Reviews For Jumissy
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Reviewer: EarthEmber Signed starstarstarstar Report
Date: 11/20/13 10:39 pm Title: Chapter 1

Good story, I liked the plotline, reminded me of Jumanji a bit. You do need to work on spelling and grammar though, but other than that, please keep up the good work!

Reviewer: Dauphin Signed Report
Date: 07/14/13 08:01 am Title: Chapter 1

Thank you for your comment to Jumissy
I know that the grammar and spelling can be better.
However, you come up to some conclusions that are not true
First I write my story on Word. This story is actually from 2008. Then I put it through a spell and grammar control
Then I re-read it
Use the control once more
Then I send it to a proof reader.

The good news is that I have a new proof reader since then.

Most stories that I read have similar problems. However, I look for the idea and the story line. Not if they are an expert prose.

Do not get me wrong, I love reviews, even the negative ones. that is why I have taken the time to write this to you

lets hope that the new proof reader helps improve the stories

Hugs
Dauphin

Reviewer: Snarfles Signed Report
Date: 07/13/13 09:18 pm Title: Chapter 1

stop using the submission box as your 'word' program. Compose your work first, then proofread and edit it using a word processor, have someone read it to you aloud and make notes on a hard copy as they read. Correct your word usages; attack is not an area of a house, she doesn't 'seen' something, she 'saw' it, etc. Many times you write sentences which immediately contradict: "Taylor didn't think he was a boy or girl. He thought he was a girl....." Reword so its no longer nonsensical: "Taylor was convinced he was actually a girl now." or " Taylor was no longer confused, he was sure he was a girl now."

Reviewer: transfansguy Signed starstarstarhalf-star Report
Date: 07/09/13 06:35 pm Title: Chapter 1

Good story you just need to work on your spelling like attack instead of attic

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