Date: 01/30/20 01:14 am Title: Leshen Learned
This was pretty cool, I loved the narration and the strange language, is it a real language? I'm so curious now. Also I know it's finished and wow how nice. She got the body she wanted, she's no longer cursed, I love this so much. Also sparing the two was a nice touch, loved the head squish and the rip in half too!
Date: 01/27/20 07:00 pm Title: Leshen Learned
This is great. You've done excellently at making the action tangible and leaving unnecessary details out. The conclusion is perhaps underdescribed (what does our new forest guardian witch look like?), but enough details are there. Similarly, the gaelic(or welsh?) isn't easy to discern any meaning from - though that might be your intention.
Even with those small things, though, this is a delightful story. You really have implied so much past and future in telling this small chunk of present.
Author's Response: Thank you so much ^_^ The "elder speech" is largely polish/gaelic sounding nonsense tbh. I wanted to maybe *kind of* give you an idea of what they were saying but nothing concrete.