Change
Sexual Orientation: Does Not Change
Story Theme: Costume or Halloween, Humiliation, Second Childhood
Type of Change: Age Regression
Series: None
Published: 10/31/15
Updated: 10/31/15
Reviewer: Karl Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 03/05/16 Title: Chapter 1: Halloween: A Cautionary Tale

Very nice.

Sam discovers his company's new diversity policy will mean some big changes in his immediate future. It's political correctness gone mad, I tell you! And if you don't look out, this could be coming to an office near you!
Rated: Adult 7 Reviews starstarstarstarstar Completed Story Reads: 14534 Words: 5251 Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Adult (27-62 yrs)
Featured Items: High Heels, Long Nails, Pantyhose, Undies
Locale: Office
Motivation for Change: For a Job, Forced
Personality: Loses Identity
Sexual Orientation: Changes to be Bisexual
Type of Change: Identity Theft, Racial
Series: None
Published: 11/23/15
Updated: 11/24/15
Reviewer: Karl Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 03/05/16 Title: Chapter 1: Positive Discrimination

Wow. I really liked this story, and I also disliked this story. Not that it was bad, it was very well written. I dislike stories that take an "innocent" and forced them through a change that they did not want. Thats what i didnt like about this story. Forcing a poor guy to change genders against his will. Its just wrong and can ruin story for me, but in this case it wasn't totally bad.

I think it would have worked much better for me if the guy was shown at the start to be some sexist pig and then this got forced on him, then he ended up as a bimbo receptionist. But that story has been written so many times. yawn.

In this case the guy has some subconscious control about who he becomes and creates the woman he becomes. I really like this part and how that ghost her came in and took his place. I thought that was a very powerful image that helped me picture what was happening which was great. I like the part about the HR person asking questions to direct thoughts and creating the new memories.

I really dislike when an innocent person is erased or trapped in a body with no control. That is really just horrible. In this case though you allowed a slower transition, and in some ways more voluntary. In the end, sam and his memories arent completely wiped away, but kinda just fades into irrelevance as Zara takes over. It isnt like a new personality taking over, but Sam's personality slowly becoming Zara's and not being too upset about the change. But also not being a totally different person as well which I thought was nice. Sharing some similar interests.

I liked the touch about adoption with the parents. I thought it just added some humanity to the character which I really liked.

It was really short, but I think it worked. You could have written a lot more, but I think this way it still worked fine.

Thank-you for writing this story. Please continue to do so.

After being caught spying on a group of girls Scott a usually well behaved, teen and his mischievous best friend Bobby are turned into beautiful girls by a spell. They're then given the task of breaking the curse before midnight or risk remaining girls forever...
Rated: Explicit 89 Reviews starstarstarstarhalf-star Completed Story Reads: 123849 Words: 21038 Chapters: 7 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Teen (13-19 yrs)
Motivation for Change: Curse, Female Domination, Forced, Revenge, Tricked
Personality: Fights Change, Loses Identity
Story Theme: Costume or Halloween, Humiliation, Witchcraft
Type of Change: Stuck
Series: None
Published: 01/03/16
Updated: 02/26/16
Reviewer: Karl Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 01/05/16 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: Time for a spell

Great start. I love your stories. Keep it up.

Author's Response: Thanks Karl, Glad you enjoyed it. More to come soon! xx

Reviewer: Karl Signed
Date: 02/29/16 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7: Time is Changing

Your story started well and it was well written for the most part. You are a good writer and I only read if off the strength of your wonderful Summer Holiday.

I hated the ending. It felt wrong in the moral sense and wrong as the final chapter in the sense it didnt seem to fit. Ruined the whole story for me. So disappointed. The sense of injustice was just too much for me. I can't stand these sorts of endings where the nice guy gets screwed and the horrible guy gets the happy ending for no real reason. Essentially the nice guy dies and no one cares. Death of personality is practically death of person. Sure it may be a happy ending for Scarlet, but its not a happy ending for the reader who knows better. Even being stuck in a girls body with your memories intact is better than that horrible end.

The witches were a decent enough plot device to start with, but in the last chapter it was silly in the sense they wanted to punish the guys and didn't seem concerned at all they wiped someone from existence and one guy wasn't punished at all and neither remembered their punishment so it was if there was never any punishment in the first place. What was the point in the first place? It just doesn't seem to work as part of the plot. I would see them being mad with the result and trying to make sure Bobby is punished and at least let Scott have his memories back through a loophole given that they remember the old Scott and let him choose his path. I feel that would be a more consistent way for them to act.

The two main characters were developed enough for the most part, but their actions were inconsistent. I dont see how an attractive Scarlet would be best friends with a loser like Bobby. How could the two be best friends if Scott/Scarlet didnt know Bobby was a sociopath. Only a sociopath would murder a friend, which is exactly what happened no matter how the character can try and justify it. That again doesn't seem consistent to me unless Scott was a clueless idiot which he didn't appear to be.

I understand you wanted to take a risk in your writing, but I don't see what the payoff was meant to be from that risk. It just didn't work for me. But I guess you can't please everyone.

Good luck with your new job and thank-you for all your stories!

Author's Response: Hi, Thanks for the long, detailed review. I'm sorry you didn't like the ending. Endings are hard to write as they do not always please everyone as you say. I can see from the feedback people are divided on this one and there are positive and negative opinions. I guess your dislike for 'the bad guy winning' kind of ending is just a matter of taste but I respect your opinion. I never intended for the story to be a meaningful journey where the readers would care about Scott's fate though it's great that you did care. I guess that is my error. The story was meant to have the tone of a wacky comedy in a sense. The witches were meant to be a bit cartoony in the way they were portrayed. Messing around with magic and revenge and not caring deeply about what happened to the poor victims. Scott and Bobby were mismatched friends, which was deliberate so they could play off each other. Scott was the serious one and Bobby was the nutty one who would get Scott into all kinds of trouble. I thought they clashed well and gave their friendship something different. Scott pays dearly in the end for his friendship with Bobby and that's just the final ironic twist. The story as a whole was meant to be a piece of fun fiction with twists and turns a long the way. I thought a rather dark and Ironic ending would be the best way to finish it and for some it was satisfying and for others it wasn't. Thanks anyway for reading and I'm glad you enjoyed 'The summer Holiday'. I hope you enjoy more of my work in future. Thanks for reading. xx

A "Timber Grove" Story: Hank finds a camera that will give him the upper hand in a fierce prank war between him and his friend, Patrick. With it he will procure some racy photos of Patrick's sexy twin sister, but Hank soon finds that he has a much bigger part to play in his devious plan.
Rated: Explicit 6 Reviews starstarstarstarhalf-star Completed Story Reads: 15329 Words: 5252 Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: None
Turned Into: Twin
Featured Items: Bikinis, Lingerie, Undies
Locale: College
Motivation for Change: Tricked, Willing or Voluntary
Sexual Orientation: Changes to be Attracted Only to Men
Type of Change: Fast/Instant Change, Identity Theft
Series: Timber Grove
Published: 01/22/16
Updated: 02/20/16
Reviewer: Karl Signed starstarstarstar
Date: 02/21/16 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter One

Nice. I was really expecting a twist ending though.

A "Timber Grove" Story: Seth is forced to become Leslie, a petite college cheerleader, for one week. During that time she discovers a pill that slowly changes her into the sexiest girl on the squad, and amps up her sexual appetite.
Rated: Explicit 16 Reviews starstarstarstarstar Completed Story Reads: 140723 Words: 35708 Chapters: 21 Table of Contents
Categories: Sci-Fi Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Young Adult (20-26 yrs)
Turned Into: Bimbo, Cheerleader
Featured Items: Bikinis, High Heels, Lingerie, Sex Toys, Undies
Locale: College, Family Household
Motivation for Change: Forced, Undercover
Sexual Orientation: Changes to be Bisexual
Story Theme: Mind/Body Posession
Type of Change: Body Swap, Fast/Instant Change, Identity Theft
Series: Timber Grove
Published: 01/25/16
Updated: 03/11/16
Reviewer: Karl Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 03/11/16 Title: Chapter 1: "Becoming Leslie"

Another great story!

I thought kinda-dad-murder was a bit too much but Iguess it was justice being served in some respects and an appropriate punishment.

For a story of this length I didn't get a sense of who Seth was before so it doesn't seem like much of a change to me.

Author's Response: I'm an incredibly sarcastic person, so I want you to know that this is sincere: Those are two incredibly insightful points. Originally I had Leslie becoming Ann's new Step-Mother while sleeping with her on the side, but if felt too good for Jerry and too mean for Ann. As for you point about not knowing Seth? That's one of the major reasons why I originally left the story as it stopped being a TG story, and became more about a girl changing. My brief time away from the story led to having both Ron and Jerry change, and that made the story feel more at home on this site. Also I felt that adding a chapter where Leslie talked about her changes would be too little too late in the later chapters post pills. Thanks for reading, and I'll work on fleshing out my characters more so the change really shakes things up.

Dr. Janet Beacher's research had hit a dead end, as had her hopes of ever having grandchildren. Her only son, Jason, seemed oblivious to the opposite sex. As for her research, animal tests seemed to lack the leap of mental consciousness needed to activate her lab's new drug, UR21 – a drug capable of changing male tissue to female tissue.

Janet had a revelation, maybe one problem could be the solution to the other. If only she could find someone who could help her son start thinking like a female...
Rated: Explicit 19 Reviews starstarstarstar Completed Story Reads: 120708 Words: 64464 Chapters: 18 Table of Contents
Categories: Sci-Fi Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Teen (13-19 yrs)
Sexual Orientation: Changes to be Attracted Only to Men
Story Theme: Pregnancy
Type of Change: Drug-Induced, Hormonal, Slow/Gradual Change
Series: None
Published: 01/27/16
Updated: 01/27/16
Reviewer: Karl Signed starstarstar
Date: 01/28/16 Title: Chapter 1: The Conversation

Wow, experimenting on your own children without consent. What an evil person.

Author's Response: Agreed, Janet is the antagonist. I was going for a bit of a cold, scientifically obsessive, Dr. Frankenstein vibe.

Reviewer: Karl Signed
Date: 01/30/16 Title: Chapter 18: The Conception of Everything: An Epilogue

Thank-you for writing this story and most importantly for completing it. It is always great to read a complete story as the author intended it. You have clearly put in tremendous time and energy into this and it deserves recognition. So many stories are left unfinished. You have the basis of a good story, an interesting premise and several potential endings that could have been interesting.

Having said that, there are so many frustrating things about this story. It really seems like a ridiculous erotica story about exploiting children that could have been a whole lot shorter and thats pretty much it. All of the characters appear to be completely one-dimensional. Like cardboard cut outs. They have no depth whatsoever. I feel real angry about Jason's situation, but I have no feelings for Jason, not sad or happy or anything, even though he is the victim of a horrible crime. He doesnt seem like a real person, so nothing to feel anything over. I can't see why anyone would write a story so long without developing the characters.

Having him surrounded by 3 characters who have absolutely no issues with experimenting on someone against their will is really surprising. Doesn't anyone have a conscience in this dimension?

How can Tom say he loves Jason when he is completely fine with turning a guy into a girl against their will? Is he a psychopath? That's not love. Not even in the biggest stretch of the imagination. It's just chemical reactions that will wear off eventually and he will be stuck with a kid he doesnt want. Its all just lust and so so wrong. And then they get married as teenagers? Statistically they would be divorced in a few years because they are so emotionally unstable and he's clearly deranged.

Greg is 1 dimensional, going along with an completely unethical experiment. Not much to mention there.

And the mother is a sorry excuse for a human being. No qualms about experimenting on her son and then when Tom runs away shes gets all protective and threatens to kill Tom and then she physically assaults a teenager and makes him be a teenage father. She is an insane trying to get babies. And the whole basis of the story is about her mind altering research which in reality her research wouldn't be recognised because it was developed through unethical methods. And then she ends up with babies. Those poor children.

I think the whole story would have worked for me better if Tom was tricked into being the girl by Janet and Jason fell in love with his friend over time.

Anyway, keep up with the writing. Like I said, there is a good base story there, just some things that dont make sense to me.

Author's Response: This is actually probably the best review I've read on this story and it's pretty much spot on. I was actually hoping to hear more of these types of opinions. Forgive me if I take some time responding then. Yes, the 4 characters surrounding Jay are mischievous, selfish and even evil. I don't condone their actions but they were, after all, written that way. I wouldn't say they are completely without conscious, they all have some redeemable moments: Janet actually gives some sage advice, Greg tries to be complaint with Jay's needs, Tom is reluctant. Most of this gets trumped however by their desires which push them to do what they do. Yes, Janet (based on a real person) is the worst of the bunch. Cold and motivated to get what she wants regardless of what it takes, even using people as pawns to do so. I don't think she “legitimately” wants to hurt anyone, she believes she knows what's best for people and acts accordingly – consequences be damned. You will see how her ambition changes the opinions of those around her. But Tom saying he loves Jay, how could you not like that part? It's perfect. I never said Tom actually loved Jay, even if he thinks he does (or merely thinks saying it is the right thing to do.) Jay is, after all, a friend he can now have sex with. What about the character of Tom wouldn't “love” that? Doesn't something about him saying he loves her after what he did just rub you the wrong way? Also, I think you have a perfect understanding of the characters, you just don't like them very much (and you shouldn't). It's possible they could have some more depth, I'll admit, but I also challenge you to read for more of the depth that's there. Most specifically look for areas where characters pull away and things don't go exactly as Janet may have wanted. I will admit Jay is underwritten however. Jay is sort of this hapless victim of circumstance and at the end of the story your feelings should be mixed with how things turned out for her. I wrote it this way intentionally but I do realize this leaves the story without a strong protagonist. Oh well, I didn't really want their to be one, the reader is really the protagonist in the story and the outrage and introspection happens off-page.

Randall finally gets the chance to meet a person that means the world to him, only their visit leaves him heartbroken. It will take a little time, and maybe some magic, to mend Randall's broken heart and maybe allow him the happiness he has longed for.
Rated: Adult 4 Reviews starstarstarstarstar Completed Story Reads: 4996 Words: 3964 Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Young Adult (20-26 yrs)
Locale: Formal Dance
Motivation for Change: Willing or Voluntary
Story Theme: Romance
Type of Change: Age Regression, Fast/Instant Change
Series: None
Published: 02/05/16
Updated: 02/05/16
Reviewer: Karl Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 02/10/16 Title: Chapter 1: The Crush: A Timely Change

Nice, sweet story. I think you got the names mixed up when they danced. I got confused who was who.

A young man is trying to find the right girl through dating sites, but all those sites are so gimmicky and never seem to work quite right.
Rated: Explicit 7 Reviews starstarstarstarhalf-star Completed Story Reads: 68600 Words: 8911 Chapters: 7 Table of Contents
Categories: She-Male Story
Characters: Male to Female, Teen (13-19 yrs)
Turned Into: Sissy
Featured Items: Sex Toys
Motivation for Change: Accident, Tricked
Personality: Fights Change
Sexual Orientation: Changes to be Attracted Only to Men
Series: None
Published: 02/16/16
Updated: 02/23/16
Reviewer: Karl Signed
Date: 02/24/16 Title: Chapter 1: Another Dating Site

Ending felt wrong. Not sure why.Generally well written, but the story makes no sense. Perfect match to a guy he/she runs away from??

Author's Response: Just another dating site promising impossible things! :-p (The idea was that the match would be perfect for the other person, but the site doesn't force you in to liking them, so it doesn't work out so well.)

After Barry accepts a job from a mysterious client to deliver a dress, his curiosity gets the better of him, and he sneaks a peek. The lesson that some items are best not meddled with is not one he will be likely to forget in a hurry.
Rated: Adult 11 Reviews starstarstarstarstar Completed Story Reads: 12782 Words: 4757 Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Adult (27-62 yrs)
Turned Into: Bride
Featured Items: Bridal Gown, Corsets, High Heels, Pantyhose, Petticoat, Lace, Ruffles, Crinoline, Undies
Locale: Road Trip
Body Modification: Ears Pierced
Motivation for Change: Accident
Sexual Orientation: Does Not Change
Story Theme: Everyday Living
Type of Change: Changed by Clothing, Stuck
Series: None
Published: 03/02/16
Updated: 03/02/16
Reviewer: Karl Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 03/05/16 Title: Chapter 1: Nice Day for a White Van Man

Loved it. Thanks for writing. Very well written. Ending was abrupt, but I cant complain how you ended it.

A wife, desperate for some satisfaction in her marriage, calls on a unique marriage counselor to help her husband understand her needs. Only where will this understanding lead? And how will it change them?
Rated: Explicit 39 Reviews starstarstarstarhalf-star Story Incomplete Reads: 100440 Words: 28862 Chapters: 15 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Adult (27-62 yrs)
Turned Into: Adult, Clothing, Husband, Wife
Featured Items: Lingerie, Undies
Locale: Family Household
Motivation for Change: Dared into It
Personality: From Dominant to Submissive
Sexual Orientation: Changes to be Bisexual
Story Theme: Everyday Living, Witchcraft
Type of Change: Slow/Gradual Change
Series: None
Published: 03/04/16
Updated: 03/20/16
Reviewer: Karl Signed
Date: 03/23/16 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15 : Three Months Later

For your first story this was great.

However I felt the story never fully recovered from chapter 13. Endings are always the hardest and this one felt rushed, like it was written as an afterthought and that you weren't sure how to end it. It just didnt make much sense to me. Tony raping his wife then running away and cutting off all contact. Its like he became a totally different person and the same with Jane suddenly being ok with being a man and not being angry at the quack who knew this could happen and yet didn't warn them. If I were Jane, I'd be suing for malpractice.

Overall, you did a good job and you should definitely keep writing.

Author's Response: Thanks for your comment. This isn't my first story. Not by a long shot. But I appreciate your comments and review. I will say that the next draft has a lot more stuff in it. A lot more lead up. We understand his reluctance at the beginning, but his desire to understand his wife. I'm completely changing the r*** scene. Making it a lot more mutual. Even if she doesn't understand or even particularly remember what happened the night before I think that might help it. I appreciate your comments. Reviews like this help make the finished product much better!

Reviewer: Karl Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 03/05/16 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 : Meeting the Therapist

This is an interesting story. It is written well. I'm interested to see how this turns out. I can totally understand how two people that love each other can still fail to understand each other. It happens. But id say the wife sounds gay, is in denial and is blaming the husband. And the husband sounds a bit pathetic.

Author's Response: I struggled with how this should come off. I wanted the husband to be reluctant, but willing to give in for his wife. And his wife... yeah, just a little gay maybe. Though you'll find out that she just wants some satisfaction in the end. Thanks for this excellent review. Gotta think more about that.

Reviewer: Karl Signed starstarstarstar
Date: 03/08/16 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4 : A Second Visit

Hmmm. An interesting chapter. I'm eager to see where things are going. I understand that a week has passed? It seems like a lot was skipped somehow.

Author's Response: I struggled with whether to show more of the week between the changes or not. I may go back and fill in some of his feelings and struggles between changes. Thanks for the comment and the feedback.

Reviewer: Karl Signed
Date: 03/11/16 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7 : The Table

The correct phrase is "all intents and purposes". And even that would probably be incorrect top use in this context. No such thing as "intensive purposes". It doesn't really make sense.

Story is going well for the most part. I'm not sure where this is going though. It is still unclear if either of them are gay. They could end up very unhappy especially when they end up with someone they realise they no longer want. You'd think the guy would be freaking out by now. Even about the fact he isn't freaking out.

Author's Response: Thanks for the correction. "all intents and purposes" will need to be changed in my rewrite. Thank you! As far as how the story is going...there might be a little twist coming up soon. I'm not a fan of the straight forward sort of stories myself. Funny how the woman's sexuality has been questioned. I wonder what that says about the attention men give women. Still, I appreciate your comments and will use this review in my rewrite. Thanks again!

Reviewer: Karl Signed
Date: 03/11/16 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8 : A Defining Moment

Another interesting chapter. I'm looking forward to the conclusion.

Author's Response: You're going to be surprised. The conclusion ain't coming anytime soon. This is just the buildup. There's still more to come after the next chapter.

Reviewer: Karl Signed star
Date: 03/18/16 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13 : The Consummation

It was all well and good until someone was raped...

Author's Response: I struggled with how to portray that. Yes, there was no explicit consent. And yes that can be termed "r***"...but given how Tori has been treated so far... I'm not sure. Anyway, thanks for your thoughts. Might need to look into having her wake up and "approve it" a little more.

Asher wakes up in a girl's room without any recollection of how he got there. Things start to get strange after he realizes that he's locked in.
Rated: Explicit 9 Reviews starstarstarstarhalf-star Completed Story Reads: 14816 Words: 4949 Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Young Adult (20-26 yrs)
Featured Items: High Heels, Sex Toys, Undies
Body Modification: Ears Pierced
Motivation for Change: Forced
Personality: Fights Change, Loses Identity
Sexual Orientation: Changes to be Attracted Only to Men
Story Theme: Captive
Type of Change: Slow/Gradual Change
Warnings: Bodily Functions
Series: None
Published: 03/21/16
Updated: 03/21/16
Reviewer: Karl Signed starstarstarstar
Date: 03/23/16 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Good first effort. Simple and straight to the point. Though I feel sorry for the poor guy.

Porter is a young man who is asked by a beautiful young woman to help out at a local gym, and he simply can't refuse her. Soon he is inundated with the site of dozens of beautiful women working out which causes him to sign up for a very special program without paying any attention to the consequences.
Rated: Adult 9 Reviews starstarstarstarhalf-star Completed Story Reads: 10700 Words: 4331 Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: None
Turned Into: Bimbo
Motivation for Change: Tricked, Willing or Voluntary
Personality: Loses Identity
Sexual Orientation: Changes to be Attracted Only to Men
Type of Change: Fast/Instant Change
Series: None
Published: 04/10/16
Updated: 04/10/16
Reviewer: Karl Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 04/11/16 Title: Chapter 1: "Fools Rush into the Gym"

Short, nicely written. I don't feel sorry for fools.

Author's Response: Thanks, me either.

Harry and his four friends enter a house they're told is haunted, but inside are some college girls looking for a good time. Little do they know that this was all a trap, and while his three friends find some sexy girls waiting, Harry finds himself as a sexy girl...
Rated: Explicit 4 Reviews starstarstarstar Completed Story Reads: 11714 Words: 8200 Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Young Adult (20-26 yrs)
Turned Into: Bimbo
Locale: Family Household
Motivation for Change: Tricked
Personality: Fights Change, Loses Identity
Sexual Orientation: Changes to be Bisexual
Story Theme: Costume or Halloween, Horror, Mind/Body Posession, Witchcraft
Type of Change: Fast/Instant Change
Warnings: Intense Violence
Series: None
Published: 10/31/16
Updated: 10/31/16
Reviewer: Karl Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 10/31/16 Title: Chapter 1: A Halloween Possession

Wonderful as usual.... Thank-you!

Alex is your average teenage boy with a nasty attitude towards women. It is the start of the Christmas season and Alex suffers a drastic change that warps his view on everything, but will his misfortune end there?

The chapters have been condensed into larger chapters, more chapters to come, but they'll be coming once a week from here on out!!
Rated: Explicit 18 Reviews starstarstarstarhalf-star Story Incomplete Reads: 54497 Words: 18416 Chapters: 6 Table of Contents
Reviewer: Karl Signed
Date: 11/13/16 Title: Chapter 1: "And Here We Go"

Overall it is an interesting story. I liked the alternating viewpoint and it is written ok. but the story doesn't seem believable. His whole family going along with it is totally unrealistic. I wouldn't be surprised if he slits his wrists and dies and see how happy his family will be then. But I suppose his parents could be evil bastards.

The premise itself isn't bad. It would just make more sense if an unknown third party did it to him. You know, the cliche old hag he treats rudely.

Overall its ok, so I hope you keep writing.

Author's Response: Thank you for your review, I do know what you mean about the family being a little too understanding. I wasn't sure how to pass that part so I did the best I could. But also remember that the family was in on the plan to change him(You see that in chapter 2), and so they're all just acting. So then, I wasn't sure if maybe they were a little too believable if you know what I mean. And yes maybe it would be better if it was a third party, but I thought I'd try this. Maybe it'll get better in the future. But if you'd like to give me some ideas you could contact me at ktechnology2016@gmail.com, I always love a knew perspective! Also, I do plan to go back and maybe reedit it all later on and then post it again. I keep thinking of new Ideas as I go on, and so maybe I'll change it up a little later. But for now, thanks for your review and I do hope to hear from you again either in the future comments or even through email with some new ideas. Thank you!!!

Joseph was a pessimistic loner, angry with both his existence and the world. After a misused wishing stone alters his body and robs him of his voice, Joseph is forced to evaluate his life.
Rated: Adult 251 Reviews starstarstarstarhalf-star Completed Story Reads: 278538 Words: 105448 Chapters: 23 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Teen (13-19 yrs)
Turned Into: Cheerleader, Daughter, Girlfriend
Locale: Family Household, High School
Body Modification: Ears Pierced
Motivation for Change: Accident, Revenge
Personality: Bad to Good
Sexual Orientation: Changes to be Attracted Only to Men, Does Not Change
Story Theme: Coming of Age, Everyday Living, Genie/Wishes, Romance, Sports
Type of Change: Fast/Instant Change, Stuck
Series: None
Published: 02/09/17
Updated: 07/15/17
Reviewer: Karl Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 03/10/17 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: Objective Apples

What an excellent story. I don't usually write reviews, but I couldn't help it.

Very well written. I didn't really notice any glaring spelling errors or grammatical mistakes so that's always a plus!

The premise is excellent. Wishing stones aren't new, but you add some twists to it.

The parents seem undeveloped/ one dimensional and their acceptance of the situation is verging on implausible. The father barely registers as 1D and the mother seems strange to change instantly from ambivalent to very supportive, but I suppose it is plausible. While the sister had a very big swing from horrible to very supportive. This is harder to assimilate and you can't fix it now because what is done is done. She seemed to get very supportive all of a sudden, but I did like how it took a whole day for her to process her thoughts and witness the isolation of her sister before she tried to reconcile. I think it worked out ok and is plausible. I also understand that you are writing with first person POV who may be unreliable in narration, so may just miss some things.

The main character. Great! Good development with lots of great details, I understand him at the start and the development she is going through.

One big thing I hate about stories is unjust themes. Victims who have no recourse. I prefer "happy" endings. I don't read to be depressed. He was a real idiot and kinda deserved it, but not being stuck in the body of a sex slave for the rest of his life. You have avoided this problem so far. It would be nice if the bad guy eventually gets punished.

I really did like how the first wish was worded. He was turned into a complete girl not just given the body of a girl. I am under the assumption that he became completely female both physically and mentally. He wasn't given the body of a girl with the mind of a guy which would be torment. Now she is going through the process of reconciling those differences and coming to terms with being a woman. I think this is really good, because a male brain doesnt just transform into a female one and it would be terrible to be stuck. I hate when stories don't deal with those issues. You have resolved this, so that's great.

I really love that you put in the disability. It adds a big twist to the story and makes it a lot more interesting in how she decides to face that challenge. Especially since how she used to use her voice as a weapon and is now "powerless". It would be nice if she eventually can speak again, but I can see how she is a strong character and the story could be just fine without that ever being resolved.

Keep up the great work, I hope to follow this to the conclusion.

Author's Response: I really appreciate this review. I agree that the father needs to be built up more, and I'm ironing out how that's going to be done atm. I also agree with your analysis of her mom. Her acceptance was pretty quick, although it's important to note that the mom, dad, and nurse are some of the only people who know the whole story - as far as Johanna's changes are concerned. I'll take all of this into account, though. You're a great reviewer

Gary visits the wizard and gets help to quit smoking. It seems some others don't like seeing him being such a quitter...
Rated: Adult 2 Reviews starstarstarstarhalf-star Completed Story Reads: 7890 Words: 13509 Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Female to Male, Young Adult (20-26 yrs)
Turned Into: Bimbo, Girlfriend
Featured Items: High Heels
Body Modification: Ears Pierced
Motivation for Change: Dared into It, Willing or Voluntary
Sexual Orientation: Does Not Change
Type of Change: Fast/Instant Change, Hypnosis, Stuck
Series: None
Published: 08/25/17
Updated: 08/26/17
Reviewer: Karl Signed starstarstarstar
Date: 10/02/18 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Very well done. Really close to the many other SRU stories out there. Nice twist.

Once an attentive husband, Andrew has become a miserly, controlling jerk. Headed for a divorce, his wife embraces a radical solution, but something goes wrong.
Rated: Adult 7 Reviews starstarstarstar Completed Story Reads: 51089 Words: 44100 Chapters: 14 Table of Contents
Categories: Sci-Fi Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Adult (27-62 yrs)
Turned Into: Child, Teenager
Featured Items: Petticoat, Lace, Ruffles, Crinoline, School Uniform, Undies
Locale: Family Household, Formal Dance, Office
Body Modification: Ears Pierced
Motivation for Change: Accident, Revenge
Personality: Bad to Good
Story Theme: Everyday Living, Second Childhood
Type of Change: Age Regression
Series: None
Published: 11/06/17
Updated: 11/06/17
Reviewer: Karl Signed starstarstarstar
Date: 11/08/17 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 - Wednesday

What horrible people. All of them. The wife is probably the worst of the lot. How could the rest of them, like the daughter or sister all go along with it. Andrew will end up committing suicide or killing them all in revenge at a later date and I wouldn't feel sorry for any of them. Good story though.

Author's Response: This has got to be the best review I ever read! You absolutely hate every character and foresee a mass-killing by the central figure, then end with "Good story, though." Honestly, that's kind of what I was going for. Thank you!

Ron has been putting up with harassment from some of the basketball team ever since he tried out. He also needs a girlfriend, badly. When a strange creature offers to solve his problem, can he resist the temptation, or even accept the results?
Rated: Adult 6 Reviews starstarstarstar Completed Story Reads: 30329 Words: 7335 Chapters: 4 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Teen (13-19 yrs)
Turned Into: Girlfriend
Locale: High School
Motivation for Change: Forced
Personality: Bad to Good, From Dominant to Submissive, Loses Identity
Sexual Orientation: Changes to be Attracted Only to Men
Story Theme: Genie/Wishes, Horror
Type of Change: Fast/Instant Change
Series: None
Published: 11/18/17
Updated: 11/30/17
Reviewer: Karl Signed
Date: 12/17/18 Title: Chapter 1: Part 1

What the heck? Feels like only half a story.

Dave and Serena have been together for quite some time now. They have anything they could desire to be happy.
However Serena can't be satisfied, and it doesn't matter how hard she tries: she's too shy, and every day is a challenge for her.
Dave loves her very much, and he may have found a solution.
Rated: Explicit 36 Reviews starstarstarstarhalf-star Completed Story Reads: 161142 Words: 38222 Chapters: 28 Table of Contents
Reviewer: Karl Signed
Date: 05/17/19 Title: Chapter 1: 1 - Prelude: Serena's Problem

Great start to a good story. I stopped reading after chapter 15. Chapter 14 just broke the flow of the story and it wasn't coming back. Im not good enough a writer to suggest what to do, but the middle is always a struggle. The other woman out of no where just didn't work well. Keep writing, you'll get better.

Author's Response: Hi Karl, thank you for sharing your feedback! :) I know, chapter 14 was no doubt the biggest fail of my "career" in the TG field so far: I got very demoralized after it, and I abandoned this story. Finally I've completed it, and I've made a lot of stories in the meanwhile, now I'm working on the 13th! :D

My crazy ex-girlfriend shows up wielding the powers of a goddess. She decides that my and my new girlfriend need to be punished.
Rated: Explicit 11 Reviews starstarstarstarhalf-star Completed Story Reads: 87379 Words: 81435 Chapters: 10 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Adult (27-62 yrs)
Turned Into: Bimbo, Cheerleader, Teenager
Featured Items: School Uniform
Locale: High School
Motivation for Change: Revenge
Personality: Loses Identity
Type of Change: Age Regression, Fast/Instant Change, Mind Control, Stuck
Series: None
Published: 07/05/18
Updated: 08/24/18
Reviewer: Karl Signed starstarstar
Date: 12/31/18 Title: Chapter 1: Part 1

Generally well written and structured. You tell us Stephen is bad and deserves this, but you never show it. Stephen and Kat just appear to be the helpless victims the entire time and never had a chance.

Nadine is a 1-dimensional evil villian and a terrible one at that. Possibly crazy. Pretty stupid. Of all the things in the world she could do and she wastes her time on this. Just doesnt seem likely. She could have just wiped Stephens memories and made everything how she wanted. Just seems rather silly.

I felt the story to be rather slow and repetitive. Same things over and over. I got bored and skimmed through most the middle. You go through 9 chapters of similar scenes and then the final chapter is a complete 180 out of nowhere.

I like the reference to SRU, but it came out of nowhere. I didn't really notice any foreshadowing of this suprise.

Same with the conclusion with Nadine. Little foreshadowing. Could have had a earlier scene showing Nadine not thinking ahead of the consequences.

The ending was dissappointing. I really don't like these stories. The original guy is wiped out completely. No explanation of why he couldn't go back to being him. Just gone forever. No reason why he couldnt retain all his memories and experiences. And poor Kat stuck in this boring bubble world. She should have just left. Now she is in prison with someone who doesnt even know it and who wouldnt even notice if they ceased to exist. Really quite sad ending.

Anyway, you write well and overall it has its moments. Keep writing and I look forward to your future stories.

As often happens, a guy gets a potion from the wizard which will turn him into his chosen girl's fantasy. Oh, she likes guys, only she doesn't really like him...
Rated: Explicit 3 Reviews starstarstarstarstar Completed Story Reads: 9337 Words: 5213 Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Teen (13-19 yrs)
Turned Into: Doll
Locale: High School
Motivation for Change: As Justice for a Crime, Revenge
Personality: Fights Change
Type of Change: Fast/Instant Change, Stuck
Series: None
Published: 09/28/18
Updated: 09/28/18
Reviewer: Karl Signed
Date: 10/01/18 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I'm so conflicted. Generally a well written story, based off SRU. But raping the bad guy makes the bad guy look like the true victim of the story. And Danny wasn't even a rapist, he was just fulfilling someone else's fantasy. Just a bully and an abuser. I don't want to feel sorry for him, but I do. You make Mickey seem like an even worse person than Danny and in fact Mickey was a true rapist, probably on multiple occasions. The ending just seems wrong. Nice lead up to another story though.

Brian is the quarterback of the football team, and he sees that there's been a slight shift in the demographic of Oakwood High School, but to the end, finds himself at the hands of the TG Questionnaire.
Rated: Adult 7 Reviews starstarstarstar Completed Story Reads: 9652 Words: 2917 Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Teen (13-19 yrs)
Turned Into: Cheerleader, Teenager
Locale: Girl's School, High School
Motivation for Change: Female Domination, Tricked, Unknown
Personality: Made Smarter
Sexual Orientation: Changes to be Attracted Only to Men
Story Theme: Everyday Living, Witchcraft
Type of Change: Slow/Gradual Change, Stuck
Series: None
Published: 09/29/18
Updated: 09/29/18
Reviewer: Karl Signed starstarstar
Date: 10/01/18 Title: Chapter 1: TG Questionnaire

Very basic story. Nicely done.

Brad is the typical frat boy at UF, but after focusing too much on the members of the opposite sex, finds himself at the whims of a witch.
Rated: Explicit 3 Reviews starstarstarstar Completed Story Reads: 16084 Words: 6251 Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Teen (13-19 yrs)
Turned Into: Bimbo, Teenager
Locale: College
Motivation for Change: As Justice for a Crime, Curse, Female Domination
Personality: Fights Change, From Dominant to Submissive, Loses Identity, Made Dumber
Sexual Orientation: Changes to be Attracted Only to Men
Story Theme: Captive, Everyday Living, Witchcraft
Type of Change: Fast/Instant Change
Series: None
Published: 10/01/18
Updated: 10/01/18
Reviewer: Karl Signed starstarstar
Date: 10/01/18 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Nice Tragedy. I feel sorry for poor Brad.

Josh just had to take his little sister out trick or treating, that was all. At least, that's all it was supposed to be...
Rated: Adult 4 Reviews starstarstarstar Completed Story Reads: 10084 Words: 4472 Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Crossdressing and TV
Characters: Male to Female, Teen (13-19 yrs)
Turned Into: Fantasy Character
Locale: Family Household
Motivation for Change: Tricked
Personality: Fights Change
Sexual Orientation: Does Not Change
Story Theme: Costume or Halloween, Humiliation
Series: The Curse Universe
Published: 11/01/18
Updated: 11/01/18
Reviewer: Karl Signed
Date: 12/17/18 Title: Chapter 1: The Worst Halloween Ever

It's a well written story because I care about the character for some reason. I can't help but feel terribly sad for the poor guy. It just seems totally wrong. He is basically being raped/violated/abused constantly and everyone just laughing it off as good natured fun. He can't trust anyone around him. They all just want to use him. I'd seriously hate my whole family if I were him and want to run away or kill them all. I can only assume he is so traumatized by his life that he had given up and is just letting his abusers get away with it because he is powerless.

Some of the most harmful stuff done to people are the psychological wounds that are left behind.

A very disturbing story.

Jack couldn't help himself from giving in to his most basic desire - to look at a woman's breasts. Little did he know he'd get a chance to do that whenever he wanted.
Rated: Adult 31 Reviews starstarstarstarhalf-star Completed Story Reads: 201472 Words: 6417 Chapters: 15 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Young Adult (20-26 yrs)
Turned Into: Model
Locale: College
Body Modification: Extreme Breast Enlargement, Liposuction, Permanent Hair/Skin/Nail Change
Motivation for Change: Forced, Revenge
Personality: Bad to Good, From Dominant to Submissive
Sexual Orientation: Changes to be Attracted Only to Men
Story Theme: Everyday Living
Type of Change: Fast/Instant Change, Stuck
Series: None
Published: 01/22/19
Updated: 08/27/19
Reviewer: Karl Signed
Date: 03/01/19 Title: Chapter 1: Ch. 1: A Quick Glance

I don't like identity death stories and this is one of them, no matter how many times the villain says it isn't. This story just doesn't make sense. It's too long to be one of those short revenge tf stories.
Great start but then lost the plot after that.

Sam is a quiet 16 year old high school guy. He's a nerd and a geek. A pretty typical guy. When his friends try to peer pressure him into playing the tank role for the new VR game they all want to play, he rebels, although he can't quite figure out why. Follow Sam as he dives into the world of Pellan Rise as the dainty little healer named Sylanna, where he discovers that the game has a lot more influence over the real world than everyone thought.
Rated: Adult 306 Reviews starstarstarstarstar Story Incomplete Reads: 198678 Words: 34674 Chapters: 10 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Teen (13-19 yrs)
Turned Into: Daughter, Fantasy Character
Featured Items: School Uniform
Locale: High School, Space or Foreign Planet
Motivation for Change: For a Job, Unknown
Sexual Orientation: Changes to be Attracted Only to Women
Story Theme: Coming of Age, Mythical Setting, Romance, Witchcraft
Type of Change: Fast/Instant Change, Stuck
Warnings: Intense Violence
Series: Kammi-verse, The Andrare Legacy
Published: 02/06/19
Updated: 02/03/20
Reviewer: Karl Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 02/24/19 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: No Tankerino pls.

Are you a professional author? If not, you are well on your way.

This is well written. I'm just annoyed it isn't complete. Usually I never read incomplete stories. I misread the tags and I thought it was complete. Read the whole thing non-stop till I hit the point I realised it was incomplete.

Very annoyed.

Anyway, your writing is well done. And I don't say it lightly. Usually I just complain about people's writing on here. Plenty of writers on this site get positive comments on this site which I don't feel are deserved. In your case with this story, it is well deserved. You either fluked this or you have developed a great understanding on what it takes to write a great story. I suspect the latter, but perhaps a bit of both.

Your premise is great. Fantasy game that is bleeding over into the real world. Young trans girl dealing with it.

No info dumps about anything which is great. You do a really great job of describing just enough to get back and you use a variety of ways to do this.

Great character development. You have done well to flesh out characters, especially the main character. Even minor characters are not too bad. Main character arc is great.

Funny. There are some really nice funny bits in there that made me laugh out loud for real. They don't seem forced, seem genuine and also help the reader better understand a character.

I can understand why you want to link this story to your other story, but the references to Nia are jarring. I feel it it breaks the flow of the story. Not sure how you work around that, unless you introduce Nia directly in the story as an interaction with the group in a way that adds meaning to the story. Then do some flashbacks as needed for the story. Otherwise it doesn't seem to fit.

How quickly family/friends accept the change is pushing the realm of belief. It is the weakest part of the story and really hard to work around (instant change in real world). Not sure I buy the whole "magic identity fix". I think that went too far and broke my immersion. Sam going missing and then a new person Syl turning up. Some government records are easy, just a name/gender/photo change I guess. No one would care or be any wiser. The problem is every friend and extended family member (annoying aunties) would be on social media soon enough going "WTH?! Where did Sam go? Did he commit suicide?? Who is this random girl living with you guys who looks nothing remotely like Sam??!."

As a Kiwi I liked the NZ references, though it doesn't add anything to the story. As in it doesnt really add to the character development or the main story arc. It could be a source of distraction/confusion to some people. It mostly works though with Sam/Syl explaining some differences through the story.

A bit of tidying up and your story gets to the point where I would actually pay real life money for.

I wish I could write as well as you. Keep up the writing and you will only get better.

Author's Response: Thanks for your review! Some good points! The parents/friends/identity thing is wish fulfillment pure and simple. If this was a novel I'd do it differently. The extended family hasn't actually had time to notice. As of writing this, not even a full week has passed in the real world in the story. If you want to know more about who Nia is i suggest reading my other story, Ruins of Andegral. Thanks for the vote of confidence! And one day i will probably go through the story and fix everything up to post on amazon or whatever

Reviewer: Karl Signed
Date: 02/28/19 Title: Pellan Rise

Nicely done. I really don't care too much for those scenes, that was very nicely done.

Reviewer: Karl Signed
Date: 03/05/19 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: No Tankerino pls.

And this is why I avoid incomplete stories. Once of the top stories on this site and it may never be finished. Ah well, good luck to you.

For years, evil wizard Venlut has been terrorising the kingdom with his transformative spells. Will brave Sir Gavad be able to bring him to justice? Or will he end up just another one of his victims?
Rated: Adult 7 Reviews starstarstarstarhalf-star Completed Story Reads: 6457 Words: 3099 Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Young Adult (20-26 yrs)
Motivation for Change: Forced
Sexual Orientation: Changes to be Attracted Only to Men
Story Theme: Mythical Setting, Witchcraft
Series: None
Published: 03/04/19
Updated: 03/04/19
Reviewer: Karl Signed starstarstarstar
Date: 03/05/19 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Short and sweet. Nicely done with the end twist.

Author's Response: Thanks! I felt I had to put *some* sort of twist on this very common set-up.

A post-college athlete is poised to see his old team play their rivals in the final game of the season. The only thing standing in his way? An old friend who won't let him in unless he follows through on a simple dare - paint his nails red with polish. Talk about frustrating. Yet... why does the idea not sound so bad?
Rated: Explicit 12 Reviews starstarstarstarstar Completed Story Reads: 16044 Words: 9491 Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Young Adult (20-26 yrs)
Locale: College
Motivation for Change: Dared into It
Sexual Orientation: Does Not Change
Story Type: Includes Images
Type of Change: Changed by Clothing, Fast/Instant Change
Series: None
Published: 03/24/19
Updated: 03/25/19
Reviewer: Karl Signed
Date: 03/26/19 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Wow. What a great story!

Author's Response: Thanks~!

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