SatomiSparks
I have a handful of short picture/captions on DeviantArt.

I don't exist IRL.
Member Since: 11/13/13 Membership status: Member
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Reviews by SatomiSparks
Nathanial's life gets turned over as his new school goals fall apart and he and girlfriend break up. Things get worse when he encounters a woman with a 'special' gift that completely changes who he was, and is given something he is not prepared to live with. Now he must break the spell in order for things to go back the way they were. The only way to do so is to live and develop a life of a beautiful teenage girl, before time runs out.
Rated: Adult 45 Reviews starstarstarstar Story Incomplete Reads: 106497 Words: 81543 Chapters: 8 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Teen (13-19 yrs)
Turned Into: Girlfriend
Featured Items: Fuku, High Heels, Pantyhose, School Uniform, Undies
Locale: Family Household, High School
Motivation for Change: As Justice for a Crime, Curse
Personality: Bad to Good, Fights Change, Made Smarter
Sexual Orientation: Changes to be Attracted Only to Men, Does Not Change
Story Type: Includes Images
Story Theme: Coming of Age, Everyday Living, Romance, Witchcraft
Type of Change: Fast/Instant Change
Series: NewHalf
Published: 08/08/13
Updated: 02/04/15
Reviewer: SatomiSparks Signed starstarstar
Date: 12/03/13 Title: Chapter 5: Ch. 8: I Chose To Wear A Bra

Pretty good story so far. I'm enjoying it.

There are some misused words, grammatical and spelling errors, and the sentence structure is a little choppy, which detracts from the flow. It's a good premise though, and has potential. It could stand to be polished up a bit.

Overall, good work so far.

A rather awkward 16 year old boy gets invited to a girl's house and is ecstatic. Believing she is actually interested in him, he agrees to go to her house and help her with some things. Little does he know what he's getting himself into...
Rated: Adult 5 Reviews starstarstarstarhalf-star Story Incomplete Reads: 50003 Words: 1269 Chapters: 3 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Teen (13-19 yrs)
Turned Into: Cheerleader, Teenager
Featured Items: High Heels, Lingerie, Long Nails, Pantyhose, Undies
Locale: Family Household
Body Modification: Ears Pierced, Permanent Hair/Skin/Nail Change
Motivation for Change: Tricked
Personality: Fights Change
Sexual Orientation: Changes to be Attracted Only to Men
Story Theme: Everyday Living, Witchcraft
Type of Change: Hypnosis, Mind Control, Slow/Gradual Change, Stuck
Warnings: Bodily Functions
Series: None
Published: 09/09/13
Updated: 09/10/13
Reviewer: SatomiSparks Signed starstarstarstar
Date: 12/04/13 Title: Chapter 1: Unknowingly

It's a good start, but very short. Maybe try to expand the first few chapters to develop the characters more. I look forward to more.

Arthur runs into a forest after he is ridiculed at a school dance. While in the forest, he meets a ghost girl who has been alone for many years.
Rated: Kid-Friendly 7 Reviews starstarstarstarstar Story Incomplete Reads: 13964 Words: 4866 Chapters: 2 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Teen (13-19 yrs)
Locale: Formal Dance, High School
Motivation for Change: Accident, Willing or Voluntary
Story Theme: Mind/Body Posession
Series: None
Published: 09/24/13
Updated: 01/06/14
Reviewer: SatomiSparks Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 11/14/13 Title: Chapter 1: Part 1

I'm really enjoying this one. I hope you add more soon!

Two jocks come across a magic lamp and make foolish wishes.
Rated: Explicit 67 Reviews starstarstarstarstar Story Incomplete Reads: 603158 Words: 21729 Chapters: 17 Table of Contents
Reviewer: SatomiSparks Signed starstarstarstar
Date: 07/18/14 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9 - So... That's what it's like.

This is really hot, and pretty funny too. I hope you keep the story going, I'd love to find out how these 3 get out of such a silly and sexy predicament, hopefully with some more mischief along the way.

Author's Response: I can't stop now, I have been rolling ideas in my head for months now... stay tuned

curiosity of a game can change your life
Rated: Kid-Friendly 19 Reviews starstarstarstarhalf-star Story Incomplete Reads: 23375 Words: 4651 Chapters: 3 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Child (0-12 yrs)
Turned Into: Daughter
Featured Items: Petticoat, Lace, Ruffles, Crinoline
Locale: Family Household
Body Modification: Ears Pierced
Motivation for Change: Forced, Tricked
Personality: Fights Change, Loses Identity
Story Theme: Mind/Body Posession
Type of Change: Changed by Clothing, Slow/Gradual Change, Stuck
Series: None
Published: 01/03/14
Updated: 01/10/14
Reviewer: SatomiSparks Signed
Date: 01/22/14 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 Learning the rules

I agree with Shigari that it moves forward way too fast.

The panties/bra thing immediately jumps into full-blown girly girl, which is just too jarring. Maybe John should make a couple more moves before you introduce the "punishment" card, and then that punishment should be a little less severe.

The story will be more engaging if the stakes get higher as the game goes on. Start with the subtle outcomes like replacing one article of clothing, then save the more drastic changes for the end of the game.

Overall this has been a really fun read so far. I love the Jumanji-esque concept. As long as you keep a steady pace this will be a great story. I look forward to reading more (hopefully soon!).

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