Date: 12/31/19 02:38 am Title: Chapter 1: The offer
Really like this so far. The writing feels rushed in the sense that the story just seems to be thrown at you, but it's still enjoyable to read. And you definitely can't leave things on the current cliffhanger so I hope you get the interest you're looking for.
Author's Response: Yeah that's something that in my opinion gets better throughout the story as the chapters progress and chapters get longer and more is trickled out. I'm glad you enjoyed the story tho
Date: 12/31/19 12:18 am Title: Chapter 1: The offer
Very cute start,looking forward to your next chapter of your story
Author's Response: thank you so much! unfortunately, the story hasn't got the traction that I was hoping for so 10 chapters are where the story may end, sorry if I have disappointed you, I say that I want to change one person's life with my stories but it's not reaching anyone, I'm sorry