Date: 06/16/20 01:10 pm Title: Chapter 1
English is obviously not your first language. Knowing that, this is an impressive tale! Please keep working on your English grammar, as it will help you tell your stories more effectively. Focus on paragraphs first, then tweak your sentence structure.
Writing is a skill that must be practiced. You show a lot of potential - don't let the low ratings discourage you!
Author's Response: I use google translation, you like it, I am very happy