Date: 02/14/13 11:04 pm Title: Chapter 1
I didn't miss Mark after his quick exit, though the tragedy of his choices would have been more dynamic if he was had more depth. I did miss not getting to know Emily and certainly Jack nearly as well as I would like to have. Forty or fifty thousand more words of clarification of their choices and motivations would have possibly been enough for me to feel I knew these two characters whom I took an immediate liking and wanted to get to know.
Then again, you probably would have had me crying like a bathtub overflowing.... Thank you for the great story.