Cilan, good writing. Nice little cliffhanger here. I think you have talent and creativity. You just need to write more to gain experience. I look forward to reading more of your work. Good luck.
It's hard to keep track of who is who when you have so many swaps going on, but I think I can keep track. Good writing, interesting premise. Thanks.
Well, they sure didn't waste any time trying out their new bodies. Nice description of the sex.Good writing, good, pacing, good descriptions.
Since Adam was also on the street he was writing about, wouldn't he also be swapping?Or is the notepad holder not affected by what he writes? Good start, should be some interesting swaps.