Date: 02/22/20 04:19 am Title: Chapter 1
I didn't quite get the very end. Did it mean that Rich cheated?
I very much liked the story though you could have warned of the time jumps.
Author's Response: No. She was talking about the general quality of a father. She was talking about herself.
Date: 02/18/20 02:05 am Title: Chapter 1
Well nice story, and the unexpected mother and the reluctant daughter had quite a journey to get to their final scene. I know 10 year old boy Avery never dreamt of being a daughter or a mother, but she owned her circumstance and her new hormones. Bravo ladies...
Date: 02/17/20 09:39 pm Title: Chapter 3
Kind of a long chapter, but because of the time span it serves as a beautiful epilogue to the story. Nice to see how everyone turned out. All the babies and relationships. I love happy endings and you certainly made this a great one. Thank you.
Author's Response: Yeah, I didn't really write this with chapters in mind. It was just one solid chunk that I tried to find good places to break.
Date: 02/17/20 09:36 pm Title: Chapter 2
Wow, what a great idea for an ice - breaker for Avery. Hosted by her nemesis, Yvonne. Seems like this was the big turning point in her transformation.
Also loved the school play. I could see how Bobby could become all flustered at the sight of Avery all done up like a princess.
Great job with your writing, again felt like I was there. Thank you.
Date: 02/17/20 08:04 pm Title: Chapter 1
This is definitely one of the most unique and creative gender change stories I have ever read on these sites. And it's a double one to boot.
Great job on the introduction to the characters and the setup for the story. Felt like I was in the room with them. Though if I was, I would have been exposed too. Hmmmm.
Plenty of detail, the pacing was right. Very readable and entertaining. Thank you.
Author's Response: Only if you ate the eggs. It's not airborne. You have to at least touch the spores for it to work.