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Reviewer: Foundling_Fae Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 12/20/19 07:16 am Title: Best Friends Forever

A perfect ending to a wonderful story. Thank you for editing over it and reposting it!

Reviewer: Livvy Signed Report
Date: 12/17/19 11:36 pm Title: The Spring Fling

Oh no katie likes her as in loves her friend

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Date: 12/17/19 08:24 am Title: First Date

I was uncertain about your decision to break up this story into sections, but while it does make it slightly harder to read all at once, it allows you to time jump for the start of this so perfectly. Filling in the time could give you a bunch of warm happy sections, but it would also have left the story underplotful.

You do perhaps rely too much on telling about Nikki and Sammy's relationship. Having her remember things helps the reader feel the emotions much more directly.

I definitely know where things are going, but I'm looking forward to see how they/you get there. :)

Reviewer: AlexaTiresias Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 12/16/19 01:34 am Title: First Date

Adorable as usual Donjo. I just wished your stories (especially your Neko stories) were longer.

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