Date: 08/05/20 09:41 pm Title: Chapter 5 - Going through the motions: Part 2
Oh wow, this is really getting good. You've added a lot of depth to is at stake for Tony. Not a vacation, not a chance to relive old times. Put up or start buying tampons.
It will be easy for Tony to join clubs at school, but those are probably not what the Goddess had in mind. There is some big pivotal event coming up where Tony has to turn right instead of left. Then by the Butterfly Effect, the rest of his life will be different. He just doesn't know what it is.
I love your stories. Your writing style is amazing. Can't wait for the next part. Thank you.
Author's Response: Thank you, Elron for your kind words! You've certainly caught onto the essence of the story. I think I have an idea what I want that pivotal event to be and how it affects Tony and those around him, I'm just trying to find a way to organically get there.
Date: 07/31/20 07:52 pm Title: Chapter 2 - The Girl in the Mirror
Loving the story so far, can’t wait for the next part.
Also, while reading this, I can’t help but also think of the collegehumor skit “What going back in the 90s would actually be like” ;)
Author's Response: I hadn't seen that CH skit. I just watched it. Oh Wow! That may have convinced me to not mention 9/11 at all in this story. Best to not get into such philosophical moral quandaries as preventing major world events.
Date: 07/30/20 03:47 pm Title: Chapter 1 - Hello my name is Tony
Wow. I got so into this story that when I came to the end of the chapter it felt like running into a brick wall. I wasn't ready for it to end. I'm really looking forward to the next chapter.
Author's Response: Thanks for reading! That's awesome that the end of the chapter had that effect. It certainly had that effect on me as I was writing it.
Date: 07/30/20 08:01 am Title: Chapter 1 - Hello my name is Tony
Great start, and a perfect setup for the story. You also picked a great spot to end the chapter, now I can't wait for the next part.
Author's Response: Thanks for reading! I'm excited to share the next part too.