Aki_Breeze
I am 21 years old and work at a web hosting company. It has been years since I've written anything, but I would very much like to get my groove back.
Member Since: 03/06/14 Membership status: Member
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Reviews by Aki_Breeze
George is jobless and looking for any job that can help him pay rent with his flat mate. he goes for an interview as a babysitter at a mysterious rich mans house. the job to look after a 6 year old girl, the reality though is much worse. George wakes up as a living doll...
Rated: Explicit 51 Reviews starstarstarstarstar Completed Story Reads: 178926 Words: 26196 Chapters: 12 Table of Contents
Categories: Sci-Fi Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Young Adult (20-26 yrs)
Turned Into: Doll, Mannequin, Mother, Object, Slave
Featured Items: High Heels
Locale: Family Household
Motivation for Change: For a Job, Tricked
Personality: From Dominant to Submissive, Loses Identity
Sexual Orientation: Does Not Change
Story Theme: Captive, Humiliation, Medical Experiment
Type of Change: Drug-Induced, Fast/Instant Change, Stuck
Series: None
Published: 03/25/13
Updated: 05/22/15
Reviewer: Aki_Breeze Signed starstarstarstar
Date: 05/22/15 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: The Interview

Disagree with the reviewer saying you took the "easy way out" of this. There are plenty of writers who end their stories with the protagonist living as some sexy slave for eternity with no hope, enough to the point where having a happy ending is actually refreshing. I think he's upset not because you "took the easy way out" but because he just prefers sadistic endings.

Great story regardless, but I feel like the post-hiatus chapters were rushed. I kind of get the vibe that you felt the pressure to continue the story as you had taken so much time off, that you simply came up with a fast ending so you could conclude it.

I like the happy ending, but it really could have benefited from being fleshed out with one or two more chapters. The last few paragraphs which server as an epilogue, kind of feel rushed. "Afterwords, she did this, then this, met a lesbian, this is what happened to Amy, she lived happily ever after."

I don't mean to be rude, but it really felt like you were just trying to end the story at this point. I would have really like you to have stretched out the "what happened after" parts into a nice large epilogue chapter on its own, or maybe even two.

That or ended the story without the epilogue part as well, and then teased a potential short continuation series at a later time where it goes through her struggles to adapt to a regular life after the trauma of being a living doll.

Sorry, don't mean to be so negative. All in all, the story was incredibly fantastic, I just feel that your post-hiatus chapters were not up to the quality of your pre-hiatus ones. I hope you write more on this site, and look forward to the next story.

Author's Response: Hi, Thank you for the detailed and honest review. I appreciate the comments and advice you have given. Glad you liked the happy ending as i think it did feel refreshing also. While I was writing this story i had no idea how it was going to end. I was letting the story speak to me and dictate where it should go. The happy ending in the end seemed the most fitting to the story I was trying to tell. I appreciate the comments about the rushed chapters. Though I don't like to use the word rushed as I never rush my work. I do agree they were more fast paced and snappy and went into a bit less detail. The hiatus you speak of was necessary for me. It was not writers bock or anything like that it was because I had other stories begging to be told. I felt I needed that break to write them and come back to this story with a fresh perspective. I will admit however that when I returned to the story I did think 'hmmm how am I going to end this'? as i thought the story had run its course a little bit. So if the last few chapters seemed rushed then this is the reason. I did want to finish the story and perhaps it was a little premature but I never threw together a quick ending just to finish it. I spent weeks considering where it should go and how it would come to a climax. I'm really glad you enjoyed the story and I will definitely be writing more in the future. Thanks for the review and reading my work. xx

One evening, right in the middle of 'the act,' a husband and wife find their bodies changing gender. This transformation is not the only thing the two share, as the couple is just weeks away from becoming new parents.
Rated: Explicit 44 Reviews starstarstarstarhalf-star Completed Story Reads: 160254 Words: 30433 Chapters: 11 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Young Adult (20-26 yrs)
Turned Into: Mother, Wife
Locale: Family Household, Office
Motivation for Change: Unknown
Story Theme: Pregnancy
Series: None
Published: 04/30/13
Updated: 03/07/14
Reviewer: Aki_Breeze Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 03/08/14 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: In Flagrante Delicto

Was worried this wouldn't get a conclusion! thanks for coming back to this one.

Author's Response: It was touch n go there, Aki_Breeze, I'll admit. But next time I will include more humor, which hopefully will keep me having fun and feeling less pressure.

Jaux Ballad has always wanted to enter the realm of magic, but could not do so by regular means. In his desperation to become a magician he finds himself with more power, and more trouble, than he could ever have imagined.
Rated: Adult 354 Reviews starstarstarstarstar Story Incomplete Reads: 330733 Words: 97327 Chapters: 48 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Teen (13-19 yrs)
Turned Into: Fantasy Character, Teenager
Featured Items: Corsets, Petticoat, Lace, Ruffles, Crinoline
Locale: Camp, College, Family Household
Motivation for Change: Accident, Curse
Personality: Fights Change
Sexual Orientation: Changes to be Bisexual
Story Theme: Historical Time Period, Mythical Setting, Witchcraft
Type of Change: Fast/Instant Change, Stuck
Warnings: Death, Intense Violence
Series: Vanasia Universe
Published: 02/22/14
Updated: 09/17/15
Reviewer: Aki_Breeze Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 03/08/14 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: The Demon Root

This is excellent! Please don't stop.

Author's Response: This train ain't stopping till we reach journey's end!

Tami's continuing journey to become queen of the Secret Society
Rated: Explicit 11 Reviews starstarstarstar Completed Story Reads: 13226 Words: 30311 Chapters: 8 Table of Contents
Reviewer: Aki_Breeze Signed starstarstarstar
Date: 03/08/14 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

All is well with Dana back! :)

A man travelling in Thailand follows the wrong girl into an alley and experiences a dramatic life change.
Rated: Adult 33 Reviews starstarstarstarstar Story Incomplete Reads: 182705 Words: 14673 Chapters: 12 Table of Contents
Reviewer: Aki_Breeze Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 03/08/14 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Absolutely love it so far! Keep it up, please!

As a normal boy, I would always dream of going to Paragon and meeting a hero. But, maybe my chances weren't so bad after all.
Rated: Adult 27 Reviews starstarstarstarstar Story Incomplete Reads: 26231 Words: 19515 Chapters: 10 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Teen (13-19 yrs)
Series: Paragon Verse
Published: 03/05/14
Updated: 07/23/15
Reviewer: Aki_Breeze Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 03/08/14 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I can feel the passion here, and I can tell this is a story you really want to tell. I look forward to reading more!

Author's Response: Thanks!

A fallen hero. An assassin. An unlikely meeting. The road to redemption is long and hard and filled with explosives.
Rated: Explicit 422 Reviews starstarstarstarstar Completed Story Reads: 215491 Words: 73655 Chapters: 43 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Female to Male, Adult (27-62 yrs), Male to Female, Young Adult (20-26 yrs)
Motivation for Change: Accident
Sexual Orientation: Does Not Change
Story Theme: Everyday Living, Mind/Body Posession, Mythical Setting, Romance
Type of Change: Body Swap, Fast/Instant Change
Warnings: Bondage/S&M, Intense Violence
Series: Paragon Verse
Published: 03/06/14
Updated: 04/13/14
Reviewer: Aki_Breeze Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 03/08/14 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue

28 reviews already! That alone should speak for your writing prowess. I look forward to more.

Author's Response: *smiles* I'm glad you like it! And for the review count I can thank my loyal readers :3

The heroes and villains of Paragon always seem to be in a stalemate. This is not just coincidence. No matter how many advantages a side may obtain, there's always someone behind the scenes... balancing the books.
Rated: Adult 10 Reviews starstarstarstarstar Story Incomplete Reads: 6352 Words: 6787 Chapters: 4 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Young Adult (20-26 yrs)
Turned Into: Fantasy Character
Motivation for Change: Accident, As Justice for a Crime, Curse, Revenge
Sexual Orientation: Does Not Change
Story Theme: Horror, Mind/Body Posession, Mythical Setting, Witchcraft
Type of Change: Age Regression, Fast/Instant Change, Stuck
Warnings: Death, Intense Violence
Series: Paragon Verse
Published: 03/07/14
Updated: 03/18/14
Reviewer: Aki_Breeze Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 03/08/14 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: Balancer's Hello

Wonderful edition to the paragonverse, I look forward to more updates! Come on people, review this story more! ;)

Author's Response: Haha, thank you for the support! I appreciate it :), tg inbound!

This is the story of how Ben started cross dressing to how he became a beautiful woman and the challenges he must face to become Emma with the help of his girlfriend Kristy.
Rated: Explicit 2 Reviews starhalf-star Story Incomplete Reads: 9764 Words: 1063 Chapters: 3 Table of Contents
Reviewer: Aki_Breeze Signed starstar
Date: 03/08/14 Title: Chapter 1: Prologe

You really need to use more punctuation. Periods, commas, etc... Also, I would recommend trying to make sure your chapters are at LEAST 1200 words in length, they are far too short. Don't give up, but I would recommend looking at some of the more popular stores on this site for guidance.

Luke and Lillian are brother and sister. They're also best friends. Siblings who share a secret fantasy to experience the world as the opposite sex. One night when they confess this to each other, their wish comes true--for the entire world.
Rated: Explicit 29 Reviews starstarstarstarstar Story Incomplete Reads: 95752 Words: 27400 Chapters: 11 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Teen (13-19 yrs)
Locale: College, Family Household, High School
Motivation for Change: Willing or Voluntary
Personality: From Submissive to Dominant
Sexual Orientation: Changes to be Attracted Only to Men
Story Theme: Coming of Age, Everyday Living
Series: None
Published: 03/08/14
Updated: 09/24/15
Reviewer: Aki_Breeze Signed
Date: 03/08/14 Title: Chapter 1: Homecoming

I enjoy the concept quite a bit, but I'm worried it will devolve into Luke finding out how utterly hard women have it in life while Lillian doesn't learn anything in return. I have no issues with showing how hard it is to be female, but I know that men have their own equal share of issues in life, so it would be nice if they both learned something. That being said, I am hooked and will keep reading. I'll save a rating until I've seen another chapter or two, keep it up!

Author's Response: I hear your worries. This story, like the title suggests, is equal parts Luke and Lillian's. And I enjoy (and try very hard) to subvert cliches, so I have a feeling Lucy will have her fair share of success and Liam his own slew of frustrations. Thanks for your note, and I hope you keep reading!

After a bachelor party goes wrong, the man of the hour not only finds himself in a new body, but a new race and ethnicity as well.
Rated: Explicit 24 Reviews starstarstarstarstar Story Incomplete Reads: 67252 Words: 9228 Chapters: 7 Table of Contents
Reviewer: Aki_Breeze Signed starstarstarstar
Date: 08/27/14 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Enjoying the story quite a bit! Though I have to agree with others about the harshness of the Goddess. He was kind of rude, but everyone has preferences and we are entitled to find different races attractive. He wasn't really horribly mean to the stripper, he just kind of shooed her away. It is like someone getting life in prison for shoplifting a candy bar if you know what I mean. I would maybe revise it and make him more of an asshole. Maybe have it where he makes racist comments and jokes, and shows himself to be far more deserving of the punishment, because right now it just feels like the Goddess is a villain who is just being cruel.

That being said, the content itself is interesting and I look forward to more.

Author's Response: Yeah, that's something I considered myself. I'll make the needed changes tomorrow. Thanks for the advice and kind words!

Kyle becomes Jessica and learns that there is life after becoming a woman.
Rated: Adult 26 Reviews starstarstarstarhalf-star Completed Story Reads: 141654 Words: 12136 Chapters: 13 Table of Contents
Categories: Sci-Fi Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Teen (13-19 yrs)
Turned Into: Girlfriend
Locale: College, Family Household
Motivation for Change: Willing or Voluntary
Personality: From Submissive to Dominant
Sexual Orientation: Changes to be Attracted Only to Men
Story Theme: Coming of Age, Everyday Living, Medical Experiment
Type of Change: Slow/Gradual Change
Series: None
Published: 01/30/15
Updated: 06/30/15
Reviewer: Aki_Breeze Signed
Date: 01/31/15 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue

Enjoying this, but holding off on a rated review for now. Chapter three was very short, confusing, and there is already a five year skip? I'm not really sure what is going on there.

Author's Response: There seemed to have been an issue with chapter three. It is longer than that! Thank you for noticing!

A shady organisation begins recruiting teenage males to its ranks; an organisation that, unknown to many, intends to eradicate the world of all males using female super-soldiers.
Rated: Explicit 115 Reviews starstarstarstarstar Story Incomplete Reads: 284441 Words: 116349 Chapters: 40 Table of Contents
Categories: Sci-Fi Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Teen (13-19 yrs)
Locale: Camp, Labratory
Motivation for Change: Female Domination
Personality: Made Smarter
Sexual Orientation: Changes to be Attracted Only to Men
Story Theme: Captive
Type of Change: Mechanical Device, Mind Control
Warnings: Death, Intense Violence
Series: None
Published: 04/20/15
Updated: 02/19/17
Reviewer: Aki_Breeze Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 06/01/15 Title: Chapter 1: "Introduction"

Very much enjoying this... The real question is whether or not you're going to update soon. :)

Author's Response: I am still working on it! I'm currently in the middle of my exams, but I will definitely get back to it once they're done!

Derrick went through a rough breakup. That's no excuse to be sexist
Rated: Adult 4 Reviews starstarstar Completed Story Reads: 7734 Words: 1016 Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Teen (13-19 yrs)
Turned Into: Bimbo
Featured Items: Lingerie, Long Nails, Undies
Locale: High School
Body Modification: Extreme Breast Enlargement, Lips Plumped, Permanent Cosmetics, Permanent Hair/Skin/Nail Change
Motivation for Change: Forced, Tricked
Personality: Loses Identity, Made Dumber
Sexual Orientation: Changes to be Bisexual
Story Theme: Humiliation
Type of Change: Fast/Instant Change
Series: None
Published: 08/23/15
Updated: 08/23/15
Reviewer: Aki_Breeze Signed starstar
Date: 08/24/15 Title: Chapter 1: Bimbo Sweetheart

Way too short. You basically forced us to hate the boys and then it just kind of ended. I know it is none of my business, but all of your stories are pretty hateful towards men. I am sure you've been hurt, but maybe it would be worth a try to put away all that anger when you write. Your stories come across more as an outlet for your misandry rather than a story you had genuine passion to write.

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