Date: 08/30/20 09:57 pm Title: Chapter 1
I want to write a review to acknowledge this short story, but don't really have much to say either way. It was amusing, and all too brief. Emmi is a paradox, apparently very smart and powerful, yet can screw up, and it's unclear why she chooses THIS day to fix a longstanding mistake. Beyond that, though, the transformation story is what it is, well done. I do hope you continue so as to explore Talon and Thea's new reactions and perceptions.
Date: 08/26/20 10:32 pm Title: Chapter 1
It was well written but the story never went anywhere. It needs more chapters — the swap is not very interesting by itself.
Thanks for sharing!
Author's Response: You're welcome. As stated elsewhere, the intention was to write a bodyswap piece that heavily focused on the transformations and this was it. The plot wasn't intended to really go anywhere but it does leave it open for a third story if people want to see it.
Date: 08/23/20 02:38 pm Title: Chapter 1
Their reactions to the transformations are very funny. I really appreciate that you didn't use "mind changes": they virtually "kill" part of the character, and take away a lot of the fun.
The twins will have to help each other to overcome this first critical phase ... and in the meantime they will have to look for a way to return to the bodies they grew up with. I'm very curious about the continuation, and I hope there will be a happy ending (my favorite ending would be that they get their bodies back, but that hardly ever happens hahaha). Thanks for this story!
P.S. Looking into your profile now, I saw that you are the author of Crimson City too, a story I read on Deviantart a while ago. You are an amazing writer! Are you going to finish that story sooner or later?
Author's Response: Thank you! I tried to keep the twin's reactions pretty natural or as natural as one can react to turning into their sibling. Yep, that's me! Finishing Crimson City has been in the works for years... I've been occasionally working on it in between random stories to the point where I'm about ready to post a "part 3" which will hopefully tide people over as I continue to procrastinate writing the fourth and final part.
Date: 08/22/20 09:28 pm Title: Chapter 1
Yes, please continue.
First, i thought that because of the title this was some type of sequel to the original "Weddings are no Joke", but I guess you were just writing a new story along the same TG wedding day theme.
Second, Emmie is using 'Plan B' to change the pair without anyone seeing them naked, but she already told both parties that no one could see or hear them while she held them captive. So 'Plan B' should not have been necessary.
I thought the transformations were a little drawn out for someone with Emmie's powers, but I liked the way you described what was happening and each person's reaction to each change.
Finally, I'm surprised Emmie didn't give each of the new people some abilities to handle their new bodies and minds - like the ability to walk in heels and some person-specific memories. "Oh, so you're my new father in law? What was your name again?" LOL Hopefully they know enough about each other to be able to function at the wedding and reception. All this was sprung on them at the last minute, after all.
I guess I would have liked to hear more about why things got screwed up in the womb, that would still make good material for the next chapter. Emmie visits each person to explain what went wrong, making them realize that they probably felt like they were in the wrong bodies their whole life.
As for Emmie's procrastination, I'm sure I would be the same way as a diety - much as I'm sitting here reading stories right now instead of taking care of work that I'm behind on. So I get it.
Overall, a very good story that should have a happy ending eventually, but you're not there yet. Too much to be discovered and explained. Should be quite a conversation when the new Theo and Talon get a few minutes alone together to discuss what happened. And of course, Emmie owes each of them an explanation other than 'Oops, my bad'.
Your writing is excellent and creative, and your descriptions of the characters and the scenery are very detailed.
Thank you and I am looking forward to the next chapter.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm really glad you enjoyed reading this! You're right about the Plan B. It was a small blip I forgot to take note of in my head while writing but I like to think it was the best excuse Emmi was able to give on the fly. I'm happy to hear you like the description of Talon and Thea's reactions to their changes. I always try to be somewhat realistic with the reactions and this one I happened to go all out on. I do want to try and avoid the classic TG trope of "the characters realize they were the wrong gender the whole time". IMO it's overused and a pretty lazy way of explaining the reasoning behind them being changed in the first place. I do have a few ideas in mind for Weddings Are No Joke 3 so stay tuned!