Reviews For Entrapment
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Reviewer: baq17 Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 08/15/20 01:37 am Title: Chapter 1

That's a phenomenal start - could use a little more of a physical description of Penny beyond what her hair color is and what color bra she wears, but the idea of being trapped in a sexy female body is SUCH a turn-on. I'm really, really excited to see where this goes! Well done.

Reviewer: Elron Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 08/14/20 05:39 am Title: Chapter 1

Wow, what a mystery. I can't imagine waking up into a situation like that.
You called her Miss Penny and then Britney. Is Penny her last name?
Can you clarify, "Who you will meet... who is lives that you effect the most..."
Should it be "Whose lives will you affect the most"?
You have really piqued my interest, I can't wait to read more of your story. Thank you, Elron.

Reviewer: Carly I Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 08/14/20 02:50 am Title: Chapter 1

Oooooh I LOVE the potential of this story. I really hope you spend a chapter in a beauty salon. Dying her hair platinum blonde and adding extensions. Hope she gets a pedicure and long square-tipped acrylic french manicure. Maybe some botox and lip and cheek fillers too? For a job maybe she starts out as a cocktail/bottle service girl or an instagram influencer and progresses to an OnlyFans account or gets a suger daddy?

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