Date: 03/11/20 12:23 am Title: Chapter Ten: A Toast To Damnation
Great job! The plot is definitely intriguing; I like that so far, we have been kept in the dark, just like Ace is, which definitely makes things more suspenseful. Just out of curiosity, is Ace nonbinary, or is there some other reason that you are using the pronoun ‘they’?
Author's Response: Thank you very much! Yes, Ace is nonbinary. :)
Date: 03/09/20 06:09 pm Title: Chapter nine: The Annoying Orange
Your narration is a little bit crazy with how great the tone is. It is truly a pleasure to read.
Your narrative is perhaps a touch understated, but I think that is intended to mimic Ace's own understanding of what all is going down. You have got me thoroughly hooked, anyways, so it can't be too bad.
Date: 03/03/20 12:14 am Title: Chapter Seven: The Surreptitious Sailor
Oh my god! I know I have already said this multiple times already, but I love this story. Remember how I was saying it reminds me of Lemony Snicket? Well as the story has gone on, it is also starting to remind me of Terry Prattchet’s Discworld. Keep up the good work!
Date: 02/14/20 04:34 pm Title: Chapter One: The Terrible Town
The narration here is A+. Sensible-Chuckle laugh worthy at quite a few points. Also, some very good descriptions, particularly the chocolate cake and the depression.
Chib is an unusual but nicely not very gendered nickname from Archibald. But who knows if anyone would agree to use it. :(
Date: 02/14/20 12:53 am Title: Chapter One: The Terrible Town
A very interesting beginning; the conversational writing style reminds me of A Series of Unfortunate Events, by Lemony Snicket, and is certainly a refreshing change of pace from this website’s usual fare.