Date: 04/04/20 09:13 pm Title: Tuesday, Third Day (second half)
So funly expositated! Loving it, well done, thanks for the fun. A great "what if" angle I haven't seen before, but you the author know that we the readers are NOT gonna gloss over the transition with a so-so whats-the-big-deal reaction, so you're winking at us and feeding us all the little tidbits that keep us entertained and wanting more. And enlarging the story, adding more expositions but also more mysteries.
Date: 03/29/20 05:37 am Title: Tuesday, Third Day (first half)
There’s a lot of good stuff in this.
But I don’t see how it can appeal to anyone who’s not a teenager. All their relationships and all this focus on the physical part of people makes the story feel very superficial and shallow, as a whole.
I know it’s not meant to be too serious, but... it still feels too stereotypical and cliché.