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What happens if you wake up to find years have passed and everything you were had been changed.
Rated: Adult 8 Reviews starstarstarstarstar Completed Story Reads: 53596 Words: 30667 Chapters: 24 Table of Contents
Categories: Realistic Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Young Adult (20-26 yrs)
Turned Into: Adult
Locale: Hospital or Clinic, Labratory
Body Modification: Sexual Reassignment Surgery, Vocal Surgery
Motivation for Change: Accident
Story Theme: Everyday Living
Type of Change: Hormonal
Series: None
Published: 11/16/14
Updated: 11/16/14
Reviewer: mike34912 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 03/13/15 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

This is one of the best stories I have read online. The writer knows how to write a complete sentence, handles dialogue very well. Knows english syntax and uses it correctly. It was a pleasant story, very adult, a beautiful piece of fiction, almost plausable. The chapters could have been better organized, too many, and more even length. Some of the chapters could use more fleshing out. With the addition of the two other chapters you have added you have started to fill in the blanks that give a story depth and the characters more form. It seems to be written similar to a romantic comedy, happy ending and all that.
mike

In England, a forty-two-year-old Electro-mechanical engineer, married, two kids. He lost his job. Putting his family first, he has ended up as a maintenance engineer at a girl's school, although a little out of his depth he copes.
A short visiting academy of eight mature teenage girls turns out to be not what they appear as they turn his life, family, job and even him around.
Rated: Explicit 24 Reviews starstarstarstarhalf-star Story Incomplete Reads: 99993 Words: 340076 Chapters: 64 Table of Contents
Categories: Sci-Fi Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Adult (27-62 yrs)
Turned Into: Daughter
Featured Items: Breast Forms, Lingerie, Pantyhose, School Uniform, Undies
Locale: Girl's School
Motivation for Change: Accident, Female Domination
Personality: Made Smarter
Story Type: Comic
Story Theme: Fan Fiction
Type of Change: Age Regression, Mechanical Device, Stuck
Warnings: Bodily Functions, Politically Incorrect
Series: None
Published: 07/07/19
Updated: 10/04/20
Reviewer: mike34912 Signed
Date: 10/16/19 Title: Chapter 41: Forty one: an Engagement

The Orgasmatron I think, was also in a 1970's Woody Allen movie. I think the movie was called Sleeper.

Author's Response: Oh yes, mike34912 you are right, you have just reminded me. Without any research, I vaguely remember him being a beauty queen among other things, another classic sci-fi. Thanks, Kitty

When Martha needs an emergency babysitter for her daughter, Suzie, for a week or lose her job, she contacts her neighbor, Mark. Being a programmer who can easily work from his laptop, he agrees thinking it'll be easy money watching a six year old girl. Unfortunately for Mark, Suzie made friends with a magic lamp's occupant. Might not be an easy week for Mark after all.
Rated: Explicit 154 Reviews starstarstarstarhalf-star Completed Story Reads: 343887 Words: 81314 Chapters: 41 Table of Contents
Reviewer: mike34912 Signed
Date: 09/19/19 Title: Chapter 11: Gymnastics Class

Started out interesting, but the pace got repetitive and boring. Almost as bad as 50 shades of grey. On of the writers on this site a DR Miller, wrote a series of stories called 'Frankie' that were a good example of how to write a story. Nice pace, plausible context, good sentence structure of conversation between characters.

Author's Response: So, I don't know if I should take the Fifty Shades of Grey remark as an insult or not considering how many copies it's sold, and considering I haven't read it myself, but I'll assume it's bad. Maybe I can break up my conversations from the rest of the descriptions more, but there are many differences between that(those) story(ies) and my own including, but not limited to, PoV and setting. I do notice I overuse certain words (such as 'rather') and am trying to break that habit, but the first two days were intensionally designed to be similar to set a routine so I could break it on day three. I'm also breaking the story up into parts of the day though I could gloss over the cooking a bit... If that's the repetitive part you refer to, I have plans to change it. If they don't work out though, feel free to let me know so I can improve as a writer.

I always wanted to try sex as woman. Thanks to one company, i managed. So first bodysuit, first transformation, first sex
Rated: Explicit 4 Reviews starstarstarstarstar Completed Story Reads: 7361 Words: 2317 Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Categories: Sci-Fi Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Adult (27-62 yrs)
Turned Into: Adult, Bimbo, Clothing, Prostitute, Stripper
Featured Items: Breast Forms, Corsets, Curlers, High Heels, Lingerie, Long Nails, Masks, Work Uniform
Locale: Labratory, Office
Body Modification: Extreme Breast Enlargement, Permanent Cosmetics, Permanent Hair/Skin/Nail Change
Motivation for Change: Dared into It, Willing or Voluntary
Personality: Good to Bad
Sexual Orientation: Changes to be Bisexual
Story Theme: Costume or Halloween, Medical Experiment
Type of Change: Body Suit
Warnings: Bondage/S&M
Series: None
Published: 01/21/20
Updated: 01/21/20
Reviewer: mike34912 Signed
Date: 01/23/20 Title: Chapter 1: My first bodysuit

I have corrected some of the incorrect English and the run on sentence look of the story.
If you want to see how a good story is written, look at the Frankie stories by dr miller on this site, no it is not me, they are a good example of a well written stories that hang together.
Hello, it's my first ever try to make a story - so do not judge me too strong. And I hope you will forgive my imperfect English. So, let’s begin the story :)

I always wanted to understand how it feels to be a woman. I did not want to do surgery and hormone therapy, and cross dressing was not so good idea - just a man in dress, maybe attractive one, but a man.
And then one day I managed to find the site xxxgen.com, which promised to help a man feel like a woman and they we looking for people to take part in testing their new product - a female bodysuit. Moreover, according to them, one could program both character and behavior in different situations. I don’t know how, but I went through the selection and I was asked to choose a new personality. In fact, the choice was not very large, and I decided that I want to be a brunette with big breasts and a slightly slutty character. And then I had to sign a bunch of documents, according to which I agreed to take part in testing during the week, to complete all the tasks and instructions of the company, etc. In the case of success, I could leave the bodysuit.

You see, the product is innovative, we also implanted into it nanobots with behavioral models and physiological functionality; you don’t have to learn to walk in heels, for example, it will be natural for you, like everything else.
Finally, day X came.
Two attractive girls came to my house and my transformation started. I could not see what exactly did do, since I was told to close my eyes. Finally, when it was all over, I was allowed to open my eyes.
I got up and tried to examine myself from top to bottom, but I couldn’t see too much - rather big boobs literally blocked my view.
I bent my fingers, which seemed a couple of sizes smaller than my own, with polished nails. Leaning a little, I felt a thin waist, which was 10 centimeters thinner than mine, turning into wide curved hips and a rounded ass. Leaning a little so that my boobs didn’t block the view, I looked and saw that my cock “disappeared”, and a triangle of black hair adorned my crotch. I could feel where my cock is inside the suit, connected to different sensors. I felt my boobs. I really could feel them, a gentle breeze gently caress my nipples, transmitting vibrations to my nervous system. Definitely my new nipples were more sensitive than my own skin.

Turning around, I saw in the mirror a beautiful, completely naked woman who was invitingly looking at me. Ruby red lips and pink eye shadows. Full breasts, cream skin and wavy dark hair. Heck. She was not very young, and not that slim. But she was very feminine and sexy.

The voice of one of the company representatives led me out of the stupor “Everything looks perfect, and now it's time for you to get dressed, Victoria.” I liked the name. They helped me put on red stockings and a white cup less corset, which simply held my new amazing chest, then a red dress and white shoes. Some jewelry and the girls said that I was ready to go out.

“Girls, don’t you think that white shoes are not matching a red dress? And where are my panties? ” - I asked, and my voice sounded like music to me.
“Oh, we forgot them,” the girls giggled. “But it's okay; anyway, you would have removed them soon. And white shoes match well with your corset. ”
“What do you mean?!” I asked.
"Just what we told you! If everything goes according to plan, then our Victoria today will get an unforgettable sex in various poses. You wanted it when you agreed to participate in testing! ”
I wanted to object, but they were right — I really wanted to feel sex as a woman. So Victoria licked her puffy lips and languidly said, “And how long will we wait for this wonderful moment?”

“That, honey, all depends on you. Now a taxi will take you to the hotel, where a room is booked in your name. ”

I went to the hotel.
As soon as I was in my room in the hotel, the phone rang.

’’Hello?” I wondered who might be phoning me. ”Ooh, I understand flowers for me. Yes, you can send the bellboy up with them...!” Just after I had finished talking to the man at the hotel’s reception desk, there was a knock at the door of my suite. ’’...Come in, please!” And the bellboy entered with a bunch of flowers in his hand. It was immediately clear to me that the flowers hardly rated a second glance. But first let’s find out what is on the card!”
The flowers were from xxxgen.com, and it was written on the card “Victoria, thank you for your participation in the testing. Your first task is to test the emotional, physical and physiological components of the model as soon as possible. My eyes were filled with tears - at least with emotions I am fine. “Unhappy love?” asked the bellboy. “What can a youngster like you know about love? And where sex is concerned, you probably know even less”
That’s what you think!” The bellboy places a hand onto my bare shoulder.
"Maybe I cannot help you with love, but if sex is what you want, I can certainly be of service!”.
Just listen to this guy! I am in for the next surprise, when he starts kissing me and pushes down my dress, which lets my heavy breasts fall free.
’’Oooops!” the bellboy says. ’’They might have landed anywhere if I had not caught them!”
’’That’s what you think!” I grin. "Big boobs like mine always find someone to catch them!”

“Your sadness about being deserted didn’t last very long!”
The bellboy starts talking to me in a more familiar tone. ’’One man leaves, and already you’ve got yourself involved with the next one!”
Then he shows me how much I’m ’’involved”. Like a fish caught in a net by mine (or not really mine, it’s just a bodysuit) own sexual desires. He tongues my nipples hungrily and starts fingering the black hairy triangle between my legs!
’’Aaaaaah! The bellboy has made me feel... as randy as a bitch in heat, and I grab his prick.
”Wow!” I exclaim, ’’This youngster has a man-sized pecker..!” (“and it’s bigger than yours” - giggled my inner voice)

’Quit calling me ’’youngster”, will you!” moans the bellboy. And it is no wonder that he’s moaning, knowing that I have managed to prick-tease him into a state of swollen excitement! ’’Try calling me “he-man” or "big guy", now that you have seen the size of my gear!”
”O.k. Big guy!” I have no more reservations. ” But now I would like you to prove that you are a real he-man...!”
“Shove it in deep!
” I kneel down putting my expectant slit just one inch sway from his erect penis. ’’And then get it moving in and out!” ”I know perfectly well what to do!” mutters the bellboy while he does what I asked (not me as a man, but me as a woman. It's just the test). ”Do you think I am an idiot?” And then he proves that a man cannot be stupid enough, not to know how to fuck a randy woman!

I am very pleased to hear and feel this ...!” I was just overwhelmed with sensations, new, unusual, but certainly pleasant . “When it comes to fucking, you are definitely more experienced than me”, he whisper in my ear “, may be you would like to teach me some new tricks?”

And if that’s the case, there is no need for me to hold back any more!” And I climb over the bellboy, and settle onto his prick, which is thrusting vertically upwards. Once ’’seated”, I start performing an unbelievable dance; raising my body and moaning loudly as his cock vanishes up my channel on the downward plunge.
’’Aaaaaah, this is good! In fact, it is the best hotel ’’service” I’ve ever had! Catering to the ’’needs” of single women! That’s an important thing; one could also say it’s critical!
Aaaaaaaaaaah!” ’’Would you tell that to the hotel’s director?” grins the bellboy.
“And you are definitely a fool!” I smile contentedly as make his thick prong slide in and out my well-lubricated channel. ’’You have such a good ’’qualities”! They really are hidden talents! I'll leave you for myself! And from now on I will be a regular guest at this hotel!”

And now rub your cock between my boobs, like this! And if you want me to give you some tips, you have to do some real ’’hard” work!” ’’That’s just fine with me!” The bellboy moves behind me, and proves how ’’hard” he can work!

"Aaaaaaahh, aaaaaah!” I have no objections as he bangs his rock-hard cock deep into my wet cunt, but there is no need for him to lift my leg up so high. ’’ What is this, a circus act?” And the bellboy isn’t quite sure himself what his intentions are, but he is enjoying the way I sway around on one leg, as I try desperately to keep my balance. Obviously, he cannot tell the truth,so he says: ’’And when you stand on one leg, it feels like my prick is in a vise...!”
’’Don’t talk such rubbish..!” I complain ’’All you want is for me to jump around on one leg, for you to get practice in your silly, silly circus act!”

“Well. If you don’t like this position, let’s change it! Please take a seat on me! Be a call girl you are in your soul”. ”Oh, thanks, very considerate...!” I straddle him and get comfortably ’’seated” on his erection. Then I continue with my wild up and down movements. ”
Aaaaaaaah!” I gasp between thrusts. ’’This is also exhausting!”
But being lazy won’t get the ’’job” done! ” The bellboy pushes me on her back, so all I have to do is to spread my sexy legs. But he even helps me with that by lifting them onto his shoulders! ”
I hope you are not feeling tired, so you can finish the "job”! I just relax, and let him concentrate on with his ’’services. ’’You know very well that I am a ’’hard” worker!” pants the bellboy. ’’But I hope you show some ’’results” soon because all this ’’pounding” is beginning to have an effect on me, too!”.”Ooh, don’t worry about that..!” I am answering. ”By the time you ’’squirt”, I will have had my climax!”

That’s good news, now you can let your cunt juice squirt whenever you feel like it!” The bell boy speeds up the movement of his cock in and out of my cunt, as though he is drilling a bore hole on the search for my ’’love juice”. ’’Come on, start squirting!”
’’Aaaaah, aaaah!” I feel as if I'm going to faint. My vision blurs and I feel a contraction deep inside my womb , which means my orgasm is on the way, and juice will soon come pumping out of my (yes, I want to be in this bodysuit forever) cunt.
"Aaaaaaaaaah, here it comes!” I scream, and then all I can see is stars dancing in front of my eyes
Aaaaah, aaahh, hey, what’s that?” Suddenly the stars moving in front of my eyes have changed into whitish spots. ’’You little devil!” And I grab hold of his twitching prick, which is just in front of my face and licks it. ’’And you squirted without warning me! And I wanted you to squirt in me”
” Do you want me to do this once again?” gasps the bellboy. I smile”Yes, definitely! Come back in an hour!"

It took literally a couple of minutes after he left, and the door opened again and two charming company representatives with a couple of suitcases waltzed in into my room.
“Victoria, we watched you through cameras - you were beyond praise! And as we told you didn't need panties! And look how your white shoes perfectly match with your white corset! ” They chirped.
Then one of them took a remote control out of her purse and pressed a couple of buttons.
At that moment, my masculine “I”, which had been at the back of my mind all this time, finally came to the fore! “What the hell was that?!” I shouted. “I, man, have just been fucked by a man!” And I could not do anything and behaved like the last whore!

The girls giggled - “You saw yourself in the mirror, Victoria! Now you are just a slutty thing! And we warned you about nanobots - they took on all the motor and behavioral functions of your body. Does a man know how to suck a dick? Does a man have big boobs between which the cock glides so nicely? And can a man know how it feels to feel a hot, hard, throbbing dick inside his pussy that is ready to spew a stream of sperm? Once again - you wanted it! I and you are the only one who most fully merged with nanobots. So relax, we will change your appearance and you will be ready to further tests! ”

Dear readers, your comments are welcomed
I'd like to know, whether I have to continue writing, or this is just not my way

Author's Response: Thank you very much! I'l do my best to make next part better

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