Date: 08/14/13 05:53 am Title: Chapter 5
Okay, can I be honest here? I feel like this is Homestuck. It sucks, but I can't stop reading. I don't like it, yet I want to read more and more. But as I read, I notice it still... sucks. I would say spelling and speach are not your strong suits. Work on them. 6/10 stars from me.
Date: 07/05/13 04:54 am Title: Chapter 1
i like the story, but it looks like ur losing track of some of ur details, you mentioned in an earlier chapter that if a person who takes the baby pills has sex with a woman than they would get absorbed into the womb but the parents didnt have sex they were just kinda taken. besides that its an interesting story.