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Reviewer: storylovinggamer Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 10/22/20 12:39 am Title: Chapter 1 - Hello my name is Tony

I'm just 19 now, so i have so much to live for, and i think I'll keep this story in mind. I'd like to mention that i haven't logged on to leave a comment on this site for a long time, but i felt your story was touching enough for me to do so. Just a side note, i don't feel a longing to be a girl however, i feel content as i am (i will admit curiosity at what it'd be like however). It's just that it really hit home for me because i am kind of anti-social, and throughout my life so far I've kinda payed for it in terms of having maybe a single friend that's stayed around. Once corona loosens up and i can go to college physically, i think I'll give it my best shot at being more social. And I'm definitely going to have a new outlook on my current life.

Author's Response: Thanks for reading and for the review! I bet if you talk to most people who have read "middle age" they'll all tell you about something that should have done when they were younger. Live it up while you can! College is a great time to come out of your shell and find out who you are. (After COVID19 is done of course). Good luck!

Reviewer: Hatha Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 10/18/20 11:50 pm Title: Chapter 30 - Hello my name is Chrissy

I think the whole premise of this story is incredibly relatable for a lot of us.

Honestly this was great. Sure there's a fair number of typos, nothing that prevents you from understanding the text.

This was legitimately touching. On some level this is just blatant cliche wish fulfillment, but at the same time...isn't that what we're here for in the end? This was genuinely good and I'm happier for having read it.

Author's Response: I think the premise made it certainly easy to write. Slowly I've been going back and fixing typos as I find them. It's certainly not as aasy as I thought as I keep finding more! I figured for my first story, I'd stick with the "happily ever after" ending. It felt right, and made me feel pretty good about it too! Thanks for reading!

Reviewer: Day Dreamer Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 10/18/20 10:55 pm Title: Chapter 30 - Hello my name is Chrissy

Fabulous finish! Thank you again for this excellent read, and for seeing it through timely and well to a very enjoyable conclusion -- and beyond.

Author's Response: Thanks for reading and thanks for the review! I'm glad you enjoyed it!

Reviewer: arcticcell Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 10/16/20 02:34 pm Title: Chapter 30 - Hello my name is Chrissy

Damn! That was such a wonderfully executed ending, thank you very much for writing "Second Chances".

I remember two months ago, where I made this account just so I could write a review for this story, and my opinion still hasn't changed. I still absolutely love your story and I've enjoyed it to the very end. The way you wrote it and the execution of the plot is in my opinion one of the best I've seen in this site. The characters are oh so lovable and relatable, especially Tony as Christina.

And this ending, just wow! Thank you for this kind of ending, a happy not-so-open-ended and satifying final chapter. Kudos to you for such a beautifully-written first story, and if ever you decide to write some more stories, I'll definitely be there as a quiet-but-occasionally-commenting reader.

Author's Response: Thank you so much again. I remember reading your original review and being so flattered! Its been this kind of reception that really kept me going! I'll definitely write again.

Reviewer: xexter Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 10/14/20 09:11 am Title: Chapter 30 - Hello my name is Chrissy

Just finished your story and loved it. You kept me up way past my bedtime :-)

Author's Response: Thank you so much for reading! Hope you get some sleep tonight! I know i need some.

Reviewer: Patricia Sanders Signed starstarstarstar Report
Date: 10/14/20 01:30 am Title: Chapter 30 - Hello my name is Chrissy

Thanks for the wonderful ride. You're too hard on yourself, and I found myself very much looking forward to this story. I didn't even mind that it's not as erotic as I normally wish, so you're off to a good start as a storyteller.

Author's Response: You're very welcome! Thank you for reading! I'm actually proud of it. I'm only hard on myself because I was nervous publishing this stuff for the first time.

Reviewer: Elron Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 10/14/20 12:59 am Title: Chapter 1 - Hello my name is Tony

Tfes8,
I was honestly so blown away by the final chapter I couldn't think of the right words to create my usual wordy review (I think some of my reviews are half the length of your chapters).

I am touched and honored that you listed me at all. That was quite unexpected. Thank you for that. The way I see it, you authors put forth all kinds of time and effort to create something to share with the world. It's no different than painting, or writing a song, or any other creative pursuit. And you don't profit monetarily. So I figure the least I can do is take a few minutes to let you know what I thought of your work. Maybe it inspires you, maybe it makes you think about the direction of a story, I don't know. I'm not going to nit-pick someone over typos, spelling, or grammar as long as I can figure out what the author was trying to say. Hey, you get what you pay for, right? In my job as an engineer, I appreciate honest feedback, especially when I am working in unfamiliar territory.

I couldn't begin to comprehend the amount of time and effort you put into 'Second Chances'. I could tell it wasn't a spur of the moment story. It was too structured and cohesive. At the same time, I could tell that Chrissy had some control over her own destiny. I think your passion for this story gave life to the characters that took them beyond mere words on a page. As a result, we the readers were more able to relate to what Chrissy was going through. Plus you picked a great topic. Who hasn't thought about going back in time to fix their mistakes? Hell, I would need 20 years just to get to all of mine.

Chrissy's adventures also brought back a lot of my own memories of that time. Some good, some bad. It was like my own trip back in time. I could even identify a few personal events from the dates given in the story, as well as dates from when I was Chrissy's age. That was a mostly fun and nostalgic look at my past. Other than Chrissy being female, athletic, popular, and attractive this could have been about me LOL. I was in high school band, and had a serious relationship crash and burn when I moved away to college. My childhood friends are still my best friends and we get together whenever we can.

Time seems to pass more quickly the older we get, so if nothing else, Chrissy's trip reminded me that every moment is precious, and should not be wasted. Chrissy certainly learned that lesson and was rewarded beyond imagination by her 'Second Chance'.

Tfes8, you should be extremely proud of your story. I still can't believe you haven't written 100 others given the passion and craftsmanship you showed with this one. I hope you will continue to write, you're too good to step away now. Like getting a home run in your first at-bat (isn't that where our conversations started)?

I was going to ask you what you thought about the first time travel story, HG Wells' "The Time Machine." Either the book, the first movie, or the remake. Is it possible to change our destinies or are we compelled to repeat the same events no matter what we do? Obviously Chrissy could, Marty McFly could, and those whales are somewhere in the 23rd century. Wells didn't seem to think so, neither could Phil Connors - well, he couldn't escape. I think it's more fun to pretend we can, otherwise we are just passengers on a long boring drive across Kansas.

I'll get off of here now, but I want to thank you again for writing such a compelling and wonderful story. I was envious of Tony and Chrissy, and I gained a new appreciation for the time we are given, especially if we ever get a 'Second Chance'.

Best wishes in all of your future (and past!) endeavors.
Always your fan,
Elron

Author's Response: I don't know how I did it either. Once I had the premise and settled on some key moments in the story, the rest of it came together really easily. I would constantly think about this story and how it should unfold and how these characters would act when I had alone time. The excitement at watching the reviews come in certainly helped. Starting the story was the hardest part. Going from a reviewer to an author. Would the community accept a new comer? I had only read other authors descriptions of gender transformation, first time dressing as a woman, and sex scenes. How would people accept my own versions of these? It was certainly nerve racking to step out of my comfort zone. Now that I have and a have a finished story under my belt, I'm sure I'll write another one. When I originally read HG Well's The Time Machine, I wasn't really old enough to see his social commentary. When I saw the remake movie, it all clicked. I also love the soundtrack to that movie. It's not my favorite because the movie has some plot holes that don't make sense. The book is a tighter narrative I thought. Thank you again! Til the next story!

Reviewer: HeatherNYon Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 10/13/20 10:56 pm Title: Chapter 30 - Hello my name is Chrissy

You stuck the landing!!! OMG!

- The guardian angel didn't need a name. It actually made the whole thing more mysterious and interesting. And Tony's wife not having a name makes sense with the way that you ended the whole thing.

- So, if GA met up with someone while checking in on Chrissy, could that mean that GA was checking in on one of the partying high schoolers in Chapter 1 when they met Tony?

- How much of Tony is there in you? Chrissy?

- Do you wish you could go back and redo life as a bamf girl? I do, and I feel guilty about it, because it would mean making a bunch of people's lives worse for it. Luckily, nobody is going to give me that offer. :-)

Thank you again.

Author's Response: Thank you so much! * Re: " So, if GA met up with someone while checking in on Chrissy, could that mean that GA was checking in on one of the partying high schoolers in Chapter 1 when they met Tony?" That's absolutely possible! I'd like to think so. :) * Re: "How much of Tony is there in you? Chrissy?" Tony is loosely based on me at first. Except I'm actually married with kids. I took some literary licences of course to limit the number of characters I introduced and gave Tony some more insecurities than I actually have, and made it easier for him to make his/her decision in the end. As for Chrissy, she's much more confident, self assured, and and much more positive person than I am. Chrissy is who I'd love to be. * Re: "Do you wish you could go back and redo life as a bamf girl?" It's a hard question. I'd love to be in one of these stories to get a chance to experience life as a cis-girl. Erasing my own history as Christina did would certainly had its moral dilemmas seeing as I have kids already. I think that's why I really enjoyed writing this. I got to live vicariously through them and insert my own fantasies in there, knowing they could never happen in real life. * Thanks again for reading!

Reviewer: Amanda Lynn Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 10/13/20 08:50 pm Title: Chapter 1 - Hello my name is Tony

Loved it, great ending. Gonna miss it, but that's what happens.
Like they say, always leave them wanting more.

Author's Response: Thanks again!

Reviewer: djm3sho Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 10/13/20 02:54 pm Title: Chapter 30 - Hello my name is Chrissy

I truly loved this story. The way you played off the male vs female personality was very engaging. I also liked the way you turned away from the usual bully engagements. I could really tell that you had some experience in understanding how these engagements develop.

I really look forward to seeing more stories from you in the future. Even though this is your first work, I'm adding you to my favorite author list!!!

😉😍😘

Author's Response: Thank you for your kind words! I loved working with the Tony vs Christina internal monologue. Iím not a fan of identity death stories, so i wanted to show that Tony and Christina are very much the same person, but both exhibit different personalities. The moment Tony embraced the Christina persona, he started acting like a 17 year old girl, and that was in direct conflict with him being a 37 year old guy. Then I really wanted to play up that she realized that she was very much more comfortable as Christina as she ever was as Tony. Yup. I had my fair share of bullying when I was younger. Some of the events depicted by Tony in the story were pulled directly from my own life. I considered introducing a male bullyÖ but decided that isnít where i wanted to go with the story, and realized I wanted to show that the bully of the story, Amber, is very much a victim of circumstances too.

Reviewer: Bri74 Signed Report
Date: 10/13/20 12:59 pm Title: Chapter 30 - Hello my name is Chrissy

I loved it...easily 1 of my favorites and I’m sad to see it end. Thank You for that!!
Even though I graduated high school in ‘92, I finally left home for a BIG college in ‘97 for the Police Academy and it brought back alotta memories. The music, the people, etc. Thanks again. a86;a039;

Author's Response: Thank you for the kind words! I'm excited that a lot of people enjoyed the 90's nostalgia aspect of it as well!

Reviewer: Nyssa Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 10/13/20 12:35 pm Title: Chapter 30 - Hello my name is Chrissy

I enjoyed this story from the beginning and I am so happy you did an epilogue. The scene with Amber the day after was my favorite. I liked how you brought us through Chrissy's milestones and let us see that it wasn't just a happily-ever-after, but a fulfilling and rich life. I think you have a talent for characters and story, even if you feel like the plot got away from you here and there. What I'd suggest for your next story isn't a particular genre, but a story told in third-person. Even if you use a narrator for some of the storytelling, I would really like to see it because I really enjoy your dialog.

Author's Response: When I decided on time-travel, I decided I needed to start and end the story in the same time setting. So I knew I had to end the story in 2018. I donít know where I got the idea to actually touch on every milestone along the way, but it felt right rather than an immediate fast-forward from 1997 to 2018, and have all of the exposition at the reunion. Iím happy with the way it came out. It also allowed us to stop and spend some time in 2005 and 2006 where the biggest milestones occurred. Thank you again for the kind words! A third person narration sounds challenging, but Iím up for a good challenge!

Reviewer: Robyn Hoode Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 10/13/20 11:48 am Title: Chapter 30 - Hello my name is Chrissy

Well done for providing a neat and believable ending (well as believable as a story based on time travel can be!). I've really enjoyed your treatment.

I used to be a very enthusiastic motorcyclist right up to my 40s (I even competed) and was often warned about the dangers just as Chase was. I wonder if Chase had been killed in a car accident Chrissy would have wanted to stop his driving a car in order to save his life?

Author's Response: Thank you very much. I only chose the motorcycle accident because of my friend. I have no idea what I wouldíve done if Chaseís accident was much harder to avoid - like a car accident. Maybe a Marty McFly letter ďDonít Open Until 2006Ē ďStay home on X dateĒ

Reviewer: Roadbandit Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 10/13/20 10:25 am Title: Chapter 30 - Hello my name is Chrissy

Awesome storyline, excellent ending! Thanks for sharing, I will be watching for your next story

Author's Response: Thank you for reading! We'll see what I come up with after I take a little break!

Reviewer: Lailaluvs00 Signed Report
Date: 10/13/20 07:20 am Title: Chapter 30 - Hello my name is Chrissy

Lol. Great story and sweet ending! If you're done reliving the past maybe you should go back to the future!?! ;-)

Author's Response: Back to the Future! Haha. Thanks for reading and leaving multiple reviews!

Reviewer: Syldrak Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 10/13/20 07:02 am Title: Chapter 30 - Hello my name is Chrissy

Absolutely lovely, thanks for the story :)

Author's Response: You're welcome! Thanks for the review and for reading!

Reviewer: PepitoBat Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 10/13/20 06:12 am Title: Chapter 30 - Hello my name is Chrissy

Thank you so much.

I’d been looking for a story like that for... well, I’d say about 2 years, more or less. And I wasn’t disappointed. I got what I wanted. A nice cute story, about redemption and happiness.
It genuinely made happy, and gave me a bit of hope for my own future.

So, thank you. :)

Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad this story makes people feel happy. I was aiming for a feel-good TG/teen-movie/rom-com type uplifting story. I hope I nailed it!

Reviewer: Elron Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 10/13/20 05:50 am Title: Chapter 30 - Hello my name is Chrissy

Tfes8,
You nailed it.
You effing nailed the whole story.
I'm sitting here shaking with tears in my eyes.
Thank you.
Always your fan,
Elron

Author's Response: Elron, Thank you again! I listed you first in my thanks on purpose. This has been extremely fun! Iíll certainly have to find a cool premise for my next story! Again, thank you for your support!

Reviewer: Elron Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 10/11/20 07:48 am Title: Chapter 29 - The Man in the Mirror

I was all for Tony remaining in the past as Chrissy. Hell, I probably would. Seemed like she had it so much better than Tony did when he left 2018. However, all the little things he did as Chrissy really made a difference for Tony in the new timeline. Successful marriage, successful business, he even got to take Amber to the prom. How cool is that? So, yeah. It was kind of bittersweet when Tony gave that stuff up to remain Chrissy. It would have been a no-brainer if his life was the same when he returned to 2018. I hope Tony's wife had a happy life with whoever she wound up with. That, and Chrissy saving Chase, marrying him, and having his babies would make it all worthwhile. Maybe that will get some mention in the final chapter?
Reminds me of Doc Brown choosing to remain 100 years in the past.

Author's Response: I guess I made Alternate Tonys life too good.. haha. We'll see if Chrissy can do better. For those reading comments.. I'm aiming for a Monday night/Tuesday morning publish time for Chapter 30.

Reviewer: jayadams Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 10/10/20 06:46 pm Title: Chapter 29 - The Man in the Mirror

This story was great.
It is reminiscent of Renpet's stories.
Keep up the great work.

Author's Response: Thank you so much!

Reviewer: HeatherNYon Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 10/10/20 12:29 am Title: Chapter 29 - The Man in the Mirror

You are amazing! If you set up a patreon or whatever, I’m in. If you sell it, I’ll buy it.

I am so looking forward to the final chapter, rereading this, and reading everything else you write.

Author's Response: Thank you, Thank you. This means so much to me to read!

Reviewer: Robyn Hoode Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 10/09/20 03:38 pm Title: Chapter 29 - The Man in the Mirror

Getting better :) You had me worried for a moment.

So ... does Christina still remember being Tony in the future? It seems so for now, at least. However, time-travel-Tony seems to have a better life than the old Tony; better business/career, better marriage and lots of friends from his earlier life. So probably hard choice to make but probably swung to Christina partly because new-Tony felt guilty for having a successful llife without actually remembering having done so but, perhaps mostly, because he liked being Christina more and her future is still just that - an unknown thing.

thanks

R

Author's Response: She remembers partial memories from being 37 year old Tony. She doesn't realize it yet. She goes back for multiple reasons. Primarily to be Christina. Then to save Chase, then because she felt out of place on Alt-2018.

Reviewer: Amanda Lynn Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 10/09/20 01:02 pm Title: Chapter 1 - Hello my name is Tony

Wow, like I said before, I hate to see this end, but I need to know what happens.
I love this story and am looking forward to more from you.

Author's Response: Thank you again! It's been fun. One last LARGE chapter to go!

Reviewer: Elron Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 10/09/20 04:52 am Title: Chapter 29 - The Man in the Mirror

Oh, man. I'm happy for Tony, but I feel so guilty. I wanted Tony to stay in the past as Christina. But then I saw how his life had changed. Business was good. He was still married and his wife loved him. For a moment I thought he might have been married to Amber. (My prediction.) They were about to try for a family. And he gave it all up to stay in the past. Plus losing all his memories. (Another prediction. I'm 1 for 2 here.) Would I have done that? Hard to say. Two weeks as Christina? Sure. Two months, why not? Twenty years? I would definitely need some time to weigh the pros and cons.

Now I assume the last chapter will fill in the 20 years that Tony is reliving as Christina. I hope it was worth it for her. I hope she can help Amber improve her situation. I hope she can save Chase and his girlfriend - whoever she is. I hope the GA looks in on Chrissy occasionally even if Chrissy never finds out. Gotta give her some props here for making it all possible.

Tfes8, you made me think. You drew me into the story. Made me care. Made me relate to the characters. Think about my own teenage years, my friends, and my relationships. My own family and friends who passed away in the last 20 years. Your story has been magical in every sense of the word and I am glad you shared it. Thank you. Always your fan, Elron.

Author's Response: "And he gave it all up to stay in the past." This interpretation actually make the storys ending sound darker than I had intended. I considered making Amber the new wife, but that would make Tonys decision to leave the future even crazier! Your assumption on the next chapter is pretty close. There's a lot to cover! As always thank you for the kind reviews! These have certainly kept me going through this story!

Reviewer: Distemic Signed Report
Date: 10/09/20 04:39 am Title: Chapter 29 - The Man in the Mirror

this is a great story and i've been entrenched since chapter 1 was posted. on the days a new chapter wasn't posted, i was disappointed because i needed to know what happened next. you're a great writer and can't wait to see more in the future

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the kind comment and reading!

Reviewer: four Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 10/07/20 06:12 am Title: Chapter 1 - Hello my name is Tony

What the hell! I did not like the way that chapter ended but to not spoil things for others I won't say more but ooooooOOoo I was not pleased but also I adore the story so i am pleased!

Author's Response: Don't worry. I don't think anyone want it to end this way. The story is not over yet.

Reviewer: Amanda Lynn Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 10/07/20 05:25 am Title: Chapter 1 - Hello my name is Tony

I don't get how she goes back to being Tony, going back to Tony means that everything she did was for naught! Tony didn't save Amber, Chrissy did.
Without Crissy being in the past, there's no Amber in the future, she dies drunk driving! The only way this makes sense is if she remains Chrissy, saves Amber then helps Amber do better. Otherwise it makes no sense.

Author's Response: Back in chapter 3, the GA explains the they would use the same memory altering approach they did at the beginning. Everyone will remember the past 2 weeks that Chrissy was really Tony... yup.. That certainly creates some interesting memories which ill have to address next chapter.

Reviewer: Elron Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 10/06/20 11:01 am Title: Chapter 28 - Jumper

Maybe Chrissy just fainted from all the excitement, adrenaline, and the shock of her GA showing up. Even Chrissy says she is in shock.

If nothing else, Chrissy leaping home leaves a sick Amber passed out by herself in a running car at an intersection at night. The GA wouldn't do that to Amber, would she?

Author's Response: You found a common time travel plot hole. If you go to the future who stays in the present? I'll have to explain next chapter.

Reviewer: Nyssa Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 10/06/20 10:13 am Title: Chapter 28 - Jumper

The cliffhanger is one you could see coming, but it's still perfect. I wonder if your phrasing of the chapter-end questions might be a hint? Or the site you posted it to? Haha, can't wait!

Author's Response: I added those chapter notes so readers didn't get too upset. We still have 2 more chapters to get to our happy ending.

Reviewer: Robyn Hoode Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 10/06/20 09:58 am Title: Chapter 28 - Jumper

Oh no!!! It can't happen like thiis ... can it? However it ends you've done a great job so far and I'll enjoy the rest no matter how you play it :)

Author's Response: Thanks! The journey isn't over yet!

Reviewer: Elron Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 10/06/20 06:02 am Title: Chapter 27 - I Wanna Dance With Somebody

OK, I'm first to chapter 28. It's not even showing updated yet, but I was able to download it.

So, the big reveal. Yes it was worth the wait. Yes, it made perfect sense why Chrissy could save Amber but Tony could not. And you still leave some threads to grab for. I thought Chrissy was going to stick around to tutor Amber and get her a scholarship. Or at least stick around long enough to say goodbye. She certainly earned it.

So the way I see it, if we leap back to 2018, it's Tony who shows up. Just doesn't seem to be a whole lot in it for Chrissy if she misses that 20 years. That's when she and Chase would marry, have kids, whole 9 yards. But if she wakes up in 2018 as Tony the timeline is more-or-less intact, with a few improvements Chrissy made to Tony's life in 1997.

On the other hand, if tomorrow is still 1997, then it's got to be Chrissy - but for how long? Two days, two months, or two decades? Real cliffhanger here, we are looking out over the edge of the Grand Canyon and a mile straight down. But it's the most beautiful cliff in the world. And I'm glad we are all sitting there together waiting to see what happens to Chrissy and Tony.

Tfes8, you have really written a great story here, and I can't wait to see what tomorrow brings. Thank you for all the time you have put into writing this tale. Your fan, Elron.

Author's Response: Gah! The site was down all day. I wanted to have a longer response. But I think you know where I'm heading ;)

Reviewer: Nyssa Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 10/03/20 10:33 am Title: Chapter 27 - I Wanna Dance With Somebody

Great cliffhanger and it might have been my favorite chapter so far. But only 3 more chapters?!!! Nooooo!

Author's Response: Thanks! This chapter certainly has my favorite scene written so far!

Reviewer: Amanda Lynn Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 10/02/20 08:23 pm Title: Chapter 1 - Hello my name is Tony

So she saved Amber, that would mean she can't go back to being Tony because if she did Amber would die.

Author's Response: Well, she hasn't saved Amber yet. But you have it reversed. Save Amber go back to Tony. Don't save Amber, stay as Christina.

Reviewer: Elron Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 10/02/20 01:22 pm Title: Chapter 27 - I Wanna Dance With Somebody

Wow, i thought the dial-up internet was going to be the highlight of this chapter. Man, was I wrong. FWIW, 1998 was the year I got cable internet. 1997 was AOL dial-up.

So, a perfect night on the dance floor, a perfect nice with Chase - except for the motorcycle. What was he thinking? I mean I wound up with a car that had bucket seats and a stick shift for my prom instead of the big car with bench seats I was promised. But a bike? No wonder he reacted so badly to Chrissy's suggestion to give it up.

And now Amber. So it's all jealousy over Chrissy's sudden fame? I think that is only a symptom, not the root cause. Seemed like there was an opportunity to bury the hatchet until the shit with Tim hit the fan. So it looks now like Chrissy is there to save Amber and it would be a lot harder to do as a guy if she is in the girl's restroom unconscious. And a girl could probably get closer to Amber than a guy could at this point. I'd still like to see Chase and Ron beat the shit out of Tim, just because he needs it.

As always, your writing is incredible. The pacing, descriptions, drama - it's all amazing. Sorry to see we have moved one giant step closer to the end. You have really thought this out well.

Author's Response: Haha. The dial-up joke was thrown in there last minute to add to levity to break up the previous emotional chapter and this action packed chapter. Plus at no point in the previous 20+ chapters did I write "And Chrissy disconnects the dial-up internet." So I laughed to myself and decided to add that. Chase seems like the perfect gentlemen, but he's still just a teenager and still a little inexperienced. He didn't put up a fight when i realized that a girl in a prom dress cannot ride a motorcycle. There's more to Amber that will be revealed next chapter. I don't want to spoil it though (plus I'm still writing it and I might change my mind from now until i hit publish!) The story is told first person from Chrissy's POV, so for all we know Ron is likely kicking the s*** out of Tim right now! Thank you as always for the compliments. I'm just hoping that the ending I have planned out is as good as the rest of the story.

Reviewer: Roadbandit Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 10/02/20 10:44 am Title: Chapter 27 - I Wanna Dance With Somebody

Excellent chapter! Nice cliffhanger!

Author's Response: Thanks! With 3 chapters left you won't have to wait long.

Reviewer: Robyn Hoode Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 10/02/20 10:30 am Title: Chapter 27 - I Wanna Dance With Somebody

I'm no expert but the difference between ethyl and methyl alcohol in distillation can be quite narrow ... and the latter can be a killer. So will Chrissy save Amber? I suppose so (unless this is more tragedy and romance!) but 'how' will be entertaining as will the result.

thanks

R

Author's Response: That's really what I was going for with the alcohol distillation. I could've just had the girls get normal drunk.. but I also really wanted to prove Ron right from Chapter 12 that Tim IS bad news. All of the girls have up to this point either got black-out drunk or really sick. You won't have to wait to long to see which way Amber's going.

Reviewer: Amanda Lynn Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 09/30/20 01:46 pm Title: Chapter 1 - Hello my name is Tony

Wow, I think I'm getting to know the end, she can't stay there..... No, but does she have to go back to Tony?
This is a very well written story. I love it.

Author's Response: We'll see! :)

Reviewer: Robyn Hoode Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 09/30/20 01:26 pm Title: Chapter 26 - Just a Girl

So Amber's the target? Did Tony (or, better, will Tony) know Amber 'back' in 2017? Perhaps Amber harmed herself in 1997 and Christina saves her life but Tony (in 1997) couldn't?

thanks

Author's Response: We'll see :)

Reviewer: Elron Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 09/30/20 05:47 am Title: Chapter 26 - Just a Girl

Wow, for some reason there seems to be a lot of tension in this chapter - like winding up a spring. Eventually it is going to let loose and the ensuing chaos might just mess up everything Chrissy has accomplished in the past.
And yeah, there is Amber. We still don't know why she is so antogonistic towards Chrissy. It was going on long before Chrissy 'met' Chase, so it shouldn't be that.
I thought this chapter was especially well-written, particularly near the end when Chrissy talked to herself and then Tony. It does seem like she is being selfish in stealing Tony's life from him, but since she is Tony is not the same as if she got dropped into some stranger's teen age girl life.
Man, time travel can really cause headaches. And heartaches. I don't know how The Doctor can stand it.
Another phenomenal chapter, and one inevitable step closer to the end. Good luck Chrissy.

Author's Response: It's interesting you're comparing this to a wound up spring. That's what the audience is feeling, because we know that are a lot of unresolved things going on. Christina, meanwhile has felt like a weight has been lifted on her. She's accepted her fate, and she's happy with it. Will she be prepared for what fate really has in store? So - another time travel story. This time a book. My favorite book is The Time Traveler's Wife. Henry jumps randomly around through his wife's timeline in a crazy predestination manner. Wonderfully written as the two out-of-sync timelines merge and converge again. I'm I'm generally not into predestination stories. But this is hands down my favorite book. It's the only book I've read multiple times. The movie doesn't really do it justice... except for Rachel McAdams who was my dream casting for Claire before the movie was announced anyway.

Reviewer: Lailaluvs00 Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 09/30/20 04:37 am Title: Chapter 26 - Just a Girl

What a great take on her mental state!

Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it! I've had this chapter partially written for months!

Reviewer: Sabina Signed Report
Date: 09/29/20 01:12 am Title: Chapter 1 - Hello my name is Tony

I feel like I've maybe finally figured out what the task was, and really hoping I'm right! Don't want to say it in case I am, but if I'm right well played on keeping it hidden! Been loving this story since the beginning!

Author's Response: I'd love to hear whether you were right when its over!

Reviewer: Amanda Lynn Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 09/28/20 03:59 pm Title: Chapter 1 - Hello my name is Tony

As I told you, I can't wait to see how it turns out, but at the same time I don't want it over.
This is a really good story. Ring where Amber fits in.Well written, great characters and plot.
I'm looking forward to se

Author's Response: We're getting so close to the big reveals.. can almost taste it! I'm excited about it. I just hope my writing does the finale, justice.

Reviewer: bloodraven Signed Report
Date: 09/28/20 03:58 pm Title: Chapter 25 - One Sweet Night

Good chapter. I did notice that this one was a bit rough on the editing. But it didn't detract from the story.

Speaking of... so Chrissy lost her virginity... could she be pregnant? Condoms are not 100% effective... that would certainly change where Chance ended up. Although while Chrissy seems to think she needs to save Chase I'm not convinced that's what she's there for. I think the answer is staring us in the face but we've missed it because there were more obvious clues.

I too am gonna be sad when this is over, but that's okay. This is one hell of a story and I'm enjoying the ride.

Author's Response: Thanks for the heads up on the editing. I posted it last Saturday night - then the site went down. I can go back and fix it tonight. Thanks for the comments! Yeah - Chrissy is 100% focused on Chase at the moment that she really has seen any of the clues that have been starting at her in the face. (Granted I've only sprinkled in the clues so far. I'm hoping on tieng those clues together shortly.

Reviewer: Lailaluvs00 Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 09/28/20 03:57 pm Title: Chapter 25 - One Sweet Night

Wow, quite a day for our heroine! Things have gotten a little Pollyannaish, glad to see there's still Amber to play the foil.

Author's Response: So yeah - it's a little on the "lack of drama" side because I screwed up the pacing early on in the story. I knew where I wanted the climax of the story to be, but I accidentally resolved all of the drama on Day 7. So I was forced to draw-out some drama and create new ones. If i had to do it again, I either would've shorted the amount of time Christina was given, or draw out some of the week 1 drama.

Reviewer: Nyssa Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 09/28/20 12:46 pm Title: Chapter 25 - One Sweet Night

Definitely bad news that the end is so close. I've been eagerly awaiting each installment as Tony/Christina stumbles and triumphs through this do-over. And who wouldn't want to go back and see what they might have missed? To do so as a different "you"? Even better. But you've done a great job telling the story, so it's not just a great premise. Can't wait to see how you tie it all up!

Author's Response: Thank you! This story certainly has me questioning all of the possibilities. It's almost a shame the guardian angel only give Christina a two week deadline!

Reviewer: Robyn Hoode Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 09/28/20 11:15 am Title: Chapter 25 - One Sweet Night

Makes me sad too :) You're writing a good tale. I hope there's more there but, for now, finish this.

Author's Response: I'll be sad when it's over too. This has been too much fun!

Reviewer: Roadbandit Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 09/28/20 11:04 am Title: Chapter 25 - One Sweet Night

Awesome chapter, I love the storyline, I’m sorry that there’s only 5 chapters left ! Well maybe follow up storylines ?

Author's Response: Thanks! We'll see about follow up story lines. Right now I want to really have a satisfying ending for these characters.

Reviewer: Elron Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 09/27/20 09:34 am Title: Chapter 25 - One Sweet Night

So Chrissy and Chase consummated their relationship. I kind of hoped she would wait, after all it's only their 3rd date. But they are horny teens and Chrissy might not get another chance. At least they used protection. I thought more would happen in the hot tub, but maybe too much risk of getting caught.
And now her mind is made up. She is staying. I think I would as well. Too many reasons to stay, too few to return.
I liked the way you wrote the sex scene - rushed. The parents were just across the street, and at any time one of them could have popped back over for a forgotten item, or something the host had run out of - ice, for example. Can't say my first was much different, for the same reasons. Brings back good memories. Thank you.
So now that we are over that hump (haha) it's time for the dance. And I'm sure Chrissy's GA will be stopping by to discuss Chrissy's priorities with her. Like you, I am sad to think we are one chapter closer to the end. But on a more optimistic note, we are also one chapter closer to your next great story. I still can't believe this is your first. It's too well thought out and executed.

So I was gonna bring up 'Whales' aka Star Trek: The Voyage Home. I loved that movie because it wasn't so serious. "No, I'm from Iowa. I only work in outer space." And maybe that guy DID invent transparent aluminum. But since Chrissy has made up her mind, the only time travel she will be doing will be one day at a time into the future. Riiiiiiight???

Author's Response: Thats bizarre. This chapter didnt validate yet. So I was going back and forth on whether I would let them have sex. With the way the rest of the story is laid out, there really wouldn't be anymore time... unless I put the sex scene in the epiloge. I decuded that Christina is a grown 37 year old adult with raging teenage hormones. She knows what she wants and she wants it now. "Star Trek: The one with the Whales" was my favorite as a kid. As an adult its now Undiscovered County. But damn is that wasnt a fun movie. No villas. No space battles. Just 80s humor with a environmental message. But yeah- if Chrissy stays, 2018 will come on day at a time.

Reviewer: PepitoBat Signed Report
Date: 09/25/20 09:26 am Title: Chapter 24 - It's Friday, I'm in Love

Thanks for the chapter ! :)

Author's Response: You're welcome!

Reviewer: Elron Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 09/25/20 05:47 am Title: Chapter 23 - La Vie en Rose

Chapter 24 - So, Chrissy put one and one together and realized she is Chase's girlfriend, and Chase's girlfriend also dies in the motorcycle crash. But she is right in thinking that's still a long way off. If her and Chase were truly meant to be, they would be married long before Ron's wedding and the accident. Still, it would make me panic just thinking about it. For now, just worry about making it through Homecoming without screwing up anything or anyone else's life. Gotta admit - Chrissy's life sure is enticing right now.

Author's Response: She's been dating Chase for what.. 2 days. And she's thinking about affecting his life in 8 years. That's a long way to go! Yeah - there's not much really going on in Chapter 24. It's like the slow incline part of a roller-coaster before the drop. That's Chapter 24.

Reviewer: Day Dreamer Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 09/24/20 03:26 am Title: Chapter 23 - La Vie en Rose

Loving all of this; the TG, interactions, conflicts, metaphysical. Just popping in to say, "thank you" again, looking forward to the rest of the story.

Author's Response: You're welcome! Thank you for popping in!

Reviewer: Day Dreamer Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 09/24/20 03:26 am Title: Chapter 23 - La Vie en Rose

Loving all of this; the TG, interactions, conflicts, metaphysical. Just popping in to say, "thank you" again, looking forward to the rest of the story.

Reviewer: Elron Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 09/24/20 03:03 am Title: Chapter 23 - La Vie en Rose

Well Chrissy showed maturity beyond her years in apologizing to Chase for last night. I guess that is to be expected, given that she is 37 mentally and maybe even emotionally. I'm also glad Chase was able to see the bigger picture and not let this disagreement ruin their chances together. At this point I'd put the odds of Chrissy staying in the past at 99%. We'll have to see what kind of curveballs her GA throws at her in upcoming chapters to make that number change.

So today's time travel show is "Timeless" the short-lived, and shorter-relived TV show from 2016-2018. A very wealthy, powerful, and private individual uses a mercenary to go back in time and change historic events - like the Hindenburg not exploding. But for what purpose? And three hired hands have to follow him around time and try to undo the changes he is making.

The butterfly effect is strong with this one. In the first episode, they fix the Hindenburg timeline, but in doing so, the main character's sister ceases to exist. So now, in addition to fixing the merc's changes, she is trying to get her sister back.

My wife and I were glued to every episode of timeless. Each episode featured a real event in history, because I was googling them as we watched. One of the most compelling was the episode about H. H. Holmes, who built a hotel of torture in 1900s Chicago. That all really happened! OMG!

I thought the show got a little too deep into the background behind the time travel events. The wealthy guy behind it all was an enigma the public could not unravel, and as a result the ratings went down and even a last-ditch reprieve could not save it. I highly recommend the show for the historical aspects and the attempt at making a cohesive storyline out of it all. But the public is just not cerebral enough to follow all the threads taking place behind the time machine, so to speak.

Author's Response: It's certainly challenging to write a character who is 37 years old mentally and emotionally but who is immersed in the life of a 17 year old. She goes back and forth between being an experienced mature adult and a teenager who is still finding herself. I'm glad this chapter got really good reviews. I hope everyone is excited for the final acts. Buckle-up, the story is about to shift into another gear from here on out. I have not seen Timeless. Honestly since NBC canceled "Journeyman" I stopped watching any sci-fi show that network TV put out because I knew it would get cancelled right away. I should start a list of things I should watch when I finally have the time.

Author's Response: Oh yeah - no one noticed that I posted Chapter 23 on September 23. Which also happens to be Christina's birthday! ;) Actually all of that was entirely coincidental.

Reviewer: Robyn Hoode Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 09/23/20 04:19 pm Title: Chapter 23 - La Vie en Rose

This story flows so well and realistically - well as realistically as a story involving time travel and a guardiam angel can ever hope to do! It still remains for Christina to find out not only what her task is but to accomplish it. If it's not 'saving' Chase (though as a former very enthusiastic motorcyclist, myself I'm not at all sure 'saving' is the right word) then what might it be?

I'm wondering what will happen when time is called on Christina 1997 (which is recent history to me!) and she returns to being 2020 Tony. If it happened to me I know what I'd opt for - 1997 and no Corvid 19 :) even though I'd still be 57. Not so sure I'd like 1957 and being 17 again, though!

Author's Response: I'm the same age as Christina - so I'm currently 40. I'd love to be back in my early 20's again. Not sure if I'd like to be 17 though. Don't worry.. this story will NOT touch 2020 with a 6-foot socially-distance poll. I purposely set the story in 2018 so I didn't have to address this year at all. :)

Reviewer: nitewatchman Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 09/23/20 03:55 pm Title: Chapter 23 - La Vie en Rose

I am REALLY enjoying this story. I love the details, and the drawn-out characters in it.

I have some ideas as to how it might end for Tony/Christina, but for now am just enjoying the ride.

Thanks for posting!

Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I'd love to hear what your prediction was after I'm all done.

Reviewer: Amanda Lynn Signed Report
Date: 09/23/20 12:19 pm Title: Chapter 1 - Hello my name is Tony

Chrissie and Chase, they just seem so natural together!
I do hope that they stay together.
I think the mistake was being born make.

Author's Response: I'm glad they seem natural. I really tried to make them compatible so Chrissy has a great reason to stay as she is.

Reviewer: bloodraven Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 09/23/20 11:35 am Title: Chapter 1 - Hello my name is Tony

I was hoping The Famiy Man wasnt going to be brough up here but its logical it was. I hated tha movie, because I loved it. Pulling Nick away from where he clearly belonged made it nothing more than a daydream. I don't recall him trying to recreate that with Tea, because she definitely was not the same person in the last scene.

Anyways, if you haven't watched Millenium yet don't. Its a terrible movie. The book by John Varley is much better. I saw the movie when it came out and never watched it again, and its probably been 30 years since I read the book. I think you'll get more from the book than the movie.

Anyways, Chrissy's story is a daydream I've certainly had... I'd love to go back in time and redo my life and have wondered what it would be like. I'm a few years older than Tony, but I'm also on a nostalgic kick for 90s music so a lot of these songs remind me of those times. So envious that Tony gets to be Chrissy, and the girl in me hopes Chrissy wins, for lack of a better term.

Author's Response: After a month of writing a story from Christina's POV - I think I'm envious too. This has been too much fun! Thanks for the review! When I get a free moment, maybe I'll check out Millenium the book instead of the movie. Right now I only really have 2 hours a day to myself.

Reviewer: Lailaluvs00 Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 09/23/20 11:24 am Title: Chapter 23 - La Vie en Rose

Another wonderful chapter, i can really relate to Chris and what she's going through.

Author's Response: Thank you!

Reviewer: Elron Signed Report
Date: 09/22/20 04:44 am Title: Chapter 22 - Go The Distance

I loved "Family Man". I'm just a sucker for happy endings. I was bummed when the 6 weeks was up, but at least we saw Cage trying to re-create that alternate universe for real.

I think the whole point of Tony going back in time was to intentionally create a new timeline leading up to 2018. One where Tony has completed his mission as Chrissy in the past and either solved or prevented a problem that occurs in the 'normal' path to 2018. But I would think that no matter what Chrissy does in 1997, there will be ramifications in 2018. And only Tony/Chrissy will be aware of them since he is the Time Lord LOL

So here is a little-known time-travel movie for you: "Millenium". In the future, humans are sterile and the population is dying out. But, they have time travel capabilities, so crews go back in time and save people from disasters that would have killed them and take those people to the future to repopulate the earth. Like a plane that is about to crash, or the Titanic. It has Cheryl Ladd in it, so it's worth watching just for her.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=S0k8xDtHnNM&ab_channel=ScreamFactoryTV

Author's Response: I don't think its a spoiler to say we'll eventually end up back in 2018. The question is whether it will be the quick way or the long way. The angel told Christina to fix an event but also encouraged her to improve herself too. There will certainly be changes. I'm looking forward to writing it! Millenium.. i think you finally found a time travel movie I'm not familiar with. Will have to take a look.

Reviewer: Amanda Lynn Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 09/22/20 02:32 am Title: Chapter 1 - Hello my name is Tony

Go get him, Chrissy!

Author's Response: Exactly! I'm excited! I have the next chapter's draft written right now. I'm eager to publish it, but alas it still has a ton of editing needed.

Reviewer: Elron Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 09/21/20 10:59 am Title: Chapter 22 - Go The Distance

Ok, today's movie: "The Family Man." Nick Cage (yup) stars as a hot-shot wealthy and single investment broker who gets to spend 6 weeks in an alternate reality where he chose instead to put a ring on Tia Leoni and live a very different life. What will he do at the end of the 6 weeks..........?
I like this movie because of the parallels to my own life - although I was never rich, a hot-shot, a banker, and I never even met Tia Leoni. But I have kept in contact with a girl I was very serious about a long time ago. It's been interesting to see how our lives unfolded along very different paths. She overcame some serious struggles and poor decisions to make something of herself. I told her just last week how proud I was of her for all she has accomplished. It was cathartic.
Like Tony uncovering repressed memories, you're making me rethink my own relationships. Thanks.

Author's Response: Family Man. A much better Nick Cage movie that the others. I actually enjoyed it and have watched it on several occasions. Many of the movies you mentioned have certainly influenced me. It's entirely possible that Tony/Christina wakes up in 2018 in an alternate reality based on the events she changed in 1997. Maybe?

Reviewer: Elron Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 09/21/20 10:37 am Title: Chapter 22 - Go The Distance

Wow, so much to take in from this chapter. The aftermath of the fight with Chase, the track meet, Tony's introspection, but most importantly the talk with guardian angel.

1. So nothing Chrissy does in 2 weeks will save Chase.
2. Staying may or may not save him - but they haven't run the simulations on that one. What, are Al and Ziggy gonna show up in this story at some point?
3. And saving Chase is not her mission.
4. If Chrissy completes her mission she can go back to being Tony in 2018.
5. If she fails her mission, she is stuck as Chrissy in the past.
6. Pass or Fail, she can opt to stay in the past as Chrissy.

Important pieces to the puzzle, but where do they all fit together?

Well, since everyone in 2018 seems to be doing OK except for Chase, it would seem that Tony's mission is about him, his ex, or their marriage.

And Chrissy is determined to save her relationship with Chase, oops, I mean save his life. At least Chrissy's father is keeping a level head through all of this - he remembered to record Voyager. Score 1 for dad.

You are the master of suspense, my friend. Great job.

Author's Response: Thank you! Thank you! I was excited with this chapter. I didn't have nearly the same writers' block as I had with the previous chapter. Hopefully I can tie all of these puzzle pieces together properly as we get to the end. We're getting close, but I don't want to rush it!

Reviewer: Elron Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 09/21/20 06:16 am Title: Chapter 22 - Go The Distance

You can't imagine how hard it is to save this chapter for tomorrow so I can get some sleep before going to work.

Reviewer: Amanda Lynn Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 09/20/20 02:24 pm Title: Chapter 1 - Hello my name is Tony

I did not see that coming.
Definitely the wrong time to bring up losing the bike, gotta make him fall head over heals for you first, not just two dates.

Author's Response: I agree! I bet Christina at the end of the chapter agrees too.

Reviewer: Elron Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 09/18/20 08:16 am Title: Chapter 21 - Whiplash

This must have been a very difficult chapter to write. It is deep on so many levels. First we have Ron pointing out to Chase, "that's my seat." Then Chrissy's revelation that she would prefer to stay in the past. The fight between Chrissy and Chase. She really did not think things through before confronting Chase about his bike and it may cost them both big time. Finally, memories of Tony's fight with WHAT'S HER NAME about parenthood. That might be the most important piece of this story so far. Tony wants kids and she doesn't. If Tony stays in the past she can literally take matters into her own hands.

Very powerful emotions at play here. I am both excited to read each word of this story, and saddened to think we are slowly marching toward an end. You have really created a compelling story. I knew after the first chapter that it was going into my 'favorites' folder to be read again. Thank you so much for the time you have invested in writing Second Chances. I can tell it's not just words being poured onto paper to sort themselves out. You have painstakingly thought through this and it clearly shows in the finished product. Your fan, Elron.

OK, given the fight with Chase, this is probably the right time to bring up this episode of Star Trek: TOS. "City on the Edge of Forever." Arguably the best episode of the series. If only it had Tribbles in it. McCoy goes through a time portal into earth's past and screws things up so bad the Enterprise no longer exists. Kirk and Spock must go through the portal to find McCoy and restore the original timeline - but at what price? You know, much as I would like to go back in time to fix some mistakes I made growing up, I can't help but be afraid I would only make my present time even worse upon returning. Damn, you are a great writer.

Author's Response: This was certainly a difficult chapter to right - emotional - plus I had a case of writers block. After resolving the Amber drama, I was a point where I thought had nowhere left to go - and I'm still another 4 or 5 chapters from where I want the climax to be. But addressing the Chase issue and more of Tony's emotional baggage felt like it needed to happen now - even though I knew it would hurt. It's bitter sweet. I have the rest of the story mapped out from here on out, so I know the ending is fast approaching. Thank you again for these inspirational words and these great engaging reviews! I didn't think my first story would have the impact that it has had. City on the Edge of Forever is a classic. They best part of it is that it's really a tragedy. The dialog between Kirk, Spock and Bones at the climax of that episodes. "Do you know what you've done?" "He know's Doctor" (i'm paraphrasing here of course). This story right here has the potential to end in tragedy if I so desired - but I'm not feeling that. I want the ended to be organic and earned.

Reviewer: HeatherNYon Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 09/17/20 05:16 pm Title: Chapter 21 - Whiplash

This is the most compelling piece of fiction, of any genre, that I have read in quite a while. I am totally wrapped up in these characters.

Usually, my attitude towards teen angst is to discount it, because things that seemed essential when we are young become distant memories later. However, in this case, everything happening carries a real sense of urgency and importance, not just for the past but for the present and future.

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm glad this story and its characters are resonating with its readers. I liked your description of the type of drama that's in the story and how it's not your typical teen angst drama.

Reviewer: Elron Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 09/16/20 03:40 am Title: Chapter 1 - Hello my name is Tony

Nick Cage's character had such a stupid sounding voice in Peggy Sue I almost cut it short. Why does he always get such unusual roles? I think Con Air might have been his last good role. Though he was pretty good in Sorcerer's Apprentice.

Author's Response: Maybe that's why I didn't like Peggy Sue. I think it was one of Nick Cage's worst roles. He was such an unlikable character in that movie.

Reviewer: Elron Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 09/16/20 01:51 am Title: Chapter 20 - Things Are Looking Up

Wow, Chrissy isn't even going to have time to sleep in the next week, let alone complete her mission to get back to the future. All these activities. Amber is no longer the enemy. Chrissy is popular. She really doesn't want to leave.

I'm glad she had 'the talk' with Ron. But having been in his shoes, I know that Chrissy just broke his heart into a million pieces and fed them to sewer rats who will gnaw on them for the next 20 years. He is way too good a friend for the friend zone.

Today's time travel movie: "Peggy Sue Got Married". Kathleen turner goes back in time 25 years to high school to avoid the one big mistake she made with her bad-boy boyfriend Nick Cage. Will she do better the second time around? Or is fate unchanging?

Author's Response: So things are lookup up for Chrissy. Too bad the story's not over yet. ;) Yeah - I've been in Ron's position too too many times to count. I'm hoping the Ron-Christina friendship is more of a long-term platonic kind. Not many of those type of M-F relationships exist. But they're out there. I only just watched Peggy Sue Got Married for the first time sometime this past year. (reads Wikipedia to get a refresher). Ah yes. Not as good as I had hoped. There is certainly something to be said about predestination stories, though.

Reviewer: Amanda Lynn Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 09/14/20 04:25 pm Title: Chapter 1 - Hello my name is Tony

I am really loving this story. Can't wait till the next installment to see how the date goes.

Author's Response: Thanks! I'm currently writing the double date chapter. Hopefully it goes well for Christina and friends! :)

Reviewer: Lailaluvs00 Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 09/11/20 04:02 pm Title: Chapter 19 - Waves

Another great chapter!

Author's Response: Thanks!

Reviewer: Elron Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 09/11/20 02:07 pm Title: Chapter 19 - Waves

Chrissy and Chase,
Sitting in a tree,
K-I-S-S-I-N-G.
First comes love,
Then comes marriage,
Then comes Tony in a baby carriage!
Looks like they had an awesome first date. I said Chrissy's decision to go back to the future would depend how things things went on her date. At this point I think she needs to buy more than one box of tampons.
However, Amber's phone call could not have been a coincidence. Maybe she had her sights set on Chase and now Chrissy is moving on on her prey? It sure was a short time on Amber's good side. Loving the suspense.

Author's Response: We couldn't have more than 4 hours without Amber poking her head in on Chrissy's life could we?

Reviewer: Elron Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 09/11/20 07:11 am Title: Chapter 18 - Face Off

Plenty of smaller elephants in the room as well. Too late to save Jimmy Hoffa or the Challenger Space Shuttle, but still time to prevent the Columbia Shuttle disaster and that fan who interfered with the Chicago Cubs. Seems like Tony's angel would have to impose some strict controls on Chrissy if she remains in the past, like blocking out some or all of her memories of the next 20 years. Too much at stake with the time-space continuum.

Author's Response: ;)

Reviewer: Elron Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 09/11/20 01:51 am Title: Chapter 1 - Hello my name is Tony

I'm glad you didn't identify Tony's ex. It gives you more flexibility in how the story plays out. If you have her a name, and it matched a character from the past, it would take a lot of the mystery out of the story. And mystery is what makes this story so compelling. It might also divulge what happens to Chrissy at the end of her mission. Nah, I think you're on the right track the way you're writing it.

Hmmm, if Chrissy were to remain in the past, she knows about 9/11 and could warn people and save lives. But should she? Classic time travel question. I'd hate to be in her high heels of she found herself staying in the past.
Speaking of shoes, any chance Chrissy might become a cheerleader? She sounds like she has the right look and attitude. And after she buried the hatchet with Amber (and not in her forehead) maybe Amber will invite her to try out. Just a thought.....

Author's Response: 9/11 is very much the elephant the room. (I can't believe TODAY is the 19th anniversary of that awful day) Its the inescapable event you have to deal with when writing a story that time travels to the late 90's / early 2000's. With that being said. I have a few ideas in my head how I want to deal with that. I've purposely not mentioned it AT ALL so far. But depending on which direction Christina takes - I may have to mention it. But it's the classic time travel problem. Kill Hitler? Prevent 9/11? How does that affect the future? Does preventing those events just delay another worse event?

Author's Response: Oh an I'm not sure Amber can handle TWO Demarco girls on that squad. It might be too late for fall cheerleading - plus she'd have to give up band. But if Christina stays around long enough, there's always winter cheerleading and competition season? It has potential.

Reviewer: Kathryn Mayhew Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 09/10/20 05:12 pm Title: Chapter 18 - Face Off

This story is utterly amazing. Kudos for writing a lovely, interesting story! I can't get enough!
I'm kinda hoping Christina gets a happy ending, and I really hope she can save Chase. Awesome!

Author's Response: Thank you for the kind words!

Reviewer: Elron Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 09/10/20 02:29 am Title: Chapter 18 - Face Off

Oh, man, this is a really pivotal chapter. Chrissy starts exploring the possibility of staying in the past. I think her upcoming date with Chase might have a lot to say in her future plans. Since Tony's benefactor is omnipotent, why does it have to be exactly 2 weeks? Could an extension be given if Chrissy doesn't turn in her book report on time? (time - get it LOL).

I think you're right about Ron. He has a great wife and child in the future. It would be wrong to mess with that, even though in the past it seems like Ron and Chrissy were made for each other. Well, how many high school romances make it last for 20 years? Not many, I'll bet. None of mine did..........

It seems a bit out of character for Chrissy to bow down to queen bee Amber like she did. It may have smoothed things over in the short term, but in the long run it just feeds Amber's ego and could encourage her or other students to push Chrissy around.

On the other hand, escalation won't end anything in the next week, and could affect Chrissy's ability to go back to Tony's future. Sometimes you have to step back and look at the bigger picture. Chrissy showed maturity (she is 37 years old after all) in playing the battle to Amber's strengths (or weaknesses) to resolve the conflict.

Here's a random thought - Tony's ex-wife's name is Amber. Coincidence? I think not. Tony's mission in the past might be to smooth over the rough edges both Amber's and Tony's personalities, so they can make it as a couple in the present time. And maybe only a girl can reach deep enough into Amber's psyche to help her. (BTW, that BS answer would have gotten me full credit in Philosophy class.) But that means Chrissy HAS to go back to the future as Tony to make his mission in the past 'meaningful'. Otherwise, what's the point of going back in time in the first place.

OK, this week's time travel movie is "The Lake House". I know it's probably considered a chick flick, but I just like the time travel elements. I thought the mechanism for time change was very novel and creative. Neo plants a sapling in his time, and it's a full grown tree in Sandra Bullock's time. Time machine communication by snail-mail. Very well done.

Speaking of very well done, you already know what I think of your writing. Add today's accolade onto the pile. You're doing an amazing job. A story like this requires careful planning to keep everything in sync, and you're doing an amazing job. Will the reader get a peek at what is taking place in Tony's time, like the photo Marty McFly was holding in "Back to the Future"? Or will you just keep us in the dark and on edge for the rest of the story? Thanks, Elron.

Author's Response: Two weeks was an estimate that I regret writing as "two weeks" or maybe I regret starting the story on a Tuesday. Without giving too much away, I'm going to divulge that the climax of the story does NOT take place on Day 14. Bowing down to Amber was very out of character, but Christina hated every moment of it. So Tony's wife. It was a complete oversight early that I forgot to give her a name. I did toy with the idea that Tony's wife is someone Christina is interacting with in 1997. But it felt too forced. I read a CD story on FM a few months ago that had that exact twist ending. My mind was blown, but it won't fit here. I do have some plans for Tony's wife towards the end of the story. Lake House. Good Movie. Underrated. I like when stories find a creative twist on an older genre. Time Travel via Snail mail is certainly thinking outside of the (mail)box. So I went back and forth on whether I was going to have changes to the future affect Christina real-time. Like Time Cop, Frequency, or Butterfly Effect, but I decided to let it all play out so that our protagonist is surprised at the same time as the readers.

Author's Response: Two weeks was an estimate that I regret writing as "two weeks" or maybe I regret starting the story on a Tuesday. Without giving too much away, I'm going to divulge that the climax of the story does NOT take place on Day 14. Bowing down to Amber was very out of character, but Christina hated every moment of it. So Tony's wife. It was a complete oversight early that I forgot to give her a name. I did toy with the idea that Tony's wife is someone Christina is interacting with in 1997. But it felt too forced. I read a CD story on FM a few months ago that had that exact twist ending. My mind was blown, but it won't fit here. I do have some plans for Tony's wife towards the end of the story. Lake House. Good Movie. Underrated. I like when stories find a creative twist on an older genre. Time Travel via Snail mail is certainly thinking outside of the (mail)box. So I went back and forth on whether I was going to have changes to the future affect Christina real-time. Like Time Cop, Frequency, or Butterfly Effect, but I decided to let it all play out so that our protagonist is surprised at the same time as the readers.

Reviewer: Amanda Lynn Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 09/09/20 07:03 pm Title: Chapter 1 - Hello my name is Tony

Hmm, I think that Christina is beginning to want to stay and forget Tony ever existed.
Something will happen and she and Amber will become friends, there is something going on with Amber.
She seems like she will fall for Chase and not want him to die.
This is a very good story that put me in a quandary, I want to know howw it ends without having it end.

Author's Response: I'm in the same quandary. I really want to write and share the ending with everyone. But that means it'll be over.

Reviewer: HeatherNYon Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 09/09/20 06:45 pm Title: Chapter 18 - Face Off

I am getting worried that Christina/Tony will have to make a really big decision and a sacrifice. Assuming that the mission is something important liking saving Chase, completing the mission will lead to Tony coming back. This could be really tragic if Christina develops feelings for Chase. Unless the guardian angel is full of it, and the way Christina actually saves Chase is by being Christina with Chase, and the big decision is just a challenge for Christina and not the actual goal.

Author's Response: This makes me eager to get to writing the climax/ending. It's all in my head (and in a outline document) and I'm hoping the finished product comes out as epic as everyone expects it to be!

Reviewer: Lailaluvs00 Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 09/09/20 01:45 pm Title: Chapter 18 - Face Off

Really loving this journey

Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad it can share it with everyone!

Reviewer: Elron Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 09/07/20 04:21 pm Title: Chapter 17 - You're Makin' Me High

Let's start with Jessica. Wow, just wow. Chrissy even seemed a little jealous that Jess had bigger boobs. There's no way I could have just stopped and went home. I guess there is more of Tony inside Chrissy than it seems. Reminds me of a line from 'Beautiful Loser' by Bob Seger. "He wants to dream like a young man, with the wisdom of an old man."

Now for Ron. I really feel bad for Ron. He has feelings for Chrissy and yet has to sit there and take it while she dates Chase, Jess, and Fay.

It seems like Tony is putting more effort into fixing Chrissy's life than Tony's life. That coupled with Tony thinking he MIGHT wake up as himself next week makes me think there is a little foreshadowing towards Tony remaining in the past as Chrissy. Other than Amber, Chrissy seems to have everything going her way. And Tony really has nothing to go back to in the future, so why not stay?

Great writing, love the suspense, love the drama, love the details (especially the boob comparison with Jess). So today's time travel mobile question - have you seen 'Hot Tub Time Machine'? Guys go back in time to fix the past, one stays behind and invents Google before Google. Becomes really rich. Awesome movie.

Author's Response: I like that. "He wants to dream like a young man, with the wisdom of an old man" That almost does describe Christina. Despite her getting re-acclimated to being a teenager in high school, she still has 37 years of experiences.I actually had to rewrite this chapter multiple times. I toyed with different ways Chrissy would leave Jess's place. I was trying to strike a balance of letting Chrissy have fun while still keeping some of Tony's maturity. I'm not sure what I want to do with Ron. I think I wrote myself into a corner by describing him earlier as happily married with a kid. If Christina did try to change his future it would be rather selfish of her. I'm going to start exploring how Christina sees her new life over the next few chapters. It's going to be important she compares her life as Christina vs her life as Tony before we get to the climax of the story. I enjoyed Hot Tub Time Machine. It's certainly a favorite of mine. I like when they can take a semi-serious genre like time travel and make a tongue in cheek comedy.

Reviewer: Amanda Lynn Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 09/06/20 03:27 pm Title: Chapter 1 - Hello my name is Tony

Really liking this.

Author's Response: Thanks!

Reviewer: Elron Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 09/06/20 07:04 am Title: Chapter 16 - The Amber Strikes Back

A great day for Christina. I'm surprised she didn't have a visit from her fairy godmother posing as one of her friends. So the only negative is Amber. Could be Chrissy's mission is to make peace with with Amber? It could have long - term effects on Tony's time-line. Of course with all the good things happening right now I could see Tony doing whatever he has to do to stay in the past as Christina. And I still think she belongs with Ron.

You have some fantastic reviews for your story. There isn't much I could add to what has already been written. I think this story strikes a common thread with your readers. Who wouldn't want the chance to fix their past? And doing it as a hot and popular girl to boot. I still can't believe this is your first story. Keep up the great work!

Author's Response: Yeah, I think I forgot to have the guardian angel poke their head in in the last chapter. Christina's certainly due for a visit. These have been great reviews! I'm glad I started this story.

Reviewer: PepitoBat Signed starstarstarstar Report
Date: 09/06/20 04:57 am Title: Chapter 17 - You're Makin' Me High

Thanks for the chapter !

Author's Response: Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: bill_lumberg05 Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 09/01/20 07:55 pm Title: Chapter 16 - The Amber Strikes Back

It was an off-chance that I pulled up some weird fetish stuff like a "tranny stories" search in google and came across this website - then it was an even bigger off-chance that I'd happen to come across this story which INSTANTLY snapped me out of whatever mood I was in and completely captivated me. I am 1000% emotionally and intellectually invested in Tony/Christina's journey right now. This writing is incredible! I've never been able to relate to a character any more than Tony or Christina - and I'm not a divorced man or a cute teenage girl; it's just a gift you have for providing your characters with depth and substance.

I can't wait for the next chapter and at the same time, I don't want this to end - the type of ambivalence you only get from superb story-telling. All of these insights seem so genuine - the way someone would in a time traveling scenario with a "future-programming-background" would handle tech circa 1997. This could be a series on Netflix or just a really great novel with a screenplay option to follow - Hell, I'm no actor but I'd be honored to play Tony, if I wasn't 6'4" and 300lbs. Seriously. I find myself thinking about these characters throughout the day as well as some of my own in stories I've started writing before but hadn't finished. You've got an incredible gift for writing and I'm grateful for this work you're doing. The birthday party scene has me taking a look at my relationship with my parents and I'm finding a deeper fulfillment from time spent with them. Keep up the awesome work and when this story is done, don't keep us waiting too long for the next!

Author's Response: Thank you for the amazing review! It's the first time I've written fiction in almost 20 years, so it means a lot for everyone to enjoy my writing style. I too keep constantly thinking about these chapters as well. I want to write and ending that feels earned and yet satisfying for the readers.

Reviewer: Day Dreamer Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 08/30/20 10:00 pm Title: Chapter 16 - The Amber Strikes Back

You've got me hooked, waiting to see what happens next. Lots of characters, but you're making it relatively easy to follow them anyway. Mysterious setup, hope a good reveal is coming. Entertained and amused how well Chrissy is coming to grips with being a female, at least temporarily. Having to suspend judgement about how if she gets it wrong, though, she's stuck there -- which given her new personal style, she doesn't seem too upset about. Chase's unfortunate future is an interesting twist, what would YOU do in a case like that?

Author's Response: Thank you for the review! You're absolutely right. I've spent the past 14 chapters having Christina build this new wonderful life she has. It will eventually cross her mind that she may actually want to remain here. In order to do that she has to fail at her task. So there are consequences. Without giving away any spoilers, once she figures out what she's here to do she may realize the price is too high.

Reviewer: Amanda Lynn Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 08/30/20 08:31 pm Title: Chapter 1 - Hello my name is Tony

I'm confused here as to who she's supposed to help. I'm beginning to think it's Amber, but Amber wasn't in their former life. But, maybe that's why Chris had to come back as a girl and why they will have to make the decision to remain a girl!
I still think they end up with Chase and save his life.
BTW, five stars again.

Author's Response: It's OK to be confused. I've purposely been very stingy with the foreshadowing of "the event". It will all become clearer the closer we get to it. And why Christina doesn't remember it.

Reviewer: Lailaluvs00 Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 08/30/20 02:38 pm Title: Chapter 16 - The Amber Strikes Back

Have fun!

Author's Response: Thanks!

Reviewer: Elron Signed Report
Date: 08/28/20 09:32 pm Title: Chapter 15 - What I Did Over The Weekend

What if Tony's ex-wife is named Christina? And she's really Tony who stayed in the past, either to save Chase or because her true mission failed? Don't you just love time travel stories!

BTW, if you haven't seen it, check out the movie "Final Countdown".
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=IX33Diwrv3A
Lots of parallels.....

Author's Response: Great Scott! I hadn't thought of that. Yeah. Final Countdown. I hadn't seen it but I've heard of it.

Reviewer: Elron Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 08/27/20 07:59 pm Title: Chapter 15 - What I Did Over The Weekend

Nice of you to give Chrissy the weekend off to recover from her hangover and from trying to save her future.
Hard to believe it's already been a week for Chrissy.
Time flies when you're, um, time traveling haha. I like that she is taking a logical and methodical approach to solving her problems, that was Tony's strength as a programmer. Might as well use the tools you have to solve the problem.
I can't imagine the pain and joy Chrissy feels at seeing her grandparents again. My own dad died in 99 and my brother and sister more recently so I would be incredibly tempted to just say 'fuck the future' and remain in the past to see them all again.
What if Chrissy's mission involves her future ex-wife? I wonder if they will cross paths sometime in the next week? Oh, well, can't wait for the next part.

Author's Response: You're the first one to mention Tony's ex-wife. I hadn't decided what I'm doing with her yet. Hell - I haven't even given her a name yet!

Reviewer: four Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 08/27/20 06:02 pm Title: Chapter 1 - Hello my name is Tony

Hello again! its four for the third time.... anyway awesome new chapter but holy cow, how much do you have planned out, your spoiling us with a impressive chapter every 2 days, thats crazy cool but don't burn yourself out! anyway still loving the story :D

Author's Response: Thanks, I'm glad you liked that chapter! I'm trying not to burn myself out. I'm just super excited to get to the good parts! But alas, I'm on vacation next week, so if the next chapter doesn't drop Sunday morning, then it might be later next week.

Reviewer: Soumahr Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 08/26/20 06:59 am Title: Chapter 14 - The Morning After

I read the entire story in one day. Your story totally captured my attention. I like character interaction are realistic even when there are supernatural elements in the story. Btw your story reminded me of the "relife" webtoon. It has same theme (without time travel). If you haven't read it I will highly recommend it. Now I am Looking forward to the next chapter. 🥳

Author's Response: Thank you for reading and your kind words! I'll check out your recommendation.

Reviewer: Amanda Lynn Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 08/25/20 04:45 pm Title: Chapter 1 - Hello my name is Tony

Yeah, that was gin and tonics, sometimes I hate spell check.
Anyway, it gives me a chance for another five stars.

Author's Response: :)

Reviewer: Amanda Lynn Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 08/25/20 04:44 pm Title: Chapter 1 - Hello my name is Tony

Yeah, I could see my dad being the same way after my first drunk, but it was, after all, at one of my parents parties that I got my first knock out drunk! Just turned 18, legal and tending bar for my sister's graduation experimenting with him and tonics.
Wasn't my last time either. I can't drink anymore as I lost my tolerance for alcohol decades ago and just one drink can make me sick sometimes now.
Loving your story. One star? Boo. Five all the way. I'll review it again with five more just to even it out more.

Author's Response: It was with my parents I first started drinking. My dad would give me an beer at 16/17 and they were of the opinion "If you're going to learn to drink you're going to learn here with us." I too, certainly can't drink as much as I could in my 20's and 30's anymore. Thanks for the the feedback! Reading these reviews (except for that one) is certainly making this worth it!

Reviewer: Robyn Hoode Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 08/25/20 11:12 am Title: Chapter 14 - The Morning After

Even though I'm more than twice as old as Tony, I think his parents in this earlier time are wiser than I am. 'Time served' seemed a good enugh reason for leniency - as well as Chrissy's obvious pain and embarassment at making a fool of herself. Parties were never like that in my teens but there were occasions when they got pretty close and just as embarrassing to recall. Good job I lived and worked a long way from my parents :)

Not sure why having a (possibly) bi-sexual protagonist should justify a 1 star review as one reviewer judged. In the very strange circumstances in which Tony/Chrissy finds her/himself it would be surprising if bisexualty wasn't an issue. Now, will it be Chase or Jess? It will be interesting to find out and I'll happily give you 5*

Author's Response: Thanks for the comment! Unsurprisingly, I modeled Christina's parents after my own. Now, I didn't get black out drunk in high school, but I did in college. This is pretty much how it went down. They looked at me hungover and sick - and laughed at me. No punishment necessary. Yeah - I don't know why that reviewer gave me a 1 star. I clearly put "Becomes Bi-sexual" in the story tags. I wasn't sure if it was a trope they got tired of. I actually let Christina not choose a label so I have flexibility on who she might end up with at the end. The final chapters are still fluid in my notes.

Reviewer: Elron Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 08/25/20 07:13 am Title: Chapter 14 - The Morning After

Wow, that was a very sobering chapter. Chrissy seemed to be flying pretty high, she needed something to remind her she is here for a higher purpose than attending more parties than she did the first time around. I'm glad you approached the morning after the way you did. You didn't gloss over anything, you told it straight. Very well done. I hugged the porcelain god a few times until I learned my lesson, and you brought back some ugly memories of my own. Thanks.
I get the feeling Chrissy's 'mission' is to prevent Chase from dying in the accident later on. So does she do it by convincing him to drive more safely, give up his bike altogether, or does she have to stay as Chrissy in the past and marry Chase to keep him alive? To quote Marty McFly, "This is heavy!"
BTW, since we seem to be on the same wavelength regarding fixing the past, have you ever seen the movie 'Frequency'? I thought it was a great movie, reminded me of my dad. I see some parallels to your story that may give you some more inspiration, although I don't think you really need it. You're doing a tremendous job, and I don't want to sidetrack you, or mess with your own timeline HAHA. Keep doing what you're doing, all the positive reviews are telling you you got it right. Good luck.

Author's Response: I llke your use of "sobering" there. I've been there, done that so many times. I really wanted to capture that feeling. That feeling sucks. So yeah - Frequency - I LOVE that movie! I'm a fan of all time travel stories, but Frequency cleverly weaves 1999 and 1969 together so they're happening simultaneously. It's a very cool variation on the genre. The ending brings me to tears every time!

Reviewer: FaithRomeyer Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 08/25/20 04:19 am Title: Chapter 11 - Confessions

The story so far has been engaging and Chase's appearance as well as his premonition are adding more to the enjoyment factor. Time travel is a genre born for tragedy and a happier outcome is usually a must. I can tell I'm going to enjoy this.

Author's Response: Thanks for the response! I love time travel stories. But yeah, there a potential for the story to end in tragedy, but that's Christina's goal. Changing the future for the better is a must.

Reviewer: YuunaMatsubara Signed star Report
Date: 08/25/20 03:46 am Title: Chapter 14 - The Morning After

>bisexual protagonist

instant 1 star rofl

Reviewer: Lailaluvs00 Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 08/25/20 03:17 am Title: Chapter 14 - The Morning After

Really well written chapter. Hit a lot of plot points without getting bogged down, transitioned smoothly. Parents were amazing if a bit TOO understanding and cool with their eldest's first time coming home blackout drunk! Maybe one of them should have been a bit more bent on discipline with the other stepping in? ;-)

Author's Response: You're right about the whole "TOO understanding". I should've had something in there. In my head they had discussed their approach WAY before Christina woke up.

Reviewer: four Signed Report
Date: 08/24/20 05:18 pm Title: Chapter 13 - Foolish Games

Lemme say, thank you for avoiding the trope and terrible thing of getting drugged at a party. I am enjoying the direction, though the backlash of that punch is gonna be something

Author's Response: You're welcome! Actually I hate when a story starts off fun and light and suddenly goes VERY dark. The drugged/raped troop is not my cup of tea so I promise I'm not going in that direction at all. Granted I introduced a character that will die in an accident, but Christina is going to trying to change that. So hopefully she succeeds!

Reviewer: Elron Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 08/24/20 06:47 am Title: Chapter 1 - Hello my name is Tony

I think everyone has thoughts at one time or another about going back in time to change something about their life - turn right instead of left, say yes instead of no, use a condom.
So it is a very common and relatable theme. You've given it a new twist with the 'angel' and the TG. And not only can Tony make life-altering changes, he might get to (have to) relive those 20 years as Christina. Sounds like a fun and challenging two weeks.

If you get a chance, check out the movie "Mr Destiny".
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=B5gVrNXyfB0

Author's Response: That's funny, cause Mr. Destiny was one of my inspirations. Also the 80's movie "18 Again" and it's reboot "17 Again". Plus a whole slew of late 90's early 2000's teen movies.

Reviewer: Elron Signed Report
Date: 08/23/20 11:11 pm Title: Chapter 1 - Hello my name is Tony

Wow, you have really thought this out way beyond the superficial and stereotypical TG fantasy stories.
It must be pretty gratifying when you put so much effort into your characters that they take on a life of their own. Kind of like giving birth. Shows real talent on your part. Thank you.

Author's Response: Thanks! I didn't expected to be as enthralled with this tale when I first started writing it. It has certainly been fun an gratifying to see everyone get involved with these characters.

Reviewer: Robyn Hoode Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 08/23/20 03:19 pm Title: Chapter 13 - Foolish Games

This is a very entertaining story and I apologise for not saying so earlier. As an add-on, the writing is as entertaining as the story, so thanks for that too :)

Author's Response: Thanks for the compliment! I'm really trying to have Tony/Christina's inner monologue really drive what she's going through.

Reviewer: Roadbandit Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 08/23/20 08:09 am Title: Chapter 13 - Foolish Games

Excellent chapter, one punch Chris! A lot went down in the chapter it read very well.

Author's Response: It was certainly a longer chapter. I felt I just shouldn't have a chapter break mid-party. Thanks for continuing to read!

Reviewer: Elron Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 08/23/20 08:02 am Title: Chapter 13 - Foolish Games

It was good to see Chrissy finally get the upper hand against Amber. She certainly deserved the punch after slapping Chrissy. And too many witnesses to lie her way out of it.
I think Chrissy showed incredible restraint with Jessica. I know if it was me I'd have done anything and everything in that closet. But now Chrissy has put herself out there as a lesbian, but not with Fay. Bet she wasn't thinking this far ahead.
I still think she should be with Ron, he has treated her as a perfect gentlemen - and she has him in the Friend Zone. He needs to work his way into the Couple Zone with her. And she needs to realize what an opportunity she is missing. I was the same way in high school. Trying to land a hot cheerleader so far out of my league, while there were actually girls that liked me that I ignored. Oh, to have the chance to go back and fix things. This story really resonates with me.
Fantastic writing, I can't wait for more.

Author's Response: Elron, you and I must've had the same high school experiences just a decade apart. If I was in Chrissy's shoes I would've gone all the way with Jessica too. I did toy with that idea when writing it. But alas after writing who Christina is after 12 chapters, i realized that she has developed her own persona different from my own and different than Tony, and so I decided that should would likely offer some restraint there.

Reviewer: Elron Signed Report
Date: 08/22/20 07:08 am Title: Chapter 1 - Hello my name is Tony

One does not simply cancel Voyager night with dad. Dear old dad needs his weekly dose of 7 of 9.

Author's Response: Yup! A missed opportunity seeing as its currently season 4 in Sept. '97, and Seven was just introduced.

Reviewer: arcticcell Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 08/21/20 05:05 pm Title: Chapter 12 - T.G.I.F.

I just made my account today just so I could write a review.

Absolutely love your story, I love the plot and I certainly would want to be in Tony's shoes.
I really love the way you write, I mean it's so clean and easy to read, that I get to enjoy the story a lot.

As usual, I love seeing all this new things between Chrissy and Ron, how Ron is just so overprotective and it doesn't click to Tom that it's because she's a girl right now. Also I really think Ron has a crush on Christina.

I'm excited for the next parts, especially the party. Can't wait!

Author's Response: This review made my day! Thank you so much for your kind words. I really means a lot to hear from readers who are enjoying this story.

Reviewer: Amanda Lynn Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 08/21/20 03:03 pm Title: Chapter 1 - Hello my name is Tony

Oh, I know. Amber is in the closet!

Reviewer: Roadbandit Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 08/21/20 10:02 am Title: Chapter 12 - T.G.I.F.

Excellent chapter, I think by the end of the two weeks she will want to remain a woman.

Author's Response: Honestly, if I was in her shoes I'd do the same thing too! That's option she hasn't considered yet. But everything comes with a consequence as she will find out.

Reviewer: Elron Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 08/21/20 09:26 am Title: Chapter 12 - T.G.I.F.

Amber is one mean bitch. I hope that she gets taken down a few notches on her social standing for all the trouble she causes.

I'm glad Chrissy apologized to Ron for her behavior in the car. Things are different with her being a girl, and he was just concerned about her safety and well-being. It will be much better for Chrissy to have Ron with her at the party.

Your writing is awesome. Felt like I was right there with the kids. Of course it helped that I was also in marching band and didn't go to parties in high school. Definitely a band geek.

If I might offer a suggestion, it would be to drop some reminders of the time into the scenery - any news on the radio, or an ad on a billboard for the latest computer or TV show or whatever. You have time travel, might as well make the most of it!
- Princess Diana had just died in a car accident on 8/31/1997. Girls would have been talking about that for a long time.
- Ellen came out sometime that year. Might have a tie-in to what Chrissy is going through with Fay.
- Mike Tyson bit Evander Holyfield's ear.
- The Sojourner rover landed on Mars on July 4.
- Judgment Day, when Skynet takes over the world, was on August 29, 1997 in the Terminator movies.
- Several new TV shows made their premier right around 9/26/1997. South Park, Buffy the Vampire Slayer, Oz, Ally McBeal, Dharma & Greg to name a few. Chrissy and her peers would have been interested in at least some of those. "Did you see that new show about a high school girl who kills vampires? That Angel is soooo hot!" Ron and Tony would have been watching South Park. I'm sure the kids would have been talking about the topics of the day. Helps remind the reader of what was going on, and gives extra depth to the story.

Author's Response: Thanks for the suggestions! Those a certainly good. I've been sprinkling my 90's references using mostly music and technology. I think i wrote myself into a corner by not giving Christina any downtime to watch TV. She's been go-go-go since she got there. I originally had a note in my outline about how she was cancelling "Star Trek: Voyager Night with Dad" by going dancing with Fay, but I forgot to include it. See as she's about to go to a party, there's certainly room for more casual social interactions.

Reviewer: Elron Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 08/21/20 05:34 am Title: Chapter 11 - Confessions

"Workin' on mysteries without any clues" - Bob Seger's Night Moves.
That's what this chapter reminded me of. Tony doesn't seem any closer to finding out why he is in the past and what he needs to do to go home.
So now Christina is crushing on Chase. I still think she belongs with Ron. Can't wait to see what develops between her, Ron, Chase, and Fay. As always, very well written.

Reviewer: Amanda Lynn Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 08/19/20 08:52 pm Title: Chapter 1 - Hello my name is Tony

I think Tony is gone forever.
Christina is gonna fall for Chase and not want him to die and choose to stay as Christina and be with him to prevent it.
Loving this story.

Author's Response: Thanks for the comment! I have a few ideas for the ending written down. Certainly everyone's predictions are hitting on potential endings. I don't want to give away the ending I'm leaning towards though. :)

Reviewer: four Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 08/19/20 05:50 pm Title: Chapter 1 - Hello my name is Tony

First , thank you. This story is wonderful and probably the best story I have read in some time. I am looking forward to what comes next

Author's Response: Thank you for your kind words! I certainly hope the rest of the story doesn't disappoint.

Reviewer: Lailaluvs00 Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 08/19/20 12:21 pm Title: Chapter 11 - Confessions

I'm really Into this story, great work, the suspense is killing me!

Author's Response: Thank you!

Reviewer: Roadbandit Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 08/19/20 10:01 am Title: Chapter 11 - Confessions

The was a deep chapter, I loving the storyline. Excellent work

Author's Response: Thank you!

Reviewer: HeatherNYon Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 08/17/20 10:26 pm Title: Chapter 10 - Escalation

I’m getting tired just reading everything Christina is doing! I do hope that at the end of two weeks, she decides to stick it out (she was never told that she HAD to turn back).

I have fantasized about being able go back and to grow up cis longer than some of the folk here have been alive. I am really curious about how this will work out.

Author's Response: Thanks for the comment! She certainly has done a lot in two days! We're almost approaching the mid-point of the story, and I'm hoping to tie all of these things together.

Reviewer: Elron Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 08/17/20 09:35 pm Title: Chapter 10 - Escalation

I graduated from high school in 1982. We had no cell phones, computers, or internet. Barely had electricity.
I've come to rely so heavily on things like cell phones, the internet, and Google I think I would have a nervous breakdown if I suddenly found myself without those things, even without the gender change. Christina seems to be adapting a lot better, perhaps because her time change wasn't so drastic.

Author's Response: I think Christina is mostly getting by because she's done everything once already. She's back in her teenage home. Her high school. Since she's lived it once already it was easy to fall back in the same routines. Old computers, no cell phone, pre-social media internet.

Reviewer: Elron Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 08/17/20 09:22 pm Title: Chapter 10 - Escalation

This chapter was perfect. Self-contained with the softball game. You're doing a great job of finding the breakpoints so there aren't a lot of unexpected loose ends to tie up. In this case, just the lingering Amber issues, but that will be a common thread for much of the story - kind of a binder holding things together.
Your foreshadowing is great as well. That party will really be eventful. I'm expecting Amber to cause as much trouble for Christina as possible, but got to give Christina props for taking the high road - so far.
And then the cherries on top was the naked girl boob comparison in the girl's locker room. Only thing missing was some lesbian groping, but I'm sure you're saving that for Fay LOL.
Again, great job with the writing, your chapters are really worth waiting for.

Author's Response: Thanks for the comment and compliments. I think I've found a nice groove of splitting a day in the life of Christina into 2-3 Chapters

Reviewer: Amanda Lynn Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 08/17/20 03:53 pm Title: Chapter 1 - Hello my name is Tony

Hmmm, I'm looking forward to seeing what happens at this party! Will there be a showdown with Amber or will there be something happen that bonds them?
Will She meet a boy? Will she find she likes Ron or will Ron fix her up?
So many possibilities!

Author's Response: So many possibilities indeed. The next few chapters will certain turn Christina's work upside down in way she hasn't imagined.

Reviewer: Elron Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 08/14/20 05:27 am Title: Chapter 9 - Date Night

Wow, Chris had the perfect date night. At least until the end. Should she have gone in for the kiss? It didn't seem like Fay was looking for one, and even told Chris she didn't have to get out of the car. I don't think Fay saw it as a date, just a BFF experience.
It seemed at first as though Christine and Ron were destined to be together, but all the attention she got from other guys might change all that. And who was the mystery band member? He has to show up later, probably tomorrow at school.
Nice way to finish up the night. I wonder if Cindy heard anything? You know if she did she will be teasing Chris in the morning hahah.
Great writing, I hope you plan on stretching this out, I'm really enjoying the ride.

Reviewer: Amy Nichole Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 08/14/20 02:40 am Title: Chapter 1 - Hello my name is Tony

I’ve been really enjoying this story. I’m rooting for Chris and fay, but I have a feeling she’s not into girls. Keep up the good work!

Author's Response: Thanks for reading and commenting! After spending a whole chapter with Fay, it's hard not to root for them!

Reviewer: Elron Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 08/13/20 07:03 pm Title: Chapter 8 - Recruited

Here's a couple of alternate futures: Tony comes back to the present and finds himself married to Amber. Or maybe Chrissy comes back to the present and finds herself married to Amber. Wow, the possibilities are endless!
Personally, I would say reliving the last 20 years is appealing, even as a woman, as long as I knew what was going to happen. I'd be a very wealthy woman by the time 2020 came around again.

Author's Response: I'm thrilled that this story has captured your imagination and you're trying to predict the ending! I hope the possible ending I have planed is just as awesome as these ideas! I know I certainly wouldn't mind reliving the past 20 years again too (assuming I knew what was going to happen as well) I'm sure this is a thought that will also pass through Christina's mind at some point too.

Reviewer: Lailaluvs00 Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 08/11/20 04:17 pm Title: Chapter 8 - Recruited

Fun stuff!

Author's Response: Thank you!

Reviewer: Elron Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 08/11/20 03:44 pm Title: Chapter 8 - Recruited

Wow, so much going on in this chapter. It's no understatement to say Christina's dance card is full at this point. Hard to believe the things she has done in this short time will not have a big effect on Tony's life in the future.
So I was wondering, Christina seems to be enjoying her 2nd chance so far. What if at the end of 2 weeks Christina gets to go back to her life in the future as Tony, but asks her angel if she can do it as Christina? Would that be possible? Or could Christina decide in two weeks that she wants to remain in the past as a girl? I guess it all depends on what takes place over the next two weeks. But I'd say that no matter what, Tony/Christina will be better for the experience. If I had a dollar for every time I wished I could go back and just not say that one stupid comment, or had asked out the girl I was stalking, oops I mean, well, stalking. How different things would be today.
Great job with the concept, you have me really invested in the lives of the characters. That's a direct result of high-quality, passionate writing. Thank you.

Author's Response: Thank you for the kind words! I'm having a blast living vicariously through these characters. I think you are very aware of the choices Tony/Christina will have to make towards the end of the story. In which case, I won't spoil it for you. :)

Reviewer: Roadbandit Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 08/11/20 09:55 am Title: Chapter 8 - Recruited

I’m enjoying the read, very interesting storyline. Well done

Author's Response: Thank you!

Reviewer: Amanda Lynn Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 08/10/20 07:15 pm Title: Chapter 1 - Hello my name is Tony

No enemy, but many friends.
Don't worry about Amber.

Reviewer: Elron Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 08/10/20 02:10 am Title: Chapter 7 - Take Two

Amber had it coming. Christina tried it the nice way earlier. Making friends as she tried to reach home plate would have let her team down and most likely not have put her on better terms with Amber anyway. Christina did the right thing sliding into home. Maybe instead of being friends, Amber will show Christina a little respect next time they meet.

Now Christina did dig herself a bit of a hole with Ron and Fay. She really needs to downplay the 'date' with both Ron and Fay - it's just two BFFs hanging out doing girl stuff. Too soon for Tony/Christina to be choosing sides, since Tony's future may depend on choices like that.

Great writing, you are keeping things exciting. I don't want to say I'm jealous of Tony, but two weeks as Christina in the past - sure.

Author's Response: Thanks for the compliment! Christina might be new and improved, but she still has Tony's habit of sticking their foot in their mouth. Hopefully she gets over that!

Reviewer: Elron Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 08/10/20 01:20 am Title: Chapter 6 - Homework

Nice to see Christina is jumping in with both feet. What's next?

Reviewer: Bri74 Signed Report
Date: 08/06/20 07:28 pm Title: Chapter 6 - Homework

I luvvvvvv it!!! a86;a039; It brings back memories for sure!! My senior year was ‘92 so not far off....

Author's Response: Thank you! It's been fun reliving ideas and concepts from back then.

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