Date: 03/07/20 03:33 am Title: Chapter 1
Really interesting story. Enjoyed every bit of it. Only question I have is do you have others in this setting or plan to do more with this concept? Even with the innate acceptance the collar gives I bet there could be a good extended story to be had here.
Date: 03/05/20 06:33 am Title: Chapter 1
I really liked this story! I loved the disordered narrative from a literary perspective, but I have to admit that from a smut perspective once I knew which story I wanted to follow I skimmed the other ones (before going back and reading them all!). Can’t wait for more writing!
Date: 03/01/20 03:56 am Title: Chapter 1
Really loved this story back when I read it at FM. However, I think the hottest part was the transformation sequence, and its a shame you only went through it with with the first guy... the other ones just changed in a flash. Kind of a waste.
Date: 02/29/20 01:26 pm Title: Chapter 1
I loved the premise and it was well written. But the whole "lets tell 4 stories in random parts in random order" got old pretty fast. It just did not seem like anything particularly worthwhile was gained by doing that if you did not bring the characters all together at the end, which is really the only reason to do such a mixed writing order. Its writing chronologically rather than each persons whole individual experience's. And in general that kind of writing is much more prone to being disjointed, and likely to cause readers to lose track of what has happened with who the more peoples stories you tell concurrently. So throwing in a semi-risky story writing format for no discernible purpose seems... well, pointless. Even as a writing exercise it would only really make sense if they all came together near the end. Otherwise its literally just telling random parts in random order of 4 different stories.
Although dont get me wrong, I loved the stories themselves. And as I said before the stories themselves were well written. But yea... I have no idea why you broke them up for seemingly no good reason. It only made it more difficult to read/keep track of.