Date: 02/06/13 01:12 pm Title: Chapter 1
I've always thought your writing skills were good, but there wasn't really much story being told before. Mostly snippets of eroticism. This one goes much further, and is actually your best...and, ironically, possibly the least sexual.
What I would have liked to have seen was not the gloss over the end that I saw, where you explain what was going to happen and then jump over to the return flight. I think you could have really done a lot showing GiGi develop, rather than simply showing George diminish into submissiveness.
Otherwise, I think it's a great story, and hope to see more like it in the future.
Date: 02/06/13 06:03 am Title: Chapter 1
While I believe it could have been MUCH MUCH longer to give us further insight into the psychological aspects of the transformation, there is no denying the obvious ability of the writer; or the quality of his/her vision.