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Reviewer: Elron Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 10/11/20 07:33 am Title: Ch. 5: Not Just Physical

Baq, I'm glad you chose to make a story out of a message. That's creative.
I don't understand the need to reduce Lexi's intelligence. A low IQ is not a prerequisite to be a beautiful woman.
So if Lexi is representing Miss Desire I would think she would get more free stuff from them, not just a 30% discount. But that's not my field of expertise, so I really don't know.
Too bad there were no lady's 'toys' in the boxes - or maybe they moved to the nightstand while the clothes were unpacking. Lexi will find them later and give them a try. LOL
Overall a great story. Pacing was good. I liked the short chapters. You broke the story apart at good spots. Good descriptions. I wonder if the boxes included accessories like jewelry and makeup? Gotta make her a complete woman. Great job Baq!

Author's Response: I loved the concept too, and I decided to go with a bimbofication story because a lot of my stories donít feature identity death or loss of intellect, so I wanted to try it out. Glad you enjoyed, I love hearing your thoughts!

Reviewer: Elron Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 10/11/20 07:23 am Title: Ch. 4: Changes Continue

34E is a fantasy size for me, can't really explain why. Great idea to run to the closet and check a bra tag for the size.
I'd be trying out the new parts right away. Never understood those stories where the new girl was afraid to touch or even look at her fun parts.

Reviewer: Elron Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 10/11/20 07:19 am Title: Ch. 3: Changes Begin

Well, he certainly wasn't going to fit all those women's clothes with his male body, now was he?

Reviewer: Elron Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 10/11/20 07:17 am Title: Ch. 2: Packages Arrive

Wow, a full wardrobe! Including lingerie. Now I'm curious.

Reviewer: Elron Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 10/11/20 07:16 am Title: Ch. 1: The DM

Great start, Baq. Who knows where this could go?
Speaking of question marks, there is a bug in the system that prevents downloading stories that end in question marks. I have to edit them out to be able to download. I works, but a bit of a hassle.

Reviewer: Terrigen Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 10/11/20 06:11 am Title: Ch. 1: The DM

Great start!

Author's Response: Thank you! I'd love to hear more of your thoughts!

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