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Reviewer: Day Dreamer Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 04/04/20 09:13 pm Title: Tuesday, Third Day (second half)

So funly expositated! Loving it, well done, thanks for the fun. A great "what if" angle I haven't seen before, but you the author know that we the readers are NOT gonna gloss over the transition with a so-so whats-the-big-deal reaction, so you're winking at us and feeding us all the little tidbits that keep us entertained and wanting more. And enlarging the story, adding more expositions but also more mysteries.

Reviewer: lilyth3lily Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 03/31/20 03:58 am Title: Sunday, First Day (first half)

Really interesting idea, well written, I read it all the way through and am hoping for more.

Plenty of room to expand, many different ways you could go. Hope you write more, and have a good day!

Reviewer: Amanda Lynn Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 03/29/20 03:19 pm Title: Sunday, First Day (first half)

I really like your story. I love how you don't tell how the changes happen, maybe you will eventually, but I like it. I think Sharon has something to do with it.
Keep going!

Reviewer: PepitoBat Signed starstarstar Report
Date: 03/29/20 05:37 am Title: Tuesday, Third Day (first half)

There’s a lot of good stuff in this.

But I don’t see how it can appeal to anyone who’s not a teenager. All their relationships and all this focus on the physical part of people makes the story feel very superficial and shallow, as a whole.

I know it’s not meant to be too serious, but... it still feels too stereotypical and cliché.

Reviewer: Kathryn Mayhew Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 03/27/20 03:02 pm Title: Tuesday, Third Day (second half)

I freaking love the crazy dream sequences! OMG! This story is pretty damn good, and really mixes in the humor and strangeness well. Cool!

Reviewer: Calamity Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 03/26/20 06:00 am Title: Sunday, First Day (first half)

Oh, Sharon. Creepy, and intriguing all mixed together.

Interesting start to the story.

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