Phoenux
Currently on Hiatus, sorry y'all :( I've got too many hobbies on my plate atm.
Member Since: 08/01/14 Membership status: Member
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Reviews by Phoenux
Jack was a normal boy with a special talent. Then one day he wasn't so normal anymore. In fact, he wasn't even a boy!
Rated: Adult 125 Reviews starstarstarstarstar Completed Story Reads: 1332007 Words: 96069 Chapters: 14 Table of Contents
Categories: Sci-Fi Trans
Characters: Male to Female, Teen (13-19 yrs)
Turned Into: Cheerleader
Locale: High School
Motivation for Change: Unknown
Sexual Orientation: Changes to be Attracted Only to Men
Story Theme: Everyday Living, Sports
Series: None
Published: 02/18/11
Updated: 02/18/11
Reviewer: Phoenux Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 09/28/14 Title: Chapter 1: I - A Good Day at the Track

This was probably the first story i read on this site. And ever since it has been my favorite of them all.

Cat girls appear and start spreading like a virus.
Rated: Adult 27 Reviews starstarstarstarhalf-star Completed Story Reads: 50893 Words: 40199 Chapters: 14 Table of Contents
Categories: Sci-Fi Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Adult (27-62 yrs)
Turned Into: Adult, Daughter, Slave
Motivation for Change: Forced
Personality: Fights Change, Loses Identity
Series: Neko
Published: 01/04/14
Updated: 08/15/15
Reviewer: Phoenux Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 09/28/14 Title: Chapter 1: Prelude

I've loved this story since the beginning. I have now been waiting 4 months for an update, but i refuse to give up! D:

Jaux Ballad has always wanted to enter the realm of magic, but could not do so by regular means. In his desperation to become a magician he finds himself with more power, and more trouble, than he could ever have imagined.
Rated: Adult 354 Reviews starstarstarstarstar Story Incomplete Reads: 331979 Words: 97327 Chapters: 48 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Teen (13-19 yrs)
Turned Into: Fantasy Character, Teenager
Featured Items: Corsets, Petticoat, Lace, Ruffles, Crinoline
Locale: Camp, College, Family Household
Motivation for Change: Accident, Curse
Personality: Fights Change
Sexual Orientation: Changes to be Bisexual
Story Theme: Historical Time Period, Mythical Setting, Witchcraft
Type of Change: Fast/Instant Change, Stuck
Warnings: Death, Intense Violence
Series: Vanasia Universe
Published: 02/22/14
Updated: 09/17/15
Reviewer: Phoenux Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 10/20/14 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: The Demon Root

We want a new chapter! We want a new chapter! This Story was making an easy run for over taking "For a Girl" as my favorite story on this site but if it is never finished i'm just gonna end up crying every night )': )': seriously though. Beautiful story

Reviewer: Phoenux Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 12/30/14 Title: Chapter 47: Chapter 47: Tussle

FINALLY! I've been waiting for sooo long! The story is amazing, finally the climatic battle >:D

A gender confused boy get's dragged into a war between angels and demons. How will he deal with everyday life when he finds himself in the wrong body at night?
Rated: Adult 40 Reviews starstarstarstarstar Story Incomplete Reads: 31222 Words: 52356 Chapters: 15 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Teen (13-19 yrs)
Turned Into: Adult, Fantasy Character
Featured Items: Corsets, High Heels, Lingerie
Locale: High School, Space or Foreign Planet
Motivation for Change: Accident, Forced, In Hiding, Willing or Voluntary
Personality: From Dominant to Submissive
Sexual Orientation: Changes to be Bisexual
Story Theme: Everyday Living, Mythical Setting
Type of Change: Fast/Instant Change, Hormonal, Stuck
Warnings: Death, Intense Violence
Series: None
Published: 05/11/14
Updated: 12/08/16
Reviewer: Phoenux Signed
Date: 09/28/14 Title: Chapter 4: A Whole New World!

Agh! This story has such a great and axciting build up from the start! We need an update nooow! D:

Author's Response: I'm so sorry, I've been in the process of moving and getting settled. I just got to a point where I can start writing again. I'm literally working on a chapter right now :P.

Legend is a game unlike any other. A true sandbox of possibilities. Some more enticing than others.
Rated: Explicit 7 Reviews starstarstarstarstar Story Incomplete Reads: 5506 Words: 2066 Chapters: 2 Table of Contents
Categories: Sci-Fi Gender Change
Characters: Female to Male, Young Adult (20-26 yrs)
Turned Into: Fantasy Character
Motivation for Change: Willing or Voluntary
Sexual Orientation: Does Not Change
Type of Change: Mechanical Device
Series: None
Published: 05/23/14
Updated: 05/26/14
Reviewer: Phoenux Signed
Date: 09/28/14 Title: Chapter 1: Legend

This story seems to have a looooot of potential stored up in it. Being in a virtual RPG world? Our protag is lucky so far, curious to see what's going to happen.

East City was enjoying a normal day, until several people awoke to find strange humanoid creatures telling them that they were "chosen"...
Rated: Adult 147 Reviews starstarstarstarstar Completed Story Reads: 80555 Words: 181322 Chapters: 44 Table of Contents
Reviewer: Phoenux Signed
Date: 01/06/15 Title: Chapter 14: Issue #14: The Gathering, Conclusion

I'm sure if this was a mistake it would have been fixed by now but I figured I would ask anyways since it's bothered me ever since I read this chapter. After the fight, Blackhole and Guardian are tossing robots into a black hole, but after that you write that a whole lot of destroyed robots are tossed Into a garbage truck. Didn't Blackhole and Guardian already get rid of them? Or did I miss something?

Author's Response: Some were tossed into the black holes, others were stuffed onto trucks for study and alternate forms of disposal.

Sam was a normal boy. A loner for the most part, but he was fine with that. But what happens when one simple party spins his world on its head and puts him at the center of attention?
Rated: Explicit 28 Reviews starstarstarstarstar Story Incomplete Reads: 58293 Words: 33709 Chapters: 8 Table of Contents
Reviewer: Phoenux Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 08/25/14 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: The Party

This story so far has been absolutely amazing. I have been able to connect with the main character and easily tell what he is feeling. Whenever he feels like he is going to get caught i catch myself looking over my shoulder as if I'M the one about to get caught doing something wrong hahaha. Whenever his step-dad is being a dick i feel myself even getting angry and wanting to yell at him for the MC. A great story that i wish i hadn't found until it was finished because now i have to deal with the agony of waiting for another chapter Dx

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I find that it is hard for me to create an emotion or reaction for my MC that I wouldn't feel. So I'm glad that I can portray that to you. Having the intent is one thing bit when it happens it makes me giggle like a school girl. And I know the agony. Oh so well. But I will try to make speedy (weekly) updates! Thank you so much for the review!

Mark Raynor is nearing the end of his career as an airship gunner. But when his ship receives a mission to look for an ancient device, and actually find it, his outlook on life changes completly
Rated: Explicit 53 Reviews starstarstarstarstar Story Incomplete Reads: 44021 Words: 27560 Chapters: 13 Table of Contents
Categories: Sci-Fi Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Young Adult (20-26 yrs)
Turned Into: Adult, Fantasy Character
Featured Items: Boots
Locale: Labratory
Motivation for Change: Accident
Personality: From Submissive to Dominant, Made Smarter
Sexual Orientation: Changes to be Attracted Only to Men
Story Theme: Coming of Age, Historical Time Period
Type of Change: Age Regression, Fast/Instant Change
Warnings: Death, Intense Violence, Non-Consentual Sex
Series: None
Published: 08/21/14
Updated: 02/02/15
Reviewer: Phoenux Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 09/30/14 Title: Chapter 1: A Gunner's Job

Love the new chapter.

Author's Response: Hopefully you'll keep loving the next few :)

In Randion City where technology and science determine rank and status, while those with no skills receive nothing. Now there is someone or something new and more capable. Will the city crumble or reach a new golden age.
Rated: Adult 55 Reviews starstarstarstarhalf-star Completed Story Reads: 51249 Words: 101155 Chapters: 24 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Teen (13-19 yrs)
Turned Into: Daughter, Fantasy Character, Teenager
Featured Items: School Uniform
Locale: Family Household, High School, Hospital or Clinic, Labratory
Body Modification: Ears Pierced
Motivation for Change: Accident, Revenge, Willing or Voluntary
Personality: Loses Identity
Sexual Orientation: Changes to be Attracted Only to Men
Story Theme: Coming of Age, Mythical Setting
Type of Change: Age Regression, Fast/Instant Change
Warnings: Death, Intense Violence
Series: None
Published: 09/17/14
Updated: 05/07/15
Reviewer: Phoenux Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 09/30/14 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 10: Return on investment.

Great story so far, only issue with this chapter are some typos and doubled words. Keep up the good work, loving it so far

Author's Response: Thanks. I've enjoyed writing it thus far. Only issue has been those illusive typos and double words that I can't seem to find when I search through it.

Reviewer: Phoenux Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 10/20/14 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 14: War between worlds

I've loved this story since the beginning. But I kinda feel like Sheeni was a little too direct with some of her dialogue this chapter. I mean she usually is direct in a manner but Towards the end when hope and crew show up she just kinda throws bad news out there like it's common knowledge.

I am often at fault for getting straight to the point whenever I get excited about a climax that is soon approaching and i kinda start skipping everything so i can get too the climax as quickly as possible. And i kinda get a sense that this is what is happening towards the end of the chapter. Though I could just be blowing crap out of my ass who knows. All in All, love the story, keep it up!

Author's Response: About the direct bit. Lios, that is Fate would kinda know a little about the scenario, even if she came after her in hopes of seeing romantic interaction it was more to do with the bad news. You'll probably find that it was Fate who told Hope about the problems Sheeni had been having rather than the other way round. Fate has by far the largest scope of power but the least influence whereas people like Hope and Valor fall in the small scope but highest influence. If you want to know about Death, she's a good all rounder.

Human flesh is their only sustenance. Don't go looking for them, or it will be your flesh.
Rated: Adult 40 Reviews starstarstarstarhalf-star Completed Story Reads: 50275 Words: 106299 Chapters: 20 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Teen (13-19 yrs)
Turned Into: Girlfriend, Object, Teenager
Featured Items: School Uniform
Locale: High School
Motivation for Change: Curse, Forced
Personality: Loses Identity, Made Smarter
Sexual Orientation: Changes to be Attracted Only to Men
Story Theme: Mythical Setting, Witchcraft
Type of Change: Fast/Instant Change
Warnings: Death, Intense Violence, Torture
Series: Castaways
Published: 10/25/14
Updated: 11/27/14
Reviewer: Phoenux Signed starstarstarstar
Date: 11/08/14 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: Midnight sun

I've really really enjoyed this story so far. But with a heavy heart i don't feel that I can give you all give stars because of a few glaring writing errors. There are quite a few cases of doubled words, sentences where it seems you had two ideas of how to write the sentence and they both ended up smashed together on accident and other errors. I realize proof reading is boring, tedious and I hate doing it with a passion, but sometimes errors can affect the reading experience and with a piece of writing as immersive as this one the errors really drag me out of the story. But the story itself is a wonderful one, I enjoy being able to notice the similarities from where you drew your inspiration and all of the wonderful ideas you've put down. Also when I read the chapter notes about throwing in mythical creatures so late I was about curious to see how you would manage to fit it in without it being an obvious after thought but your managed to do so very well. Great story!

Author's Response: Thank you very much for the review. And with the writing errors... Yeah, I can blame that mostly on the difficulty of trying to fix it, I may spend the rest of tomorrow fixing chapters instead of writing my 13th chapter. I'll finish the 12th chapter today and take a rest. Where you see the smashed together part, I really feel bad about those parts, I have multiple plans coming into things and at times I decide halfway through writing something that 'hey it would sound better this way' then I forget to change one of the slots. You may find that The Wedge pointed out one such moment during his review.

Patrick was an ordinary teenager, then he fell into another dimension along with his sisters cat. Now he's far from home, not exactly human, and definitely not male. Worst of all she is surrounded by people she's not sure she can trust, in a situation she can barely comprehend.
She has a long way to go if she's ever to find safety, and the path is dark and dangerous.
This is the first part of a trilogy.
I added in a new chapter, Answers and Questions, it was necessary for the second part.
Rated: Adult 57 Reviews starstarstarstarstar Completed Story Reads: 42457 Words: 57295 Chapters: 19 Table of Contents
Categories: Sci-Fi Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Teen (13-19 yrs)
Turned Into: Alien, Fantasy Character
Featured Items: Long Nails
Locale: Hospital or Clinic, Labratory
Motivation for Change: Accident
Personality: Fights Change
Sexual Orientation: Changes to be Bisexual
Story Theme: Coming of Age
Type of Change: Fast/Instant Change, Stuck
Series: Far From Home
Published: 10/28/14
Updated: 12/13/14
Reviewer: Phoenux Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 11/15/14 Title: Chapter 10: Good Luck

With Pat being the somewhat leader who seems to be at the center of this group. When everyone turned to her waiting for her response I was really hoping for something along the lines of... This is insane. We will be in danger. Risking our lives to save people. I'm okay with that. But If one of my friends are hurt I don't know what I'll do. I can't lose them. I stood up and walked up to her, anger filling my voice "If one of us gets hurt, or worse." I stared into her eyes and raised my hand slowly so that it was inbetween our face pointing to the ceiling and let my claws out full length "You won't even have a chance to be sorry."

Yes I'm not the author I know xD but I can't help but just picture Pat saying something like this. I think of Pat being very protective of her friends almost like a big sister.

Anyways loving the story so far (: Keep up the amazing work

Author's Response: While that paints an awesome picture I just don't see the relatively shy Pat doing that. If they tried to pressure one of them into it, especially Michelle then she would protest, with everyone signing on as a matter of honour, duty or to protect innocents, the peer pressure was pretty high. She doesn't want to be seen as a coward and there was the threat from the party of losing everything. Everything was aligned against her. Thanks for the detailed comment, you will start seeing her acting more like a big sister and taking charge in the next several chapters. Just don't expect big speeches, she's more of a doer then a speaker.

Reviewer: Phoenux Signed
Date: 11/19/14 Title: Chapter 15: Blood, Fear and Death

Nice chapter. Getting hit where you live can have a serious impact on a person. Will be interesting to see how their thought processes as a group are affected by this.

Author's Response: Thanks. I wasn't quite sure where to go so I went with my instinct of when in doubt send in a killer, and now I have lots of fun things I can do. Glad it met yours and apparently many others approval.

Reviewer: Phoenux Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 11/25/14 Title: Chapter 19: Can You Run?

It's been a great story from beginning to end. Just wish I didn't have to wait a month for more D:

Just something I noticed throughout the story but you seemed to switch between Mr. Stevenson and Mr. Stephenson. I'm not sure if this was intentional and they were different characters or if it was an accident, just figured I would mention. There's always the possibility that I just don't know how to read as well haha Now to read the rest of your stories!

Author's Response: Sorry, I have to finish Slave of The Fae which should be a few weeks, and I need to edit and rewrite parts of this story to publish it on Kindle. So I need a short break. As for the name changes. That was a mistake on my part, I'll be fixing it in the editing part. Thanks for the review. Glad you liked it.

Sam has been wanting to fight in the struggle for humanity since he was a little boy. His father, and sister play important parts in the military. Once he gets a taste for battle, he gets a little more than he bargained for.
Rated: Adult 4 Reviews starstarstarstarstar Story Incomplete Reads: 5209 Words: 9270 Chapters: 3 Table of Contents
Categories: Sci-Fi Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Young Adult (20-26 yrs)
Turned Into: Fantasy Character
Series: None
Published: 11/07/14
Updated: 11/14/14
Reviewer: Phoenux Signed
Date: 11/15/14 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 2:Heartfelt tears, and the Gearing up.

Heavy Weapon/Demolition specialist to Stealthy Assasin? Well that's quite a leap in the other direction hahaha. Good story so far, definitely looking forward to more. I would rate 5 stars so far but I feel that it's better to wait until 5 chapters or so to actually leave a rating. Keep up the good work! (:

Author's Response: Indeed! It'll lead to some big trouble later on as you might imagine! I'm more than happy to hear your enjoying the story! And I am just glad that you read it and got some form of enjoyment out of it. :) I'll be sure to deliver some good things.

A new world of magic and strange creatures, where slavery is accepted and racism is the norm. One man will become something completely different and change the world itself.
Rated: Explicit 139 Reviews starstarstarstarstar Story Incomplete Reads: 112289 Words: 196456 Chapters: 37 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Young Adult (20-26 yrs)
Turned Into: Fantasy Character, Wife
Locale: Camp
Motivation for Change: For a Job, Forced
Sexual Orientation: Changes to be Attracted Only to Men
Story Theme: Historical Time Period, Mythical Setting
Type of Change: Racial
Warnings: Death, Intense Violence, Non-Consentual Sex, Torture
Series: None
Published: 12/27/14
Updated: 03/21/17
Reviewer: Phoenux Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 01/02/15 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5: To accept the changes

Really liking the setting so far. Another good story. Just a few little things, Sheran's name seems to bounce between 'Sheran' and 'Sharan' in the first two chapters. Also in the Third chapter when you introduce Talia and Seela you refer to Sheran as 'Sherara' a few times. not sure if that was an intentional nickname or not. The dialogue is pretty good, the I agree with (I believe it was Person42) that the cursing seems a little out of character with Irasha's rather good nature. Though I kind of have to disagree with myself on that since I get a bit of a dark and brooding sort of batman feel from Irasha.

My impression of Irasha so far is that she does the right thing and helps others not because she wants to or because it makes her happy. But because she feels obligated to or because that's what she was told to do as she was growing up. She is selfless because she doesn't know how to think of herself. (If that wasn't how she was supposed to seem, and I'm just overthinking it could you please correct me?)

Author's Response: Okay, you grabbed a couple of things I skipped over when editing my work, with the change in language and a lot of Beastlings being named their magic language counterparts of course Sheran, Seela, Talia are named a cross between common and magic language, but with the introduction of magic language and the fresh names I came across the problem of remembering who is who. So yeah, I've got to fix that. With your impression of Irasha. You are completely correct, originally she just didn't know any better. As Favus, there was no-one telling him what was right and wrong and the only person that did that was his mentor (I'll talk about his mentor in greater detail maybe next chapter during the travel I think it's about time), but his mentor taught him what is right and what is wrong, but essentially there was still nothing that made Favus happy. All he could do was make others happy. So to simulate his own happiness he decided that he needs to make others happy because he cannot feel happy himself.

Reviewer: Phoenux Signed
Date: 01/04/15 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6: To know nothing

Dun dun duuuuun character development in all it's glory haha. A good chapter, nice to hear a little about his past, he was a rather destructive lad. Sheran definitely had no trouble with getting straight to the point haha

Author's Response: Oh, just wait for the 'nightmares' that Esran talked about.

Reviewer: Phoenux Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 01/07/15 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8: The Council's decision

Haha your appreciation of Japan is showing in this chapter. With Ishara being a lady now would she not be more likely to curtsy than to bow? At least that's my thought anyway. I for the whole "I can handle two thousand but three thousand is too many for me" to be a little strange. And one more thing, you're switching the characters names again :P 'Devan' and 'Davon' as well as 'Ishara' and 'Irasha'. Not that it's an issue, still obvious who you're talking about.

Still enjoy I the story (:

Author's Response: I feel like bowing would be more customary in this world rather than a curtsey as gods are strongly involved and they tend to prefer bows over curtsey, and *sighs miserably* how do I reach these characters...

What happens when you get trapped in a virtual video game? What if the only way out was to beat it? And worse, what if you die in real life if you die in the game?
Rated: Explicit 7 Reviews starstarstarstarstar Story Incomplete Reads: 6322 Words: 9709 Chapters: 2 Table of Contents
Categories: Sci-Fi Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Teen (13-19 yrs)
Turned Into: Fantasy Character, Wife
Motivation for Change: Willing or Voluntary
Personality: Loses Identity
Story Theme: Coming of Age, Distant Future, Everyday Living, Medical Experiment, Mythical Setting, Romance
Type of Change: Mechanical Device, Stuck
Warnings: Death
Series: None
Published: 02/16/15
Updated: 02/20/15
Reviewer: Phoenux Signed
Date: 02/21/15 Title: Chapter 1: A new Beginning: Enter Diana

I was going to mention the bouncing between first person and second person pronouns but it seems you've already noticed. I'm looking forward to a VR story as it seems most of the ones on this site don't make it very far and are forgotten so I'm definitely cheering for you. Would have preferred some more original ideas versus the interaction and dialogue straight from the show though. Ignore a few minor mix ups in the finer details this seems to be a good start. I'll be looking forward to the rest of it.

Author's Response: Thank you, I had to leave some of the Dialogue from the show in just to steer readers in the right direction on how the general mechanics of SAO work. The further into the story it goes the more original it will get, However I do plan on having a few interactions with the main SAO cast that will be original as well. I was originally writing the story in third person, but decided it flowed better in first. My mind occasionally throws a third person word in and I don't catch it. I'll be on the look out for more. I tend to read my own story on the site after I post it to see how it feels and how I can improve on it. What emotional response does it invoke in myself.

Reviewer: Phoenux Signed
Date: 02/21/15 Title: Chapter 2: The Furious Seven

I know Baroc is supposed to be Irish but I can't get this darn pirate accent out of my head...! The fight was interesting, wasn't expecting to se Ryu again so soon. Though personally I feel it would have been better if they went back to town and then found out that the boss was cleared, wouldn't have felt quite as random as it came off to be.

Author's Response: Lol, It's okay, the pirate thing is in my head and you just ruined his characterrrr! Now he must die :(..... I did feel the floor clear was a little bad with timing. I have a general story board written out and set things that need to be said before a chapter is ended. Most of the things are come up with on the fly. I appreciate the feedback as well though. I like hearing this. Since this is such a on the go story I don't mind ideas either lol.

In the not-so-distant future, Virtual Reality gaming has become the new way to play. Among the many mmorpgs out there, Nurtha has a reputation for being one of the most unique games of its kind. Its competitive scene isn't very large, but it has a dedicated player base and a massive world. When two gamers log on, they find that the game is a little more than they anticipated.
Rated: Adult 14 Reviews starstarstarstarstar Story Incomplete Reads: 12315 Words: 22800 Chapters: 4 Table of Contents
Categories: Sci-Fi Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Teen (13-19 yrs), Male to Female, Young Adult (20-26 yrs)
Locale: Space or Foreign Planet
Motivation for Change: Accident, Willing or Voluntary
Story Theme: Mythical Setting
Type of Change: Fast/Instant Change, Mechanical Device
Series: None
Published: 05/09/15
Updated: 05/18/15
Reviewer: Phoenux Signed
Date: 07/03/15 Title: Chapter 2: Gifted: Wrapped up

I don't like him... Don't even know his but I don't... I mean really, who plays an RPG and COMPLAINS about cutscenes? Who skips out on lore? Nay sir, nay I say!! Not a true gamer tsk tsk...

Author's Response: Yeah, I don't like him either. But I need him to be cocky and a dick. He'll improve as he starts to enjoy the game, but for now, he's stuck like that.

Dane thought he had life planned out and everything was working out. That is until a car crash tears it all away and leaves him paralyzed, but what can a medical company that specializes in bleeding edge technology offer him that will help him retake his life?
Rated: Explicit 75 Reviews starstarstarstarstar Story Incomplete Reads: 55659 Words: 65166 Chapters: 10 Table of Contents
Categories: Sci-Fi Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Teen (13-19 yrs)
Turned Into: Daughter
Locale: High School, Hospital or Clinic
Motivation for Change: Willing or Voluntary
Sexual Orientation: Changes to be Bisexual
Story Theme: Everyday Living, Medical Experiment
Type of Change: Mechanical Device
Warnings: Death, Politically Incorrect
Series: None
Published: 06/26/15
Updated: 05/18/17
Reviewer: Phoenux Signed
Date: 07/05/15 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3: Who am I?

This had been a really good start to a story. Not too slow but not overly fast paced. Looking forward to seeing how Lisa affects Dane/Tara's mental view point on things. Hoping she may be more of a neutral/TeamDane character to counter-act Tara's parents influencing him. You're making it difficult for me to hold into my "5 chapter staring rule" I want to go ahead and rate it 5 stars! Haha

Author's Response: Well, I've written 6k-7k word chapters, usually I write 4k-6k word chapters, 6k being my limit usually. So I'd mostly be at the 5 chapter rule next chapter anyway. Lisa doesn't really know about Dane, though I'm sure I'll need to find someone who's for Dane, as I haven't got too many people who know about him, it's difficult, but the pressure provided by people who care about the memories created with Tara can create a good story, even if it is a little harsh. I have my ideas, but I'm not sure I want Dane to grab onto someone in this story, I want everything to feel fleeting as if, just like at the beginning, where a bad choice made because of peer pressure, I want that point in the story to be pivotal, to make Dane have trouble trusting people. In other words, someone who feels the world is against them may have trouble discerning exactly who is on their side, I think this is very clear by this point considering the way she seems to take peoples' comments.

Reviewer: Phoenux Signed
Date: 07/05/15 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: Tetraplegia

Bring it on, the more controversial the better. Life isn't all sunshine and rainbows and it's always nice to have that slapped in your face everyone once on a blue moon. I like it so far. I have some other thoughts that I can't really organize atm, but if I figure out what I'm trying to say I'll write another review later.

Author's Response: Alrighty then, I'll look forward to that review then. I'm working on the next chapter, but it's a little slow.

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