Date: 05/09/20 10:11 pm Title: Chapter 22 - Vital Signs
What a great, weird, fun story. I enjoyed all of it, and understood nearly all of it (grin). Fabulous concept and execution, great TG aspects. And the notion that lucid dreaming taken too far could open up Pandora's box of disasters, never thought of that, fortunately it's impossible, or it already would have happened, right? Same reason we know the LHC can't make dangerous black holes?
Author's Response: Thank you! And as fun as it was to write this, I certainly hope it's impossible (unless, of course, I get to be in Parker's position).
Date: 05/07/20 04:27 am Title: Chapter 22 - Vital Signs
Ah she gets to sleep in a real dream. Well let's hope you do a part two to this. I like yo see this keep on going. And thank you for telling me how she fixed herself and if I read it right seems like she could have became a goddess as well. I happy that she turned it down for now to live her life. A young lady with that much power how scary will that be I dont want to know at all
Date: 05/06/20 08:56 pm Title: Chapter 1 - Dream On
“We're currently full over there. I want to be honest with you though. I don't think I'd be comfortable with you there.”
Of course. I'd let my defenses down for a minute there, when he'd invited me into his home.
I don't understand this line, what does it mean?
Author's Response: Sorry I wasn't clear. When the director offered to let Parker stay in his home overnight, Parker thought that meant he didn't have a problem with her being trans. But then the director tells her he wouldn't be comfortable with her at Soul of Hope, the girls' home, Parker realizes that he is transphobic after all, and is annoyed at herself for having gotten her hopes up.
Date: 05/06/20 05:28 am Title: Chapter 1 - Dream On
I am really loving this story. Parker's voice is so strong and clear, I can almost hear it in my head. You keep me on my toes story wise, and I'm desperate to discover what happened on the big swim. This is a wonderful story!
Author's Response: Thank you so much!
Date: 05/03/20 06:02 pm Title: Chapter 19 - Fall into Your Dream
This is a really well written story. You have balanced a lot of aspects together, and brought it now to a serious climax, emotionally and narratively. I am curious and hopeful for everything to work out, even though it seems like some solutions are mutually contradictory. Particularly though, what I'm dream happened with the dolphin assisted journey is very curious and you've played that hand close, but also intriguingly.
Some of your imagery, though, is so life-giving.. Thank you for sharing some of these thoughts.
Author's Response: Thank you so much. I'm glad you're enjoying it.
Date: 04/23/20 04:39 pm Title: Chapter 8 - Caught in a Dream
Aaand I'm caught up! Not for long, I see you've already uploaded chapter 9 and it's stuck in validation right now, but I'm caught up to what I'm allowed to read. This is so great. Parker is a great and well fleshed out protagonist and her powers make me ask myself many questions. Glad we finally have the answer to what she'd left behind at her old Home.
Author's Response: Thanks!
Date: 04/23/20 03:27 pm Title: Chapter 4 - Sweet Dreams
Oh hey, since I'm french, mind if I proofread your two french lines in chapter 4? Because right now it reads like a literal translation from English, maybe even machine made :p
“Bonjour mes élèves,” she says, “Nous avons une nouvelle étudiante qui nous a rejoint aujourd'hui. Jordan, parlez donc un peu de vous, s'il vous plaît.”
“Bonjour. Je m’appelle Parker,” I reply, “J’aime lire et faire de la gymnastique. J’ai récemment commencé à pratiquer le parkour. Je . . .”
Other than that, I'm really enjoying reading this so far!
Author's Response: Thank you! It was mostly Google, but I tried to tweak it with my two years of decades old high school French. I knew it was bad and had intended to come back and fix it, but in the long interval between writing it and now, I forgot.
Date: 04/23/20 02:20 am Title: Chapter 6 - Childhood Dreams
Spectacular story! You have me hooked, it's one of those rare serials where I drop everything to read the new chapter(s) as soon as I notice them. Your writing is superb, and witty too, but on top of that, you have an unusual premise, relatable characters, a fun TG theme (though I wouldn't mind more explicitivity about what Parker experiences, even though she's happy with it), and lots of action and interaction. Well done, thanks.
Author's Response: Thank you!
Date: 04/23/20 12:51 am Title: Chapter 1 - Dream On
I like your story a lot! Your style of narration is really engaging and works really well :)
At the start I had a strong Kammiverse vibe while reading, but as the chapters keep coming, I realise it's more than that, isn't it ? Also, a schoolgirl fighting with a long-ass chain feels very Tarantino-esque to me
Author's Response: Thank you! I actually wrote this four years ago, and it was reading a Kammiverse story (Falling Over) that made me decide to finally post it somewhere. (And in an early revision, I obliquely referenced Kill Bill in the backstory about Molly, but cut it for flow and space. So, good catch.)