Date: 07/05/20 05:37 am Title: Chapter 4: Talking to a Friend
It really seems like Zach's mother is just trying to ruin his life. She'd better have a real good reason for what she's doing, and better be ready to admit that she didn't handle it as well as she could have. If nothing else, changing someone's gender without their will, knowledge, and consent deserves an apology to Leah when she finally comes clean.
Date: 07/04/20 05:31 pm Title: Chapter 4: Talking to a Friend
I love how creepy you made her there, it fits her evil personality
Author's Response: Thanks! The funny part is I never really meant for her to be this devious. She's got a bit of a Loki vibe going on. Hopefully I'll get to show another side of her in the next couple chapters.
Date: 07/04/20 08:31 am Title: Chapter 4: Talking to a Friend
that's super creepy and fucked up at the end there.
Author's Response: Lol yeah. The whole story has actually become a lot creepier and more complex than I initially intended. I'm kind of enjoying building up some campy suspense though.
Date: 06/28/20 04:40 am Title: Chapter 3: The Girl in the Mirror
"Last day", huh? That's ominous!
Don't leave us hanging so long this time!
Author's Response: Haha yeah. What could she be alluding to I wonder? Thanks for the review. I plan to have one chapter released every week. Chapter 4 may be a little shorter this coming week because of other projects I have going on. I'll get it up as soon as I can though.
Date: 06/28/20 02:50 am Title: Chapter 3: The Girl in the Mirror
YES! Zach tell her that she's a sociopath, maybe that'll make her realize how evil she really is. It might make her change, or at least not screw your friend over permanently. To the evil woman: YOU CAN'T ASK HIM IF HE WANTS TO STAY A GIRL WHILE YOU BRAINWASH HIM TO WANT TO STAY A GIRL YOU EGOMANIACAL MONSTER!
Loving this, thank you!
Date: 06/22/20 01:01 am Title: Chapter 2: What is a Girl?
This is insane, the mom really thinks this is okay? I don't get why she thinks it's okay to mess with people's lives like this. Why not ask THEM if it's okay, has she never heard of consent? Especially when she makes permanent changes.... she's a freaking super villain or something
Author's Response: Haha yeah. She means well, but her heavy handedness and abuse of power doesn't make her very redeemable. (especially with the Matt/Mattie incident). It's hard to tell what's going on in her mind, or what ulterior motives are there. We'll see what happens. Thanks for the review.
Date: 06/22/20 01:00 am Title: Chapter 1: Boys and Girls
Permanently changing a 10 year old into a 16 year old girl babysitter? Wow... this mom really has no regard for personal identity AND making him like boys. Like.. .has she never heard of a lesbian? God she's homophobic and drunk with power, YIKES
Date: 06/20/20 01:05 am Title: Chapter 1: Boys and Girls
This is very interesting.
I feel mom is just a bit above 'mischievous'... maybe she has too much agency?
I think the story is hinting that there might be more to Zach than meets the eye, based on his interactions with mom's magic.... I just hope there is no character death in this.
Author's Response: That's an interesting theory, and a pretty dark twist lol. We'll see what happens.
Date: 06/16/20 04:07 am Title: Chapter 1: Boys and Girls
Good story but be careful with not mixing up the characters. There were a few instances in which you had Liam when I think you meant Zach. I look forward to the next chapter.
Author's Response: Fixed now. Thank you for pointing that out. It helps to have proof readers. They actually had different names in the beginning so I guess I messed myself up on that one.