Date: 03/18/20 08:15 am Title: Patience
Omg that ending was something special. Like they legit ate the transphobic folk. Like this was something special in that they actually got vengeance.
Author's Response: Aww I'm glad you liked it. Yeah, I kinda am thinking of making a sequel for those teachers and nurse. I'm thinking they need to be invited to a special buffet :DDD
Date: 03/16/20 07:47 am Title: Patience
The end was hilariously gruesome and I loved it!
In the beginning, I was trying to find my place as I envisioned Vicky's point of view. Classroom, hallway, cafeteria, nurse's office, and, finally, the woods, but I failed to get a feeling of what kind of school this was supposed to be. It wasn't important, but it did give the overall picture a monotone feel... Not the conclusion. I got the green leaves and grass, brown trees and branches, and red. A bloody red picnic.
Through the confrontations between the bullies, biased teacher, and bigoted nurse; I felt the frustration and anger that our loving couple felt. You were spot on in getting me to hate all of those who displayed their own hatred for those who were different than the "norm". That ending made me happy. A bit excessive, but, honestly, I'm not going to complain. The world is better without those sorts.
Great use of the bold text. A shame that colors couldn't be used to highlight their dialogue and give each character (other than Vicky and Cecy) some added flare. Sometimes those can generate a better idea of their individual personalities with some color.
All in all, this was a five out of five. Excellent at pulling at my emotions, getting me to like (then love) the two main characters, hate the antagonists, cheer for the single support character (the Art Teacher), and laugh in morbid glory at the end. Wonderful story with a tug at the feels and its lasting gory charm.
Author's Response: Thank you for your review, I'm glad you loved that part! Thanks for the criticism as well, I could have done better to describe it, though I was afraid to make it any set time period because I am not sure how teenagers talk these days. I'm just an ancient millennial after all xD And yeah I wish I could have done different differentiations, but yeah sadly most TG sites don't allow it. Again thank you so much for this review, I appreciate it!