IshAsh
Member Since: 07/21/14 Membership status: Member
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Reviews by IshAsh
After a bachelor party goes wrong, the man of the hour not only finds himself in a new body, but a new race and ethnicity as well.
Rated: Explicit 24 Reviews starstarstarstarstar Story Incomplete Reads: 67339 Words: 9228 Chapters: 7 Table of Contents
Reviewer: IshAsh Signed
Date: 07/21/14 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

A wonderful start! I am excited for the next chapter! Some minor errors, so 1st chapter could benefit from an edit, but nothing that detracts from my enjoyment of the story. If you don't mind some constructive feedback, I would suggest breaking up the paragraphs by putting a blank line between them. The current format almost has a "wall of text" look to it and that alone may discourage some from reading.

Author's Response: Thank you for the feedback. I've been really excited about this story, and have almost gotten the second chapter completed. It'll be posted tomorrow sometime, and the first chapter will be changed to avoid the wall of text.

Reviewer: IshAsh Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 08/27/14 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Great job with this story! You have definitely shown improvement since chapter one; your tale is entertaining and keeps me amped for the next chapter! I would still advise a proofread before posting, as there are still some minor errors occurring that appear to be typos rather than any consistent grammatical issues. I'd recommend stepping away from any new chapter for 24 hours and then re-read it with "fresh" eyes to better spot mistakes. Keep up the good work!

Author's Response: Thanks for the feedback! I'm currently without a dedicated computer, so this entire story has been typed on an iPhone. I'll start sweeping through chapters before posting.

In the not so distant future, half of Africa unifies to become one central superpower, ruled by a ruthless dictator. In the interest of the United States, a CIA wetwork operator is dispatched to... dispose of him.
Rated: Explicit 5 Reviews starstarstarstarstar Story Incomplete Reads: 9953 Words: 2904 Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Categories: Sci-Fi Gender Change
Characters: Female to Male, Young Adult (20-26 yrs)
Turned Into: Adult, Wife
Featured Items: Bikinis, Bridal Gown
Locale: Hospital or Clinic
Body Modification: Extreme Breast Enlargement, Weight Gain
Motivation for Change: Forced, Revenge, Tricked
Personality: Cultural/Nationality Change, Fights Change
Sexual Orientation: Changes to be Bisexual
Story Theme: Captive, Humiliation, Medical Experiment
Type of Change: Cultural, Fast/Instant Change, Racial, Stuck
Series: None
Published: 08/21/14
Updated: 10/15/14
Reviewer: IshAsh Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 08/27/14 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Impressive start! I love well-written TG stories that include a cultural change! I can't wait to see more!

Robert behaves badly. A Witch catches him in the act, and she has the perfectly fitting punishment!
Rated: Explicit 7 Reviews starstarstarstarhalf-star Completed Story Reads: 60445 Words: 7516 Chapters: 4 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Teen (13-19 yrs)
Turned Into: Bimbo, Cheerleader, Slave, Teenager
Featured Items: High Heels, Pantyhose, School Uniform
Locale: High School
Body Modification: Breast Implants, Lips Plumped, Vocal Surgery
Motivation for Change: As Justice for a Crime, Female Domination, Forced
Personality: Bad to Good, Fights Change, Made Dumber
Sexual Orientation: Changes to be Bisexual
Story Theme: Humiliation, Witchcraft
Type of Change: Age Regression, Fast/Instant Change, Mind Control
Series: None
Published: 04/19/18
Updated: 05/06/18
Reviewer: IshAsh Signed starstar
Date: 04/21/18 Title: Chapter 1: Robert's New Body

I really wanted to love this story...the categories, tags, the rating are all up my alley in terms of personal preference; however I found myself disappointed. I realize that every TG cliche has been used a thousand times over, but more than just being hackneyed, the pacing of this tale this felt rushed. The players are one dimensional and there was little to no steamy build-up in either the physical or mental changes inflicted upon the protagonist which deflates the enjoyment of the transformation. Given the genre of this piece of erotica, I feel that makes this a below average effort.

Author's Response: Well thank you for the time and effort to write a review anyway. This was always thought as a short story, as build-up would be better suited for longer tales. That said, still thank you for your review. I hope you'll be able to enjoy the ending and future stories a bit more.

What would you be willing to do if a long absent goddess offered to grant your innermost desires?

Another story set in the same universe as my previous light novel (see "Self Portrait. Self Reflection." on my Itch.io page).

This story is a much shorter one with less of a focus on self discovery and more on wish fulfillment.
Rated: Adult 5 Reviews starstarstarstar Completed Story Reads: 10624 Words: 2805 Chapters: 7 Table of Contents
Categories: Sci-Fi Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Teen (13-19 yrs)
Locale: Family Household
Motivation for Change: For a Job, Undercover, Willing or Voluntary
Story Theme: Mythical Setting
Type of Change: Fast/Instant Change
Series: None
Published: 01/21/19
Updated: 01/24/19
Reviewer: IshAsh Signed
Date: 01/22/19 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue

I spent 5 minutes reading this before I realized I was still on the title. :D Seriously though, a pithy name for your tale may entice more readers to peruse your work. Think more of what you'd see on the front cover of a novel than the back. Also, the title was all I could read...I received an error every time I tried to access this. Will update if that changes. I haven't encountered this with any other offerings on this site yet...

Author's Response: Sorry about the errors, it seems to be working for some people but not other not sure what is going on but can't seem to reproduce it so might be on the website's server side. On the topic of the title, most of my stories are short form light novels and corny synopsis style titles are part in parcel with the style and part of the fun.

Reviewer: IshAsh Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 01/23/19 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue

Follow-up: Finally able to read this, and delivering an actual review as promised. You have an excellent writing style and it keeps the reader engaged. Although I admittedly lean toward stories that are somewhat more erotic than this, I can appreciate the skill of the craft. I appreciate that you took my advice on the shorter titles and I hope that was not a stinging criticism. When you have the ability to write well, I feel you are best served by letting the unfolding story seduce the reader rather than giving away too much up front. I hope you continue to contribute to the site!

Karl wakes up and doesn't wasn't to go to work and wishes he didn't have too. Unknown to him something hears him and grants him his desire. Things start changing and he tries to get to the bottom of it.
Rated: Explicit 8 Reviews starstarstarstarhalf-star Story Incomplete Reads: 76891 Words: 16956 Chapters: 6 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Young Adult (20-26 yrs)
Turned Into: Bimbo, Girlfriend, Model
Featured Items: Bikinis, Lingerie, Long Nails, Sex Toys, Undies
Locale: Office
Body Modification: Ears Pierced, Extreme Breast Enlargement, Lips Plumped
Motivation for Change: Accident
Personality: Fights Change, From Dominant to Submissive, Good to Bad, Made Dumber
Sexual Orientation: Changes to be Attracted Only to Men
Story Theme: Everyday Living, Genie/Wishes
Type of Change: Age Regression, Slow/Gradual Change
Series: None
Published: 06/06/19
Updated: 09/28/19
Reviewer: IshAsh Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 09/28/19 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6: The Choice

A fun read so far! I do hope Kali continues to fight back...it's more fun when they struggle. Note to author: You are using "roll" in circumstances where you meant to use "role."

One morning, Jules awakens to find himself wearing a cursed collar. In short order, he finds himself changing in unwanted and unexpected ways.
Rated: Explicit 7 Reviews starstarstarstarhalf-star Completed Story Reads: 26063 Words: 3761 Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Adult (27-62 yrs)
Turned Into: Bimbo
Body Modification: Extreme Breast Enlargement
Motivation for Change: Curse
Personality: Fights Change, From Dominant to Submissive, Made Dumber
Sexual Orientation: Changes to be Attracted Only to Men
Type of Change: Mind Control, Slow/Gradual Change, Stuck
Series: None
Published: 06/21/19
Updated: 06/21/19
Reviewer: IshAsh Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 06/24/19 Title: Chapter 1: The Cursed Collar

It is a pity that you do not dabble much in short stories or bimbo tales because this was superb! I would love to see you do more like this!

Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it. I've got a few more in this genre in the pipeline, but they only take up maybe 10% of my output. If you liked this, check out my other stuff - it's usually longer and less one-dimensional, but my longer stuff contains at least some similar themes.

Dave forgets about his daughter's birthday. To make it up to her, he tries to get her the perfect gift at the mall, where he stumbles upon a strange store.
Rated: Explicit 7 Reviews starstarstarstarhalf-star Story Incomplete Reads: 28674 Words: 4774 Chapters: 3 Table of Contents
Reviewer: IshAsh Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 07/02/19 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Nice setup for this tale. Although I relish reading stories where some lout is transformed/body swapped against his will and put through the ringer, it is tough to know that the hammer is going to fall on a nice guy like the protagonist seems to be. That I care enough about the characters to already anticipate the next chapter should be considered praiseworthy. Well done!

"To suppose the sorceress, one who had painstakingly made preparations for chess with a nonexistent girl only to create said girl and then rope her into said match, was skilled at chess was all but a foregone conclusion."
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Rated: Kid-Friendly 1 Reviews starstarstarstarstar Completed Story Reads: 3560 Words: 1887 Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Young Adult (20-26 yrs)
Motivation for Change: Dared into It, Lost a Bet, Tricked
Personality: Cultural/Nationality Change
Story Type: Includes Images
Type of Change: Cultural, Fast/Instant Change, Mind Control, Racial, Stuck
Series: None
Published: 07/27/20
Updated: 07/27/20
Reviewer: IshAsh Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 07/28/20 Title: Chapter 1: Czechmate

Fantastic!! I love short transformation stories. Extremely well written and still a little sexy for a PG tale (imagining that cute Czech accent--rowr!). Thanks for creating this!

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