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Reviewer: nitewatchman Signed starstarstarstar Report
Date: 06/26/20 08:17 pm Title: Chapter 1: The First Transformation

An interesting start. I would like to see more, which I assume will include who is behind this and why.

A minor suggestion - I personally find huge blocks of text daunting to read. Going ahead, can you try to break them into smaller chunks or paragraphs? I'm getting to the age where it's easy for me to lose my place, and with big blocks of text it's harder for me to find where I was reading. :) Thanks!

Reviewer: bloodraven Signed starstarstarstar Report
Date: 06/26/20 08:11 pm Title: Chapter 1: The First Transformation

Interesting start. Looking forward to more of this story.

If I may offer a piece of constructive criticism, I would break the paragraphs up more. You're kind of smashing those together.

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