Hick559
Member Since: 05/09/18 Membership status: Member
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Reviews by Hick559
After defeating his life-long rival in the US Open, Ben was living the dream. However, tennis turns treacherous when the rival's family seeks vengeance.
Rated: Explicit 26 Reviews starstarstarstarhalf-star Completed Story Reads: 84961 Words: 21687 Chapters: 10 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Teen (13-19 yrs)
Turned Into: Daughter, Girlfriend
Locale: Vacation Destination
Motivation for Change: Forced, Revenge
Personality: From Dominant to Submissive
Sexual Orientation: Becomes Only Attracted to Men
Story Theme: Romance, Sports
Type of Change: Fast/Instant Change, Stuck
Series: None
Published: 10/20/16
Updated: 11/05/16
Reviewer: Hick559 Signed starstarstarstar
Date: 05/15/18 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: The Price of Gold

Game, Set, Match - I liked this story. I have always had a thing for sports stories just because I like the whole overcoming adversity element of them. This story did seem a bit fast paced, not so fast that it ruined the story but it felt like if you had extended the story a bit it would have been even better, since some of the characters weren't really able to be fleshed out since it was so short. Oh, and I like that the Whistler family weren't your stereotypical villains and just did something in the heat of the moment they couldn't take back. 4/5

Author's Response: Yup, you're absolutely correct. This was the first story I'd ever posted publicly and I learned a lot from the experience. I certainly learned what not to do :D

Peter - a shapeshifting intelligence operative - sets out to solve a series of grisly murders, only to have his investigation derailed when a disguise backfires.
Rated: Adult 127 Reviews starstarstarstarstar Completed Story Reads: 115484 Words: 108139 Chapters: 34 Table of Contents
Categories: Sci-Fi Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Teen (13-19 yrs)
Turned Into: Daughter, Teenager
Featured Items: High Heels
Locale: High School, Hospital or Clinic
Body Modification: Extreme Piercing
Motivation for Change: Accident
Sexual Orientation: Becomes Only Attracted to Men
Story Theme: Everyday Living, Horror
Type of Change: Age Regression, Fast/Instant Change, Identity Theft, Stuck
Warnings: Death
Series: None
Published: 11/07/16
Updated: 06/23/17
Reviewer: Hick559 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 05/15/18 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: Noir

Know all your Enemies: Once again a well written story I enjoyed. It honestly made me so frustrated when she started doing drugs again, but even more when she went to Nate for drugs when he was the guy who basically killed her friend. Of course it's perfectly understandable, I can honestly say I'm not sure I would fair much better if I was transferred into the body of someone who was a drug addict...I know I don't do well without caffeine right now. An epilogue would have been nice, but it was a nice end even without one. I'm just spoiled and want to know what happened to the Guard 5/5

Author's Response: Thanks for the feedback! I know that the story's plot sort've meandered in the middle, but I'm glad that you appreciated the cyclical nature of Ash's journey. As far as the Guard is concerned, I insinuated that they would likely disband after losing so many members, but there'd be no way for Ash to find out. I'm not ruling out a sequel of some sort, in this story world.

Joseph was a pessimistic loner, angry with both his existence and the world. After a misused wishing stone alters his body and robs him of his voice, Joseph is forced to evaluate his life.
Rated: Adult 250 Reviews starstarstarstarhalf-star Completed Story Reads: 263041 Words: 105448 Chapters: 23 Table of Contents
Categories: Magical Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Teen (13-19 yrs)
Turned Into: Cheerleader, Daughter, Girlfriend
Locale: Family Household, High School
Body Modification: Ears Pierced
Motivation for Change: Accident, Revenge
Personality: Bad to Good
Sexual Orientation: Becomes Only Attracted to Men, Does Not Change
Story Theme: Coming of Age, Everyday Living, Genie/Wishes, Romance, Sports
Type of Change: Fast/Instant Change, Stuck
Series: None
Published: 02/09/17
Updated: 07/15/17
Reviewer: Hick559 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 05/09/18 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: Objective Apples

This was extremely well written, your descriptions really suck you right in to the story. For example, the parts where history is different than we remember such as the British putting the first person on the moon or Norwegian being the worlds trade language and not English. Little details like this really add to the the world and it makes you realize just how powerful those wish stones could be. I really love the ending especially, since not everything was perfect and all. To be honest I went to this site planning on re-reading "For a Girl", but I'm glad I looked around because now I have 6 great new stories to read.

Author's Response: I'm so happy that you appreciated the tiny details! I tried to make the world-building aspect of this story as minimalist as possible, with most explication provided via classroom lectures and a few interspersed and seemingly unimportant facts. Since we're seeing the world from Johanna's eyes, I figured that it would make more sense if she never focused on the quirks of her own world, since she was so accustomed to those quirks. Thanks for the encouraging words, and I hope you enjoy my other stories, as well!

Evan and his three closest friends take part in an ‘organic’ virtual reality Beta test. Together, they learn how immersive 21st century video gaming has become while they explore the fantasy world of their favorite book series and re-discover themselves.
Rated: Explicit 143 Reviews starstarstarstarstar Completed Story Reads: 156555 Words: 71291 Chapters: 18 Table of Contents
Reviewer: Hick559 Signed starstarstarstar
Date: 05/15/18 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: Droozle

Blitz was great. I liked that it was a bit darker (Although not all stories have to be) but not so dark where it made you want to quit reading. Emma was a great character, she really was what Nat needed to make her wake up. I like that you had Nat keep having racist thoughts and self doubt though the whole story it made the story a lot more realistic, people don't just change overnight. Honestly she got past it faster then I would have expected, but that was kinda explained with what she went through and the fact that she was never super invested in the Neo-Nazi cause to begin with..it was more a desire to live up to her dads expectations. Overall a great story 5/5.

Hush: I already reviewed this one on the other page. But really, this was my favorite out of the stories. I think that's just because I love descriptive story telling and a mute MC lends to that. If you wrote a sequel to this story and published it, I would buy it. 5/5

Perfect Harmony: This was decent, but the story felt more bland for some reason. The characters were all well written though. I enjoyed all the references to GOT....all the way down to the author killing off the character I enjoyed most. Poor Pensa. 4/5

Author's Response: Yup! This was definitely a character-driven story, down to the physical display of people's personality traits. I understand that the story's genre and setting aren't too appealing to everyone, and this was definitely one of my sappier stories. Glad you still found it enjoyable ;)

Nathan, the son of a white nationalist leader, learns that hard times reveal true friends.
Rated: Adult 292 Reviews starstarstarstarstar Completed Story Reads: 183250 Words: 76073 Chapters: 37 Table of Contents
Categories: Sci-Fi Gender Change
Characters: Male to Female, Teen (13-19 yrs)
Turned Into: Daughter, Teenager
Locale: Family Household, High School, Hospital or Clinic
Motivation for Change: Unknown
Sexual Orientation: Becomes Only Attracted to Men
Story Theme: Coming of Age, Everyday Living, Romance
Type of Change: Slow/Gradual Change, Stuck
Series: None
Published: 09/08/17
Updated: 03/12/18
Reviewer: Hick559 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: 05/15/18 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: Kristallnacht

Blitz was great. I liked that it was a bit darker (Although not all stories have to be) but not so dark where it made you want to quit reading. Emma was a great character, she really was what Nat needed to make her wake up. I like that you had Nat keep having racist thoughts and self doubt though the whole story it made the story a lot more realistic, people don't just change overnight. Honestly she got past it faster then I would have expected, but that was kinda explained with what she went through and the fact that she was never super invested in the Neo-Nazi cause to begin with..it was more a desire to live up to her dads expectations. Overall a great story 5/5.

Can't wait for your next story. Comparing this and Hush to your older stories: You have gotten quite a bit better. I enjoyed all your stories, but the newer ones rival some of the published books I've read.

Author's Response: It was originally much darker in my early outline, but I edited it in places to lighten its tone, just like I did for Hush. When writing Emma, I tried to view her as the 'audience-character'. She expressed the thoughts that were probably shared by the readers, and called Nat out on her BS, which was an absolute necessity. Great observation with Nat's desire to please her father, and I'm so flattered by your final note. Thanks for reading!

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