Date: 12/21/19 04:34 am Title: CH. 5
It took me a while to open this story, TGS has been busy lately (and me too), but then I found myself eager to get through all the chapters posted so far, plus rereading parts. It's entertaining and fast-paced, enough that I get a little lost at times, but that's OK, better than dragging along. Really enjoying the MTF self-discovery descriptions.
Parents' reactions are a bit harder to believe, but I guess they know magic exists, so in a world like that, people aren't so surprised? Also why weren't they upset about black blood being found throughout the house? (Early in the story, did I miss something?) The fictional multi-world is great, well-enough presented and explained.
Didn't expect contracts with summoned entities to go so well though -- at least so far -- very cheery and fun to read, no nastiness. Giving up life force sounded risky, but apparently you can grow it back with a big breakfast (grin). What do the "demons" get out of the deal, though? Other than sustenance, just some entertaining variety?
I'm enjoying the first-person snarks, quirks, and idiomatic references, even if I don't get all of them. Keep it up.
Date: 12/20/19 12:09 am Title: CH. 1
Interesting start. Let's see where it goes. I would think people would be a lot more freaked out, though.
Author's Response: Most people are, Chris was sort of a self insert in this story. I respond to crises and the like with a sort of calm detachment. I have no idea why, it's just what I do. I crashed a car into a muddy corn field at one point and the most worked up I got was me, deadpan saying out loud to the screaming driving instructor next to me, "here we go."
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