Reviews For Resort to a Resort
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Reviewer: maverick1616 Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 01/20/20 07:31 pm Title: Chapter 3

The world building is good! I thought it should help things make more sense in the long term and creates more interest in the characters. I can't wait to learn why this is happening!

Reviewer: Portia Bennett Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 01/19/20 04:50 pm Title: Chapter 3

Quite an interesting tale. I wonder how much reality has changed on the outside. There certainly will have to be some reconciliation. Their acceptance and happiness are paramount.

Reviewer: Portia Bennett Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 01/19/20 01:37 am Title: Chapter 3

Rather hot.

Reviewer: ZZChromosome Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 12/19/19 02:09 am Title: Chapter 2

Great start. Love the combination of awareness and cluelessness.

Reviewer: Arcade Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 12/18/19 04:34 pm Title: Chapter 1

This was a great start! I loved reading it. For me, there was just enough narrative to go along with the erotic parts, but I think you could slow it down a tad if you wanted. Either way, I’m already invested and want to know what happens next, and I think that’s all you can ask for as a writer. Good stuff!

Reviewer: evenrude Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 12/18/19 12:17 pm Title: Chapter 1

This is an excelling beginning to what is a very interesting story concept.

I suggest you slow it down a bit and add a bit more detail before going for the erotic parts. It has a little of everything... family, friendship, sex, passion, even incest, though that seems to be caused by an unexpectedly provided drug or even a magical curse of some sort. The mutual sex change added an additional twist that allows for an entirely separate storyline.

The brother and sister appear to be normal young adults and not prone to incestuous activities, though the sister was unusually willing to share her bed with her brother. But again, the drugged wine may well have caused that.

I am anxiously waiting to see what happens in the morning. Apparently, the first issue might be clothing.

Reviewer: CHRIS2K Signed starstarstarstar Report
Date: 12/18/19 04:51 am Title: Chapter 1

Nice start

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