Jim Ruggeri
I've been writing for almost a year now and I love reviews, please review a story or shoot me an email.

I take requests too, so if you've got any ideas floating around it would be great to hear them
Member Since: 05/26/14 Membership status: Member
Average Review Rating Given: starstarstarstarhalf-star


Reviews by Jim Ruggeri
The Machines of the Matrix don't care a whit for things that mean the most to humans. So what happens when one of their side experiments is awoken from the Matrix by the crew of the Nebuchadnezzar, and discovers what reality truly is?
Rated: Adult 4 Reviews starstarstarstarhalf-star Completed Story Reads: 4132 Words: 2107 Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Categories: Sci-Fi Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Adult (27-62 yrs)
Motivation for Change: Tricked
Story Theme: Distant Future, Fan Fiction
Type of Change: Fast/Instant Change, Mechanical Device, Stuck
Series: None
Published: 03/21/11
Updated: 03/21/11
Reviewer: Jim Ruggeri Signed starstarstarstar
Date: 11/08/14 Title: Chapter 1: Matrix: Reassignment

I love the voice behind this, really unique and impressive

Star Trek Story. Ensign George Smith's life is changed on his first mission, which is just a normal patrol mission. The chances of it happening? One in a million.
Rated: Kid-Friendly 6 Reviews half-star Story Incomplete Reads: 3103 Words: 189 Chapters: 2 Table of Contents
Categories: Sci-Fi Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Young Adult (20-26 yrs)
Featured Items: Work Uniform
Locale: Space or Foreign Planet
Motivation for Change: Accident
Story Theme: Fan Fiction
Type of Change: Fast/Instant Change
Series: None
Published: 08/15/13
Updated: 08/15/13
Reviewer: Jim Ruggeri Signed
Date: 11/08/14 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 1 - The Next-To-Last Frontier

Needs descriptions, and action, dialogue is integral but needs a framework to hang it on. Love the Star Trek themes though and I shall have to steal them!

a boy seeking revenge on the murders of his family but not as a boy so what will come to next?
Rated: Adult 3 Reviews starhalf-star Story Incomplete Reads: 7121 Words: 151 Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Reviewer: Jim Ruggeri Signed starstar
Date: 11/08/14 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 the end starts here

This could have done with some reading and rereading. Crafting a story takes a little effort, and I can tell from the ideas you've got it in you!

Ash meets a Espeon and Lucario while in the forest. They changed him in a way...Discontinued if anyone wants to take over review this and I will allow you
Rated: Kid-Friendly 7 Reviews starstarstar Story Incomplete Reads: 13836 Words: 591 Chapters: 5 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: None
Turned Into: Fantasy Character
Motivation for Change: Tricked
Personality: Made Smarter
Sexual Orientation: Becomes Only Attracted to Men
Story Theme: Fan Fiction
Type of Change: Fast/Instant Change
Series: None
Published: 09/27/13
Updated: 04/15/14
Reviewer: Jim Ruggeri Signed
Date: 11/08/14 Title: Chapter 1: Meeting Espeon and Lucario

Yeah lack of punctuation or correct spelling aside, I don't often read books where the author so blatantly is talking to me, the reader, this could have been a lot better if you'd employed some restraint, written chapters at least a thousand or two words long, and done a couple of drafts. This is your first story apparently so I'll forgive a numerical rating.
Also reviews on this site take a little while to trickle through, and it's really only once you build a following that you get them on the regular. Stick at it, and I look forward to seeing what else you come up with!

When a woman named Natalie invites him to her home, John thinks it's the best day of his life. But when her husband catches the two in the act, he realizes he was horribly wrong.
Rated: Explicit 13 Reviews starstarstarstar Completed Story Reads: 82805 Words: 6344 Chapters: 5 Table of Contents
Categories: Sci-Fi Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Young Adult (20-26 yrs)
Turned Into: Slave, Teenager, Wife
Featured Items: Lingerie, Sex Toys, Undies
Locale: Family Household
Motivation for Change: Forced, Male Domination, Revenge
Personality: Cultural/Nationality Change, Fights Change, From Dominant to Submissive, Loses Identity
Sexual Orientation: Becomes Only Attracted to Men
Type of Change: Age Regression, Drug-Induced, Hormonal, Racial, Stuck
Warnings: Non-Consentual Sex, Politically Incorrect
Series: None
Published: 01/02/14
Updated: 07/01/14
Reviewer: Jim Ruggeri Signed starstarstar
Date: 07/11/14 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Fun story, I liked how you skipped over how the drugs caused the change, a lot of writers get bogged down in that and it takes you out of the story. Enjoyed the marriage aspects of the story, although they do tread into racial territory I wasn't expecting especially as she's a black girl being sold.
Grammar and spelling need to be looked at but that's a cosmetic change, and some characterisation would be nice, just some flecks here and there.
All in all a good story, very much enjoyed reading it all things considered
James

Author's Response: Thanks for the review. To be honest, I didn't even make a connection between her being black and being sold while I was writing. I'm hoping I didn't accidentally offend any black readers, as the story wasn't meant to be racist. x)

Link is turned into a Gerudo maiden and corrupted by Ganondorf.
Rated: Deviant 2 Reviews starstarhalf-star Story Incomplete Reads: 23196 Words: 1486 Chapters: 5 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Young Adult (20-26 yrs)
Turned Into: Bride, Fantasy Character, Wife
Motivation for Change: Forced, Male Domination
Personality: Cultural/Nationality Change, Fights Change, From Submissive to Dominant, Good to Bad
Sexual Orientation: Becomes Only Attracted to Men
Story Theme: Fan Fiction, Pregnancy, Romance
Type of Change: Cultural, Hormonal, Racial, Slow/Gradual Change, Stuck
Warnings: Death
Series: None
Published: 01/02/14
Updated: 01/02/14
Reviewer: Jim Ruggeri Signed starstarstarstar
Date: 07/11/14 Title: Chapter 1: Transformation

I should really give this a 3, but your ideas are so strong and clearly fleshed out I'm bumping it up to a 4. You could easily have something really great here if you spend a half hour spell checking and making sure grammar is right.
Great job though, and I hope you find the time to finish it
James

Raised in a world you do not belong in, you are a pond in a game.
Rated: Adult 3 Reviews starstarstarhalf-star Story Incomplete Reads: 2122 Words: 364 Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Reviewer: Jim Ruggeri Signed starstarstarstar
Date: 11/08/14 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue

There's some tenses getting mixed up here, but there's some great ideas too, a lot of them!

[(Dot) .Virtual: Hack] "No that can't be right! My genes are supposed to be used for medical purposes. What is all this?!" Blood stained the alley walls and a boy that looked just like me stood mangled on the ground. I pulled the bags I was holding closer to my chest. | "Hey Onēsan!" I looked at a boy that looked like the former me, the only difference were his eyes, they were a pale gray, dull and lifeless.
Rated: Deviant 2 Reviews starstarstar Story Incomplete Reads: 1767 Words: 295 Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Reviewer: Jim Ruggeri Signed
Date: 11/08/14 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue

Not going to give you a numerical rating because it's the prologue. Extremely short, but a good start

Author's Response: Don't get your hopes up, I'm known to not finish my stories, but just maybe I can finish this one.

The apprentice of Darth Visious has returned from a failed mission. His first in fact. So how does a prodigy of the Sith Empire get punished when he is so use to pain.
Rated: Adult 3 Reviews starstarstarstarhalf-star Completed Story Reads: 4291 Words: 1468 Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Categories: Sci-Fi Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Teen (13-19 yrs)
Turned Into: Alien, Fantasy Character, Prostitute, Slave, Stripper
Featured Items: Boots, High Heels, Latex or Rubber Clothing, Undies
Locale: Space or Foreign Planet
Body Modification: Extreme Breast Enlargement
Motivation for Change: Blackmailed, Forced, Male Domination
Personality: Cultural/Nationality Change
Sexual Orientation: Becomes Only Attracted to Men
Story Theme: Distant Future, Fan Fiction, Humiliation, Romance
Type of Change: Fast/Instant Change, Racial, Stuck
Warnings: Bondage/S&M, Death, Intense Violence
Series: None
Published: 10/15/14
Updated: 10/15/14
Reviewer: Jim Ruggeri Signed starstarstar
Date: 11/08/14 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 Enter Your Dezyre

I agree with the other reviewers this work seems a little rushed. I like the themes, and think that this is a really good first draft, just make the narration a little more subtle, show don't tell, and maybe a little nuance if you're up to it.
All in all I'd love to see a second chapter
Jim

Ash, a sixteen year old boy, has never felt like he belonged in the situation he lives in. His mother died while giving birth to him, and his stepmother and sisters hate him. He's awkward and disliked at school. He can't even bring himself to ask a girl out on a date. His life is a living hell. But one day his fairy godmother appears to him and tells him some pretty big news. Will that news make Ash's life better, or will he regret ever knowing the truth?
Rated: Adult 8 Reviews starstarstarstarstar Completed Story Reads: 43560 Words: 18909 Chapters: 12 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Teen (13-19 yrs)
Turned Into: Daughter, Girlfriend, Teenager
Featured Items: Corsets, Petticoat, Lace, Ruffles, Crinoline
Locale: Family Household, Formal Dance, High School
Body Modification: Extreme Breast Enlargement, Lips Plumped, Permanent Hair/Skin/Nail Change
Motivation for Change: Willing or Voluntary
Sexual Orientation: Becomes Only Attracted to Men, Does Not Change
Story Theme: Everyday Living, Romance
Type of Change: Fast/Instant Change
Series: None
Published: 12/29/14
Updated: 12/31/14
Reviewer: Jim Ruggeri Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 12/30/14 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Passionately well written and enjoyable. The direction the story is going in is both sticking to the tale we all know, while also introducing novel and engaging characters. Very interested in seeing where we're going here! Well done!

Author's Response: Oh thank you so much! I was really worried that it wasn't as good as I had hoped it would be. I'm glad that you of all people enjoyed it, as I enjoy your stories so much. It really is a super huge compliment that you like my story.

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