Date: 05/02/13 03:37 pm Title: Chapter 1
Review this piece? Are you kidding? Stop composing in the submission box, use a word processor and copy paste the finished work. Stop depending on spell check to correct your word choices, the spelling might be correct, but you use the wrong word so many times.... THROUGH not threw.... Learn the rules of punctuation. I've read every piece you've posted, hoping for improvement in the technical aspects, and been disappointed. Do you proofread at all? You can do much better.