Date: 02/23/20 09:55 pm Title: Chapter 30: Evapotranspiration
This continues to be super cute. Grace is jealous and eager to reclaim Ryn from the suspicious spellsword. And Ryn has no problem with that, even if she's convinced herself Grace is just "protective".
Seems like Fennimore has some sort of fast-healing spell or internal armor to reduce the damage from wounds like the gunshot. If that sort of magic is not common knowledge among mages, does that mean he's just creative and invented something new, or did he do something nefarious to get that unusual kind of power? I seem to remember Esra saying something about other magic systems besides the plant-based grover system.
Date: 02/22/20 11:10 pm Title: Chapter 29: Eilian the Golden
I feel weird writing reviews here, that it should be for the whole story. not sure why...
I do really love the story so far. the magic is (to me) really unique and fun and has so much potential and you know all what i've said about it on discord :3
the previous chapter had such a massive cliff hanger and i was sooooo scared. but then grace just did some amazing quick thinking with her phone in this new one to distract the robot and then shoving the sword into the joint for ryn to break with magic (and also it seems the sotom is powering up her magic?)
omg do i love this sword mage goat who is probably gay and hitting on ryn and making ryn jealous over the next few chapters and i'm really excited to see that happening and also for her to help ryn learn more magic :3
thanks for the chapter!!!
Date: 02/22/20 10:58 pm Title: Chapter 29: Eilian the Golden
Grace had me going: "Who throws a phone?" Telepathic sword hammer was awesome! New mage character Eilian the Golden is fun, slightly irresponsible goat girl with a reputation and love of drinking. Also Kit 'Sulis knights'? Im betting it's actually some popculture reference by our nerd.
Date: 02/22/20 10:05 pm Title: Chapter 29: Eilian the Golden
ugh this was like one of those dreams that you just remember one scene from but you just KNOW there was so much more to it,lol. anyways thanks to your muse for what we got, and to you for bringing it to us.
Author's Response: Rude
Date: 02/20/20 08:54 am Title: Chapter 26: Breaking Magic
Woo! Magic world building, in two ways at once!
This was cool. Really cool. I definitely suspect that Ryn has figured some things out that haven't been thought of before, with how much she's trusting her gut...but her world is starting to come together into a full blown magical ecosystem, which will be great for her.
Author's Response: I'm excited to fully explore her ideas and what she'll be able to achieve. She's a great character and I love writing her
Date: 02/20/20 02:33 am Title: Chapter 26: Breaking Magic
Great chapter! I hope she remembers to be careful with rabbits though; If left unchecked, they can quickly grow out of control and devastate the ecosystem. Perhaps she should also add some foxes to her garden. I hope your head feels better soon! Hugs, Alexa
Date: 02/19/20 08:44 pm Title: Chapter 25: Zero G Teasing
Now THIS is why you just earned yourself a pay raise, congratulations, I just logged into Patreon and doubled my monthly, OK just from "not that much" to "somewhat better", but still (grin).
So I saw this new story show up, by you, but was spending most of my free reading time keeping up with "Change of Perspective" (frequent long chapters) until it ended (brilliantly of course). By then you'd posted all or most of 25 chapters in THIS great new story. Yay/groan, now to catch up! I tried to pace myself, but must admit to binge-reading the last 5 or more. And now it's all stuck in my head and I'm eager for more, and you sure better not lose interest before you spend about say another 100 chapters fleshing out all the teases!
I mean, you got going a mysterious extraction from the Earth (what happened back there anyway?), a ringworld and NOT just a Niven-style (points for creativity), AND magic and a mentor, AND a budding love story, plenty of TG and likely more possible, good guys and bad guys, and...
Plus it's all so WELL written, from typos (few) to grammar (great) to dialogue to plot development and foreshadowing to conflict and friendship, mostly upbeat and a LOVELY fantasy. Although I must admit that after chapter 25 I'm wondering how Ryn, up against superior force and no longer hidden, can possibly survive and expand on her promise. I bet you have something in mind!
Thanks again for the great entertainment. More please... OK OK I know there's more out there in other venues too, but I barely find time to keep up with you and other favorites here on TGS.
(On MINOR request... Watch for capitalization of proper nouns like "german".)
Author's Response: Thanks!!! I'm especially proud of my typos and grammar considering I barely know how to spell, have dyslexia and have absolutely no idea how grammar works at the best of times xD. Also I only ever do one quick edit on my chapters before posting sooo.. yeah. With the exception of college steps that is, I spend a lot more time on chapters of that story.
Date: 02/19/20 04:08 am Title: Chapter 1: The Obelisk
Ryn and Grace are so cute and wholesome and gay! Also, considering that Ryn can create any plant she wants, repeating crossbows are good idea, since historically, when the ancient Chinese used repeating crossbows, they would poison the bolts, since each bolt would not do very much damage on its own.
Date: 02/17/20 03:18 am Title: Chapter 23: The Quest for Millowhall
It seems that of their party, James is the That Guy. There is always at least one in every party. Hopefully he stays lost, but I suspect that is too much to ask for, considering that there is no DM to punish him if he acts out of line.
Date: 02/16/20 11:26 pm Title: Chapter 21: Happy Little Fir Tree
"I was dead. Done. Ryn was no more, only the raw and unending essence of embarrassment. An embarrassment so pure it could be distilled into a fine liquor for those with a truly bonkers taste in alcohol."
I definitely cackled at this. Well done.
Date: 02/16/20 11:24 pm Title: Chapter 23: The Quest for Millowhall
Grace and Ryn continue to be a couple of adorable disasters. I'm curious about why they decided on Millowhall right away, though, without inquiring further into the differences between that and the other places the vendors recommended or discussing the alternatives. It's not clear how far away each of them is, or how useful each would be, except that Din is probably the farthest and Millowhall the most dangerous to travel to.
Author's Response: Because aliens!
Date: 02/16/20 02:01 am Title: Chapter 22: Ulterior Motives
Nice to see some representation for trans men on this website; sometimes it can seem like we all forget they exist. Also, considering Avonside is a university, I suspect she could secure everyone’s undying loyalty by supplying everyone with weed.
Date: 02/14/20 12:55 pm Title: Chapter 20: Storytime
Ryn and Grace are so adorable. I don't get James' motivations, though. Troy says he's dumb, so sure, but dumb people still do things for reasons (if dumb reasons), and it's not clear why James would want to ditch Ryn.
Author's Response: Good point! I have the perfect motivation for him too, thank you!
Date: 02/13/20 10:11 pm Title: Chapter 19: The Black Armoured Men
This chapter was as fuzzy as a bunny. Aaaaaah~!
You doing your best to write all of your stories is the most anyone can really ask for. If, asymptotically, they all get finished, I know I'll be happy.
Date: 02/13/20 06:40 pm Title: Chapter 18: The God's Bridge
This chapter was a really nice close to this section. I'm guessing it won't be the last time these two show up, but it feels nicely remorseful of their splitting paths.
I am so excited about the family starting to get back together. Two months isn't much time, but plenty of change has still probably happened... And how will Ryn convince them off her identity?
Date: 02/12/20 11:36 pm Title: Chapter 18: The God's Bridge
Ryn is so adorably sweet and she has such a good heart. I once again hope her friend are ok.
Hmm, what if they got an electric vehicle of some sort put together and working then by using the telescopes Avonside decided to send a "trade/exploitative" caravan to head to the city. Then two of her friends volunteered to travel to the city to see if any trade could be had but also are still not giving up the search for Ryn?
Date: 02/08/20 05:28 pm Title: Chapter 13: My Grove
So in this setting l, would a necromancer just be a mage with lots of mushrooms, those flowers that smell like rotting meat, and cordyceps fungus (the one that turns ants into zombies) in their garden? Also, I agree, bunnies are really cute. Also, if you want an overdose of cute and fluffy, look up the Siberian flying squirrel or one of those videos of ginypigs popcorning on YouTube.
Date: 02/08/20 09:20 am Title: Chapter 13: My Grove
Did I skip a mention of bunnies in the story? I don't think I did, but your referring to bunnies so often in the closing notes is making me second-guess myself. Maybe I'm the bunny, given how confused you have gotten me.
Loving the magic system... It balances into sci-fi-ness quite fittingly. You have also given yourself a large space to create flowers in. It is always disappointing when someone effectively says that you can't do anything beyond the known spell list. You are not running into that any time soon.
Author's Response: Thank you! And the bunnies thing will come up later, I just really like buns. They are so cute!
Date: 02/06/20 11:40 pm Title: Chapter 12: The Nameless Garden
I'm enjoying this, although I didn't expect it to veer into fantasy after the scifi start. I also appreciated the Ringworld and Halo references.
Speaking of an entire town being whisked away in time and space, have you read the 1632 series?
Date: 02/04/20 04:24 pm Title: Chapter 9: The Right Kind of Goop
This story has some incredible imagination behind it. These first nine chapters have just made me super curious about all sorts of things!
The dynamic between our heroine and Grace is great. I really like how you've shown it.
And this new development is so weird! In a good way. Is this the outside of the ring? That feels the most likely to me, but what do I know about your imagination?
I am kind of in the same boat as other people, but I'll try to say it all politely: you have gone and gotten me invested in so many characters already, and now you are so cruel to make me involuntarily invested in another? How shall I ever survive reading more stories?... Yeah, I too would like to see the conclusions you have intended for all of your works (and if you don't know them yet, then the endings you will intend eventually), but I have also seen you do a very good job at keeping on posting chapters for all your unfinished tales. I think many readers on this site have been burned by great stories, unfinished, and last updated five years ago. You aren't the problem, though.
Date: 02/03/20 11:48 pm Title: Chapter 9: The Right Kind of Goop
You're doing an amazing job with your writing and you deserve to be able to take your time and write as you wish. I personally believe we're lucky enough to have you sharing your stories with us. Truthfully I honestly dont mind what story you write, or when it comes out, because I'm just glad we get to read and enjoy your works. I know I joke about "needing moar" and it's just me trying to show my excitement, I'm sorry if I've ever caused otherwise. I'll change how I leave reviews so that you hopefully won't feel pressured like you have to post something. Thank you for sharing your stories with us and again I'm sorry for ever pressuring or bullying you to write more.
Also great chapter and thank you for it.
Author's Response: Don't worry at all, enthusiasm for my stories keeps me going. TBH the more reader interaction and just generally gushing comments I get, the more I write haha. it's a pretty direct feedback loop and I really like it. Thank you so much for enjoying my work!!!!!!
Date: 02/03/20 11:09 am Title: Chapter 1: The Obelisk
It’s a great start,I like your work, but u never finish a story. I’m not sure I should read anymore.
Author's Response: Who says I'm abandoning the old ones? I finished Trouble book 1, I finished Kammi Kettu. Witch is on hiatus until Trouble 2 catches up up with some plot reveals and I was literally writing a Falling Over chapter when I checked the reviews. I need to swap stories every now and then until I find the old ones interesting again, because otherwise I end up hating them like I did with Pellan. So I mean yeah, you can whine like this and stop reading, or you can respect me and the way I do things. Other authors take weeks or months to get a single chapter out anyway, so what are you complaining about?