Date: 09/29/18 02:14 pm Title: Chapter 17
You know how to write and created interesting characters and plot, but this really needed to be edited. It's way too long, the interactions are repetitive and frankly all the inner thoughts and struggles of the teens just became a drone.
Date: 03/21/18 05:58 am Title: Chapter 1 Dear John
I've started and finished this in under a week! I simply loved that this was so much more than a standard TG story! I truly felt for Alex and my heart broke for her so many times!! The ending is of course bitter sweet, but it was necessary. I still wish they got to say in Clarksville as that's the town we all fell in love with and I wish Shelly had a better ending. I felt that was a really loose end in an otherwise great ending. It would have been nice to see closure between the family and the Uncle, but that's probably a whole can of worms right there. (Perhaps in the squeal? lol). Anyways, it will always have a spot on my kindle (with a custom cover by me) in anticipation for when I feel the need to re-read it, which I most certainly will!
Date: 02/11/18 12:45 pm Title: Chapter 17
I finished reading this last night, after reading it all the way through in a few days. The characterization and plotting are really good. I liked Alex's slow, gradual acceptance of girlhood, and the Project Eden conspiracy subplot, and her relationships with the other characters, especially her parents and Austin.
There are a lot of typos and malapropisms, though. If you want to fix them, contact me via this site. I enjoyed this enough to want to read it again, and I would be willing to send you copyedits when I do.
Date: 01/03/18 10:04 am Title: Chapter 1 Dear John
Thanks for a great Story Jen. In one way I'm disappointed because the story has come to an end. I had hoped that Shelly would have come out of it a little better. After losing her parents and it turns out her Grandmother is a sociopath. I'm also happy that 'Frank' had a more human side to him. One thing that wasn't explained though was why Austin never transformed into a girl yet both Walter and John did. As a reader I'm assuming it was down to their shared DNA. Once again Jen thanks for a great story. You have inspired me to go edit the second part of Bikini Beach: The Russian Connection I'm writing on Big Closet. I hope that you'll continue to write more.
Date: 01/03/18 08:50 am Title: Chapter 17
This story finally ending felt bittersweet. Although it makes sense with where the story went that it would eventually have to end, I still wanted more of it. Also not meant as a criticism of the story itself but I felt that the epilogue strangely lacked any mention of Alex's best friend, Shelly. Maybe a more fleshed out epilogue in the future?
With that said, I'm very looking forward to whatever stories you have in store for the future.
Date: 01/01/18 05:51 am Title: Chapter 17
Such a sad ending :(
I thought her and austin were so cute together. Im glad he didn't change though. Such an amazing chapter. It had me up and down on all kinds of shit hahaha. I wish there was more like a few years into the future type of chapter or something
Date: 08/23/17 01:39 pm Title: Chapter 1 Dear John
Sorry, instead of parents I meant parts. Dang spell check and my phone.
Author's Response: There are a couple of glitches I'm waiting to correct until the story is finished. In chapter one Alex's first name is spelled Katherine and not Catherine. Also In one chapter (can't remember which) Pine Grove is mistakenly called Pineville. You might be referring to the way the story appears on Fictionmania. I posted several chapters there and then did some minor edits before posting here. Nothing big--just rewording a couple of sentences. That's the problem with writing on the fly and not completing the manuscript before putting it out. If I were to do it again I would wait until I had a finished story to post it. When I began writing Clarksville I never intended it to be a "major work", it was simply something I wanted to try. I'd never written a TG story and I thought it might be fun and so here we are : ) I do want to say thank you to all of you who have been so patient with the long waits between installments. I try my best to make each one as interesting and entertaining as possible but with my schedule there's sometimes a very long span of time between when I start and complete the final edit. So again thanks to all of you and thank you for the reviews. That's' what keeps me going. Jen.
Date: 08/21/17 01:57 am Title: Chapter 1 Dear John
I've read this before and am rereading it. Did you change parents of the story? Hi do love this story, glad to see you picked it up again, it's one of my favorites.
Author's Response: Same parents - Steve and Ann Tetras. I'm happy you are enjoying the story so far. Thanks for the response. Jen
Date: 05/01/17 11:26 pm Title: Chapter 15 Nice Girls Don't Explode
Well I did Kind of seen it coming BUT WOW I didn't see her best-friend's Grandmother in that pack. Well I hope it will turn out for the better for both of the people. Maybe a they get out this mess Some how some way. Only time will tell.
Date: 05/01/17 06:20 am Title: Chapter 15 Nice Girls Don't Explode
WOW! Did not expect that twist at all. This story will always be, in my opinion, the best story in this site or even better than most tg stories which makes the wait for new chapters all the more chapter. I understand its not anyones fault for that though.
Date: 05/01/17 04:20 am Title: Chapter 1 Dear John
Well that was worth waiting for! What a terrific chapter, as things get ever darker. Genuinely exciting writing and a great cliffhanger. I know that life gets in the way, but I really hope that we won't have to wait too long for the next instalment.
Date: 02/21/17 10:24 am Title: Chapter 1 Dear John
My issue with the story is that she goes back and forth. She's going to be girly. She's not going to be girly. She IS going to be girly. She hates being girly. That's fine for a couple of chapters, but five or six times in a row? It's not so much a story arch as it is a story ferirswheel
Date: 05/16/16 05:55 pm Title: Chapter 13 Lost Girl
I liked it. Besides a couple errors I enjoyed it. And loved how she accepted being her daddy's princess :)
Brett needs to be pushed in a river >.>
Just saying. I'm sitting here like I know what I'd do if I was Alex haha
Date: 02/08/16 08:59 am Title: Chapter 12 Alex Doesn't Live Here Anymore
Please dont change her back. And Austin needs to find a way back to her. That that shock she felt when she grabbed his hand. Omg I could go on and on. Ahhh I hope this doesn't end like I think it is x.x
Date: 01/31/16 12:29 am Title: Chapter 12 Alex Doesn't Live Here Anymore
So, I recently found this and have been hooked ever since. There have been a few spelling errors every now and then as well as a instances of typing the same word twice, but otherwise it has all been very well written. I can't wait to see more where this story is headed. Thank you for giving us readers this great story.
Author's Response: I do apologize for the poor editing. Recently I've had very little time to write and I hurried the last installment more than usual. Even though I read through it several times and corrected an alarming amount of typos (I'm a terrible typist) I'm sure there were several I missed. I 'll try to do better in the future. I'm happy you were still able to enjoy the story . Jem
Date: 01/29/16 07:14 am Title: Chapter 1 Dear John
Shame on you, making us wait so long! It's very much worth it though. Still loving the story and looking forward to seeing her become the baddest girl in the town.
Also, I guess I haven't mentioned it before but I also love the song references in your titles. I had to look up the Day to Remember one today. :P
Date: 01/26/16 04:40 am Title: Chapter 12 Alex Doesn't Live Here Anymore
This is always so interesting to read, even if I have to skim the last chapter to remember exactly what happened... As per the norm, I shall patiently wait for the next chapter. Loving the story, please keep it up
Date: 01/11/16 04:51 pm Title: Chapter 11 Weird Science
Such a good read! just found out about this and binge read it. The story is pretty high quality compared to majority of tg stories. One thing I've noticed is that its been a long time since the update and I'm wondering when is the next chapter coming?
Author's Response: It has been a very long time.. I meant to publish the next installment in November but because of some unexpected events I am only now finalizing chapter 12. Hope to have it posted next week. Jen.
Date: 09/21/15 10:30 pm Title: Chapter 1 Dear John
Story is good. Unfortunately, that's hampered quite a bit by plot holes (which may/may not be resolved... eventually), unrealistic characters, and so many syntax errors. It is a work in progress, so hopefully these get better, but as-is, it's a rough read.
Date: 08/08/15 10:20 pm Title: Chapter 1 Dear John
So, somewhat of a cliffhanger, eh?
I'm glad you're still writing. This is currently the only story I'm following. I like how it's unlike most stories in that she's coming to grips with her new life slowly, gradually, and not all of a sudden super girly. It seems more realistic and less fantasy this way. I also enjoy the short interludes, like the dreams, the house, and the addition of aspects of her speaking to her in her head. Nice touches!
Date: 03/27/15 02:53 pm Title: Chapter 1 Dear John
Jennifer, great job with the story and I just want to say I have recently discover this website two days ago and this is the third story I have read after the discovery. So far your story had me addicted and I couldn't stop until I caught up with it. It had the right elements to hook me in. As soon I finish and caught up to the story, the story had been just rewinding back in my mind and I just had to re-read few of the chapters. Love this story and amazing job. Keep it up! :)
Date: 01/17/15 05:56 pm Title: Chapter 1 Dear John
I really like the story! The character development has been great, an do can actually empathise with some of the charchters. Just fund the wait between chapters antagonizing! Also I don't understand a few parts, like why she can't just tell people about being assaulted and about her creepy stalker-pedophile being her uncle.
Author's Response: I apologize for the wait time. Most of the chapters are 28+ pages in length and that takes a while. The real problem is lately I haven't had a lot of time to write, just 30 minutes or an hour here and there. As for your questions, some of them will be explained in chapter 11. Jen.
Date: 01/13/15 06:51 am Title: Chapter 1 Dear John
I've been reading this right from the start and enjoying it, both for the detailed accounts of Alex's adaptation to her changes and the constant range of adventures. It's a great read, sensitively told. Should have written sooner!
Date: 11/25/14 06:04 am Title: Chapter 1 Dear John
I think I must have reread the entire stories a hundred times now ! Just wondering when is the next chapter coming ? I hope you don't think I'm trying to rush you or anything , just asking.
Author's Response: I agree this particular chapter has taken way too long and I appreciate everyone's patience. I have been incredibly busy with some things that left me with little time for writing. Chapter 10 is almost complete . I'll post it as soon as it is finished. Best, Jen
Date: 11/11/14 10:12 am Title: Chapter 1 Dear John
I absolutely love this story. I really hope you add a chapter or two soon. I've actually gone back and re-read parts of this story just to keep from forgetting about it. Can't wait to see what comes next. Please add more soon.
Author's Response: I know it's been way too long since I updated my story. I have been working on chapter 10 every spare moment available to me. I'd hoped to have it finished by the end of October but that didn't happen (sigh). The good news is it's over half done and this month is a holiday month for me so I hoping enough enough extra time to finish it. Thank you and everyone for being patient. I'm working hard to get part 10 completed.
Date: 09/08/14 06:08 pm Title: Chapter 9 Androgynous Girl
I just stopped by to remind you that I love this story and it's maybe time to start writing again! I just stole Minikisa's muse. Want to borrow her? Only temporarily though. I'll be needing her when I start writing a thing!
Seriously though, this story is one of my favorites. :)
Author's Response: Thanks. I'm working hard on finishing up chapter 10. I'm hoping to have it finished by the end of September but I can't promise. I've been really busy with work plus having to deal with some other things. When it is finished I think you'll enjoy it. Lots of surprises in this one.
Date: 07/09/14 06:35 am Title: Chapter 9 Androgynous Girl
This is one of two stories I always look forward to reading. Your description of mood, character and location is always crisp and concise. I remember when I was in High School it was like walking a tight rope sometimes. I was very much a book nerd I always had my nose in a book but I also made the cheer squad which was also very much a contradiction. I understand some of the conflicts that Alex is going through. It was a good chapter and I look forward to the next one.
Author's Response: Thanks. And thank you to everyone that takes time to leave a review. I appreciate it very much. Jen
Date: 07/08/14 03:33 am Title: Chapter 1 Dear John
Wow! I absolutely love this story, its a refreshing and realistic take on family and friends interaction with the girl. Everything is understandable and it makes you sympathize with Alex. My only complain is that it takes too long to get updated, especially with the cliffhangers. But that is understandable given the high quality of each releases.
Author's Response: I know it's been long waits between installments. Hopefully I can shorten the wait time at least a little. As always, I appreciate everyone's patience.
Date: 04/22/14 03:13 am Title: Chapter 8 The Low Spark of High Heel Girls
i pray that you dont leave us hanging this long again after THAT cliff hanger. though idk why Walter was brought into this. sadly most stories liek this tend to have a one bad thing after another trend.
Date: 03/27/14 08:56 am Title: Chapter 1 Dear John
I was wondering when you are gonna update this story. Just curious
Author's Response: Chapter 8 is almost finished. I hopefully it will be posted soon. Thanks to everyone for your patience. I appreciate all of you so very much. Jen
Date: 02/12/14 09:16 am Title: Chapter 1 Dear John
I downloaded this and put it on my Kindle. Several hours later - and in the middle of the night - I was back at my computer. Surely there must be more. I have to know how this works out. There are so many hints about things in the background. Surely there will be more of Cal, surely. And, surely, the dark government forces, have not just packed up and left.
I know only too well how much work is involved in writing to this level of competence so I'll be patient but the sooner you update the happier I will be.
Thank you so, so much for such a well crafted story of characters I have grown to love.
Date: 12/08/13 10:15 pm Title: Chapter 1 Dear John
Amazing work. This story is absolutely superb. While most TG stories focus purely on the physical, the greatest stories on this site delve far deeper into the emotional psyche. And I have to say, even from among this elite group, this might just be this best. You've taken the emotional and mental side of your story to a whole other level. Unlike some other stories, Alex's embracement of femininity is slow and gradual, yet rocks her world on a daily basis. As another reader pointed out, Alex's voice is superb and the vast majority of all the character's motivations and actions are understandable. I only request that the physical aspects of Alex's transformation are not overly rushed and out of character, but from how you've handled it so far, I honestly can't see that happening. As long as you don't take the easy way out, this story has the potential to really go places. Best of luck and keep up the great work.
Date: 12/06/13 05:40 pm Title: Chapter 7 The Boy in the Bubble
I have really enjoyed this story up to now. But to be honest what really screamed out to me was a TV Show I loved as a kid called the Secret world of Alex Mack.That was my one of my favorite shows I loved cuddling up next to my Mom when it was on, but the plant, the 'accidental' exposure to something top secret.
Like others have said I love Alex's voice, my first thought when Austin showed up was is he connected with Bradley? You are very successfully laying on new layers and making this so much more interesting.
Date: 05/21/13 05:32 am Title: Chapter 1 Dear John
A well written story. The author's craftsmanship was excellent...though, an editor could have cleaned up a few spelling and grammatical errors.
However, I found that I couldn't believe the reactions of either the protagonist or his/her family. I imagine that criticism is personal. But I couldn't.
Date: 04/29/13 11:33 am Title: Chapter 1 Dear John
...and it continues to be awesome. Great descriptions, funny dialogue. As my old English professor would say... "It achieves verisimilitude." This has the potential to be one of the greats. Alex is a great character.