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Reviewer: Saklad Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 01/23/20 08:28 pm Title: Cannon Fodder

I mean, they saw Melody and the Mer-Captain fight, and they can't all be idiots. It's obvious that Melody isn't aligned with the attackers, though less obvious that she is actually an ally. The biggest danger here was a miscommunication like "Fire on the merpeople!", but given she's surrounded by crew that's no longer a worry. Especially since she is specialized in Charisma.

By the way, does her physical appearance change with level-up stat boosts? How different does she look now, if so?

Author's Response: Level up, no. Stat-boosts yes. Performing actions such as overeating, studying or working out will adjust the base stats. Those base stats are the ones that effect appearance, and it will be explained in a later chapter once Melody meets some veteran players. The stats gained from level up do not adjust appearance.

Reviewer: gothicshark Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 01/20/20 01:54 pm Title: Alpha

interesting story, will follow.

Reviewer: tomy1111 Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 01/20/20 06:13 am Title: Alpha

Loving the story so far keep up the good writing. Looking forward to the next chapter.

Reviewer: Nairn1572 Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 01/12/20 12:42 pm Title: Paradise

Personally I hoping this story doesn't go for the typical story line of the protagonist becoming so stupid they can barely speak, at least permanently, maybe someones spikes their drink with a temporary special charisma potion that boosts charisma at the cost of intelligence? if you wanted to go for that plot line.

I'd like the couple to meet up at some stage in the nearish future but find themselves on the wrong side of the gender line each? Maybe have the protagonist can't help but be more submissive to the new boyfriend when he pushes for it but otherwise the new boyfriend can't help but follow the protagonists suggestions due to the high charisma?

Love the idea of the story and can't wait to read more in the future, keep it up!

Author's Response: I assure you, Miles/Melody will not be made any dumber unless I do a chapter playing with potions and it would only be temporary. As for the couple? They'll meet up at some point, but I won't spoil Vicky's new form.

Reviewer: Saklad Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 01/07/20 01:34 pm Title: Paradise

No coin purse, then?

Author's Response: Not yet anyway

Reviewer: ropp86 Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 01/01/20 08:23 pm Title: Random Chance

Great start. Looking forward to more.

Author's Response: I'm glad. Thank you for the encouragement.

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