Date: 05/14/20 04:38 pm Title: Sarah tries out my body.
Your story is interesting, I both like it and at the same time I am extremely upset by it. I don't think the main character is a bad person yet it seems like her brother and possibly others are abusing / more or less raping her over and over and that's upsetting. I hope she gets revenge also the black outs while a interesting plot device we are getting less then half the story it feels. I am interested in seeing where you take this, hope you don't mind my critism but I do enjoy the story