Date: 04/26/13 04:25 pm Title: I'm Emma Watson!?
I think you've chosen a difficult style of story to write. When you choose someone that readers know, then they come with their own expectations of what that person's life is or should be like - It's why these stories work best on interactive fiction sites where the reader can write an alternative chapter. Pulling the story away from the actress' daily life, and reality makes it easier to achieve but remember what unique attributes of being that actress will help drive the story along. (For example if the actress is Emma Watson, the protagonist might have to deal with a stalker who has the real magical abilities of Harry Potter.)
A good start, just keep the readers happy.
Date: 04/25/13 09:12 pm Title: I'm Emma Watson!?
Interested to see which Smurfs actress you have in mind for part 2. Good start....maybe down the road, Mason can become my favorite child actress (though she's not really a child anymore), the uber-talented Abigail Breslin. Solid 7/10 thus far :D
Author's Response: I don't know much about her but I'll try to look into it
Date: 04/25/13 08:21 pm Title: I'm Emma Watson!?
You write well. What you need to look at is how to create suspense. The revelation that the protagonist has turned into the actress Emma Watson should have been left until the very last moment.
I walked up to the mirror and gasped.