Date: 04/07/20 02:01 am Title: Chapter 1: The Gate
This story is really well written, even compared to the more seasoned authors on this site. The story is set up and the pacing is really well done, as this story doesn't crawl at a snail's pace or introduce too many elements too quickly. A lot of authors have trouble setting up characters in the beginning, often telling instead of showing, but you definitely don't have this problem. The characters are likable and the plot is pretty unique. I would suggest that you put spaces between your paragraphs. When there isn't any space between paragraphs it can make the story look like one huge block, which has the effect of intimidating new readers as well as causing readers to skip over important information.
Overall this is one of the best starts that I've seen from a new author and I can't wait to see where you take this.
Author's Response: Thank you so so so much!!! I realized afterwards that when I copied and pasted the paragraphs didn't show up right, and a i'll fix that in upcoming chapters. I haven't gotten around to another chapter yet bc of you know Everything going on tight now lol, but I have more in store for these characters I promise! Thank you again!!
Date: 04/06/20 12:07 pm Title: Chapter 2: Waking Up
oh such a cute couple... is it too soon to ship, because I totally want to see the Blue Boy and Cat Girl go out on dates and things. :p
Author's Response: omg thank you for reviewing!!! this is my first story and im so excited youre enjoying it!! dont worry im sure there will be much cuteness ensuing ;^)