Reviews For Demons
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Reviewer: touch the light Signed Report
Date: 01/08/13 09:23 pm Title: Chapter 2

For a first story this isn't bad at all. You handled the background competently and built up to the transformation scene with commendable restraint. The wings were a really nice touch.

Technical matters: your work will be easier to read if you leave spaces between paragraphs - and a change of speaker requires a new line.

Nice start. Keep it up.

Author's Response: Thanks for the tips and the feedback! I'm hoping to be done with then next chapter by next week.

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