Date: 04/27/20 02:24 pm Title: Dinner & Friends
I am enjoying the story, and I'm pretty sure where it's going to go. It's okay when speakers use bad grammar because that's just a reflection of who they are. However, the narrator/author should avoid it as much as possible. For example in this chapter, "He actually knew it, him and his room-mates ate here sometimes." That should be "..., he and his room-mates …."
Date: 04/27/20 01:50 am Title: Counting Down
One thing this story got me thinking about your WoW setting is that at some point the coven would probably realize there’s something weird about the ka-girl spell and would ban all uses of it on assumedly cis men, even/especially as a bet or a punishment! Well in that specific case the 48 hour period is too short, it’s pretty obvious this Brandi was always a girl, but between Nikki and the father-becomes-twin-daughter you’d think they’d start being less cavalier with this spell.
Date: 04/25/20 04:00 pm Title: Date Night
Wow, intentional or not, Brandi is really getting a leeson in girlhood. And you can tell she is really thinking about when or if she wants to change back to a guy at the end of the 48 hours.
There were several sentences about Brandi's drink on the railing. I was thinking the creeper had spiked it with a date rape drug while Brandi wasn't looking in order to get her to go home with him. But that didn't seem to be the case.
Seems like a lot of wasted time if they just sit around all day. Hopefully they will decide to go to a pool or the beach or someplace public so Brandi can get a little more rounded experience as a girl, then decide whether or not she wants to go back to being a guy. Looking forward to more of the story. Thanks for writing.
Date: 04/24/20 06:34 pm Title: Dinner & Friends
The way Brandi has adapted to being a girl, you would think this was a secret desire of his all along. I guess we will find out soon enough.
Your writing is great - the pace, the descriptions all make the story easy to follow. Thank you.
Date: 04/24/20 03:39 pm Title: Hung Over
I especially love the unfolding of the story with crazy enough room for imagination. The mystery bed, it's very ok that it remains a mystery. The embrace/denial of Brandi. The almost palpable fear of exploring too much and opening a door that can't be closed. And yet, he/she is being pulled along and soaked into a new life almost unconsciously because of the ease of feeling right. Pro-material.
Date: 04/24/20 02:19 pm Title: Hung Over
The story is good, but a few details were missing. What was the bet? What were the exact details of the bet. If the winner won they become the boyfriend/girlfriend of the other for 48 hours? Did Tanya rig the bet? Because there is no way she would have gone through with that had he Brendon won.
In a previous story where the father was changed into the daughter, it was implied that he might have been trans, and might have stayed as a girl for too long. If was speculated but never said. I’m sure the coven would have been informed of this, so Tanya should have known this was a possibility of him staying a girl for too long. Again, this is because it was never stated that the father was trans, and they even said he might have been in the body for too long.
How will the coven feel with Tanya just changing someone? It’s happened before, but eventually it’s going to backfire.
Author's Response: Some of these questions have answers, some don't. Patience, the story isn't over yet. ;-)
Date: 04/23/20 02:28 pm Title: Adorably Fun-Sized
I think the lady doth protest too much.
The blushes are one of many give aways: Had a name and body image from the get go, wonders regularly about wgag it would be like to be a girl, enjoying the experience instead of freaking out, feigning some ignorance but seems very aware of the sells value to trans people etc.
Date: 04/23/20 02:14 pm Title: Hung Over
Thanks, PCG, I had started reading your stories in order from 'Nikki'; but got sidetracked and have not started 'Jessica' yet. I'm looking forward to reading the whole series. I like your style and witchcraft is my favorite change mechanism.
Date: 04/23/20 12:53 pm Title: Adorably Fun-Sized
To be honest, this chapter seemed to go a bit slower than the first one. No experimentation in the shower, no crying or hysterics, no struggles with clothing. Not even racy underwear or outerwear. If that had been me, I definitely would have taken that body for a test drive. Maybe Brandi is still hung over and not up to a lot of excitement right now.
I'm not sure why Brandi is hung up about her name. She accepted the body and clothing without too much fuss, I would think the name is the easiest part to deal with.
I hope you can delve into Tanya's past a bit more. Was she a girl who spent a month as a guy, or a guy who decided not to be changed back after a month as a girl? Is she from another story of yours that I haven't read?
Thank you for writing. I enjoy this type of story and look forward to reading how the weekend goes for the girls.
Author's Response: Re. Tanya, she has a whole story named after her. It's the 5th installment of our 'Witches of Welland' series, and unfortunately might not work as a stand-alone. But IIRC the first 2 chapters of it will pretty much explain who Tanya is and what happened to her. Re. Brandi, hopefully most of the questions and stuff will be answered as the weekend unfolds. Thanks for reading! :D
Date: 04/23/20 02:25 am Title: Hung Over
Oh yeah! You haven't pinched off this world yet, you keep finding more ways to expand on it. What fun! Poor Brandi... Although in a case like this, I always think, "you know, if they'd just embrace the situation instead of fighting it, they'd have a lot more fun!" Of course part of the fun is watching them (whoever gets swapped in any story) mostly eventually figure that out for themself.
Apparently the Goddess is good with her disciples goofing around with magic all they want... Would be sad otherwise though. And apparently body changes are easy, while clothing, well that's not so much! :-)
Date: 04/22/20 07:00 pm Title: Hung Over
Fantastic start! I particularly love your descriptions of Brandi’s reaction to her changes, though I’m a little disappointed the personality changes are not happening, it would have been delicious to see him try to navigate the world through a new lens. Thank you, I’m looking forwards to reading more.