Date: 07/30/20 11:22 pm Title: Chapter 9
Oh, I absolutely loved this chapter. Such a fun trip to the grocery store. I would have had the same feelings and actions as Ashley. I about died when she picked up the melons. What a setup. I'm surprised that stockboy didn't mess hit pants right on the spot.
Now one thing surprised me. When Ashley headed into the frozen food section I thought to myself, here's another embarrassing moment. Spending time reaching into the coolers would have turned her high-beams on, so to speak. And sperm-shooting stockboy would have been right there for an encore performance at seeing just how cold the freezers are. But no. It was kind of a letdown. Well, maybe next time.
As you can tell, I love your writing style. Your pacing, descriptions, plot, and of course the humor are all spot-on. Please keep this story going, it became one of my favorites a long time ago.
Date: 07/17/20 06:52 pm Title: Chapter 8
I really like all the descriptions of 'the girls'. Jason is really struggling with Ashley's anatomy. I don't see why all the reluctance to wear the bra. It really doesn't seem like she has a choice. I guess it's kind of like admitting defeat. Oh, well, it makes for fun reading.
You are doing a great job of telling the story. The pacing is good, the descriptions are detailed, and I feel like I am right there with her (and I wish I was). Can't wait to see what awaits her on her first venture outside (not counting the walk of shame back to Jason's apartment).
Date: 07/12/20 05:48 am Title: Chapter 6
Gotta be careful with the fun bags.
Great chapter. I liked the description of how Ashley spent her time. I'd have to say though, I would have been checking out the anatomy more than playing video games.
Can't wait to find out what is causing the dizzy spells.
Date: 07/02/20 02:56 am Title: Chapter 6
The trope of a guy being involuntarily body-swapped into a woman is old and been around... But I've never enjoyed reading (and rereading) such a tale as much as this one! Your writing is superb, loving the first-person narrative about one weird new discovery after another. And how you're taking your time and not rushing it either. Plus very erotic! Hoping you, ahem, continue to flesh out this saga for many more chapters and not leave us (nor the new Ashley) hanging in suspense. Like, can she access the $100K generously provided by the former inhabitant? Will her old body every return, and if so, what happens next? Is her body "for real" being so, ahem, over the top? What about his => her job? And why is she SO easily aroused? More please.
Author's Response: Yes, taking my time... That is definitely the only and main reason it is taking as long as it is, no other possible reason...
Date: 06/10/20 04:53 am Title: Chapter 5
Excellent story! I love the way he (she) thinks about her situation. Seems like the same way I would be thinking about my new body and life. I do hope the new Ashley gives in and tries to pleasure herself. That should be a great narration.
So why would gorgeous rich girl trade lives and bodies with a mundane guy? Seems like she must be on the Run from something. Ashley 2 needs to be very careful that she doesn't get abducted or arrested before she can find her old self.
Great writing, loved the internal narration. Can't wait for more.