Date: 01/19/20 07:26 pm Title: Chapter 1 - Origin
I reread a couple of earlier chapters and see now that it clearly said they were going to grow a uterus and implant an embryo. So it was just sloppy reading on my part. For some reason I had assumed that ovaries went along with it.
Date: 01/18/20 02:03 pm Title: Chapter 10 - Details, Details, Details
Ch 10 - Four ovaries now? Or two? I'm unclear on whether "the organs to support a pregnancy" originally included a set of Treng ovaries. Were they originally planning on zero ovaries and simply implanting eggs via in vitro or something? Or were they giving him ovaries and then using insemination (traditional or otherwise) to impregnate him? That being said, oh my...
Also, this is a very well-thought out scifi story, definitely a cut above the usual fare.
Author's Response: Hi, just the two, i'll take a look and see if this can be clearer
Date: 01/06/20 07:33 pm Title: Chapter 8 - Interrupted moments and unusual experiences
Fascinating development - loved it. I knew that more of him would be turning blue. I like the way you're making it gradual and also fun at the same time. I also like the way you depicted him as only semi-aware of the extent of his changes - twice he reached for his balls and didn't notice they were missing.
Date: 12/29/19 02:29 pm Title: Chapter 7 - Pizza and Tech’gar! Wait, whats Tech’gar?
Although I personally prefer longer chapters, the short chapters are fine if that's what you need to do to keep your momentum flowing. I really like the way you've given your characters depth and thing this could be a really good story. Looking forward to the next installment.
Date: 12/27/19 04:02 am Title: Chapter 1 - Origin
"Friendly blue space elves" indeed, nicely put, ZZChromosome (in a previous review). Good job on the prologue and back-story, never mind that alien life is highly unlikely to be biocompatible with us or our ecosphere, "but that's not important now" (grin) because it's an essential premise to the rest of the fun story. "What if" they needed help reproducing and some of our guys could do it, etc -- good exposition on the thought processes and experiences along the way.
There are more typos than I'd like, but I'm not complaining (hey free is free), just observing, and it's still well enough written to keep me hooked and looking forward to more.
Date: 12/21/19 01:33 pm Title: Chapter 5 - Not quite according to plan
Ch 5 - "However, this picture had one obvious difference, it was blue." Fascinating. I wonder what else is turning blue next? Looking forward to finding out, this story is really pulling me in.
Date: 12/21/19 10:54 am Title: Chapter 5 - Not quite according to plan
Very interesting story, can't wait for more! I don't usually bother mentioning typos however I feel this one is significant. It's not whom its womb.
Author's Response: ty, slipped past me when i was running though with auto correct.