Date: 06/03/14 07:33 pm Title: Chapter 1
Absolutely brilliant wording, your spelling was great too. The idea is a marvelous one, though your grammar is holding you back, this would have been a five star rating had it been better, one of the main things I noticed is you not finishing quotation marks, and given your usage of (""), I think you know in programming, not finishing a quote fucks everything up. And sadly the same goes for writing.
Date: 05/11/14 02:08 pm Title: Chapter 1
Wow! Didn't expect that ending! Really liked the story, especially his discovery at the ending! If you want to, continue this story! Perhaps it could be about how he is trying to become a male again, and how he is searching for Nic's hairstylist friend. Anyways, really liked the story and your writing style!