Reviews For Vapour Trails
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Reviewer: Elizabeth Mondalimare Signed starstarstarstar Report
Date: 05/21/13 09:30 pm Title: Chapter 1

A deft touch created this thought provoking work. I'd love to offer you creative suggestions for improvement. I can't. This story fragment is complete and entire. And it was penned by a craftsman.

Reviewer: GM Shephard Signed starstarstarstar Report
Date: 05/04/13 10:44 pm Title: Chapter 1

I look forward to more. Good idea, one I have thought about many times. In your creative hands, I am quite confident another masterpiece will emerge.

Author's Response: You're too kind. I haven't yet managed to blend the mundane and the surreal, as the late J G Ballard did so effectively. The vapour trails should have been a recurring motif, visible from the beginning. It was a good metaphor, but I could have made more of it.

Reviewer: touch the light Signed Report
Date: 05/03/13 01:19 pm Title: Chapter 1

I remember the show, but not that part of the plot. I know I felt it to be hugely disappointing at the time, wasting all sorts of opportunities to make the story more interesting.

Reviewer: Connair Signed starstarstarstar Report
Date: 05/03/13 04:57 am Title: Chapter 1

It may not be strict TG but portrays a society where the entire male population is gradually changing gender.
reminds me of a BBC Show with a similar theme "Invasion:Earth"
Men were being feminized over generations leading a terminal drop in sperm count and increasingly female population. The aim was to make the Earth more susceptible to attack but didn't count on females taking on Warrior and Science roles and other forms of reproduction replacing male-female pairing.

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